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  • T Tired

    Pinkie Pie reconnects with a few of her old friends.
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  • T U-Harmony

    Twilight's curiosity pushes her to go were no bookworm has gone before: On dates.
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  • E In The Rain

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  • T Merely a Mare

    A tale of regret, redemption, and romance starring Luna, Applejack, Celestia, Twilight, and all their past mistakes.
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  • T The Three Notes

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  • T Forbidden Lovers

    Two sisters meet, and their hearts set them on a path to tragedy. Celestia/Luna
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Blog Posts21

  • 27w, 22h
    On the Bridges I've Burned

    So I'm back. You may have noticed that the last blog post I put up before BABSCon was back in October of 2012. I kind of fell out of the fandom around then, especially after Unicon the February after that. I never really stopped liking MLP and kept up with episodes and some other things, but I stopped keeping up with fanfic and resigned from EqD.

    BABSCon kind of invigorated me. There were a couple of panels and a few super awesome fic authors (including the best party of the con, which mostly consisted of a bunch of authors discussing ponyfic) that made me really want to get back into the game as far as fic writing goes. I just posted a short one shot, On the Care and Construction of Bridges, and I'm going to try to make a habit of the whole writing and posting thing. Please don't be surprised if this fic isn't great; I'm super rusty and I didn't get an editor or anything.

    Bridges started out as a very different fic. The seed of an idea for it started just after BABSCon, when I got a line from a song stuck in my head and it turned into the title "Let's not Fall in Love". Originally, the fic was going to focus much more closely on the lack of relationship between Applejack and Rarity, their trepidation over ruining the friendship they already had, and the power Rarity had over Applejack due how much more powerful Applejack's feelings were than Rarity's. It was going to explore how scary love can be, and how much power it can give others over you, and how scary it can be to have power over someone you really do care about. I've been on both sides of that sort of imbalance, and it always ends up painful. In the end, they were going to decide not to try a relationship.

    This was something rather personal to me, because I had a relationship of my own in mind as a model for the relationship between Applejack and Rarity.

    By the time the fic became Bridges, I'd changed the focus. The decision not to pursue love was already made, and I explored whether it was a good decision. I hope it doesn't seem like I came to any conclusion on that point, because I honestly don't know if Applejack's decision is right. I certainly don't know whether Rarity's decision is right, because I am not Rarity. I am more like Pinkie Pie. When I was in a similar situation, I chose the other path, because the power I had did not make me cautious, and I rushed into something that maybe I shouldn't have. Both good things and bad things came of that. I am not sure which there is more of.

    I am very good at burning bridges. When a romantic relationship ends, I tend to cut off contact. Usually it's not a deliberate thing, I just never contact them. And they never contact me. And it makes things a bit less awkward, I suppose. I do similar things with old friends, and to be honest, I do similar things with some new friends too. I find it very easy to make new friends, so I don't put any effort into keeping the ones I have. When something ends a friendship, I let it stay ended. I guess this fic ended up being more about that than about relationships. I am very good at burning bridges, but bridges can be rebuilt. The Care and Construction of Bridges is about Rainbow Dash learning that lesson. Maybe I should follow her lead.


    Also I'm half asleep typing this out so I hope it's halfway coherent.

    8 comments · 201 views
  • 30w, 16h
    Getting Back Into The Game

    So Babscon was awesome, though I managed to catch some sort of plague (or at least flu) that I'm just now recovering from. I managed to attend a couple of the fanfiction panels and an awesome fic author party. I feel like I've rekindled my passion for fanfic, and I've been spending some of the lucid time I've had while sick catching up on RCL features I hadn't read. After that, I might get around to reading all those fics I haven't read from authors I really love (Like Blueshift and CiG).

    In the medium term, I think I'll get back into writing. Let's hope I haven't gotten too rusty, right?

    The plan for the long term remains, as always, world domination.

    7 comments · 101 views
  • 31w, 3d
    Gonna be at Babscon

    I'm super excited about it. Who else is gonna be there?

    2 comments · 77 views
  • 111w, 5d
    Music Inspired by Tired

    An individual named Pi was apparently impressed enough by Tired that they created a short piano peice after reading it.

    I appreciate everyone who reads and especially those who leave comments (thank you all, by the way, for those), but this is the first time (to my knowledge) that my fanfic has inspired this particular form of creativity, so I figured I'd give Pi a shout out on it and share it with all of you.

