nice set-up, i think Rd is a bit out of place, well she is out of place ha..ha.....ha (bad joke)

I think everything is going too fast, try pacing a little more, nevertheless its a very good job and well written

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Thanks for reading, hehe. I appreciate all feedback, although I probably wont be making significant changes. There are reasons for almost everything in there. I know pacing has always been my main issue, but ... well ... it gets faster. A lot faster.

As for Rainbow, my version of her character has always diverged from the show and most fanon. Won't go into how, that's what the story is for!

Quick note: The story has mostly been written out, should go up on a once-a-week update schedule.

great story, interesting idea

Interesting. This story is getting very interesting indeed.

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So glad you like it.

Updates will be more frequent now. I've written out everything - just minor edits and lore revisions to be made. Throw me a PM if there's a glaring inconsistency - it'll be a scene I passed over accidentally, hehe.

you really mean what you said "faster"

so far so good, the plot is catching and it's nice see twilight stand against so mighty foe, not so Damsel in distress

New chapter. ^-^

...holy shit

Awesome chapter.  Look forward to the next.

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Did ... Did I just earn a favorite?

Victory dance!

>>14139971413997

yeap you earn it, the ideia of a body without mind, creating new toughts and the mind, trap on the flow of the river, well, that is my bet

I loved this chapter. look forward to the next!

So we come to the end. I certainly hope that everyone reading enjoyed Lethe as much as I did writing it.

I'm well aware that there are quite a few plot points left unresolved. This is intentional, all I'll say is keep an eye out for a follow-up. Lethe was intended, and written, to serve as a prologue. Teehee.

That said, I'm not done with it yet. At some point, presumably a ways off yet, I'm planning on coming back and rewriting large sections. There are issues to be fixed, such as the pacing - something I always end up struggling with.

I'd greatly appreciate all feedback - good, bad, whatever, I don't care. Seriously. Everything helps. The one thing I'd ask, is to constrain spoilers to PM's; while not exactly surprising, there is a certain satisfaction to be found in reading it for yourself, no matter what the story.

That's all from me for now. I'm planning on using my blog to post author's notes, or anything related. But don't hold your breath.

-Preservation

you're a bad person

>>14276891427689

This might just be my favourite comment ever.

Great story, I enjoyed too much. You deserve more thumbs up, but I can only give one and a fav.

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_cake.png

Oh holy crap Brandon Sanderson.

I am reading this as soon as I finish The Tears of Gaia.

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Brandon Sanderson is just ... incredibly good. Like, really, really, really amazing.

The crossover/AU that involves his work is subtle, but anyone familiar with the Cosmere, and especially the Mistborn trilogy should be able to pick the links up. I hope you enjoy it!

finished the first chapter just now, and i gotta say, very interesting; the only thing which bothered me a little was the unorthodox use of single quotation marks instead of double, it's not huge, but given how many use double marks it does make itself known.

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I am aware of this, though I wasn't at the time. It's one of the issues I'm fixing in the rewrite, which I hope will be ready within a couple of months

the story in itself is awesome, i absolutely love it! but i do i feel like the descriptions and "paintings" of the world are a bit behind, im not 'seeing' the world as i read, i fill out a lot in my mind; most importantly though, i don't really feel their emotions that much.

awesome story!

>>26015312601531

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!

Edit: The rewrite is now live. The original is accessible through the G-Docs link in the story description, but really, why would you want to read that? This version is all shiny, and new, and better . . . :)

Wait....wasn't this story complete before?

Lethe is the name of a river in Hades which, if it's water is drunk, completely wipes the memory of the persons past life

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Yes, yes it was.  It has been updated with higher quality, more consistent prose, an overhauled structure and pacing, and new elements of world-building that directly lead in to other stories in-universe.

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Indeed.

awesome rework of the chapter! i noticed many previous short-comings of the writing now being gone

Great re-chapter .