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JArtisonW's Stories (10)

Let's Play! Vol. 01: MINECRAFT- with Luna, Celestia, and Cadence
Luna, Celestia, and Cadence play the famed MINECRAFT on Xbox 360
9,814 words · 829 views · 35 likes · 1 dislikes
Bounty Hunters 2: Awakening
The sequel to the original 'Bounty Hunters' storyline
55,116 words · 266 views · 19 likes · 1 dislikes
Bounty Hunters
In the future, Rainbow Dash and Octavia become bounty hunters. A story on Loyalty and Combat.
45,922 words · 757 views · 42 likes · 9 dislikes
Bounty Hunters 3: Genesis
Rainbow and Octavia plunge into a terrifying new reality in this final story of the trilogy.
196,381 words · 298 views · 25 likes · 4 dislikes
Luna Nightmare
13,090 words · 366 views · 13 likes · 1 dislikes
BH Podcasts
4,322 words · 54 views · 6 likes · 1 dislikes
On That Snowy Night...
4,514 words · 208 views · 12 likes · 5 dislikes
Royal Bodyguard: Fire and Ice
15,733 words · 265 views · 11 likes · 5 dislikes
Mare in the Wheelchair
3,877 words · 220 views · 6 likes · 5 dislikes
Sullen Heart
17,285 words · 78 views · 4 likes · 5 dislikes

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Royal Bodyguard: Fire and Ice by JArtisonW

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Romance Comedy Adventure

Blaze and Halcyon are two Royal Bodyguards- the elite royal guards chosen to guard the princess's side. But will they be able to keep their love, and the princess together in one piece in the coming events? Take a look inside the lives of fire and ice, the two secondary characters in the first book of the 'Bounty Hunters' series!

A story taking place before the events of 'Bounty Hunters'. Read it here: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/50278/Bounty-Hunters

May contain blood and violence in action scenes

Chapter 1: Hearts and Hooves day · 27th Sep 2012

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Chapter 2: Welcome back... Or not. · 1st Oct 2012

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Chapter 3: Limbs · 8th Oct 2012

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Chapter 4: Well That Escalated Quickly · 7th Nov 2012

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Chapter 5: Short Time Off · 30th Dec 2012

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Blazing_Mane01

#1 · Chapter 1 · 33w, 2d ago ·

Heheh, that's pretty good.

Just a tip, but your setting seems to drag a lot to me. When I saw your first chapter being 2500+ words, I was expecting some more settings... You have three distinct action settings in chapter one. I was expecting like six or seven, since that's pretty much how I write stories.

I'm also working on a fimfic with an OC named Blaze! (partial reason why I checked this story) You can click my name to check it out.

CrimsonMane

#2 · Chapter 1 · 33w, 2d ago ·

Yes! A side story! I love these! Can't wait for the next updates! Keep up the good work! :rainbowdetermined2: /) * (\ :ajsmug:

JArtisonW

#3 · Chapter 1 · 33w, 2d ago ·

>>13640561364056

Thanks- I like writing my peaceful scenes in detail. It's often in the action scenes that I pick up the pace- for the sake of the readers, you read an action scene for the action not the scene. I'll check on your FiMFic later- once my Internet becomes stable. Thanks for dropping by!

Blazing_Mane01

#4 · Chapter 1 · 33w, 2d ago ·

>>13650011365001

Absolutely.

I do understand that your characters were in peaceful situations. I guess I dont see em very often in my story, is all. Didn't mean to offend if I did.

Choppy Internet... Ugh, I know how u feel...

JArtisonW

#5 · Chapter 1 · 33w, 2d ago ·

>>13651001365100

Nah. All good. Not offended at all. In fact, I love the discussions and suggestions

Blazing_Mane01

#6 · Chapter 1 · 33w, 2d ago ·

>>13651541365154 ...

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I just got another like on my story...

...

Was that you?

JArtisonW

#7 · Chapter 1 · 33w, 2d ago ·

>>13652671365267

maybe

Marine Corp. Raider

#8 · Chapter 2 · 32w, 6d ago ·

Cool story, I like it

CrimsonMane

#9 · Chapter 2 · 32w, 2d ago ·

Please continue the story! So Awesome! :rainbowkiss:

maskedferret

#10 · Chapter 3 · 26w, 3d ago ·

I don't have a clue why the downvotes. That said try not to let them get to you, there are so many fics on this site it's amazing we find anything *Grins* My only critique is you tend to switch around with grammar a fair bit. Going from past to future tense I mean. If you'd like a hand I'm happy to assist. :pinkiehappy:

JArtisonW

#11 · Chapter 4 · 26w, 3d ago ·

>>16292681629268

Thanks;)

Yeah... The tense thing always screws my brain. For some reason my brain is programmed to do that, and whenever it's correct I actually think it's wrong... :derpyderp2:

Bookworm

#12 · Chapter 3 · 20w, 2d ago ·

You used "arm" a lot.

Bookworm

#13 · Chapter 5 · 20w, 2d ago ·

Is Hal human?

JArtisonW

#14 · Chapter 5 · 20w, 2d ago ·

Is Hal human?

....did I accidentally write 'hand'

JArtisonW

#15 · Chapter 5 · 20w, 2d ago ·

Is Hal human?
....did I accidentally write 'hand'

I don't think I did. Just often in a lot of scenes, especially fight scenes, they tend to be bipedal, otherwise I'm not sure why you ask

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