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MLP BRONY 27 15741

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    • Unbound Hatred
      spike builds up his hatred over the years and turns into a bloodthirsty monster
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    Unbound Hatred by MLP BRONY 27

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    Tragedy Dark Adventure Alternate Universe

    Spike is now a teenager, and over the years he has built up a strong hatred for the ponies. After an incident that involving three rampaging manticores, all of the pent up rage and hatred is released, and the peaceful dragon is transformed into a bloodthirsty monster with power that only grows with the building hatred he possesses . With the dragon on a rampage, The Elements Of Harmony are useless due to being countered by the newly found Elements Of Disharmony. Will they be able to get Spike back? Or will he be completely consumed beyond all salvation.

    (This is my first attempt at a fanfiction, so constructive criticism is welcome. i ask for honest opinions)

    May include rainbowspike later

    Cover art by ss2sonic on deviantart

    ( http://ss2sonic.deviantart.com/gallery/30127646?offset=24#/d4s6syk )

    First Published
    21st Sep 2012
    Last Modified
    21st Sep 2012

    Comments ( 120 )

    Corwin Geass
    #1 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Ok I have to ask, does Spike have the Kyubbi inside of him? (Nine Tails Fox)q

    Art Inspired
    #2 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    No capitalization in the description.

    Thorax
    #3 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1311217

    As Art stated, you didn't use a single capital in the title that alone is a massive turn away for anyone who might have been looking to read it.

    I've checked the first few paragraphs in the story and you seem to have just taken Spikes character and completely threw it out the window.

    I can understand making a few changes with him to help go with the story.

    But it feels as though you shot spike buried him in a hole, ran out grabbed another dragon and shouted "Hey this is spike look how angry he is"

    Honestly there is more I could go into, but I do not have the time to go through all of it with you.

    -Work on the Description, make it look presentable and maybe more people will be willing to give it a chance

    -Get Spike back in character, work the story to fit the Character, or at least give us a damn good reason to accept that Spike is some giant dick now

    "She never loved me." that line alone makes me want to thumbs this down and walk out, but I will not rate this story, I'll be back when there is a chapter 2 and then I will give my verdict.

    PacotheTac0
    #4 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I didn't read it but I can already tell you some things you're doing wrong after having read the description.

    1. Everything Thorax said... especially about the description. You ask why I didn't read? That's why.

    2. "built up strong hatred", "pent up rage and hatred", "bloodthirsty monster"

    2 1/2. Tags: tragedy, dark, sad. Those tags, when paired with the above quotes, make it obvious that you're trying waaay too hard to make it dark for the sake of being dark. Readers don't like that.

    3. "power that rivals the Alicorn princesses"... No, no, no. I was skeptical when Chrysalis did it in the actual show. There is no reason for this except for laziness. If you can't think of a better way for a threat to feel threatening, you need to go back to the drawing board.

    Wolf Counsler
    #5 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    You got my attention. Pray you don't lose it, but tell us why he hates ponies

    MLP BRONY 27
    #6 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1311217 fixed.

    >>1311691 i will in one of the upcoming chapters. and i hope i dont lose it. but as i said, this is my first attempt at a fanfiction, so if it goes downhill i will rewrite it to make it better.

    >>1311284 fixed the description, and there will be flashbacks throughout to tell why he is like this now. i already thought about that. and for the record, i said "she never cared about him." and please keep in mind that this is my FIRST ATTEMPT! i have no experience writing, so cut me some slack. i mean, we all start out somewhere right? also, if you have any suggestions for changes. lay them on me, i am all ears...

    >>1311214 answer to said question is a big N.O

    >>1311528well thanks for the feedback, this is my first attempt as i have said, do you have any suggestions for the description? i changed it but in my opinion it is now worse. and changed the tags too. god i am screwing up for my first time at this...:facehoof: well if you have any suggestions, i would appreciate them. and i still do need to go to the drawing board again, and i already know this:ajbemused: and you are right, i didn't focus too much on this. it was just something that happened when i was bored.

    WHATS WITH ALL THE HATE ALREADY?!?!?IT HASN'T EVEN BEEN UP FOR 2 HOURS!!!!!!!

    *sigh* maybe i should leave the writing to the people who are actually good at it and just give up

    :ajsleepy:

    PacotheTac0
    #7 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1311814 Don't think of it as hate. We may come off as harsh but if we didn't want to help we wouldn't have typed anything in the first place. I can tell you now that the description is 200 times better than it was. There are still errors in it that you're going to want to go over. Don't take this the wrong way but I recommend reading up on basic grammar. I always tell people that the description is the first impression you make on potential readers. It should be flawless.

