I know what you're thinking, Aevum wakes up, mysteriously healed and ready to take part in life in Ponyville as she meets each of the mane six one by one. She becomes well liked by all and then BAM! Discord attacks, and Aevum plays an instrumental role in his defeat and lives happily ever after.

No. Just. No.

You could not be more wrong, Discord is in it, but that's down the track... way down the track... And i fully intend to get Aevum away from Ponyville as fast as humanly possible, because... well... don't get me wrong, i like Ponyville. Ponyville is awesome! but I'm going to try and avoid the standard 'alicorn makes friends in Ponyville' cliche and i also feel that there's been enough epic fics based in and around Ponyville and i'm going to try and use some more unusual locales also the mane six will feature little in this story hence the tags.

Read, Rate, Comment, and believe me when i say that the plot will thicken so much you'll think that Princess Celestia is gorging herself in her 'sleep'

Will add tags as suggested and/or as they become apparent. now if you'll excuse me i have some research to do

(Starlight: Brace for impact Doxy! Dislikes incoming!)

Italics continuity, otherwise continue

Added go read later for when there's more substance here. The description got my attention, and though alicorn stories are tough to do right, when they succeed they can be beautiful.

Good luck with this. Hope you don't disappoint.

>>13507631350763 Italics continuity? what...

>>13510751351075 Thanks! I actually took this as a challenge to see if it could be done, I'm still bracing for impact though.

playing HALO 3 soundtrack to this makes it music to my ears

>>13513131351313 Oh-my-gosh-I-wrote-this-to-the-halo-soundtrack-well-maybe-not-the-halo-three-sountrack-but-still-oh-my-gosh-oh-my-gosh-oh-my-gosh-that-is-sooo-coincidental!

but truthfully i did write this to the Halo soundtrack 'Blow Me Away', 'Pursuit Of Truth' and 'Respite' specifically

I couldn't leave this story without leaving a comment. There were a few spots where the grammar was off, such as where you put comma after comma in near the beginning of the bold section. Most of those fragments could be put in their own sentence.

I like this story for the fact that I am planning something along the same lines, an OC alicorn and Discord story. I'd like to see an aspiring writer pull a project like this off.

I'll watch this, just so I can see where its headed. If you need a proofreader/ editor I can always help, just PM me through FIMfic or email at vaniondale@gmail.com

>>13513861351386 nice

>>13514101351410 yes. I'll admit my grammar is not the strongest, never has been, and Discord's is just a minor plot device, i have bigger and badder things to introduce my little alicorn to... not that it's a self insert, my profile pic is my OC and i'd be honored if you became my editor so i think i will send that message.

i gotta say... I was expecting this to be carpet bombed with dislikes and nasty comments telling me how outdated this idea is, once again i have underestimated my fellow Bronys (or Bronies if you rather) for your ability to tolerate anything the world throws at you, including this fiction.

Excuse me while i go and shed tears of joy. ... and write some more.

>>13512321351232

For any and all dreams sequences and journals it's best to write in italics entirely.

Allright.

I think that maybe you rushed the story. Also could have built up a friendly relationship between Ceasar and your Alicorn, so we would feel bad about her losing her only friend.

If you are planning take her adventure outside ponyville that's fine, but also, it's necessary to ask  when is continuing the "humans" part of your story?

your story isn't bad at all, it's just needlessly rushed

>>13552001355200 The humans will be back, of that you can be certain

There's chapter 2, now I must go and rewrite chapter 1 for full 3rd person perspective... and hopefully I'll get chapter three done and published soon...

(Unlike Valve)

Allons-y!

Edit: Sorry about the multi-updates, i just noticed some things that weren't right after going through it again and i simply could not stand by and leave them be. (╯°□°）╯︵ ┻━┻)

Well, although it was a bit rushed, it was a good read. There were a few grammatical errors that I found, but I can't really go back and find them all. Anyways, good work!