Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash are caught in a powerful storm near the Everfree Forest. They run to take cover in Fluttershy's cottage, but, during the trip, a large branch nearly kills Fluttershy. Rainbow Dash, despite being badly injured herself, takes it upon herself to get Fluttershy to safety and care for her until the storm passes.
(Added 6/30/13: an early effort of mine I was reminded of when someone favorite it, which is why you're getting notification spam about it now. My writing style has changed a lot since this story was written)
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Although, there are a few grammar mistakes, but yeah...
Nice simple story. But I would get rid of the authors comment you made in brackets early on in the fic. You could still fit the info in, just try and do it in a way that flows with the story.
FTW!
Yeah, you're right about the brackets. I'll fix that up when I've had a bit more sleep. Writing a fanfic while half asleep does tend to have odd effects like that
First comment summarizes my feelings.
Pretty good! I feel it repetitive a few times but overall it is actually nice.
I only have to critisize just a little something: Fluttershy's opinion over Rainbow, did she change her thoughts of her friend so quickly? Because personally I think she does it out of pity.
But I could be wrong! It's just my opinion. (or it's maybe because I'm a little over FlutterDash shipping? Oh who cares?)
It was pretty nice, I say it again. I'll give you a few cheers for this!
1398542 It was more because she wanted to thank Rainbow Dash for taking care of her in some way, and when she was asked, she realized that giving a relationship with Dash a chance was a good way to thank her. I'll try to work that in, when I go back in and fix things up some more
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That's good that's good, I was just telling you my point of view.
Definite read later.
Description looks alright.
Tornado Of Souls - Megadeth
Feet?
Feet?!
FEET?!?!
Try 'hooves'
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Long Vive, Lupus Imperii!
...reading really old fanfiction is starting to feel like a bad idea...
This doesn't feel complete! We need MOAR!!!profitalist.com/wp-content/uploads/2015/03/moar3.jpg