Hidden Fortune and her sister grew up in the Wasteland, learning its dangers and doing their best to stay out of sight and out of mind of the larger world. During a treasure hunt they discover a Stable, and a chance encounter changes their world. Now the sisters must travel out of their element, learn how to survive all over again, and hopefully, discover the one true treasure of the Wasteland.
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A good story definitely worth a read
good story and chapter
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Well, as I promised earlier, I sat down and read your story. I'm getting a very 'Other guys' (or gals) feel from it. Not talking about the movie, since that was a comedy and this is Grimdark. No, I'm talking about the fact that the actual hero of the area is now dead, by the hooves of the main character no less. And now said character is going to attempt to carry on the 'good fight' as it were. With her sister, both of whom have spent the better part of their life staying as far away from large numbers of ponies as they can.
I can only image what will happen once the locals learn she killed the wastelander. That should make for an interesting chapter.
So, did I like your story?
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A few edits have been put up for the earlier chapters to fix a few inconsistencies. Nothing major. Hope you readers are all enjoying!
A new chapter will be posted sometime tomorrow evening. I am putting this off for a day because this next chapter will adjust the rating from Teen to Mature. Not to mention the formatting, but that's not important.
When starting Chapter 4, please make sure to read the disclaimer before continuing. It is important.
Thank you all for your patience.
Chapter 4 is now live!
another good one also prisoners why would they be prisoners?
It'll make sense later.
Liking it so far, though the Star Paladin was a bit off in speech or characterization.
Chapter 5 is currently in edit phase, and will hopefully be put out soon. It's up to my amazing editors and how much time they are able to dedicate to the project now. I'll have it out as soon as it's ready. On a side note, I'm getting a headstart on chapter 6 while I have creative juices flowing. So there, hopefully, won't be such a large gap between the next few chapters.
Thanks for being patient!
Wirepony really is best monster.
another good chapter love it
Yay, good chapter.
I'm glad you're all enjoying it. If anyone has any feedback, I'd be happy to hear in a message.
Either way, chapter 6 should come out with a far FAR shorter gap than the previous one. Thanks again for reading, and your patience. You have no idea how much it means to me.
Edit: For those that may be wondering, a few minor edits to fix things I missed were made, hence the new dates. No major plot changes, just little tweaks to fix stuff.
Ok Chapter 5 has been re-uploaded after the reformatting of Fimfiction ate it. WOO!
I appreciate the comments hun. I'm not ever going to profess to be the best writer, and I know just how much Hell I've put my characters through and kept a watchful eye on them. I can't say what'll happen in the future, because that'll be spoilers.
All I can really say is to please be patient, things will hit a plateau sooner or later, and it'll make sense. A lot of this first arc is build up, and the following story arc will go from following to leading, so to speak. Like I said, I can't say what'll happen because it takes the fun out of reading it! A lot of it will make more sense during the bigger picture further along. I have a lot of world building done, and a lot of plans that don't come to fruition til much later.
On the other hoof, I'm still trying to be a better writer, and I understand that there are a lot of areas I'm still weak in. The ability to string sentences together doesn't somehow make someone an amazing writer. If there's no story behind the words, then... Yeah...
I'm still working forward. Chapter seven is nearing completion as I type this, and though I've been sick the past few days and on hiatus from working on chapter eight, I'm feeling better and will be working on the story again very soon.
Thanks for being a great reader and keeping up with the story.
This is a great introduction to Hidden Fortune and Lost Art, their situation and their relationship. I was thoroughly entertained the entire chapter and you ended with a cliffhanger, which would be cruel if I were waiting for the next installment (I applaud this.) I'd say good on character introduction and development, introducing questions about them that can be answered later, and throwing in a mystery Stable as well. I like the nods in there as well, unbreakable clipboards and cups, the tardis-like bags and so on.
So, I have nothing but praise for this chapter, so I'll be brief so as not to seem like I'm gushing.
Pain and misery, at least emotionally (for Hidden) and getting shot (for Lost) I love it. Have I mentioned that I'm a big fan of putting one's characters through a meatgrinder? Well, I have now. It does seems a little weird that Hidden is carrying a pony's head around in her bags, considering most Wastelanders don't seem to bother with burial unless it's someone they know well enough to care about. But on the other hand, she does feel pretty bad for shooting him (though I'd say it's quite justified.) Also, yay for mystery Stable deathtraps; though I wonder how much loot they left behind…
Love Seethe, slimy and horrible and perfect.
Some tension between the sisters in there too, which is good; dynamic relationships are awesome.
To all the recent ponies who have been favoriting and reading! Thank you SO SO MUCH!
You have no idea how amazed I am!
And, hehe, regolit. Just wait and see what happens!
As a bonus to all you faithful readers! Here's an awesome commission of our FAVORITE goofball Steel Ranger, Praline!
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This was good and oh an Alicorn
I'm glad you liked the interview. It was a lot of fun, if harrowing. And no, I might not have ever seen something but that doesn't mean it doesn't exist! It's all about perception. We'll see. And no, I don't specifically mean to say that the actions of the characters won't matter. It's just a matter of how things will go in the end. There is a story to tell, and this is not a game. I was merely trying to give insight into the way I process ideas in my mind. As I said in the interview, the story has changed a LOT in just eight chapters compared to the original concept.
