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"Why do you think Trixie acts the way she does, Twilight Sparkle? Why do you think she became a showpony in the first place? She does it so she can be remembered. All the good Trixie did, all the bad Trixie did--it was all so her name would never die out, even after she herself had. She will not allow herself to be used as a catalyst for some greater scheme, then tossed to the wayside to be forgotten. She will make the world remember her name."

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Years after her humiliating fiasco in Ponyville, a pacified Trixie returns to try and find closure with the ponies she hurt the most. But time has wiped the slate clean in more than one way, leaving the showpony forgotten, nothing more than a fading memory in the minds of the townsfolk. Will a mare who devoted her whole life to being remembered find solace in the vastness of her impact? Or will the loss of her hallowed image tear her apart?


Art by My-Magic-Dream.

First Published
4th Nov 2012
Last Modified
4th Nov 2012
#1 · 111w, 1d ago · · ·

Already on EqD... good good :ajsmug:

#2 · 111w, 1d ago · · ·

Great job at capturing Trixies personality, she's not a stuck up snob nor a emotional crack. She's just...Trixie. Also, the story was awesome to. Have a Trixie/Twilight :twilightsmile::trixieshiftleft:

#3 · 111w, 1d ago · · ·

Definitely going to read later.

#4 · 111w, 1d ago · · ·

Was that a 'Sophistication and Betrayal' reference there?

Nice insight to Trixie's mind there.  Looks like she's got a few issues to work through.

#5 · 111w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1558422 Aaand the first horse crosses the finish line. Frikkin' love that story.

#6 · 111w, 23h ago · · ·

That was impressive and well written.:moustache::twilightblush:.

I liked that Trixie didn't immediately perscribe to Twilight's wisdom since it conflicted with her own philosphy but was willing to understand it, that sounds like realistic course of action.

Also enjoyed the scenerary, you painted a pretty good picture in my minds eye and set a nice mood.

#7 · 111w, 22h ago · · ·

I liked the story overall, but there were some pacing issues. Specially the beginning, which don't really do much for the story other than padding.

#8 · 111w, 18h ago · · ·

Will there be a continuation? I hope so. I like your writing style, even if it is slanted towards one-shots.

anyway, have a couple of Derpys.Derpies? Ditzie Doos. :derpyderp2::derpytongue2:

#9 · 111w, 16h ago · · ·

>>1560459

'Ditzies Doo'.:derpyderp2::derpytongue2:

#10 · 111w, 15h ago · · ·

>>1560773

Ditzies Doo... *thinks*

Oh! I geddit. :pinkiehappy:

#11 · 111w, 15h ago · · ·

A nice change of pace for a Trixie story. With all the disasters hitting Ponyville on a daily basis, it's definitely not hard to imagine that Trixie's little stint would be old news fast. I quite enjoyed it and it lead to a very good moral.

I liked the imagery, especially Trixie's physical response to everypony not remembering her. Those sensations help add to the picture of what she's going through.

Thankfully, this didn't evolve into some trite ship fic. If it had I would have been extremely disappointed and the message you were trying to convey would have been muddled. Glad to see there are stories than can shine without that gimmick.

A few things that I noted that I thought needed some work. One is that Twilight had a really convenient way to show Trixie that her visit hadn't been for naught. I know, the show is full of stuff like this as well, but I couldn't help think that Twilight had this all planned out in case Trixie ever returned. The other thing was towards the ending, where philosophy started hammering home the point. The dialogue in this part became a little too flowery (kinda what Trixie was doing with the cue cards). It was poetic and meaningful, but not something I can imagine another person saying. Well, maybe Twilight, but even I thought she was pushing it. Feel free to disagree!

All-in-all, a delightful read! I hope you continue writing such wonderful stories!

#12 · 111w, 13h ago · · ·

Damn......that was good :twilightsmile:

#13 · 111w, 13h ago · · ·

A very good read.

