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Purple Dalek 207

Joined January 2012
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    Purple Dalek's Stories (2)

    • Flutterquest
      Waking up after decades of hibernation, Fluttershy explores a strange new world.

      5,913 words · 278 views · 25 likes · 0 dislikes
    • Fluttershy Tricks A Troll
      A short story in which Fluttershy meets a strange troll under a bridge.
      1,494 words · 237 views · 27 likes · 1 dislikes

    Waking up after decades of hibernation, Fluttershy explores a strange new world along with an artificial intelligence, a severed head, a Changeling with a split personality and a vending machine repairpony.

    First Published
    8th Oct 2012
    Last Modified
    14th Oct 2012

    Comments ( 19 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Dis is gonna be good.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This is … odd, I will watch to see what happens. Will hold vote until after next chapter so I can see how this develops.

    changed my mnd will vote now.

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Why do I have visions of Red Dwarf running through my mind at the moment?

    Looks interesting so far, this bears a watch.

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Brilliant writing! I only noticed one little error the whole time;

    A door swung open and flooded the dark room.

    I lost my immersion a bit imagining a liquified door filling up the room Fluttershy was in. One error in 2000 words is not an issue though, totally looking forward to an update!

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This is really interesting. At first I thought this was a Portal crossover, but there are some elements that make it completely different. At the same time, pretty similar to Portal 2. Most stories get better as they go along, so I can't wait to see where this goes.

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    When I read the description, I instantly thought of Red Dwarf.  Reading this, I'm impressed.  You sir, or madam, get a fav!

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Wow, this is interesting!

    And you misspelled 'mourn'.

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    They amputated her body to save her life. LOLWAT!

    This seems interesting and will follow.

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    *reads description*

    Um... what?

    After reading:

    Hrm... this is... interesting. I will follow to see where it goes.

    #10 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1408052 You're not the only one....

    Well, this was..........interesting, I think.

    Yeah, gonna keep an eye on this one, see where it goes.......

    #11 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Well I'm instantly hooked. This is - well, as everyone else has put it - interesting.

    I'll wait till the next chapter to decide if I want to Fav, although I'm probably gonna Fav anyway. :rainbowwild:

    #12 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Oh buck it! :fluttershyouch:

    I'm Faving! :pinkiehappy:

    You have effectively managed to capture my attention. I eagerly await more. :ajsmug:

    #13 · Chapter 2 · 31w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Wow. That was... eccentric. Pretty awesome chapter.

    And apparently, cool mares look at explosions.

    #14 · Chapter 2 · 31w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Now all u are missing is something or someone that is like Rarity.

    Pinkie head=Pinkie Pie

    TWI=Twilight Sparkle

    Critter=Rainbow Dash and Applejack

    #15 · Chapter 2 · 31w, 4d ago · · ·
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    That's a bit creepy although Fluttershy doesn't seem to mind!

    I wonder what happened to the CMC?

    #16 · Chapter 2 · 31w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Once again, great work! Exciting, new, fun, and weird!

    As a nitpicker, the only thing that I would change are the two sentences in a row that both start with "the blue streak..."

    #17 · Chapter 2 · 31w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I'm loving this more and more! :rainbowwild:

    SPOILERS

    When Applejack showed up I thought, "Hmm, is this the changeling?".

    Then Rainbow pops up, "Yep. It's the changeling".

    And then we're introduced to Critter, "Knew it". :ajsmug:

    #18 · Chapter 2 · 31w, 4d ago · · ·
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    120 year average lifespan? damn.

    #19 · Chapter 2 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Liking it so far, but if I had a comment to make it would be your structure.

    As you're not putting any spaces between paragraphs and you're not indenting it's making things a little difficult to read. I'd take a look at that if I were you.

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