lmaooo the ending.... oh man he's going to the moon ..... also clean up the spelling and grammar a bit but I love the concept and will keep following

>>13418841341884 Clean up the spelling and grammar. Where do you see mistakes? (I don't doubt there are mistakes, I'm just curious as to where you saw them)

>>13418941341894 At the beginning of the story:

Yawn

Needs a punctuation mark at the end. I saw more, but I'm too tired right now.

The 4th wall!!! Anyways, wow, I love this one. Definitely keep going. And OMG he didn't! Excited to see what's next!

"Well we don't even know where your home is!" sad Rainbow.

Oh shit. I WANT MOAR

I walked up to Celestia and punched her in the face.

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More. MORE. MOOOOOOOOOOAR!!!!

Dat bitch be going to the moon in a couple o' days.

Random crap aside, I'm liking this so far, although I am REALLY looking forward to what happens next chapter, especially after the ending.

:| TD. TD. I have a question. Do you like .... Bananas?

yeah... he's fucked.

Okay, I like it so far.

Thumbs up and favourited. I'm looking forward to what comes next.

human be trippin' balls

Let that be a lesson to you Celestia that only Pinkie Pie can break the 4th Wall.

I like it a lot.  I laughed a few times even thought I am at work.  Keep it up

! ! !  

He's screwed.  If Celestia doesn't do something to him for that, then by golly the Mane 6 will tear him to shreds!  What happens next, I've gotta see soooo....yeah.  I'm listing this story as a favorite.

He mentioned out loud that they were cartoon ponies. I'm sure somepony will notice and ask where he saw a cartoon about them, especially if he just came to their world.

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I'm liking it so far! Upvoted and favorited. I can't wait for more!

Dat Gears of War 3, I'm a player myself, a REALLY good player.

>>13421331342133 Dafuq are you doing here? Back to writing!! JK JK

If Celestia doesn't fry this guy, and somehow prevents the Mane 6 from beating the tar out of him, then he should consider himself the single luckiest creature in existence.

This is a really interesting story so far. Great job!

I already hate the main character though, is that bad?

Any story where Celestia gets punched in the face is alright in my book.

really?? how come that as soon as i ghet an idea i find out that someone has already done this o well at least you have a diferent riting stile why why beside that well i chan`t say anything since i did not read it so yea just don`t whant to steal any of you`r ideas by mistake so when i finish what i am doing now i`l read it with all pleasure

He did exactly what I would have done in his situation

She just ripped permanently him from his reality, friends and family just because she messed around with magic?

Hell I would have grabbed her by the horn an kneed her in the face.

>>13440631344063

But... But I have finished it...

Ha!!

Take it bitch!!!

Bill: hes dead

That last line was gold. I wish I had some semblance of artistic ability or else I would draw that scene.

Twilight looked contemplative for a brief moment before he spoke up again.

There ya go x3

The ending alone has made me like and follow this story.

I want to see more.

TO THE MOOOOOOONAH BEYEEEEEETCH!!!!

"At any rate, I took this news like I thought I would, with all of the 'quiet dignity and grace' that I could muster. I walked up to Celestia and punched her in the face."

Holy shit dude. Not only is your insert the absolute stupidest I have ever seen, but you better have a good explanation for how he gets out of this to make a convincing story.

MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON

Lol I like this guy, he's not afraid to have a pair around the Princess. I imagine I'd have problems bowing, proper titles and all that as well. Pffft, silly authority.

One of these days Celestia: POW!

Straight to d'sun.

>>13441101344110 Not at all. You don't have to like a protagonist to enjoy the story, so long as your dislike of the character is...positive (does that make sense?) You dislike him so you want to see what he does in these situations because it's interesting.

>>13441661344166 Noooooooo you must be looooyal to teh prinssseeeessssssss

Lol, I'm just kidding.  This wasn't that bad, actually, and I wouldn't mind reading another chapter of it.

I'm hoping for some originality from this, not just what you've done with the concept.  I've seen this sort of story before, but they always end up loving the ponies and becoming bronies or self inserts.  I'd love to see the main character turn to absolute revulsion of the ponies, or just simply trying to ignore them long enough to get home and then never thinking of them again.

But then, I always like seeing new things instead of the same story told a thousand different times.

I'll at least be watching this for the next while.

