If I may make a few suggestions, first of all indent your paragraphs :P and secondly, consider slowing down a little bit, you could've extended the Twilight visit quite abit. Personally I wanna know what her and Spike shut down, but despite what I've said I'm going to give you a like and favorite and see where this story goes

sooo is this hetero shipping i hope?

cuz i tired of F/F ships (i readed so many of them already)

>>13127381312738

I'll see about the paragraphs, thank you.   About that other thing, this story is just beginning

>>13127641312764

There's going to be both kinds of shipping here, hope that pleases you

>>13130151313015

lesbidash? meh

>>13131461313146

Um, I used a Dash emoticon, I don't know how that amounts to Lesbian Dash. If it helps you, no, she won't be lesbian here.

tracking...now this isnt your fault just somethat annoys me if cadance can keep people together isnt that cheating she could do good like or soething like this

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Spike appears to be getting left out Well at least he isn't just randomly being ignored either.

>>13205631320563

I don't like shipping Spike. But I read your story

Truth is, in most of my stories poor Spike gets left behind. I'm sorry!  

But he'll be here :3

Well... an okay start I suppose. Its mainly the summary which has me interesting, because this chapter through nice, is rather... bland.

>>13212591321259

... So does that mean he'll be shipped in this one?

... Yeah I really didn't like this chapter. Just a complete and utter pointless. The flashback serves no purpose and it can be told much slower over several chapters. The only interesting bit it 'Apple Bite'

I am really enjoying your story, the flash back for Apple Bloom was great, but really did not in fit its current format or place into the story, you might want to think of some transitioning. Maybe going into after Winter Blossom inquires about Apple Bite's name. Again really enjoying it, Good content and it has genuine feel to it. . Look forward to more.

>>13439841343984>>13441361344136

i appreciate your criticism since my stories receive really, really very little of it. I'll try to keep the flashbacks contextualized.

>>13442341344234

No problem.

>>13442341344234

You are very welcome.

I think the story works fine as a slice-of-life tale, as we meet and catch up with the residents of Ponyville ten years later.  I suppose people eager for the shipping might get a bit impatient, but I don't mind getting to know everyone a bit more first.

I'm guessing that Apple Bite is Big Mac's son.  The common guess for the mother would be Fluttershy, but since colors are fairly random in a family, it could be anyone.  Looking forward to more!

>>13595321359532

Thanks. You know, this was supposed to be a oneshot, but I'm too bad at keeping my stories contained; they always grow up unexpectedly.

Funny, I thought I had made implicitly clear who was Apple Bite's mother. But you'll know soon enough.

Thanks again!

Hey look at that, someone finally breaks off the presumption of BonBon/Lyra pairing and done something really original! Way to go on my books, its hard to find someone to do an original shipping that's not tied up(or in my words "pleases") to the fandom. Also, nice character descriptions on the OC foals of this story, for having some-what original names (that may or may not ties to the family tree) and give them unique color schemes to make them distinctive (ex. Winter Blossom having rainbow-maned color that's not related to the parents).

I'll be honest I was really hesitant about how this story will go, including giving this a full read. But now, you have piqued my interest with your story with what you have done so far. I'll be looking forward to more updates man, keep up the good work!

Best Regards

Ugh...unsolicited matchmakers....I hope Cadence can do this without looking like every single matchmaker I've read about...

Haha, Bon Bon and Big Mac? I was indeed curious to see how that one came about, and your flashbacks in this chapter flowed far better in the story than the last chapter's about Applebloom, so well done. I look forward to more chapters

ALL OF MY YES!!!!! Sorry about that, it's just I'm hoping for a rather lengthy part for "Time Turner" because well, come on, it's "Time Turner." This has now jumped up to my current anticipation list, I look forward to seeing how you handle it. Cheers!

P.S. I haven't liked this until now? Well I have been quite busy with stuff and things and...would you look at that all it took was a click and now it's all green and shiny. That was a long time coming, my apologies if you waited.

Hmm, I can imagine who Time Turner would paired up with and It doesn't seemed it would end up with either Twilight Sparkle and Derpy ,which is one again refreshing, nice to break away from the fandom so that the plus. What also nice to that you didn't make a direct reference to Doctor Who, or too strongly for that matter, it would make this a Crossover story but without the Crossover tag! The Horror, the horror!

