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It's a really hot day in Ponyville, and Scootaloo is working hard to win some bits by herself. The dreadful heat makes her crave ice cream, so she decides to purchase one with the money she earned. However, things never go as planned...
Original idea by Carmine.
Awww, some nice Scoots and Rainbow. We've all been there Scootaloo, I feel for you.
On a side note... What do you say if I invite you an ice cream?, R-really? You… you will invite me an ice cream?
Pinkie Pie is gonna EXPLODE, 
They are apparently inviting the Ice Cream to a PARTY
Ice Cream+ Party = 
that's an easy error, if you speak spanish, (that's exactly how you say it in spanish, literaly translated) and just checked deistar's youtube channel and that happens to be true. So if you take into account he isnt english native, i'm quite impressed by his grammar, If it were me instead, i'm sure i would have been buried alive XD
:_:
My little dashie has nothing on this.
Couldn't have said it better myself. <insert Princess Bride references about 'invite' not meaning what one thinks it means>
That actually ruined the fic, ti's a pointless sentence that adds nothing to the story, it just distracts from everything else that was going on.
There's potential here, it just needs to be cleaned up a little bit in places, and word choice needs to be considered a little better.
No, the sentence is quite awkward. It's vague enough and worded in such a way that implies Rainbow is referring to some greater tragedy, like abandonment or something to that effect. The root of this issue is, "suffer the same thing that happened to me as a filly." There's no specific incident mentioned, and the verb "to suffer" exacerbates the vague nature of the wording when it is combined with the equally vague "me as a filly." Together, those words imply some sort of ongoing event from Dash's childhood that she's trying to spare Scootaloo from. It would be better to just have Dash answer with something like, "Because I want to be" and follow it up with some description of a memory that Dash has of dropping ice cream. We don't know what Dash is thinking unless you describe it to us.
A quick-fix would be to just to have Dash say: "Let's just say I know how you're feeling." Actually, forget that, just don't have Scootaloo ask why, Scootaloo wouldn't question something like that and Rainbow hasn't really shown herself to be a jerk to Scootaloo.
I'm sorry I didn't notice it at the time, seems more than one of your stories is taken from one of the Fab Four's song titles 
Is the next one going to be "Mean Mr. Mustard?" Nearly any title off Abbey Road works 'cept for maybe Maxwell's Silver Hammer *shudder.* Really, nearly anything out of their catalogue works.
Being for the Benefit of Silver Spoon!
If you want to reply, I'd appreciate if you did in my userpage rather than having a chat in the fic's comments.
In the words of Darth Vader and Spike the dragon: NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Not the ICE CREAM!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Poor Scootaloo, and Lyra, for once she's not paired with Bon-Bon and is a nice and sweet mare I can enjoy...I like her. This fic was great, one or two error but they are minor.
>>1373948 really do you post that on every comments page ?
I think you gave that to me TWICE!!!
Let's just say I know better than anypony how you feel about dropping an ice cream.”
don't get it
No tears were shed nor was any sadness felt, Scootaloo crying over ice cream? That's sad? Really?
I think the 'sad' tag is applied from the perspective of Scootaloo, i.e. she's sad she dropped her ice cream. The entire story is subtle Scootabuse bait, and the switch is that it's actually Scootalove. The last line implies that Rainbow Dash can commiserate with Scootaloo in that Rainbow Dash, too, has dropped ice cream and been sad about it. 
Excellent and all, but certainly one of the sliciest slices of life I've ever seen. You could at least have added a twist at the end, like Scootaloo dropping her second ice cream as well. That being sad, I guess there is nothing wrong per se with something utterly harmless being added to our cultural heritage, and even becoming popular.
*looks at sad tag* "oh no!" *looks at story title* "oh no!" *reads it anyway*
"aww, now that wasnt so bad. Not really a sad story if it ends on a good note"
Meh, this story doesn't have too much plot to it, but I still walk away feeling satisfied. I guess i'm just a sucker for short lil stories that have happy endings. Most of rainbow's comments were totally on character. But that one "mushy", as rainbow would say, bit where she said "besides, I just dont like to see other ponies crying", idk, I think it may have been a tad off character, but I could be mistaken. Overall, good story.
This has to be the most, its undeniably, unquestionably, cute!
I mean its sad that Scoots dropped her icecream and all, but its so cute!!!!!!!
Also, I want to know what Rainbow went through with dropped icecream now, lol.
This story, its, its, its, 
then its 
then its I can't fathom the feelings and emotions of this story.... 5 out of 5, er, Ice Creams for little Scoots.
Cute story. 
Although I wonder what happened to Rainbow...
Needs moar disappointment. Like they get to Sugarcube Corner and Scoots is all ready to get a replacement for her vanilla ice cream cone, but it turns out they only have...eeyuck... CHOCOLATE. 
Keep trying, perhaps you'll write something funnier than Scootaloo is Slightly Flame
Retardant someday.
>>1373608 When you live in Cloudsdale and you drop an ice cream..........maybe it landed on someponys head? OMG Revalation! It landed on derpy (who was flying somewhere under Clousdale) and thats what made her the way she is! I dunno, but this is very interesting and well written, good job!
What a nice Scootalove story this was.
The story was basically as follows:
Ice cream + Scootaloo = Happy Scootaloo
Ice cream on the ground + Scootaloo = Unhappy Scootaloo
Ice cream + Rainbow Dash + Scootaloo = Happier Scootaloo
No secret terrible pasts or some crying about how Scootaloo has no parents (or does she? I dunno "Scootaloos secret origins" isnt complete yet)
>>1373641 It's very clear that what happened was that when Rainbow Dash dropped her ice cream as a filly, she could not bear the weight of the crushing loss and committed suicide by diving down a hydra's throat and digesting alive in acidic agony.
So she is currently a ghost and has joined the Ghost Wonderbolts.
Again I comment on this story for the 3rd time in the same day....
I just want to reach into the screen and give Scootaloo a great big hug, say everything is alright and then give her another icecream! The picture is soooo adorable!!!!!!
Also, 20 people dropped their icecream and rainbow didn't give them more... lol, sorry thats the first time I've done a 'haters did this'
Dunno...
Anyway, this story deserves to be featured everywhere, its sooo cute!!!!!! This is definatly an all time favorite of mine.
NOT THE ICE CREAM!!!! ANYTHING BUT THE ICE CREAM!!!
Lawl, dis b cool story bro.
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that was the saddest thing i evah read.
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