    10 comments · 311 views
  • 117w, 5d
    Everfree Northwest

    I hope I'm not the only one that can barely remember the start of a convention by the time it's over. Conventions for me are just so dense with activities and socialization and alcohol (Though less at this con than at anime cons I've been to). So yes, I'm currently exhausted from attending Everfree Nortwest.

    I shared my room with the ever-awesome CupcakesNom, Bronycon staffer and founder of the Humble Brony Bundle, and a guy named Xiago who I hadn't ever interacted with but seems nice enough. It also turned into a minor hub of people because of its size. I managed to contain my squeals when John Joseco got his hands on the coloring book I'd picked up at Target and used eight colors of crayons to make a madly impressive recolor. I played Munchkin and Words Against Humanity with a few of the other EqD prereaders and drank homebrewed mead.

    As for the con itself, it was rather awesome. There were a few headaches (as is expected from any first year con), but everything came together nicely despite the challenges of a split venue. I've been assured that Ponystock was awesome, though I'm not big into the music side of the fandom so I didn't spend much time there. I attended one of the writing panels and found it interesting. I should have gone to more, but I was too distracted wondering how many of the people in the room had written stories I'd rejected from EqD. There was a ton of other stuff to do, so I was far from bored. I was fortunate enough (and shelled out enough money for a sponsor's badge, so I had the opportunity) to be in the front row of the Mane Six Minus Two (Plus Two) panel, and that was beyond awesome. The VAs are hilarious. The Equestria Daily panel was fun, and I found it amusing that the blogponies brought cookies for everyone... but only bought fifty cookies. They were gone quite quickly. I got some buttons from the dealers' hall, including an awesome Pinkie Pie one that I managed to get signed by her VA.

    On Sunday, Couch convinced a few of the prereaders and Sethisto to skip out on the con to go to a water park. That was fun, but the weather could have been better.

    Overall, an awesome experience. I'm looking forward to more MLP conventions. Hopefully we get more on the west coast soon enough!

    10 comments · 178 views
  • ...

The mane six take shelter in a place that is, for now, safe from a disaster occurring outside.

This gruesome tale of violence and death is not recommended for colts, fillies, or the faint of heart.

First Published
18th Aug 2011
Last Modified
18th Aug 2011
#1 · 170w, 3d ago · · ·

For some reason, I thought this would be a good fic to start the day off on. Not that it isn't a good fic, but DAMN.

#2 · 170w, 3d ago · · ·

Very dark...but I like it, and I don't usually like dark fics. :pinkiecrazy:

#3 · 169w, 6d ago · 1 · 1 ·

I love Flutterdash, so, I dont have good feelings for this fic...

but as a bronie, I'll tolerate and love....

#4 · 169w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

I don't typically read grimdarks, but since this one was so short, I figured I'd give it a try.

...and now I know why I don't read grimdarks.

#5 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

Damn this was very sad and scary.

But props for establishing the setting along with the last sentence

#6 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·


That fits my reaction the most...

#7 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·


#8 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

It was great, im not mean, but i love these stories, keep it up!

#9 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

:rainbowkiss:good fic

#10 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

Y U KILL FLUTTERSHY.:fluttercry:

#11 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

:ajsleepy::applecry::fluttercry::raritycry::twilightoops: im sad:moustache:

#12 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·



I love it. But AAAAAGH.

#13 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

OH MY GOD. quickest, yet most gut wrenching grimdark ever. oh my god. just absolutely horrifying. and the author didn't even explain what was going on yet! I feel sick...

#14 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

What the buck is even going on?!?! Although... heh heh heh :pinkiecrazy:

#15 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

the entire story felt like a non-event to me. somepony coughed and rainbow dash kills fluttershy. The characters did exactly what they said they would. There was no conflict. Maybe Im missing something..:ajbemused:

#16 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·


Oh, there went my mind...:fluttershbad:

#17 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

That was an amazing story. Although the ending makes really no sense to me. Was it somepony outside that coughed? Or did Fluttershy lie about her cough so she wouldn't have to live through the suffering of this life?

#18 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

That ending hit home. :fluttershysad:

#19 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

Luckily, it looks like Rainbow Dash will not have to concern herself with the staining... cough cough

#20 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

Wow. I love grimdark..but..that-that was just to much... :fluttercry: :applecry:

#21 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·


#22 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

Oh. My. God.

