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  • 102w, 3h
    just made a tumblr

    check it out:

    http://letters2theprincesses.tumblr.com/

    ~John Roetzer

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  • 122w, 2d
    Well...

    I (John Roetzer) am considering writing a companion/side story for the Chess Game of the Gods series involving a zebra.(Chess Game of the Gods is the universe featuring the stories Ballad of Echo the Diamond Dog and Griffin the Griffin)

    I am not sure how it would turn out and, i am sad to say, may sputter out and die if I cannot get enough time to write it, as Royal Pains maintains first priority. Do you guys think I should go through with it? please respond so i can determine weather it would be worth the effort.

    Also this would most likely be a solo project, just me, no Xplayer.

    I would also need permission from rust to have it official after the first chapter, so it could end right there.

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  • 124w, 2d
    Release Notes: Chapter 5

    Yes, we finished a chapter in 3 weeks and not 3 months. It is indeed possible!

    Xplayer here. I'm glad to see that FiMFiction threw Royal Pains into the featured bar again for some odd reason. New fans are always welcome! The story isn't that long anyway.

    On to various behind the scenes A/Ns and references:

    1. Please forgive the memespamming in the second paragraph. Memespamming, in my opinion, is the WORST. POSSIBLE. THING. in writting :P

    2. For any horse experts out there, we are aware that horses do not have ankles. We just thought using the technical term for the joint between the hoof and lower leg (which, according to Wikipedia is called the fetlock), would just sound awkward and have people rushing to dictionaries unnecessarily.

    3. Our fight scene may not be as detailed and fluid as something from, say, The Immortal Game, but it's our first attempt at a crowd fight, so any comments and criticism on that scene in particular would be greatly appreciated.

    4. Since both John and I dabble in learning about the science of the multiverse, we'd like to address whether or not if you met yourself from a parallel dimension, the space time continuum would unravel. However, since I don't have the time to write and you probably don't have the time to read a dissertation regarding the physical and philosophical implications of the matter, we'll just say, NO.

    5. Obvious Lord of the Rings reference is obvious.

    Again, there's no timetable for the next chapter, but hopefully it will be written soon. Both John and I will be away for most of July, so if there isn't an update by then, don't expect one until the end of July. Until then,

    Godspeed,

    Xplayer

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  • 127w, 3d
    Release Notes: Chapter 4

    WOW THAT WAS A LOOOONG DELAY.

    Xplayer here. John and I are now very much familiar with the problems of scheduling, especially considering that one of us only has access to a computer during specific times of the day. I also learned to never set a timetable for a new chapter, but if you know anything about internet timetables, they're never accurate. We're on Valve time here people! I will say that HOPEFULLY  the next chapter will come out sooner than this one. The summer should allow us to work together more efficiently, but I will make no promises. ;)

    Anyway, on to the story notes to prevent our author's notes from being ridiculously long, because I know that most people don't really care about my "behind the scenes" thoughts.

    1. For those of you who haven't taken/fell asleep in World Civilizations 101, here's the building upon which the Upper Crust was based.

    2. Note that the latest developments regarding the structure of the Royal Equestrian Army shouldn't contradict our story. Shining Armor is like a five star general, whereas Lance is just a Commander, or if we actually knew what we were doing and used the correct army term, a lieutenant colonel.

    3. There was no (and I believe still is no) consensus on the genderbent Fancypants and Fleur de Lis names. We decided on Pleated Skirt for Fancypants as a more "literal" genderbent equivalent. Floriano is more of a phonetic equivalent, as the Italian for "lily" is "giglio" (according to Google translate).Floriano, in my opinion, is supposed to be more of a dashing, beautiful male rather than a "trophy" male such as a bodybuilder athlete type. We couldn't really agree and didn't really have the time to develop his character, so it was left rather ambiguous.

    4. I'm really glad to finally have BBs change places. That was our intention from the beginning, and having to keep that unwritten for months was aggravating. Now the REAL story (whatever that means) begins.

    That's all I have to share for now. If you have any questions, feel free to leave them in the comments below and I'll try to answer them.

    Godspeed,

    Xplayer

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  • 128w, 1d
    Chapter Four

    should be out by Monday at the latest. sorry for the wait, but i can almost guarantee ch5 will not entail such a long period of suffering on all our parts

    sorry for the delay

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Blueblood needs to learn some humility. With the help of Celestia and a few "friends" he will learn his lesson, whether he wants to or not.

First Published
26th Dec 2011
Last Modified
5th Jun 2012
#1 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Tracking! :rainbowkiss: Cool story :raritystarry:

#2 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Yes I can track this now!

Ice
#3 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

0_0 tracked

#4 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Hermmmmmm...... Blueblood. :ajbemused:

This looks interesting. I, like many others, hold no special place in my heart for the so-called Prince. However, this story is promising. Could be good.

