First chapter of book two up, if you read this and didn't read book 1, sorry for spoiler of book 1. Lemme know if you see anything wrong!

Chapter is up for ya too, i know there are 2 chapters right at the start, but i think i needed more words so it could get past moderation, so i added another chapter. Lemme know if you see anything wrong.

MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  

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Why on earth do i have a dislike???

Not everyone will like what someone else writes.

P.S.

It wasn't me, I was just stating a fact.

>>13942461394246 Your right... i'm just being stupid Lol

This is great I can wait to see Pinkie Pie break earth physics

>>13946951394695 She's Pinkie, she can do anything.

>>13946991394699

um duh I wonder what would happen if scientists found Pinkie Pie and saw that saw broke the laws of Physics

>>13947111394711 I'm not going to go that far, just saying.

k

When's chapter 3 gonna be up?!

>>13948131394813 dude chill out. its only been a day. took him 2 days to write this one... i'd say give him a week at least before you start wondering whats going on

MOAR!!!!

>>13948131394813>>13952241395224>>13954811395481 Do not worry it will be up sooner than you think

>>13959601395960 I see what you did there...

wow

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Good... good...

One thing. Can you please separate the speech please? I find it hard to follow who is talking and when. Thanks.

....That did not disapoint. Thanks curiosity!

>>13966541396654 I tried to do that... it irritates me for some reason, I don't know why... I like to have at least 3 lines before i hit enter twice to open a new paragraph... I really don't know why i don't like it. It doesn't confuse me at all

ouch poor rainbow alex doesnt remember her or their relationship i hope he somehow remembers please author dont do this to rainbow dash

>>13971701397170 Fair enough. I can't go against you on that. I will try my hardest to keep up.

>>13976691397669 hey if you need help! just ask! i will clarify for you :)

>>13959991395999

i dont know if it was perposeful or not but i kinda noticed something about the first book. it might have just been your first time writing a fanfic, but it all seemed to be happening really fast. days would happen with in 2-5 paragraphs even.  a lot of dreams that i've had at least had a simaler effect, everthing happening in quick sucession. now the story is a little more... drawn out when compared to the previous book. that could be that your trying to portray a dream before we knew it was a dream... or it could just be accedental awesomeness from first time writing fanfics. either way i love it so far.

>>13979741397974 wow, i never thought of it that way... i was just writing it, my skills just got better over time. and people were saying that the story was going too fast, so i decided to make the second book more lengthy, i had no idea that i was doing that. LOL.  Glad you like it

>>13967761396776 That curiosity seems to get the better of us all the time!

And now for the very late dose of Listener's comments.

My Gosh. I didn't see this coming at all! And I sorta knew! That is talent my friend.

I think you've got a  [ center] >story< [/ center] going on here. Was that on purpose?

Great spin on the story Gareth!

>>13979951397995

Yes, yes you have improved!

*sorry for being late.*

>>14020581402058 I did not intend for [ center] story [ /center] do you know how to fix it?

EDIT: Nvm fixed it.

>>14029641402964

'Tis okay. I've done that before. It's easy to get confused with the BBC code thing going on here.

I've seen even semi-professionals forget a / in one and have half the story italicized. :P

>>14032281403228 yeah i forgot the /

So far this is a good story. More so since it shows that Dean wasn't in fact dreaming and that it was more like he physically was still on Earth but mentally and spiritually he went to Equestria. Well that is my opinion of what happened to him. Course that technically means that it kinda was a dream and kinda wasn't. Seriously though don't leave Rainbow Dash heartbroken for long doesn't seem right or fair since they all remember except for him.

>>14074781407478 AND I WILL TELL IT AGAIN

Next chapter is up, Please tell me if there is anything that doesn't make sense to you. And tell me if you see grammatical errors (Please don't go super grammar nazi on me though).

I hope you enjoyed the chapter.

