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One little dream is all it takes to brighten your life,
But when do you make the dream a reality
The second part of Magic is Love Series
Featuring Twilight Sparkle X Rainbow Dash
Disclaimer: Aside from the basic story idea I make no claim to anyother material unless otherwise noted
Interesting Idea, but the length of each dialog relevant sentence is roughly twice as long as it should be, unless the speaking character is, in fact, Pinkie Pie. I would recommend using commas, ending the sentences shorter and continuing the subject in the next sentence, and using a thesaurus for diversification of the wording, thus allowing for the story to go down nice and easy, right into our intellectual gullet.
Doesn't that sound tasty?
But, again, the story Idea is quite interesting. I look forward towards the next chapter. 
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