Nice start

>>13647591364759 It feels awkward to admit it, but I'm not sure where I'll go with this. It might have a nice start, but I'm not sure what the rest of the story will be like.

>>13647741364774

Try to think of where you want it to end, then use this start to make the connections, details, and paths it will follow to complete the story.

>>13647781364778 I know how to write.

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And unlike a few other stories I've read, not many mistakes.

Cool, interesting, and RidiculouslyOP

PS. Would you mind editing my story The Book Master, The Dashie Chronicles. Start from chap 1 as the prolouge has been edited.

>>13647871364787 >And unlike a few other stories I've read, not many mistakes.

I have a long editing process that takes about three days as I check over the story/chapter a total of five times before submitting it. That's why there aren't many mistakes. Also, I seem to have a lot of capacity for grammar that most people don't have, making it so that I speak English better than most anglophones despite it being my second language.

>PS. Would you mind editing my story The Book Master, The Dashie Chronicles. Start from chap 1 as the prolouge has been edited.

Kind of a random request, but I'm cool with it.

Faved. Now gimme moar.

Awesome and poor Dinky and Ditzy

Very good story, can't wait to read more.

Well, you aren't the first to ship these two....that being said, I wanna see where this is headed. I also wanna know why her wings locked up like that.

>>13648611364861 AHHH SERVER GOING DOWN IN 2 MINS! thats cool. and thanks

How dare you title your story "A ____ Turn of Events"! Especially when "unexpected" has the same syllable count as "jolly spiffing". You obviously stole my story and just changed the names and plot and setting! How could you?

(Bookmarked, I'll read it in a few weeks during my marathon)

Interesting. Not many obvious mistakes. I am a personal fan of many Big Mac ships, so I will favorite and see where it goes.

>>13651851365185 Well, I've never seen this shipping before. I'm certain shippers have already done this, but it's just that I haven't seen any.

>>13670041367004 I'm sorry. ;_;

>>13682241368224 Big Mac can be shipped with anypony. That's a fact.

>>13690841369084

You should then read "Gentle Red" and "Ditzy Doo's Dismally Derpy Day."

>>13698591369859

Also read "The Promises We Keep" if you haven't - one of the best fanfics I've read, although you should expect to shed manly tears.

>>13791081379108 Time to put on my feelface.

<deep breath>

Not bad, not bad at all

>>14887641488764 NO IT'S AWFUL I FEEL BAD FOR WRITING IT.

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Good very good, I look forward to reading more....

Just one thing three days to get to town even with a snow storm i think that's even a bit much, unless there was a pass that was blocked and they have to take a longer route.

I can say this, I like where it's going at the moment

Derpy is best Pony :)

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Das waffle demand more D:

This is good, I am normally a fan of TwiMac (considering I am writing a fic about it) but this is just so cute!

I see Ditzy was burned by who ever was Dinky's father...

>>14974581497458

That's three days without snow for pegasi... which is still a ridiculous length of time since it takes 2 hours to travel the same distance for Earth Ponies and Unicorns.

Umm. I noticed some inconsistencies. It was stated that Sweet Apple Acres was a two hour flight from the post office, but it only took "a solid hour" of flight to get there? And then Big Mac said it was only a two hour walk back to town? And then it was suddenly a three day walk, because of the snow I guess?

Also, Big Mac said that Applebloom had "school tomorrow" but then it was suddenly it was Sunday the next morning. Ignoring the fact that it's the weekend, wouldn't Applebloom have to walk to Ponyville to get to school? Or is she homeschooled on weekends for some reason?

lol, other than that I like this story. I hope you write more because I want to read more!

>>14977691497769

That's what I was on about if it takes two hours for a earth or unicorn, then with a pegasus it would be three/four hours to walk.

Then add snow and a hurt pegasi a rough time would be twelve hours tops, but if when Mac went for his walk at night (no leaves on the trees) and saw that a pass was blocked that could give them the time for camping.

I dont know why but i always like storys when somthing nice happens for ditzy

>>14979191497919

Easy enough fix, replace Days with Hours.

Make it about a day and a half and we might be getting somewhere, no way she can go 12 hours straight without have to stop and rest. And I don't think there is a pass between the Acres and Ponyville.

I like those stories too, I also like ones that don't try to make her mentally disabled.

Nice chapter

Based on the show, I'm pretty sure Ponyville is not a 3 day walk from Sweet Apple Acres. I mean you see characters in the show going to and from Ponyville and Sweet Apple Acres in the same day on foot.

Otherwise good chapter, looking forward to more!

>>14978291497829>>14974581497458>>14979191497919>>14979561497956>>14986991498699

Your comments all seem to have something to do with inconsistencies, which I'm personally too lazy to fix. It's really not the end of the world, and I'll make sure no more inconsistencies occur during the rest of the story.

Cheers.

>>14988931498893

Too many inconsistencies can ruin a perfectly good story. The travel time isn't as big of a deal as you say, but it can add up after a while

>>14989901498990 Like I said, I'm not going to let any more inconsistencies get in the way.

>>14975301497530 >be me

>early in the morning, not much to do

>decide to read comments on recent fic because why not

>looks at all the profile pictures of people

>sees a familiar one

>KingOfSquirrelz

>name looks familiar

>click on profile

>sees "Black Coated Alicorn Mary Sue" series

>jizz everywhere

>realize relatively popular author commented on my story

>jizz everywhere

>no easy task to clean the room

>>15034001503400

Lol, funny. ^_^ but i don't think i am that popular to consider Jizz everywhere, i think that comes with +500 followers

>>15055591505559 You're talking to someone that has about 20 followers. That's not many.

Although I have to admit when Aegis Shield commented on my profile my eyebrows raised a little. That's the equivalent of my head exploding. Aye, it was almost like advertising, but I don't really mind. He was only trying to suggest a reading to me.

>>15057541505754

What kind of author advertises?

Clink here for Cute story

>>15065481506548 Not advertising so much as he was giving a suggestion since I was looking for some headcanon on the origins of the Night Guard and he happens to write a lot about that. I'm not very fond of his writing, to be honest. It's not that he doesn't write well, I just don't like the stories.

Also that cute story made me grin.