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Even the toughest of us have emotions. When a certain cyan daredevil is feeling under the weather, Twilight ventures to help Rainbow out of her rut, and possibly gain more than she had hoped for.
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I.....wow......one of the best ships on the Rainbow/Sparkle angle ever read............thanks for the uplift....I needed this one today......bloody good show!
And you are excused from the minor mistakes mentioned in the A/Ns
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I enjoyed this. It was that pick-me-up cute that everyone needs from time to time.
One thing that peeved me off about the story was your use of links to video's and music and whatnot. I mean, I'm here to read your story, why would you want to direct my attention elsewhere? Stuff like that should only be added into the A/N at the end of the fic in my opinion, because it encourages re-readability, being able to enjoy a scene that much more because you know what inspired it, not have it be a distraction while reading it.
Cute and sweet. A little over the top with the Wonderbolts favor Twilight was able to arrange, but not enough to make me stop reading. Thumbs up for you.
Couple of minor errors, as you mentioned:
Daring Do and the Quest for the Goron’s Ruby - should this be Gorgon's Ruby?
Well Twilight said you’d help us with out flying techniques today - should probably be "our"
Also, I've never heard the word "yonks" before. At all. Ever.
>>I’ve been trying to get into the Wonderbolts for yonks now
>>Rainbow’s been wanting to perform with you guys for yonks, now
Actually had to Google this one! Some sort of local British slang for years / a long time / ages? Learn something new everyday, I guess.
>>1354190 Hmm, yeah good point. But the story was inspired from those two links, so I don't know how it would have worked without. Thanks for enjoying it though 
>>1354439 Gorons from Legend a of Zelda: Ocarina of Time. Just a little reference I though I'd throw in. And yes, well spotted. I'll edit that now 
>>1355160 Hmm, forced how? Elaborate a bit?
And thanks to everypony who enjoyed my story. Honestly wasn't expecting so much positive feedback 
i love Twidash so much, and I'd say this is one of the best Twidash fics I've read. It wasn't that thourough, but it didn't need to be. You got everything across in that short of a time, and It was amazing.
So yeah, I'd say second best Twidash fic ever (behind Building Bridges). This will give some of the stories in my favorites on my user page a run for thier money.
That was an exceptionally heart warming story. It has earned my like, my favorite, and the feature it has. I would love to see a sequel, but it also has the perfect ending. You have made my night, and perhaps my day as well. I shall be watching you.
tl;dr Bravo, good sir, BRAVO!
This was brilliant...I can't even explain how much this touched me. I love Twidash and whenever I read a story with them, it melts my heart. I wish I was able to write romance like this. The ending was beautiful, it made me cry. I don't usually cry when it comes to ship-fics, unless it's The Party Hasn't Ended but; this was just so touching...I couldn't help but cry.
Great story, and all I can give you is a thumbs up, a fav, and a watch. I hope that's enough.
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well done, a nice, short but touching story and so adorable, felt a little rushed in places including the wrapping up of it, but that in not uncommon with (im assuming) a one shot story like this
also, i am australian (nsw) aswell, and the term yonks does float around not too common but it is still used along with the rest of our slang XD
keep up the great work and hope to see more (maybe even a sequal to this fic maybe?)
cheers
thorlain
Holy cows. Too cute. This was really just a great read, it made my night. It was totally worth reading. I would love it if there were a sequel, but it would be fine if it ended here; that was the perfect ending. Seemed a little rushed, but if it had gone slower i don't think it would have the same effect.thumbs up, fave from me! You have earned my mustaches.
Nice, short and sweet. I admit to laughing out loud when I clicked on the double rainbow link, but I never like to see other media incorporated into a story like that - as I believe someone else said, it distracts you from the story. I didn't actually click on the second link until after I'd finished reading because, frankly, I was expecting Rick Astley's "Never gonna give you up" and I just wouldn't have been able to take the climax seriously if that was the case 
Other than that though, this was a good read! Keep them coming
Umm...wow thanks everypony for all the positive feed back 
Also to those who pointed out flaws in my writing. I'll be sure to take your advice on in the future. Might write some more fics like this 
If enough people ask for a sequel / epilogue kinda thing, I'll do that, too
>>1358263This could become one of the best fics I've ever read if you continue it and continue to do it the way it's been done. I meant every word of my previous comment. I really enjoyed this fic, and I look forward to reading more of it and probably anything else you write. Keep it up, and keep 'em coming!
Also have this one:
Maybe my next story will incorporate a dance track 
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I'm not going to open the links...
In actual literature, keeping songs and music vague or unspecified as a general rule is better, as the reader is able to fill in the songs frmo their head as they see fit. Personally, I put Ray Charles' "You Don't Know Me" as Twilight's love song for Rainbow Dash.
Anyhoot, all that aside, it was a great and sweet little story.
The story is good, but most of romance in this place are usually the Mane 6. Doesn't it encourage homosexuality? I was thinking, can you remake this one, but maybe Soarin from the Wonderbolts falls for Rainbow Dash and they both love each other? Or maybe Twilight with another nerd. And Canterlot is not full of those obnoxious people. Canterlot is very neat, none of the informal.
I went back and read a lot of the other comments. Not sure why people are so opposed to the media references. It isnt really a distraction, you read up until the reference, you go to it, watch it, you come back, and keep reading. I thought it worked excellently, was really cool and I wish it was done more often. As for the song, im glad he referenced to a specific song rather than keeping it vague, for me it was like adding more detail to the scene, my mind wouldn't have been able to set the proper mood without it. I thought this story was excellent. Sigh, if mlp was made for bronies and not young children, then this would have made an excellent episode.
>>1359219 Is the word you're looking for really "disingenuous"? My dictionary defines it as "lacking in sincerity", and how exactly can you lack sincerity to something, much less a species?
Anyway, I really liked this story. One fascinating aspect of it is that you could pretty much cut the ending and one or two sentences before that, and you'd have a classic friendshipping story rather than a romance - which goes to show that this one had quite a bit more thought going into the romantic buildup than the average shipping story. Well done.
A simple, yet beautifully written story. Normally, I am strongly - very strongly - opposed to shipping of any of the Mane 6, but this was so perfectly executed that this story was more than tolerable. I was unsure of reading this story, seeing yet another title, cover, and tags pointing to a stereotypical Twi-Dash ship, but I do not regret reading it in the slightest. I'm glad I read this. I hope to see more from you, shipping or otherwise. Sazura, good job. *Tears up* And the use of that song made it all better than perfect. Great - no, fantastic job.
Well done. >>1358263 Don't take this the wrong way, but I hope there isn't a sequel, the story is too perfect just the way it is. Continuing it would feel very tacked on to me, but that's just my opinion and may very well not be worth a bucket of horseapples. I do hope to see more of your work in the future though.
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Made yesterday, already has 94 comments and about 3k views. Bravo :D. Good job on the story, they need more fanfics that don't have the characters going, hey I like you, hey I like you too; and nothing but kisses and sex after that. XD Get's rather annoying after a while, so this was a good story to read. I'll keep this one bookmarked just so I can check you out again for more stories ;P
Beautiful. This is going into my showcase.
I can really relate to Twilight. I have fallen (deep) for my best friend. One could easily compare Twi to me and RD to her, given our personalities and interests.
This story could perfectly apply to our friendship, or at least Twi's feelings.
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