I love it! But one thing... upper case the I's and the words 'I'm' kay?

wait i thought part one ended with Twilight still being a foal or did i miss the part where she turned back to normal

>>13196971319697 I will explain that later in the story

Yay! Part2!

I thought I had left a comment when I read this oh well. Now I have

>>13214961321496 I bet you are wondering about the black mist well it will be explained much much much later in the story

This was an affront to authors everywhere and the English language in general. Just because you're writing about babies doesn't mean you have to write like one. I've seen more legible work come from an Elementary school. You managed to butcher the character's  personalities, create giant run-on sentences, failed repeatedly to observe even the most basic of punctuation rules and then tied it all up with some of the worst writing I've yet to see in this fandom.

This isn't even so-bad-it's-good, it's just plain bad.

>>13221171322117 Then don't read it if you don't like it

>>13221261322126

Oh, I have no intention of doing so. Just thought you should know the reality of the situation rather than smother yourself in blind praise from people that would worship the writings of a brain-dead mollusc if it involved ponies and regression.

>>13221621322162 Thank you for the compliment

I'm not sure what to think. The formating seems radically different then the past story. my thought is that the poison joke just natural wore off, either that or magic anitbodies of some sort. Well at least that makes the most sense to me.

>>14386801438680 Well no the black mist that turned Twilight back is going to be explained

Love it! you changed close to protectively (╯°□°）╯︵ ┻━┻

Okay.  Poor Trixie.  Having to go through foalhood again.  BTW,

You should have thought of that before.

Maybe Rarity should tell Trixie before what.  And is her name still Trixie or is it now Sapphire Stone?

>>15035691503569 Sapphire Light but dont worry i know there are a few spelling errors i am going to fix it was 3am i was tired as heck.......But if you have not guessed  it was

1: All the crap when she came to PonyVille

2: She foalnapped Twilight in the first one

>>15036051503605  Number 2 I understand as to why she was sentenced to foalhood.  However, number one wasn't entirely her fault.  I was just suggesting Trixie should know why she deserves this punishment.  She was asleep when Celestia 'gave her ruling'.  In any case, we know it will only be a matter of time before she becomes Sapphire.

DON'T LET HER LOSE HEr Mind  I like Trixie as she is

>>15036251503625 that will be in chapter 3 or 4

>>15041051504105 I CANT PROMISE THAT I HAVE A TEAM WHO HELPS WRITE THIS

Man lovely to get a new chapter :D

Keep the awesome work up

This can possible evolve into  a very dark story but I dunno you probably got your own plans.

>>15047121504712 Trust me it wont turn dark but if you have ideas tell me

is Twilight suffering from memory loss? becuase shouldnt she remeber being turned into a foal

>>15069021506902 Nope she remembers the whole thing

It was rather enjoyable, thought I don't completely agree with Twilight forgiving her that easily, dood. (But yea, Twilight would forgive her)

I want to say that Trixie doesn't exactly deserve it but I can't for two reasons, dood. The first reason is that she did do several bad things. The second reason is that after all the stories I have read on this site and Fanfiction.net, I have very little love for Trixie, dood, mostly because everyone sees her as Twilight's rival and she isn't, it's like saying that I am just as powerful as Overlord Baal or Pringer Z (sorta possible if I power-level to the level cap and have the best gear in the game, and I had help, dood.)

I'll throw a fav this way, I look forward to this, dood.

>>15429961542996 I like Trixie but don't worry there is going to be more stuff and a lot of plot twist in it

YES

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FOR THE NEW LUNAR REPUBLIC!

>>15481761548176 Thank you i am glad you like it

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You did a SPECTACULAR job

>>15993861599386 heh thank you

Trixie " Hellp Trixie please "

Well looks like Poison Joke has a time limit, perhaps it was a good thing that said limit expired because I don't know if Rarity could handle looking after two foals.

Sweeite Belle an Aunt? Oh Trixie is not going to like that.

This was terrible. I spit on it.

>>16111821611182 What happened to Love and Tolerate?

>>16112161611216

That's nothing more than an utterly meaningless buzzphrase used by people with little to no skill to excuse their obvious and apparent lack of due care. A myth, a fabrication, a lie of the highest order whose only purpose is to hide the obviously inept behind a veil of "good feels". To tolerate something is only a virtue when that something is of inherent positive values; a story that looks like it was written by a particularly dull child does not deserve recognition nor praise.

>>16113801611380 It's a thing so people don't share hate.

>>16113801611380 Listen man I really don't care what you think I am just having fun writing I have a great team of editors and a lot of friends I am just taking a shot in the dark and guessing you are some grown man sitting at his computer 24/7 and its not my place to judge but please I am asking kindly do not spew hate on my stories if you saw a problem with it then please tell me that is all you need to do and I will try to fix it when I get the time to I have been at this site for almost 30 weeks now and I enjoy every bit of it all of my fans/friends so please I ask do not spread hate on my stories just tell me if there is a problem in it and I will try to fix it when I get time I am sure with all the groups you are in there has to be one with the rule not to spread hate on a story

>>16114601611460

Okay, problems with your writing? Well, how about we start with how that entire mini wall'o'text didn't have a single punctuation mark. Seriously, you don't even try.

>>16115141611514 See was that so hard just saying it needs punctuation edits you did not need to be so harsh or rude about it

I'm waiting for updates

More dude more! This is frigging amazing! :D

>>20558582055858chill I can only do so much  

>>20562712056271 Hehe..sorry. I was hyped up on caffene and Pixie Sticks last night. XD Take all the time ya need. :3

>>20313002031300  >>15429961542996  >>13196971319697  >>13207491320749  >>13214961321496  >>14386801438680  >>15481761548176  >>20578892057889  >>16096611609661  >>15993861599386  >>20578892057889  >>13192521319252

Alright everypony so I am working on the new chapter as we speak no promises it will be a HUGE chapter but still a chapter none the less so yeah just wanted to inform you all

I Like your "foal" Storys. I hope you get the Time to write more Chapters^^

Extinction Loves this story?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

O)_(O

Did you like the chapter please say yes...did you :D

No. No I did not. Imma try to be civil.

*Sigh* after the last one I figured "Hell, maybe they got better" nope. You didn't. I mean come on! Why the hell would Celestia (The kind and benevolent ruler) it essentially sentencing Trixie to be mentally tortured until her mind breaks and she thinks herself a foal.

Why would Twilight forgive Rarity at all? Let alone so quick?

Rarity pulled so much shit and what does she get out of it? A fucking kid of her own. What the hell?

The premise of this is horrid to me and your treatment of Trixie is terrible. Yeah she has an ego and yeah she foalnapped her but I wouldn't wish this kinda crap on anyone.

1: All the crap when she came to PonyVille

-All she did was her own show. Two idiots brought a Ursa to town, she tried to stop it and failed. and somehow it's her fault that they were too stupid to tell fantasy from reality?

2: She foalnapped Twilight in the first one

This one I can see. But what you chose for her "punishment" is just ridiculous as I have already said.

The biggest plot point from the first story was wrapped in in the friggin prologue. Any semblance of a dramatic ending for the last one is thrown out the window.

Dash wanting to beat a filly? I mean yeah she is Trixie,but she can't even form words anymore.

I tried. I gave it a chance. It didn't work.

Have a good life. I'm going to find a better story and go to bed.

-YBG

Mph, I wish Twilight was still a foal

great pls continue