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The philosopher 91574

Joined August 2012
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    The philosopher's Stories (9)

    • The Night
      Why can they not see that it is beautiful?

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    • Never Leave Me
      I just wish my story could end—that I wouldn't be so alone.
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    • Eastern Breeze
      Sometimes the best prayers answered are the ones we don't ask for...
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    • Reunion
      I was so happy when I was told my best friend was gonna be a princess... but... after the coronation... I realized just how bittersweet this really was....
      2,749 words · 252 views · 16 likes · 1 dislikes
    • Splinter Cell
      24,397 words · 357 views · 11 likes · 1 dislikes
    • Cider
      1,027 words · 117 views · 6 likes · 0 dislikes
    • The Monster
      1,025 words · 191 views · 6 likes · 0 dislikes
    • Day After Day
      1,013 words · 348 views · 12 likes · 3 dislikes
    • We Shall Live On
      10,928 words · 131 views · 5 likes · 1 dislikes

    An insurrection is forming in the Crystal Empire. The citizens wish for there once proud empire to stand once more! Princess Cadance must fall, and Equestria must be theirs! There is no existing military with the force to stop the new regime.

    It's a good thing that 3rd Echelon technically doesn't exist...

    A Splinter Cell crossover. Inspired by the Tom Clancy's Splinter Cell series and Stalkerloo. Splinter Cell is owned by Ubisoft. My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic is owned by Hasbro.

    First Published
    1st Nov 2012
    Last Modified
    21st Jan 2013

    Comments ( 20 )

    #1 · Chapter 4 · 28w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Not a cross over if you only use their ideas. You have to implement characters from splinter cell into the story.

    #2 · Chapter 4 · 28w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1546673  that is a common misconception. Many crossovers are of mixing the characters from another game/story/movie and placing it with the MLP world. But another variant is taking the world of another Story/game/movie and implementing it into the MLP universe. This story falls under the latter.

    #3 · Chapter 4 · 28w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1546781

    True but when you bring weapons into a land of peaceful ponies; you'll need a human to use them. Ponies killing each other shows the lack of understanding of characters.

    #4 · Chapter 4 · 28w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1548952 that's why I brought them in differently. All weapons were invented secretly under

    3rd Echelon orders. I did that because i didnt want ponies in general killing each other with them, so i turned the weapons into something only the 3rd Echelon and the 3rd Echelon alone could use as part of there advanced technology (hence Marines were only armed with spears). The next question would be, why would there be gun manufacturers if most of Equestria doesn't even know what a gun is? Their manufacturers are now their inventors instead of company. And I dont necessarily "need" to have humans introduce ponies to weapons. There are plenty of fics in which ponies are armed with firearms when there have been no humans.

    #5 · Chapter 4 · 28w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1549702

    Well unless 3rd Echelon was built and not born then i can see it happening. Ponies stabbing someone in the neck from behind is just over the top

    #6 · Chapter 4 · 28w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1550050 Luna was being figurative when she said "born," the 3rd Echelon was literally built like you said. As for the stabbing, well, the Equestrian Marines are supposed to be aggressive. They were made to be Celestia's most agressive force yet.

    And yet they still Don't compare with the 3rd Echelon.

    I'm sorry if this offends you, but you're arguments are really frustrating me. You're criticizing me for elements that are in tons of fanfics. Some fanfics have violence like this, but are still good! End of Ponies by Shortskirtsandexplosions has firearms, and it's not the only fanfic that does.  Then there's Into the Depths by Pen Stroke which has bladed weapons fr the royal guard. But my story is apparently mediocre for having such weapons as well?

    #7 · Chapter 4 · 28w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1551982

    Im not really criticizing you. Im just bringing up points about your story. It's all about how you introduce weapons and technology into equestria that makes a fan fiction good. Im not going to continue reading this but if your story appeals to others then go ahead; write more.

    #8 · Chapter 4 · 28w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1552272 I don't know why, but I had a nagging voice compelling me not to end this arguments on bad terms. So I wanted to say thank you for the tip on introducing weapons, and sorry if this didn't live up to any expectations you may have had.

    If you would like to, you could check out my one-shots. They are written in a very different style than how I write Splinter Cell, so I hope you enjoy them!

    #9 · Chapter 4 · 28w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1552507

    Will do. I know that feeling when you think someones nagging at you when they're not and you get into a fight with them.

    #10 · Chapter 4 · 28w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1553225 thanks. Sorry again about that.

    #11 · Chapter 4 · 24w, 1d ago · · ·
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    update or i shall be mad :pinkiecrazy:

    #12 · Chapter 4 · 24w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1738683 the next chapter is going to introduce the 3rd Echelon and how it functions. I felt that you and others reading this deserve better, a chapter with more action then explanation, because it's almost like a filler (although it IS a nessicary chapter, I cant just toss Scootaloo in a mission and be like, "SURPRISE! you're part of the 3rd Echelon now! Here's your pistol, your goggles, and black future ninja suit!")  Therefore, it is to be released late. Expect it to be posted in one to three more weeks- alongside chapter 4.

    #13 · Chapter 4 · 24w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1740665 Hmmm i dunno just handing her a gun sounds ok to me! :facehoof: Jk that would suck keep up the great work and have fun!

    #14 · Chapter 6 · 17w, 2d ago · 1 · ·
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    Fantastic, I'm really enjoying it.

    #15 · Chapter 5 · 17w, 2d ago · 1 · ·
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    Ah... How I have missed you my old friend... oh and I guess you won in the uploading phase :|... Drat.

    #16 · Chapter 6 · 17w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1999221 just took a little bit longer to write than I wanted. :twilightblush:  

    #17 · Chapter 6 · 17w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1999196 thank you

    #18 · Chapter 6 · 16w, 2d ago · · ·
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    How in the world do you write such long chapters? I can write about 1k words and call it a chapter... you could have cut there two up alot :P

    #19 · Chapter 6 · 16w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>2034532 it's quiet simple really. Time consuming, but easy. You just write until the character has reached a moment of noticeable pause ( for example, at the end of Hunter Killer, Scootaloo's mission is over.) or when the characters dilemma changes(like in The Marines, where Scootaloo is knocked out). You already seem to follow this, but your chapters seem shorter because your writing style is a lot more terse than mine.

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