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Nopony truly knows how Rainbows are made in Equestria. But when Scootaloo and her friends fail their flight tests, they'll find out the truth to how the glorious Cloudsdale produces it's signature export... and at what horrifying cost.
Thank you Drul for your wonderful art for the cover image.
Thank you DOOM1945 for your outstandingly beautiful fanart of the ending. SPOILERS. http://doom1945.deviantart.com/gallery/34256866#/d4jfn9p
Well, for that comment I dislike you.
This man is not a terrible person, he is a god among men.
If you don't like him becuase of this story then, tough, if you don't like Gridmark then why I you view this?
No sorry, I don't dislike you, I hate you. You are now on the list.
Oh EM GEEEE!!! You are the terrible person who wrote this?! 
It's the most scarring grimdark that I've read. (Yes, worse than cupcakes.) Poor Scoots...
Okay... Fine, it wasn't that scary, but your grimdark actually has an emotional attachment that extends beyond just ruthlessly murdering my beloved ponies in a combine/thresher/industrial machinery/etc.
P.S. Wow, nice to finally see it on FimFiction...
So YOU are the one who made this? Wow, this is really the darkest I've ever seen of Rainbow, as well as the worst logical explanation for why she has a rainbow mane and trail. But nevertheless, this was expertly done. Very enticing to read and it leaves on a note that finishes the story, but still leaves questions up for speculation.
Hope to see more works from you, mate. 
And for that matter, Rainbow Factory should only be available on FIMFiction and Google Docs. If anyone finds the whole story, and not just a link to the document, please show me ^_^
I'm fine with the publicity I'd just like to make sure the proper attribution is there. 
I guess you could call it...
...A RAINBOW IN THE DAAARKKK!
Hipsterism ill serves anyone. But least of all someone that loves to think their own property is clean and pure as the driven slush. I know you just want to be cool and ironic, drinking your Pabst for a laugh and listening to music you hate to be a snob. But do it in your underground clubs with your other anticonformist friends. 
At the part where Rainbow Dash reveals herself at first I was like 
Then i was like, "NOOOOOO! NOT RAINBOW DASH! WHY?! WHYYYYYY?!?!
From then on with Scootaloo crushed and Rainbow Dash spiraling further into her insanity that almost made me feel sorry for her, I felt... I felt...
Something like that.
Honestly, I don't particularly like stories like these: gory, character destroying. However, this is much better than cupcakes. This holds something sincere and heart-wrenching that isn't simply a Cupcakes shock value trollfic. I appreciate and respect your story a lot more.
Read the story, then went to check out your profile for some more works by you... Then I realized you murdered your OC/Alter Ego pony in the story! Why man, why!
Fantastic job mate, the dark in MLP is enhanced greatly due to the usually colorful and happy atmosphere of the show.
Can't really tell if it's better than Cupcakes. Cupcakes makes me grin in a creepy fashion - this leaves me slightly moved. Especially the last line.
As to being scarring... Fallout Equestria stands strong as the most scarring grimdark fanfic out there for me, as that was what desensitized me to ponies being combined with gore and suffering.
More Grimdark than 40k?
Yes.
Maybe even more Grimdark than 3rd Ed.
Cupcakes isn't Grimdark. Cupcakes is a poorly written horror story. Grimdark implies an absolute lack of hope, utter despair with no chance in hell of ever getting better. 1984 was Grimdark. Saw was poorly written horror. Rainbow Factory is a moving masterpiece. It hits you hard.
When I first read it in august I was emotionally traumatized, for half a week. I had time to reflect on it.
The more you think about it, the more hopeless it is. Celestia has to be in on it. Everyone in power has to be in on it, and it will never, ever, ever EVER get better.
Glorious.
You sir, exemplify heresy of the highest caliber!
How is a death factory more grimdark than fucking bugs from another galaxy eating everything, monsters fueled by pure negative emotion, superhumans that have dark powers, immortal slaver pirates, undying metal robots, giant hordes of fast reproducing and mobilizing green apes, and every single form of your own goverment killing you for even contemplating something different.
No me gusta. this reminds me of a book like "the supernaturalist" or something by Eoin Colfer
but this ending was unsuccessful for me, i would have hoped for something that gave rd some serious thing to think about, along the lines of, "I Beat you in that race" or "You had to cheat to win" u know something to mess with rd before she dies
Firstly, I am relatively new to fanfiction in general, and I have to say that I am disturbed.
Secondly, this is the fourth or fifth consecutive grimdark fic that I've read, which leads me to believe that I am a sadomachist.
Thirdly, a few spelling errors, but nothing so large as to detriment from the story at all.
Fourthly, this was an enjoyable- no, wait... A solid, high quality reading experience.
I must now inject brain bleach directly into my skull and spend a week browsing the comedy fics to suppress the mental images of this fic, so farewell.
Also, I regret to say that I havnt gotten round to Fallout: Equestria; someone mind telling me the basic plot? No spoilers, if possible!
