I proofread this over and over again, you should find no spelling errors or grammar errors.

However, you could give me suggestions on how I could improve this story and for people who have played Creeper world and Creeper World 2 can give me ideas on what to write next.

<No Universe is Safe From the Creeper>

"SWEET JESUS!!!1ONE!!"

<They face a blue goo menace called "Creeper">

Image: http://art.ngfiles.com/medium_views/108/slambradley_creeper-love.jpg

Interesting concept!  Being familiar with the game you're referencing (NOT Minecraft, folks!), I'll take a look at this one in the morning.  :)

Nice way to use the Elements of Harmony with the anti-creeper, simple and strait to the point.

As for ideas, perhaps introduce the... Phantoms was the name for the flying creeper right? And perhaps dragons as a minimal version of the Thor.

If your talking about story ideas, not much help there I fear.

>>9590395903

in the first one it was spores, in the second they were called phantoms, I'll be sure to include something about them and how they're a nuisance to the pegasi in part two

However, I still don't know how the creeper will react to spike's breath though.

I also have some ideas of the group traveling to the dark and alternate reality that originally corrupted the creeper and I'll throw discord into that!

First two things that came to mind were:

Image: http://2.bp.blogspot.com/_Wa0gzFH1lu8/SU016qgUnGI/AAAAAAAABlQ/jyLlRaSnPVc/s400/creeper.jpg

and

Image: http://images.wikia.com/dcanimated/images/0/0a/Creeper.png

Honestly, I would've perferred you to used the latter.

>>9594595945 I'm not sure how Spike's breath would work. Only thing that comes to mind from the game is that it somehow has to do with the worm holes used to warp stuff between two points, as he used it for letters on the show.

Also, could you guys gie me feedback on how well written this is? I want to know if my writing is any good or not.

To all viewers: this is the game he is crossing: http://knucklecracker.com/creeperworld/web/play.php