>>13444291344429 Fear not, I am going to do my darndest to make sure that this one is original

This young boy has a problem. You don't punch someone in the face if they make a mistake on this world; you shouldn't do it in a land of cartoon ponies. To show such and egregious lack of self-control is sad. I don't believe I would like this person in real-life.

Sorry about that, the story is wonderful, I can't wait to see how this turns out. Maybe TD will learn some manners while he's in Equestria, he obviously needs it.

Well...I have to say this is a rather nice contrast to the multitude of HiE's out there.

I was originally just going to call this another version of ""I Hate Ponies!" by Scripture, but I'm pleasantly surprised. By its title alone, I suspected this to be a poorly written Trollfic.

I would say more...but I need coffee at the moment.

>>13444831344483 I'm glad that I impressed you on some level then! Yeah, I don't do trollfics. I like the show too much for that.

>>13441011344101 I don't think he's that lucky...

Oh... this ain't gonna be pretty... *tracked*

>>13443931344393

You dislike him so you want to see what he does in these situations because it's interesting.

That's exactly it. I'm very curious to see what happens next!

I want to read Celestia's reaction from the punch

>>13418941341894

God dayum the amount of errors is horrible ill re-read it and send you it through a pm

FALCON PAUNCH!!!

Awesome.

Keep it up, this is really good.

Hopefully, before she banishes him he can go on a rage and scold her.

Lol, she was irresponsible and now she's gonna get it.

That last line made it for me. I'm now hooked to see just what happens to this perfectly well-adjusted young man who cold-clocked a demigoddess in the snout.

Well, everything went to hell faster than possible! i love the story its awesome so far

Heh, the first HiE fic I have read and it's rather fabulous

Reading this was a little challenging though as you kept changing tenses. Here's an example:

Present tense

Past tense

"I hop out of bed and walked over to my closet where I pick a work shirt off of the rack and put it, as well as a pair of black jeans, on. As I finish this, I looked up at my dear roommate who is currently surfing the web on his own laptop. I rolled my eyes when I see where he is: Ponychan."

As you can see, you keep changing the tense even withing the same sentence.

This would be the same if it was all in present tense:

"I hop out of bed and walk over to my closet where I pick a work shirt off of the rack and put it, as well as a pair of black jeans, on. As I finish this, I look up at my dear roommate who is currently surfing the web on his own laptop. I roll my eyes when I see where he is: Ponychan."

And this would be it in the past tense:

"I hopped out of bed and walked over to my closet where I picked a work shirt off of the rack and put it, as well as a pair of black jeans, on. As I finished this, I looked up at my dear roommate who was currently surfing the web on his own laptop. I rolled my eyes when I saw where he was: Ponychan."

You did that kind of thing all the time. I suggest you get yourself a beta-reader to help you with that, or try to keep a close eye on it yourself. It'd improve the fic a lot

Punishment Advice for Princess Celestia:

ZAP HIM INTO PONY FORM, TURN HIM INTO STONE, AND BANISH HIM INTO THE MOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This story has some real potential!

MOAR!!!

Ohhhhh dear.  I hear that Hotel Moon is great this time of year...

that ending earns you a like, fav, and a 'stache. i can't wait to see what happens next!

He needs to be raped repeatedly by all the ponies until he develops Stockholm Syndrome and loves his abusers.  I know all about brainwashing!  (Alondro read about Scientology)  

Anyway, here is what happens next:

Celestia merely stood, nonplussed as the human grimaced in agony and grasped the hand that had struck her, to find every knuckle broken.  "What the hell are you made of?" he whined.

"Fool," Celestia intoned in a deep, masculine voice.  "You believed you would be able to penetrate my hiero?  I, the Omega Espada?"  She lowered her horn and pointed it toward the human insect.  A ball of brilliant golden light gathered at the tip.  "Gran Rey Cero..."

And the human was vaporized instantly and Aizen took over the universe, because he did.  

The End!  

Woohoo totally punch a god in the face! Now that takes balls or crazy............same thing!

MOAR!

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Favourited !

>>13446941344694

gives me an image of a random statue of a horrified pony sitting in a moon crater.

>>13441961344196

Don't you mean "Hes' dead Jim..."

Good luck with socking a goddess in the mouth there dude! Let me know how that turns out for ya!

In other news i like the style and the main character, sadly i have already given my allotment of mustaches and Trixies' for today out already.