I died inside. That was the saddest thing I think I've ever read.

The last line shot me through the heart and left me sobbing for like 10 minutes. That was amazing. :fluttercry:

#23 · 169w, 4d ago · · ·

4.5 is pretty spot on. There were a few little grammar/word choice things that irked me but overall the execution and especially the concept were really solid.

A little too focused on the grim details maybe, but take that with a grain of salt: it doesn't really get to me so it all comes across as gratuitous.

All in all though, really nice. It was pleasant when the ending actually managed to give me a bit of a "I should have seen that but I didn't".

#24 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·

That was fucking darker than Cupcakes, holy shit. excuse my profanity but holy shit.

#25 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·


I mean, it was great, but...

Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah. :fluttercry:

#26 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·

The only problem with this story is that the ponies are completely unnecessary.  This could have just been a short story with humans characters and it would have been just as great.

#27 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·

Don't get me wrong.  Fantastic piece of writing, very suspenseful.  Just... I would have liked it more without the ponies being in it, because the ponies didn't really add much.

#28 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·

Holy Hello Kitty...


#29 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·

EqD described it as "flash fiction," which I had never heard of. Wasn't going to read it because it said Grimdark, but it was short and in a new style!

:raritydespair: I realize my mistake. Amazing quality, though! A number of comments before mine bring up a good point: This could have been done with humans, and the only thing lost would be our prior knowledge of the characters.

#30 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·


Why did it have to be Fluttershy...

#31 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·


Honestly, I first considered the plot before I got into the pony fandom, but I didn't write back then. I still might do a human version. I'll probably experiment with first person and change a couple of things, but keep the most important parts.

#32 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·

Oh...  oh sweet celestia... :(  *sniffles*  :applecry:

#33 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·

I enjoyed reading this.

#34 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·

Author. Prequel. Now.

#35 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·

:applecry: that was just sad :fluttercry:

#36 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·




i cry for fluttershy

#37 · 169w, 3d ago · 3 · ·



#38 · 169w, 3d ago · · ·

Very nice flash fiction. I had a feeling about what the ending would've been, but it was well executed and well written. I read a lot of dark stories, so the gruesome scenes didn't impact me as much as other readers, but it definitely worked. The knowledge that they were trapped with a fresh pegasus corpse would be extremely unnerving.

The thoughts that went through Rainbow's mind after the second cough must have been agonizing.

#39 · 169w, 2d ago · · ·


Rarity's turn.:raritycry:

#40 · 169w, 2d ago · · ·

ummm....was a zombie apocalypse going on or what?

#41 · 169w, 2d ago · · ·

The plague..

i need a prequel!

#42 · 169w, 1d ago · · ·

That was beautiful, in a horrible way.

I think the fact it was the mane cast rather than humans enhanced the story, since we already know a lot about the characters' personalities and can more easily imagine how each of them feels throughout (apart from the obvious, of course). Also, the ponies represent the innocence which is lost by them all. I don't think humans in the same situation would've had quite the same impact.

#43 · 169w, 14h ago · · ·

That was very well done.

The intensity and that fact it was short, so the suspense built within a tiny time frame, was just executed so perfectly.

#44 · 168w, 5d ago · · ·

I didn't cry, but that made me feel like shit.

Seriously, I read this hours ago and I still feel like i'm going to throw up.


Really well written though.

#45 · 168w, 4d ago · · ·






#46 · 168w, 1d ago · · ·

Why? Why Fluttershy?

This Fic is making me rage, and it's only chapter one.

#47 · 167w, 6d ago · · ·

I feel numb now..Im a Fluttershy fan and that was a great story I dont even know how to speak now :fluttercry:

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#49 · 167w, 5d ago · · ·

I'd say this story was good, but... the author has the added benefit of us already caring about the characters, making it easier to write. But with its short length and minimal development, if it weren't for the ponies it... wouldn't be that good.

It seems to be a classic case of the author having a story to tell, but just making it a fanfiction instead of something original, thus maximizing readership. It has nothing to do with MLP other than the characters being in it, and really, those roles could have been filled by almost anybody in any fandom. A tiny bit of dialogue change and there you go.

No, this story would have been much better as an original piece, but it would have to be much longer so that we could get emotionally invested in the characters.

#50 · 167w, 5d ago · · ·

What the HAY

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