Thanks Guys /)

--Gareth

This is so cool, i cant wait to see how they do at the mall, this is gonna be so awesome

>>14112781411278 < What he said.

quick question... if he dissappered when he woke up from his "dream", and pinkie had the braclet, did his clothes just drop on the floor? i mean i can imagine the shock of some1 dissappering in equestria because of teleportation... but having the person you just married's boby just vanish would be pretty truamatizing. anyway really great story... kinda made me want to write a fan fic idea that i've had for a while. kinda wanted to know other ppls opinion first. ill write a discripton in a blog post if any1 wants to comment on it

is the rest of the story gotta be the pony's humanized

well the next chapter is going to be fun i can just imagine the mane 6 doing all kinds of funny stuff at the mall

I have a feeling that the fact that they are part of a tv show on Earth is going to be revealed at the mall. Either by a fan of the show assuming they are based off hair styles talking about the show or seeing a toy or product based off the show. Either way I cannot see that explination going down well for Dean and Alex.

Long chapter for you guys, mostly just details of what happens in the mall. Tell me if you see something you don't understand or there is a grammatical error or whatever. Hope you enjoy!

Thanks guys!

--Gareth

Havent read yet but I got to say this LET THE SHENNANIGANS ENSUE ok now I'm going to read chapter

Well that was a great chapter but I was hoping for some shennanigans going on in the mall ah well I'm sure there will be some shennanigans next time

HOW COULD THERE BE NO SHENANIGANS!

you know what you should do, have the rest find guys on earth, then watch what happens, heh heh.

I didn't expect them to be so calm about the whole MLP:FIM-thing... Great job, man!

I knew they would find out! Like with Mcayon I didn't think they would take it so well. I know for a fact if I went to a different world and there was a tv show about my life I wouldn't be that calm about it. Course I mainly expected Rainbow Dash to not take it well since she doesn't take most information calmly.

awwwwwwww yea!!! that story was SOOO AWESOME

>>14224631422463>>14224311422431>>14223781422378>>14223641422364>>14222121422212 Sorry if the chapter wasn't what you expected... I will try to make better one's now.

>>14237121423712 Hey I have no problems with this chapter.

>>14237821423782 You sure? I just feel that it wasn't as good as it could have been.

>>14237901423790 I'm sure. There are points you could have improved. Course this is just from years of reading fantasy novels. If anything one thing you could have done better was thier reactions. Mainly Rainbow Dash's since she always overreacts to practically everything. Example see the first two episodes of season 2. Its been a while since I watched them so I forgot which one she calls Twilight a spy in since Twilight was the only one that knew about Nightmare Moon.

>>14238391423839 do you think i should edit the chapter? to make it better?

>>14238921423892 Not really but if you want someone to help with editing I'll gladly help.

i'm surprised they weren't as pissed when they fund out about the show.

Great update Gareth!

I've noticed something. Do you not like conjunctions? It's not a big deal, it's just something that I've noticed.

>>14238391423839

First two episodes of season one.... But I do agree with all of your points though.

>>14237121423712 sorry if i sounded pretentious, I was just handing out ideas is all, the chapter was actually pretty good, keep it up.

>> Gareth_Jason no I don't think you should edit this it was good the shennaningans were what I WAS expecting a good friend of mine told me you shouldn't change to please other people otherwise you don't end up pleasing yourself

>>14252541425254 Sorry my bad. I typed tha earlier when I was half asleep. Didn't notice the numerical error on my part. Course didn't help that I didn't have my contacts in so so I wasn't realy focusing I thought I had typed season 1. Completely and utterly my bad on that. Thanks for pointing it out.

>>14237121423712 it twas a joke. i was playing off the previous comment. it was still a good chapter

Do go on.

>>14261611426161

No prob. If I had been smacked every time I made an numerical/grammatical error*once including telling someone off for their grammer* I would be brain dead.

I feel like an idiot. This entire time I thought his username was Gareth_Johnson. Not Jason.