So you can have all of my Big Macs, here, TAKE THEM!

Edit: Wow this got steamrolled straight into the featured box, congrats to our author!

YES!

HE IS NOT A PONY!

You sir are awesome.  

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>>13443931344393

I freaking love this protagnist! He points out flaws that I see in soooo many bronies and the show and other things that I would be hated on for voicing since I'm a brony.

>>13446081344608 I do appreciate that (so long as you're tactful about it) I know my weaknesses and technical skill is one of them unfortunately. I appreciate any and all help I can get to make it tighter!

>>13446901344690 Same for you. I knew going into this that staying in present tense (the intended tense) was going to be difficult since I haven't done a story like that before so I appreciate it when people catch stuff like that!

This is legit. Have a Discord,

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and a Dash,

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Absolutely fantastic. I honestly would punch Celestia either way. I don't like royalty.

Lovely reaction. It made me smile.

Wow.  Write more of this or I will rip out your kidneys and transform them into boxing gloves with which I will beat you.  Likin' T.D., he seems like a cool guy.  It's understandable, punching the immortal sun goddess, co-ruler of a land in which peace and nonviolence reign supreme, in the face.  She did rip him away from everything he knows and loves.

Can't wait to see how hard he will get slammed into the ground by the Elements.

   Sadistically,

               ~Plyxe

I like where this is going...

if it was me here's waht i do next.

what that's just how we say hello than proceed to punch the doctor in the face

"*Author's note* I have never read any HIE stories"

"Good lord, how does it feel to be so creative and original?"

Actually this idea has been done before but that's okay, you didn't know obviously. It's in the feature box so it shows promiss I guess, though..., a crappy HiE alicorn OC fic did make so I don't know if I trust anything anymore.

I'm liking this; a clean mouthed human in Equestria (Finally!)

Not very respectful to Princess Celestia though; wonder what will happen next.

I imagine this is what his reaction was.

I love fic like this.

Oh dear. I'm not sure what will happen after THAT. But I suppose that just having her send him to the moon would not make for a very good plot...

Suddenly, I'm on the moon. I starved to death. The end.

Yeah. Not to good of a plot.

I lmao at the ending, i really liked it though.

WHOA.

Okay... wasn't expecting that...

>>13418941341894 Woah-woah-woooaoaaaah. You don't punch things in the face if they have SHARP HORNS ON THEIR HEADS. Seriously, think about what would happen if you did that to a stag! "Ooops, looks like Toro the bull here impaled me."

Welp, looks like this is the night bitches die.

Oh this will not end well.

>>13418941341894 I saw a few words that were supposed to be other words. I can clean it up a bit if you like.

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I'm likin' it.

Quiet dignity and grace, eh?

Also,

'...grabbing my trusty razor scooter from its perch inside my closet. Man I love that thing.'

'...it made my skin crawl form the sheer un-manliness of it all.' (huh... you misspelled from)

Main character - rides razor scooter, concerned with his manliness.

SEEMS LEGIT.

Pretty amusing! Congrats on the feature, and good luck with the rest of your tale!

>>13449631344963 seriously? one could be hated for... (remembers Ernest Goes to Camp) oh right.

I can actually respect when someone is able to point out the flaws in a fan-base/source of fan-base. I may dislike it, but if the argument is valid, then I can't actually dislike them too much for it.

Oh jeez... that'd be like clocking the president. He's screwed. Royally.

>>13446941344694

How about no.

>>13447651344765

How did she get pwnt by the changelings/Zerg?

I walked up to Celestia and punched her in the face.

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Pal, I love this to death, but you have the occasional grammar/spelling error. Maybe I could be of assistance? PM me if you're interested.

>>13422391342239

wrong pic.

Woo Hawaii

*reads the rest of the sentence twice

Oh wait What?? now i am confused

>>13454891345489 I was being sarcastic. I know that Human in Equestria stories have been done, even non-fans in Equestria has been done. But yeah, I hope to avoid the normal tropes of the story type.

>>13461711346171 Quiet dignity and grace: Yep, that's exactly what I had in mind.

200th liike. what whaat.

Awwwww poor Celestia, i do belive that there will be a big ammount of human hurting in the next chapter.

I walked up to Celestia and punched her in the face.

LOL

OH GOD THAT ENDING

I read the first few words and the last few words... i like...