Either way, we'll see what happens when the final chapter releases, and it all ends. Hopefully the majority of readers will be happy with what happens.
Only time will tell.
I have dozens of those bookmarked. Thank you though.
On chapter three, so far, its brilliant, a fav and like from me, keep it up
Finished chapter 3, loved the ending, great read, looks like this fic is my new time steal, awesome story.
I'm glad you're enjoying it! <3
Well, well, well. My favorite chapter so far. That was fucking awesome, to put it bluntly.
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Who's your favorite Stable Ranger?
2195245 Lamington, I have no idea why, I just think he's so serious it's amusing
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I cant choose personally, Lamington is a darling, Praline is amazingly perky, Creme Brulee is a sultry flirt and the Berliners skittering over the table.... so cuuuute!
That's STAR PALADIN LAMINGTON.
But in all seriousness I'm glad you're enjoying. I'm glad every reader has enjoyed so far! I can't even begin to believe I've hit this many views, or even written this many words. It's amazing!
2199573 Creme was just, it's one of those moments when the inner psychopath in me yells "Just fucking sex her!" It sounds weird but I was anticipating Lost to get laid XD Inwardly screaming "You can do it!" Though she is my close second to Lamington
2201009 If I had to rank it with all other Fo:E Fics, I'd say... Third, personally, the top being the original Murky Number 7 coming in second, yours and every other trailing behind. This is MASSIVELY underrated, lot of attention on other fics that aren't half as good as this.
This sure sounds interesting. Characters are sympathetic, too.
Fav'd and watched.
Ooh, that surgery scene. I don't usually get squeamish from reading, but that made my skin crawl several times. Great writing!
I want to apologize to every one of my readers who is patiently waiting for the next chapter to be out. Due to some... Idiocy on my part, and y'know, generally being a terrible writer, chapter 9 is undergoing a major revamp at the last stage of production. Despite looking like we could've released in the next week or so, my editors have pointed out that the chapter had some very serious flaws in, honestly, several ways.
Do to this, I'm reworking how the chapter is set up, and going forward in a slightly different direction. I'll work as fast as I can, while still keeping quality up, to release something soon. I'm really sorry everyone, and I hope you all will continue to be patient. I'm by no means putting this on an indefinite hiatus or abandoning, I just need to fix some glaring issues.
Thank you for your patience, and I'll keep you all updated. I need to make a Tumblr for this or something...
I hope they meet the Stable 60 crew again soon.
Neat story, keep it up!
That was one of the most amazingly intense action sequences I have ever read and with a moving conclusion to boot. I love how Hidden fights enemies that are completely out of her league thus making her victories all the more satisfying. This was well worth staying up past midnight for. Keep up the good work.
Epic pistol fight
I too rather like that Hidden keeps getting pitted against enemies that are beyond her. I also love Xeno's unnerving cigarette trick(s).
I think you really came into your own in this chapter. The surgery scene in particular was exquisitely well-done, paying attention to detail and making sense every step of the way.
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Best family ever~ A speck of warm light in the darkness of the wasteland.
Glad you are enjoying
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Hopefully one day it inspires somepony to draw it, fanart material right there~
I'm glad you're all enjoying! The fight scene was fun to write, though it was seriously toned down from the initial design (Because OMFG ANIME isn't great writing for a serious story like this), but Slipstock is still an amazing bitch of a character.
The surgery was fun to write, we worked very hard to make sure it was as close to accurate as possible while still making it entertaining to read. I particularly like that it makes others CRINGE.
Mwahahahaha
Wow, that was...good. Not what happened to them, no, but the way you described it. Very vivid and matching the atmosphere.
Slavers are, in my opinion, even worse than Raiders and should all burn in everlasting blue fire. The more I'm looking forward to how they're going to get out of there (and hopefully kill them all in the process). I'm hoping for the Steel Rangers to come, since Lost still has that broadcaster....
Anyway, great torture/mindfuck chapter.
Our first double digit chapter and our darkest yet. As reward for everypony who reads and follows along I present Commemorative chapter 10 art for you all to properly burn this chapter and this scene into your memories~
Thanks for reading and hope you enjoy~
-LA
As a huge fan of authors horribly screwing with their characters, I heartily approve of this chapter and look forward to the next.
Suspense so much of it, anyways that slaver will regret everything so will all the others
. Late at commenting.
A minor edit has been made. Due to me not paying attention, I TOTALLY forgot that there is no 'PTSD' in FOE-lore. It was brought to my attention that it is referred to as Wartime Stress Disorder, or WSD.
Changes have been made to reflect this correction of oversight.
Good story so far. This chapter was not as bad as it could have been. The question is, could the chapter be described as more well written if it had been worse and actually disturbed me? I wonder...
Regardless, I await the next chapter with righteous fury in my heart, hoping that they can get out and get even in a satisfactory way.
With the release of Chapter 11 comes another commemorative art piece to highlight a pinnacle moment of the story.
Ch11: Sunbright
Enjoy, and please do read through. Its worth it.
Veeeery nice. Though I was hoping to see some more dead slavers at the end of this chapter.
Oh well, one can't have everything.