    However, as I said, it's better. The use of capitalization makes it tolerable to look at, at least. It's a good first step to improving. (though you still may want to tone down the unnecessarily grimdark thing you have going on)

    ReaperofSouls42
    #8 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Well then, That would be the first story I have allowed myself to look at with the Tag "Tragedy" in it. So far i like it it was what you woud expect a grown dragon to behave after years of pent up instinct. this seems interesting enough and i think it has potential.

    And whats this? even on likes and dislikes? thats to boring...time to make it uneven.

    UnweptSchlipps
    #9 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1311814

    Whoa, calm down there, my friend. Don't just give up writing forever just because some people pointed out the flaws in your fic.  They're not trying to force you to quit, they want you to become better so you can be one of those "people who are actually good at it".

    By the way, your story is miles above some of the trash I've been reviewing. Yeah, it's not perfect, but I can see that you can definitely write. Your grammar is great (and I see you've got an editor too, so kudos to you), and judging from the other comments, you're slowly improving. I do, however, have to say that Spike being unnecessarily rude is kind of a turn off. I mean, he was happy to see the pony he used to have a crush on cry herself home! That ain't the :moustache:we know and love.

    So keep working on Spike's characterization. But seriously though, you've got potential. And besides, we've all gotta start somewhere, right? (And this is coming from a guy whose first fic was a Gary-Sue...)

    Best of luck to ya mate! ~Schlippy

    Wolf Counsler
    #10 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1311814 trust me when I say this: there is a lot of potential in this story, just has some holes that need  to be filled. Remember the good writers that have a lot of love now, started out getting hate

    MLP BRONY 27
    #11 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1311923 thanks for the support and ways to make it better, thank you for that.

    >>1312024 thank you for the like, i really appreciate it, i just hope i can get better at writing and make this a lot better.

    >>1312176 thanks for the support,  and i will continue this. i just have to make the next chapter good, i am planning to stretch this out as much as i can. i just will have to put together a full story line and make it presentable. and yeah, i admit i need to stretch out the part with rarity, go into more detail on it. maybe in a flashback? tell me what you think about that

    .>>1312232 yeah, i guess. and thanks for the support, it has holes that need to be filled, and hopefully i will be able to fill said holes in the near future, now i need to finish the next chapter, i hope i could get it up in the next two days. i wrote the prologue in one sitting, and looking ahead i see this story could be a good 50,000 words at least, but we'll cross that bridge then we come to it eh? but thanks for the support.:twilightsmile:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #12 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1312503 Well from what i see, you will you are pretty good at it already, unlike me i am a grammical mess. lol if i didn't have a proff reader i wouldn't even attemp to write :rainbowlaugh:

    Anywho i look forward to were this goes, though i hope it isent to tragic. But thats comming from a guy who crys at even the smallest sad anything. lol

    As for Advice, Well i would say try not focus on just one thing let your story branch out a little and dont give up, you have potental as a good writer. like me my first story is all but dead and full of holes :rainbowlaugh: and well my other story isent that amazing eather. lol But yeah just keep tryng and im sure you will do just fine.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #13 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1312520 *puts on determined face* i will not disappoint.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #15 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1312634  she is best pony after all... thank you. will have the next chapter up soon, i have all the time in the world, being a drop out and all. but i don't want to rush it.:twilightsmile:

    oh, and i saved that picture :ajsmug:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #16 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1312718 You can never rush greatness after all and you are quite welcome.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #17 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1312724 and thank you for the compliment. and if you cry over the little things, there may be some parts in this where you cry. no spoilers here, but heads up.

    ReaperofSouls42
    #18 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1312726 Okie Dokie Loki! i'll prob still read it anyway :rainbowlaugh: I like storys were Spike isent depicted as the little baby dragon. Even if he is still awesome as one.

    Corwin Geass
    #19 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1311814Ok just makin sure cause the picture makes it look like it

    thebrony343
    #20 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    holy shit this story is awesome. this is what i tried to do with my story but damn this blew it out of the water  

    MLP BRONY 27
    #21 · 35w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1313109 okay, it can not be that good. i wrote it but i feel i screwed up big time... do you really think that? because if you do. there is more to come, and plus. i have more story ideas like this one that are in production now... but do you really like it?

    UltiXevoz
    #22 · 35w, 21h ago · · ·
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    I like this. I expect great things from this.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #23 · 35w, 21h ago · · ·
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    >>1316131 remember, this is a first attempt, but i hope to satisfy your expectations. i just hope i am good enough. i have a plot planned out and it will be EPIC! but if it is written like the prologue it will not be as good. what impression did the prologue make on you? because i say i suck at writing.:ajsleepy:

    UltiXevoz
    #24 · 35w, 9h ago · · ·
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    >>1316147

    It wasn't that bad. Give the Spike a bit more justification than just a building resentment. There has to be a trigger event that caused that resentment. A keep him in character aswell.