I really liked the character consistency: Trixie didn't do a 180 on her beliefs, her life philosophy and her character in the end of the story, she merely gave Twi's worldview a chance.

I, personally, would like to read more about that Trixie.

Not an psychological train wreck with self-esteem issues (like in some stories)

Or a blue-coat version of Twilight that speaks in third person (like in others)

This Trixie. A wholesome individual, who's conflicted between confidence in her magical abilities and doubts about an ability to live a happy life, between (partially earned) feeling of superiority over other ponies and desperate need of their attention.

Conflicted between her need and capacity for greatness and the horrible sacrifices that greatness demands from her.

This Trixie has a story to tell.

#14 · 111w, 11h ago · · ·

Great story, I connected well with it, and it managed to leave something of an emotional impact. I have the same complex as Trixie, I'll admit. I want to be remembered, and above all other things I fear being forgotten (luckily my ego is significantly smaller than Trixie's). This story gives  me a little different perspective.

Additionally, I like the way you handled Trixie's personality, instead of some broken, emotional character that pretty much just shouts "FEEL SORRY FOR ME!", you realistically represented the character from the show, with the same sort of sympathy most of us felt for her after the "Boast Busters" episode.

5 out of 5 Spikes for you.

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#15 · 111w, 10h ago · · ·

>>1560459 Funny you say that--I actually just started working on a multi-parter that I hope will break the 50K word mark.

#16 · 111w, 10h ago · · ·

Great story.:pinkiehappy:

#17 · 111w, 9h ago · · ·

Bacon loves this Trixie story. The story is the best Trixie story Bacon has read, and Bacon has read a lot of stories. :yay:

#18 · 111w, 6h ago · · ·

This is great. That is all.

#19 · 111w, 5h ago · · ·

This needs to be featured. it's too good not to be. :pinkiehappy:

#20 · 111w, 5h ago · · ·

I think this should definitely be an episode for season 3

#22 · 111w, 5h ago · · ·

This was featured... then it went away... Then it was featured again, and then it went away... again... The hell is going on?!:twilightoops:

#23 · 111w, 4h ago · · ·

Beautiful.:fluttershysad:

#24 · 111w, 4h ago · · ·

>>1563057

Sadly, it would require some more action first.:fluttershysad:

#25 · 111w, 4h ago · · ·

The best part of this is that the Sad tag didn't mean what I thought it meant.  Doctor Dyadics wasn't actually her MD, and the tingles and chills weren't symptoms of some fatal wasting disease.  At least, they weren't revealed as such.

Great story.  You've touched on the irony of humility while noting how narcicissm can work warps on a person's sense of personhood.

#26 · 111w, 3h ago · · ·

You...are amazing. That story was so well written and very VERY reader-gripping! I am not a big fan of Trixie, but after reading this story...damn, I love her. There was so much emotion in the story! And it gave a totally different view of Trixie. Instead of a snob, she looks more like a lost soul trying to make a name for herself. I sure hope there is more to this in the future. Once again thank you for creating such a powerful story.:twilightsmile:

#27 · 111w, 3h ago · · ·

>>1563305

True...  true :ajsleepy:

>>1563340   personhood?

>>1563249  :trollestia:  ...happens

#30 · 111w, 39m ago · · ·

After all, the mare beyond those wodden walls was nothing more than a catalyst leading to her forced exile.

Also, Twilight leading a Friendship Cult is my new favorite thing. Because she would take it that far to get a good grade...

I like the way you characterized Trixie here. She seems so conflicted with what she wants, and what's good for her. And honestly, who isn't a bit conflicted? And I like that Twilight is really the only one who's able to reach her, because Twilight is the only one who ever really broke through Trixie's ego. In a way, Twilight is the only one Trixie really respects and you reflected that wonderfully in how willing she was to listen to Twilight's advice. Plus, she stayed the same stubborn and self-confident Trixie in the end... Sort of.

#31 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1563949

But it is still a good suggestion.