My sonic fine-tooth comb isn't picking up any major issues. That's rare. Congratz!

AS for the story, only issue i had. Why the feeling for Blueblood/belle so fast by the caretaker, Lance/Spear? Seem sudden.

I guess the genderswap universe will come into play later, other than just being a clever way to write. Perhaps Blueblood/belle meets the other, somehow? Just speculation, of course. :raritywink:

All in all, tracking! this could be interesting!

-The Librarian

#5 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>89513

Xplayer here. Thanks for the reply! I'm glad you enjoyed the story so far.

As for Spear/Lance's "conversion," I take responsibility for the abruptness of that plot device. I tried my best to try to make it sound "natural," but due to the necessities of pacing, I needed to make it relatively quick rather than stretching it out among many chapters. I didn't really want to keep the hatred between Lance/Blueblood/Spear/Bluebelle) for too much of the story, mostly because I felt that Blueblood/Bluebelle needed a friend so they can overcome the trials coming later on. It's not to say that they'll suddenly be BFFs from now on, certainly Lance/Spear will have his/her hands full with Blueblood's/Bluebelle's behavior, but I wanted to break the "wall" between them relatively early.

And yes, the genderswap universe will come into play, but unlike On a Cross and Arrow (on which this story is based) we didn't feel it necessary to have the universes interact right away. Since there are lots of side characters and some OCs that aren't given much development in canon, we felt it necessary to spend the first few chapters on character development.

#6 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Excellent

#7 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

This is going to be so hilarious. How insufferable they are Vs. their narcissism. I wonder which will win.

#8 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Is this going to be another "torture Blueblood" fic? Hopefully not.

Anyhow, pacing seems a bit off, but you already noted why. Perhaps a little slower for following chapters?

#9 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

:moustache: Now this looks interesting my good sir please keep up the good work :twilightsmile:

#10 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I hope your version of Blueblood can get to a likable stage faster than some of the other Blueblood fics do. Yes, I know a personality change takes time and a lot of introspection, but even then reading chapter after chapter after chapter of a certain pony being such an unrelenting dick really grinds the enjoyment out of the fic. I'd rather see how other ponies deal with the new him.......

Oh wait actual reviewing. My bad. My ruminating aside, I didn't see any issues with this fic myself aside from some of the pacing. I know you mentioned you wanted to break the wall between BB and Lance/Spear early, but at the same time it does kind of cause the story flow to jump a bit. I mean Spear/Lance were screaming out loud their agony over being lumped with the Royal Load, and then move to being sympathetic to him/her after the very first day? Not to mention asking something like "Do you want to talk?" after BB went missing. First of all running away like that and giving the Commanders a scare was pretty selfish of BB. I'd imagine most ponies would be rather pissed than understanding after having been drug out of their apartment to looking for a spoiled royal.

Actually I did spot one thing that's odd. Two actually. After Commander Lance showed up in Princess Celestia's bedroom he greets her and Professor Mesmera. However in later dialogue P. Celestia warns Lance and Cantrip to close their eyes. Unless Mesmera came to visit the Princess, I'm supposing it was Cantrip he was actually suppose to greet.

The second odd thing I noticed is probably more of me just being very confused is either Professor's already being in Princess Celestia's bedroom at a time when the Commander mentions she should be sleeping. I'm just wondering about that. :unsuresweetie:

#11 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I actually didn't notice anything wrong with the pacing... It seems to be as smooth as a trans-dimensional piece can be.

But, then again, I AM me.

Loving it so far, can't wait to see what actually transpires to get blueblood and bluebelle to swap places/come snout-to-snout.

I'd like to see the Octy-scratch from both sides of the mirror, lol >_< Like, they end up with Vinyl and Octavian, and Octavia ends up with... um... Record Scratch? Would Vinyl be a male's name?

... I know! Call him DJ Dub-Step, and his 'real' name is Dudley or something! :unsuresweetie: ... I honestly cannot think of anything better and it seriously is 3 AM. Goodnight!

Tracked, 5/5, commented, will fave when we see how this goes... :yay:

#12 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Excellent story! I can't wait to read more. The idea is interesting so is the execution. In short: MOAR!!!

#13 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Tracking. This seems good. Does anypony else get Professor Cantrip's name?

#14 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Oohoo!  So you put it here on Config as well as DA? AWESOME! On to chapter 2 then!

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria'

#15 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

You wanna know irony? I'm listening to DisQord from Europony super beat, and right as Sarge finished, DisQord started laughing madly. Best. Timing. Ever. *goes back to reading the chapter*

Nice. It's much easier to track this here than it is amongst the hundreds of artists I follow on DA! Thanks again!

