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Goggari 2076

Joined July 2012
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    Goggari's Stories (2)

    • One of these days
      A collection of short stories around Equestria

      2,961 words · 105 views · 1 likes · 0 dislikes
    • 55 After Harmony Died
      What happened after the Elements of Harmony died?
      3,000 words · 201 views · 3 likes · 4 dislikes

    The tale of an old stallion after the tragic passing of the elements of harmony.




    Please give an honest opinion, altought constructive critisim is more welcome!

    First Published
    3rd Oct 2012
    Last Modified
    19th Feb 2013

    Comments ( 6 )

    #1 · Chapter 2 · 32w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Author Notes: 69 words.

    Masterfully played.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 4d ago · · ·
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    At first i was like: LOL NOPE!

    But this is... Good-ish? Decent... No, above decent (consider it as a compliment)

    i will keep my eye on this :twilightsmile: also ill give you a propper concrit tommorow *yawn*

    pro tip-for god sakes dont use tge pony maker as a cover... Just get a random pic of like... I dunno a changeling or smtn..

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Whenever I read about the Mane 6 dying...

    Interesting concept, I normally can't bring myself to read something of such a grave topic, but a war with the changelings, that's something I'd like to read about.

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 32w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Not sure what to think of this. While this idea has been done before, you write it decently enough. I'll track for the next chapter or two.

    #5 · Chapter 2 · 32w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1381037

    Anything that's not clearly negative is positive to me :pinkiecrazy:

    >>1381103 >>1381299

    I'm hoping to get the action going in a chapter or two so i hope you'll stay around for that long :yay:

    #6 · Chapter 2 · 32w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Okay mate, I am ALL for this story continuing because you're an okay writer.  I must insist, however, that you do some formatting involving paragraphs, indentations, and line spacing because that would help readability SO much.

    -Chessie

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