*derp*

>>14292791429279 Hehe Johnson LOL thats funny :)

>>14292791429279>>14268931426893>>14261611426161>>14260271426027>>14254081425408 All of you are Great bronys. I am so glad you like my story. All of you are awesome and Hey. If you happen to get any ideas of what i should right about next, or any other type of suggestions, Please Tell me. I will happily look at them and see if i can put it in. Thank you for being awesome!

>>14293941429394

It is funny. I play waaayyy to much Halo.

Aww... Thanks!

>>14300831430083 ya halo for the win

I AM SO SORRY EVERYPONY!!!! My Procrastination took me over... But it's here!!!

This chapter looks a bit different than the others because i now haz an editor! The_Foreman is helping me out.

Hope you enjoy! I will stop my procrastination!!

--Gareth

I'm happy to be of service. *deep sweeping bow*

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:D

And so it begins, the human-pony chase of history. Lets see in how much trouble they get in.

That my friend, WAS AWESOME

FINALLY

now to wait for the next chapter which i hope is soon

Yes! Update! Thanks!

You now haz editor! But... but now I can't tease you grammatically!

>>15445961544596

Bow even deeper. Thank you for editez!

>>15459471545947 well you can still tease him about misspellings as i suck at those . i fix more of the paragraph format and sentence format. hope everyone has a good day

yay

>>15446501544650>>15446801544680>>15446911544691>>15459471545947>>15484231548423 I am Glad all of you liked it, do not worry i will stop procrastinating and work. Thanks for being awesome, cause without you guys (and girls, if there is any, i can't tell cause its the internet) I would not have the confidence to write more.

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--Gareth

YESH! HES FOUND THEM! No Stache, anti-climatic chapter

STACHE APPROVED MATE!

>>15924011592401>>15924271592427 Thanks for the staches

A wild new chapter appeared.

Yeah yeah, you can bite my head off for being lazy, i really try not to be, but time gets away from me. And it's that feeling you get when you open the text document and you don't want to write but before you open it you do. Its hard to explain.

BUT HERE IT IS CHAPTER 7!

Hope you enjoy!

--Gareth

Good chapter friend!!!, feels like it should be a little longer like around 2000 some words, but other then that i loved it!!!

now to wait for chapter 8!!!

>>16696491669649 sorry that it's not longer, i wanted it to be longer but i wanted it done so i could work on the next chapter.

>>16698071669807 can't argue with that, that's why i plan things about how long chaper should be and the right time to release them

>>16698221669822 True.

Really good chapter, and story by the way XD but just one question, what will happen with Max? i mean he never go to Equestria did he will get here or he will stay on earth? and fo you will do a chapter about the PoV of Alex? and when the next c-

SHUT THE BUCK UP WITH YOUR QUESTION YOU JUST HAVE TO WAIT!!!!!!

But Chrysis, i want to know now....

SHUT UP AND GO PLAY COD!

fine................

Glad to see your still doing this story…now I must play the always annoying…waiting game

>>16701711670171 Max is sort of a surprise i'm going to throw out, i might throw in an Alex PoV not sure though...

>>16702531670253 I will try to make the next one as fast as i can I swear!

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Sorry guys I was asleep all day

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>> Gareth_Jason I'm going to hold you to that pinkie promise and if you don't live up to your promise well…let's just say CUPCAKES for everyone

>>16714361671436 oh god please don't even go there with cupcakes.... i hate that fic so much i could just scream.... *big breath* aaaaaaahhhhhhh!...

>> Gareth_Jason yeah me to but it can't be worse than rainbow factory or sweet apple masacre

>>16717421671742 I don't mean to be rude, but your replies seem a bit... off. Like the response part is nirmal text when it should be blue.

>>16711021671102 Need an OC? I've got about 4-5

>>16718471671847 no more ocs... please... i can barely handle 3...

>>16719121671912 My offer still stands if you ever need one.

>> Lord Guffington yeah I know every time I reply to a comment it doesnt turn blue why is that (take this comment for example

Great story so far and 100th comment YAY. ALEX GOT LAID!