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

#16 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Also the Sarges shouting. I'm sorry but it HAS to be done.

Blueblood: *whines incessantly*

Sarge: FUS RO DAH!!

#17 · 147w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>91031 FUS RO DOWN! UP! DOWN! UP! YOU CALL THOSE PUSH-UPS, MAGGOT?!?!?!?!?! :trollestia:

#18 · 147w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>91287

Sarge: Now for the 20 mile run!

Blueblood: But my hooves are getting dirty and my mane is in dire need of a barber! One of the royal ones, not one of those peasant-

Sarge: MOVE OUT. YOL TOR SHUUL!!

That's a fav of mine. I love breathing fire.

#19 · 147w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I'm really enjoying this so far! It's great to see Prince Blueblood getting his comeuppance without it being excessively cruel like some other stories. Having him enrolled in the military is an interesting twist, and I do like that some hint of true character is starting to show for him, not to mention an acknowledgement of his special talent.

#20 · 147w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Sinbad! Genius.

#21 · 147w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Awsome story lest just say stalked....i mean watch :ajbemused: tracked

#22 · 147w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Poor Blueblood\Bluebelle... I actually feel bad for them. So, prince\princess neglected his\her nephew for all his life, then when he, OH SO SUDDENLY grew into royal jerk they threw him into unfamiliar life and subordination, to break and make 'good'. Not when he was a colt and would've easily learned how behave properly.

But guess what - Princess\Prince don't care before it's almost too late, and now Blue' must suffer for Celest' mistakes.

That's not very nice...

#23 · 147w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>90360

>First of all running away like that and giving the Commanders a scare was pretty selfish of BB. I'd imagine most ponies would be rather pissed than understanding after having been drug out of their apartment to looking for a spoiled royal

Yeah. because when Princess and guards and everypony else let him grow into what he is now and oh so suddenly realized he's jerk  - perhaps they could've realized it sooner and rise him better when he was colt, huh? - they throw him to sergeant, act like it's all his fault, he's humiliated, worn out, covered in cuts and bruises, and he COMPLETELY unprepared for that - his body, at least, because he lived like prince. By the way, if Princess CARED about him she would've gave him tutor or enrolled into guards sooner.

So, Princess is to blame as much as Blueblood.

#24 · 147w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>92131 You know i completely agree with you can't always blame a child for their choices in life you can blame the guiding force. but what if the child was given everything they ever wanted just by asking they wouldn't usually become generous the first thing they would do would be to flaunt it in others faces, or even create it in their mind that they have done nothing wrong and when there punished its for something they didn't do

i really need some coffee :pinkiesick:  its to late to be typing like this

#25 · 147w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>92131 They mention part of the reason for this was his/her long term behavior. This isn't over one little event, this is the latest in a long line of incredibly selfish and abusive behavior to others. As for the Prince/Princess being responsible that's unlikely. We see from the show that the nobility are incredibly arrogant already, bearing the title Prince/Princess and apparently being of some relation to the monarch's would swell their heads even more. Celestia/Solaris likely didn't raise BB personally likely because they couldn't being not only the monarch of the land, but the local sun god/goddess as well. So most of the blame is with the one with the one that acted without care for others.

#26 · 147w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>92384

Nope. It's stated that ONLY Blueblood is 'Prince' and nephew of Celestia. If this is long line of selfish behavior, why won't Princess act sooner? Why Prince was left to grow into jerk without guiding hoof OR given guard-tutor-mentor sooner when he started to act unruly and selfish? If you let your nephew grow without supervision, without looking after him and teaching him how to behave properly.... don't be surprised if he grows into selfish jerk.

But, it's not only his fault. Princess and her nephew both responcible for that.

#27 · 147w, 19h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Well, I guess Celestia's methods are sometimes counter-productive.

Her very own student very nearly grew up to be an antisocial shut-in. She's gotten better, but when it comes

to the Princess she regularly turns into a nervous wreck who's a danger to herself and anypony around her. And remember, she got better after Celestia sent her away. Make of that what you will.

I don't believe Blueblood's as much as a jerk as most stories depict him. Not because of "the good in aynpony" or somesuch. No, it's because he was standing right next to Rarity when she had her great Canterlot shebang- and they both looked fairly comfortable.

#28 · 146w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

intrseting... I woulda just locked the two spoiled royals in the same room. They would have probobky drivin each other nuts. well that or fallen in love.

#29 · 142w, 7h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I'm enjoying this story a great deal, I wish you updated more often, bt I'm also glad you don't rush things.

The only thing I feel the need to point out is that Starswirl probably shouldn't be 'the Bearded' in the other universe where he's (presumably) a mare. May I suggest Starswirl the Braided?