    DashieSpeed
    #25 · 35w, 2h ago · · ·
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    I agree with the others about Spikes character development. Not that he needs to be more canonized, I just agree that you should elaborate on why he has so much bitterness about the ponies. It's YOUR story, and so it can be as far from canon as you'd like. As for the writing, me gusta. I tend to stay away from these tags, but I read it because I kind of told you I would.

    At fist I was like, aw damn, I thought his first fic was going to be a romance. Ya know what though? I like it so far. I like it alot. Kepp it up with your determination, cuz you're not a bad writer at all.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #26 · 35w, 1h ago · · ·
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    >>1318333 there will be flashbacks in the upcoming chapters explaining why... already had that planned out

    >>1320144 ^^^^^ read that comment. and like it said in the description, "May include rainbowspike later" i already made a set-up for it in the prologue. although, i may, or may not decide to work off of it. thanks for the fav dashie:pinkiehappy:

    DashieSpeed
    #27 · 34w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1320300

    Yep, yep. I look forward to reading more.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #28 · 34w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1321036:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

    NightmareKnight
    #29 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1311284Dude, it's his/her(sorry, don't know if they're a guy or a girl) story. Just because this is a MLP site, doesn't mean you have to stick to character. If everyone did that, we would have no diversification. It's okay to say stick to character when you're talking about a character that's not the focus of the story, but not when you're talking about the main character. This story is about a different Spike that has grown up to hate ponies, not the same Spike who was always the good little dragon. You telling the author to stick to his character is like saying do it my way, not your way. Sorry to go off on you, but this kinda thing just tends to piss me off.

    Thorax
    #30 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1327505

    Actually I'm saying, give me a reason to believe he grew up to hate ponies.

    I have no problem with changing a character, but when you jump forwards in time and give us no reasoning behind it, you've basically chucked the entire shows story out the window and said "This is who he is now"

    It's like me taking Twilight and telling you "She hates magic and she's a farmer now" are you going to accept that? or would you rather I give a good reason as to why that's happening?

    NightmareKnight
    #31 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1327514Okay, I may have taken the way you worded your comment wrong.I agree with you there, but when I read your comment, what I saw was 'change character now, doesn't follow canon.' Was just worded a little wierdly for me.

    Thorax
    #32 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1327528

    I'll have to go back and re-word it.

    I have no problem with changing a characters personality, but for something so Drastic, I expect a pretty good reason.

    NightmareKnight
    #33 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1327900Yeah, I'd have to agree with you there.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #34 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1327505 i am a dude my friend...:twilightsmile: sooooo... i just gotta ask... how did you like the prologue?:duck:

    NightmareKnight
    #35 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1328787Loved it. Badass Spike with anger issues who could go into pure rage filled destruction mode at any given time. Hmmm, let's see here. Very angry Spike + plot twist + shenigans=SO MUCH FUCKING WIN!:pinkiehappy:

    MLP BRONY 27
    #36 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1328842 oh trust me, spike will be pushed over the edge, and when he is, there will be consequences to anyone in his way:pinkiecrazy: if you like pissed off spike, you will like this story. i will have the next chapter up soon, but whenever i write, I FIND A FANFICTION I HAVE TO READ AND I GET ADDICTED!!!!!!!!!!!! but i will have more up soon. and thanks for the compliment on the story:pinkiehappy:

    NightmareKnight
    #37 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1328955I know how you feel. I have the next 2 chapters (both of which I'm positive are at least 4.5-5k words long) of my story written out, but whenever I go to type 'em up, I find a new story or an updated favorite. So frustrating sometimes.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #38 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1328983 finally, someone who understands:pinkiehappy: here, have a watch:twilightsmile:

    NightmareKnight
    #39 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1329055Thanks:pinkiehappy: I'd watch you if I could. But according to at least 5 other people, the watch button is broken for Internet Explorer users. Soon as I get my dad's phone, I'll watch you on that. God that sounded creepy. I will click the watch button for your profile on the phone. There, much better:pinkiesmile:

    MLP BRONY 27
    #40 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1329226 get firefox, more user-friendly and better add-ons

    NightmareKnight
    #41 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1329234No way in hell I am getting Mozilla again. It hates my guts. Without going into detail, I tried going to google, and I got some wierd (russian? some wierd language that looked like russian or some other wierd european language) Youtube. I tried going here and it took me to a porn site. It HATES me.:facehoof:

    MLP BRONY 27
    #42 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1329284 lol, how about opera? it loads hella fast.

    NightmareKnight
    #43 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1329459No idea what that is. And I can't reply back after this message. I have school tomorrow, and I need to go to bed.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #44 · 34w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1329478 well look it up, opera loves everyone,

    snipertwilight5
    #45 · 33w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1329483 well it was pretty good and i have to agree with you opera does love everone

    :pinkiehappy:

    snipertwilight5
    #47 · 33w, 1d ago · · ·
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    hey where did you get that emoticon:rainbowhuh:

    MLP BRONY 27
    #48 · 33w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1388395 i dont know where everyone gets them. i just copied the image location from another story...