#32 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

I liked this one.  It made me stop and think of all of the people I think...no I KNOW...I have made an impression on.  And it made me reflect a bit on my mortality, ashes to ashes and dust to dust and all that.  Now I feel like I need to go out there and do some charity work...make an impression...Funny how Trixie came to a similar conclusion.

#33 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1563249

Other stories, like your frickin awesome ones, take over spaces in the feature box.

That said the last three spaces in the feature box are for popular stories the were updated.

But when this story garners more views and attention it gets featured again

#34 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

It does feel a bit like the show but with less gags.  I like your explanation of why Trixie acts like it does, because even her acting like a jerk and humiliating audience members works with this explanation, in a away it doesn't with say, wanting to be liked or make a favorable impression.  Because humiliating people makes a big impression, if you don't care about negative or positive.

Though, of course, not only will you pass on and be forgotten, but so will everyone you ever humiliate or inspire or help, and eventually your entire race and planet itself, as the cold uncaring universe grinds on.  So, really, if you're basing your success in life on lasting impact you're pretty doomed to get some depressing thoughts.  

#35 · 110w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

>>1563961

Beautiful. Featured on EqD? That is quite the honor. He who fears his own emotions is a coward. I have always significantly disliked reading the great shorts and epics, that often immortalize themselves in the glorious light. Past Sins, My Little Dashie, The Guidance and Patronage of Trixie, etc, all too emotional for one's good. I have regretfully steered clear from any deep and touching stories on Fimfiction. I may have a mental block preventing me from adequetely enjoying the stories and the feelings they convey.

That being said, I was not aware that upon finishing this tale, I would be left staring off into the plains and forest beyond my window for quite some time. There was an emptiness in my hear, soul even, that Trixie took with her unknowingly into the Everfree. My eyes searched the forest edge in a vain attempt at finding a cyan cartoon pony. Now the raw emotions, my depression and constant losses in life especially, try to fill the void that "Image and Impact" is responsible for.

To be clear, I am a coward of expressing emotions, but not reading excellent and grand materials. Some of the greats and prime features do not phase me at all. Very few have made me feel like this. Even in real life those very emotions are devoid. It is funny how words and literary images affect me more than my life in reality.

I am sure you tire of my rambling, so I will conclude. I love you authors that work tirelessly or make something so amazing that it changes the way I think or act. Art Inspired, Penstroke, Im_Not_Sue, and a handful of others, and now you. One concept so boldly ground-breaking is the way this concept is the exact concept I feel right now. The authors may soon be forgotten, but the real victory is in the lessons you have delivered via your stories. It is those lessons that give literature purpose, and affect real human beings in a more than sureal way. I appreciate fully all of your work and await the next heart-wreching regale.

#37 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

that was really nice.....:pinkiehappy:

#38 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

It’s just that there’s more to just having your name in lights forever, you know.

There's something wrong with that sentence. Did you mean "more to *life than*"? "more *than* just.."?

#39 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1566460 how do you get those emot-icons?

#40 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1573116 It's a custom browser script called FIMfiction enhancements. But you need a userscript manager to run it. If you have Firefox, install an addon named greasemonkey. If you have Chrome, install one called Tampermonkey. Then google and install the script. It doesn't just do emoticons, it allows youtube embedding and even customization of the 502 (DNS error) page. But if you have Internet Explorer.......

  even Octavia can't help you with that one.

#41 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1573546 I do use internet explorer... so... :eeyup:

#42 · 110w, 4d ago · · ·

this was really good, i enjoyed reading it. also, very relevant to my interests, i think about this sort of thing (influence on world, rememberence) all the time.

good job!

:twilightsmile:

#43 · 110w, 7h ago · · ·

Beautifully written. I don't know what else to say. Everything was done above and beyond "good", you really put really emotion into it, kept the characters "in character" and really made me feel for Trixie. Great work, I am going to favorite this!:twilightsmile:

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