#30 · 142w, 6h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Starswirl the Bearded is than older than Celestia/Solarisk, much older he was born in pre discord age

#31 · 142w, 5h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>180946

Xplayer here: Point taken. I still get gender confused with this story :P

>>181005

Nothing in canon or the fanon universe in which this story takes place (On a Cross and Arrow) indicates that so we took creative license with the timeline.

#32 · 142w, 4h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

What Faldo said, though your point stands.

Also: Starswirl the Bearded Girl- VAT?!

Lastly:

How to deal with a niece/nephew that blames you for losing their only friend and feels rejected because you spent time with your student rather than them when they felt they really needed you? Humiliate them some more, of course!

/facepalm

Solaris... You great big idiot...

#33 · 142w, 1h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

:rainbowwild:

#34 · 141w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

My mind is rather blank but I can at least say... Thanks.

#35 · 141w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

At first I really didn't like Bluebelle (or Blueblood for that matter), but the way you write them, have made them grow on me... I can't really say why, but even though both Blueblood/Bluebelle AND Trixie are my least favorite characters in the show, I really love their story together. I certainly hope they meet again someday (come on, I have a suspicion that they will :raritywink:)

-Glassed

#36 · 141w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>183815  perchance. you will have to wait (truth be told i make most of this up as i go). in fact you will ALL have to wait! :flutterrage: MUAH HA HA HA!

-John

But Ah want it NAO! :applecry:

-everypony else

Too bad. :trollestia:

-John

#37 · 141w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·
#38 · 141w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I never thought of Blueblood and Trixie being friends when they were young. It certainly explains a lot. I like this bit of backstory for them!

#39 · 141w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

It's Presto, it's Presto and the Belle, Belle, Belle, Belle, Belle. "Snarf!"

Pinkie and the Brain reference. "what we gonna do today?" FOR THE WIIIIN!!!

Also, I love the whammy back-and-forth flow of the chapters. It's better -imo- than the "Belle Chapter" and then the "Blood Chapter", where the only difference is the gender wording.

#40 · 141w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>184060 not at all. XD

-John

#41 · 141w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>184941 well i wasn't even thinking of that sooooo... sure. and thank you about the chapter flow. it is the part that we were most concerned about people getting

-John

#42 · 141w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>184457 Probably more to come, it depends on chapter flow as well as some other junk, but if the fans like it i can at least tryto fit it in.

-John

#43 · 141w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Who considers whining about the length of this chapter. The quality of the writing speaks for itself, and it was a very enjoyable read :pinkiehappy:. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter :twilightsmile:

#44 · 141w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>199970 Thank you very much, though i must say that, with a crapload of schoolwork this and next week, as well as the short month and a conference i am attending next weekend it may be another month or so until chapter four. I can only hope that our writing style does not deteriorate. (though, as my first fanfic, albeit done by two people who love to read and write, writing style should improve as we progress and get used to eachother's style of writing, as well as our own.)

also, if may i ask, could you tell me/us your favorite and least favorite parts as far as style is concerned? it is hard to get detailed feedback sometimes, and i (while not sure of xplayer) have no prereaders other than myself and my co-author.

-John

#45 · 141w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>199988 Well first off I enjoy the past you give Blueblood/Bluebelle. It's done really well, and having a fan-favourite like Trixie and her counterpart be a part of it was also a nice touch. The fact he/she's integral to the blue's history also explains a lot about how she would become the braggart who ran out of Ponyville after the Ursa incident.

The pinkie and the brain reference was cute too :rainbowkiss:. Maybe a little more Blueblood in the story since this chapter seemed to feature a more 60/40 or 75% more Bluebelle than Blueblood. Assuming of course you are trying to keep a balance between the two characters, or prefer to focus a little more on BLuebelle or Blueblood in each chapter.

I enjoy the switching points of view, since it is essentially the same story going on, in both universes, but I always recognize when the POV shifts so I like that. I really don't have any complaints about this story. Maybe a different cover image as it has always struck me as Blueblood turned into Bluebelle via a TG spell. Dunno if you can get your hands on a image with Blueblood and Bluebelle but that would be fantastic.

#46 · 141w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>200025 we included trixie for that exact reason. and the pinkie and the brain ref was unintentional as far as i know. and i will work on the character spacing. also for images: http://catholic-deviant.deviantart.com/gallery/33966809

all done by me

-john

#47 · 141w, 7h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>200104

Xplayer here. The Pinkie and the Brain reference was definitely intentional. It seems my partner isn't as attuned to classic 90s cartoons as I. :twilightsmile:

#48 · 141w, 3h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>202691 I resent that remark. It has just been SOOOOOO long

-John from other account

#49 · 127w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

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#50 · 127w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Eheh... ahahahahahahahahaha!

Finally! Now the we hit the craziness of alternate universes full time! I wonder what's gonna happen next?

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