Hmm...it was okay. Tense while reading it, but honestly didn't leave me with any particular emotions after it was over. When a story strays so far from anything believable for canon Equestria, it might as well be a standalone short story with no reference to FiM ponies at all. So if I look at it that way, it was a fairly creepy story while it lasted.
First I'd like to say that the writing in this fic is significantly better than the majority of "pure Grimdark" fics.
I did not like it.
Partially because personally I like my grimdark like I like my shipping: just an aspect of a larger-scope story, not the entire focus of the story itself.
Partially because it brings main characters so OOC that they aren't even recognizable. This makes them feel like they were used merely as an attention grab when having the entire story star only OCs would have kept the level of believability up.
Partially because while the story is written in a chilling way and portraying a dystopian system quite well, the initial concept (rainbows are made from ponies) screams tongue-in-cheek black humor and this fic is written WAY TOO SERIOUSLY. What I'm saying is it was Soylent Green when it should have been Brazil.
Partially because I really liked the song for it's creepy vague "darkness in the light" cynical concept and now I think of this when I listen to it. It basically ruined the song for me.
Cupcakes comparison:
This fic is written MUCH BETTER than Cupcakes was, but it doesn't quite "work" as well as Cupcakes did.
I'm not a fan of Cupcakes either but objectively Cupcakes kept it simple and to the point.
Concept: Pinkie went insane. No backstory, plot or high concept needed, just a what if. and the the rest was gore porn.
Rainbow Factory on the other hand takes the tongue-in-cheek, black humor joke that is Pony Grimdark and takes it too seriously, trying to hard to make it something more than it is: a trollish joke on the fandom.
I don't understand why I keep reading this. In my head, I'm thinking, "this is grimdark, I hate grimdark, I know how this ends, it's not gonna change, why am I opening this?" And then the next thing I know I've reopened the story and I'm rereading it and I'm getting traumatized all over again.
I do, however, think the writing itself is of very high quality. It certainly did what it set out to do - disturb the HELL out of the reader. I still feel shaken, which is more than I can say about "Cupcakes."
"Cupcakes" was shocking, but didn't bother me nearly as much, because it was simply so ridiculously over-the-top that it was impossible to take seriously. And I'm not saying that "Rainbow Factory" is somehow more believable or more in-character, because I just can't imagine Rainbow Dash ever being like this and there's a reason it's tagged "alternate universe," but I am saying that the superior prose made it much easier to get sucked into the twisted, cynical world it presents.
Other commenters keep insisting that this story is somehow heartwrenching and meaningful, but I just don't see it. I'm sorry, but I simply can't see anything especially deep about this. But I will say that I'm surprised at the effect it had on me; it's resonated with me somehow. It lingers, and won't let me stop thinking about it. In the back of my mind, even as I go about my everyday life or work on my own fic, this story continues to nag at me.
It was thought-provoking, I'll give you that, although I can't say what thoughts, exactly, it was intended to provoke. And now I'm probably going to go read it another dozen times and go to bed.
oh god..... no...... i'm only halfway through i'm already feeling really sad for those failed ponies 
and i already fell like vomiting on my pc 
...... but for some reason my stomach dosen't let me puke on my pc (i'm like "come on tummy puke! puke! puke! it hurts! shit!") 
...... i can't even muster the guts to read the other half...... dark readers may like this but i just can't stand it.... but i can't stop reading it...... but great writting man... i've read a lot of super grimdark stories and by far this is the only storie that chills me to the bones and makes me sick.... good job man ( <- thats a compliment)...... i'm soooooo crazy for continuing to read this unt til i really puke... 
fuck! this is my second comment and i'm at least still a little "sane"..... but after reading that fic i stabbed my finger with a really sharp needle and drank the blood.... don't even know why i did it.....
..... all i know is now i'm a bit more insane than before i read this fic.....(lafs sigh-ko-tic-ly.....)
If this story hurts you that badly please, please for the love of all that matters never ever read any grimdark tagged clopfiction. I thought I hated ponies getting murdered, but I would read 100 stories like this, Cupcakes and Severing to take back the one rapefic I made the horrible mistake of reading.
I read this, with the song by Wooden Toaster playing and reading the lyrics as they came up.
It was...Intense...
I feel utterly evil now. Stained. I like it!
Thank you good sir for an amazing look into two characters that I have come to love and appreciate and the possibilities behind it all.
5 stars!
this was the first good fanfiction i ever read. thank you, sir, for introducing me to this wonderful world. you have done the world a favor in writing such beauty. tell you what. im gonna just leave these here. they're stars. theres five. just promise that you will NEVER speak of this. if the authorities find out... well, we dont want any 'accidents', do we? nah, its best to let the authorities stay around to do their regular business. yes..
>>91910 Exactly! I hate when people call it a horror story. Its just not. It is a sad traumatizing buetifal story. My word for it :bittersweet. Its sad but makes you do the cheesy "awwwww" and smile. Plus the only really actual gory part is Orion dying. It has a real plot and actually had a background. BITTERSWEET. NOT BLOODY.
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