Anyhow great piece of work man, keep up the good work. Can't wait to see more , best regards

I was expecting the end to be

dun dun dun dun

Dun Dun Dun Dun

DUN DUN DUN DUN

DUN! DUN! DUN! DUN!

Cadence came out of her trance

"what's wrong?" asked the estranged stallion

cadence laughed like a maniac a far to familiar laugh

"What?" he asked quite confused.

She answered him with a simple phrase

"Here come the drums!"

The end

Hey look at that, an update! Looks pretty nice for such an update, I can imagine that you have intentions to have Time Turner (or Doctor Who) to be paired with Twilight Sparkle instead of Derpy, its not something unique but I can imagine the progression to romance between them will be nice.

Nice chapter man, keep up the good work

Best Regards

Nice little story, looks like the princesses of love wants Twilight to be the next assistant

>>13212591321259 I'm with Path of Cloud on this one. I hate hate hate stories where all of Spike's friends get shipped andhe isn't. It's really nice that he's a part of this story and that he appears to be valued as a friend at least almost as much as Twilight, but I don't like that Cadence shudders at his eyes and that he doesn't hug his sister-in-law or his niece but Twilight does. Is cadence a specieist?

Other than that, it's a nice story. Winter Blossom is soooo adorable! I'm kind of interested in seeing how Cadence interacts with the rest of the ponies and it will be fun to see if Twilight and spike blow up Ponyville.

>>19399931939993

I can only say keep reading, everything will be answered in its time (Though I acknowledge I don't like shipping Spike with ponies)

I'm a little confused over who they are talking about at the end of the chapter, and the grammar issues might not be helping.

Still can't wait to see who Cadence matches everypony up with?

>>19904011990401

I lack an editor, not that I have done anything much that a token effort towards it, and I release these episodes without looking them over too much,  but I appreciate you following through with this.

I have missed reading your previous chapter until I received the notification that you had released the latest chapter, congratulation on making it to Featured Page by the way. I am wondering what company that Fluttershy is referring to that left for Canterlot, I will find it amusing to see what character manages to be paired with the shy pony this time around. While nothing much has been revealed for the last 2 chapters, it was still a good read, keep up the good work man .

>>19400441940044

Really, I don't see the big deal with the pony characters getting a pair while Spike is left out. At this point of the game, he is still considered a child in his life-cycle, I guess that comes to show how much people like him I guess. However that doesn't mean that Spike should be involved with romance since (in addition of being a child) the story is focused on finding the Mane6 crew romance not the dragon.

(Joke) Alt. Title: Cadence Presents: ...And Then Everypony Got Paired

Ah, yes, ponies get shipped. Always guaranteed to get the featured box, am I not right?

>>20469602046960

I don't know about that. I've written quite a bit of shipping, and this is the first one I've gotten featured. I'd really wanted Playing the Heart's Strings to be it, but so be it...

Others had Fluttershy too, with a stallion next to her. In those, Fluttershy appeared happy and serene, as did the ones where a foal appeared with the joyful couple.

Does that mean Fluttershy found her special somepony? Then where is he now?

Angels dying..........SO MUCH YES.......................I mean we will all miss him greatly

“Angel is very moody these days, Winter. Better to leave him alone.”

Nothing new there.

>>14835921483592

Oh Celestia, yes ! You, sir/madam, are a genius.

I like this story, but the chapters feel a little rushed - so much switching between the threads it's hard to keep track of everything!

>>22616012261601

I know it is. This is tied to my choice to make CDHAH's chapters quite short, and the fact that I'm writing by the seat of my pants. I hope you can enjoy it nonetheless. Anyway, I'm almost done gathering the players, so it should return to a manageable level. Thanks for your input, I'll take it into account.

Ah Rarity, you always do travel light, don't you? I don't want to see what would heavy mean in your own understanding

Chapters are short but enjoyable, but yeah I have to agree with MLPAllGrownUp - for such short chapters I had to think a bit to understand where I was in the story.

Still, very enjoyable piece for a nice read

The orange mare took a final bite from her plate

who eats stew off a plate?

The never ending drums a time lords heart beat

before I continue reading chapter 1, I must say I can almost understand how the daughter of a unicorn stallion and a pegasus-turned-alicorn was a unicorn. I'd explain how I get that but I'm tired of typing.

>>27185752718575

Magic.

No, really. High concentration of magic.