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Simple Pleasures

As Rainbow Dash flies through the sky in the late afternoon, she spots something she knows Fluttershy would love to see...

This was written by a good friend of mine, Call-Me-Jack on Deviantart. He told me I could post this after I bugged the living crap out of him, telling him it was excellent in every way.

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sierra_seven_

sierra_seven_ #1 · Oct 5th, 2012 · · ·

First of all, title art is an excellent option for drawing new readers in. I tend to just glaze over stories without title art.

Secondly:

rainbow dash

Names are always spelt with capital letters! Mis-spelling the name of one of the Mane 6 in the description normally isn't a good idea.

~Sierra, TWE's Destroyer of Words dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_rape.png

cloudedguardian

cloudedguardian #2 · Oct 5th, 2012 · · ·

Not bad!
There are some punctuation and capitalization errors that need to be corrected, but aside from that- It's a cute, short story.
I'll give you a thumbs up