    MLP BRONY 27
    #50 · 31w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1447149:rainbowlaugh: i hope to have more of this up soon... no inspiration has come to me lately...:ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy::ajsleepy:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #51 · 31w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1447211 Lol cool. i also am finding it difficult to get to writing my next chapter.:facehoof::raritydespair: It is perplexing to say the least.

    snipertwilight5
    #52 · 31w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1447263 thank you for telling me that i will do that when i get home:rainbowlaugh:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #53 · 31w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>1463345 You are indeed welcome.:twilightsmile:

    Inferno demon Dash
    #54 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1464250 YOU! Stop following me on every story I review :rainbowlaugh: JK brother:derpytongue2:

    >>1447211 And as for you....I find your work very, very impressive though remember to caplize the i in your story or when talking about yourself orwhen you have other creatures talk about themselves in first person ALWAYS, trust me it will make the holler monkeys not be so.....bitchy.

    I really, really loved this story though I was laughing so hard when Spike told Rare to buck off, ah, she's my least favorite pony so I hate her:pinkiehappy: Found it really unfair that Pinkie just was so cold and cruel to him for an accident and would not forgive him, that does not really seem like Pinkie Pie.

    And it was strange how Spike would just burn down half a forest that a good friend of his works really hard at each day of her (and her familes) life to survive. Also, how would it be murder to kill a bunch of moving sticks? The manicore I could understand though.

    Damn...Spike as a bastard bitch? LOVE IT! And he was really harsh to Twilight, the one who has been with him since day one and I find it really hard to believe that out of every creature that he would leave her in her time of need, and the same for her as well.....still, I'm always down for some Rainbow Spike, and I'm completely ok with Twilight/Spike brother/sister moments in said story it's just them becoming mother/son *shivers* that I say "OH HELL NO!"

    You ever need any help, ideas or advice bro, I aways got your back...I'll be awaitng more. I'm liking this a lot, mind adding the pets? More so Peewee? (my favorite of the eight pets)

    Also always remember these words: "In everything you do, do your best."

    And: You can NEVER please everyone, so don't ever try.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #55 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497274 for the pinkie pie thing, think about it... she was put in the hospital and all the evidence pointed to it being assault... would you forgive someone if it seemed as though they assaulted you?:trixieshiftright: as for the aj thing, i meant to put this in. she started treating spike worse after what happened to pinkie so he didn't even consider her a friend. and if luck fucked you over and made you look responsible for everything people would probably leave you... (theoretically) the thing with twilight was pent up anger. i base spike's angry persona on myself... and if you don't mind... you got any ideas? i went into this with barely anything... i have stuff for the next 2 chapters but after that i got no clue...

    ReaperofSouls42
    #56 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497274 Never!! Lol also. i hope that review was as helpful as it was funny on your story XD

    MLP BRONY 27
    #57 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497310 hey reaper... i hope to have more up soon, my computer got corrupted and took the FINISHED chapter with it. i had to restore it...:ajsleepy: now i gotta rewrite it...:fluttercry:

    Inferno demon Dash
    #58 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497305 I'll reply tomorrow, about everything it's 4:20 A.M. here what the BUCK am I stilll doing up?:flutterrage:

    >>1497310 For your insult against a fellow fan of Derpy Hooves you shall be punished by having to......SPEND A WEEKEND WITH RARITY AND UGLY CLOTHES, MMMMWAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:trollestia:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #59 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497318 No way? that totally sucks!!

    damn. :fluttercry:  well you got me to rant to if you need it.

    ReaperofSouls42
    #60 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497323....that's just...cruel. actually that scene made me cry....lol

    MLP BRONY 27
    #61 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497323 it is 3:20 where i am, my sleep schedule consists of bed at 5:00am and rise at noon:twilightblush:

    MLP BRONY 27
    #62 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497327 wait what? what scene? FROM WHAT?!?!?!?!?!

    do you have an xbox?:trixieshiftright: (off topic question)

    ReaperofSouls42
    #63 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497329 Lol his story, in it Derpy dies a horrible death. and sadly no...no halo or black ops for me....:fluttercry:

    MLP BRONY 27
    #64 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497331 NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO I WANTED TO PLAY WITH YOU!!!!!!! i am going to read his story now... later though.:trollestia:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #65 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497333 that would be awesome!...but no...And ok! it really in a way is very good.

    Inferno demon Dash
    #66 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497325 And both you bastards got me as well if you need to scream at something. And YES! It did what I hoped it would.....TO THE BATCAVE!:pinkiehappy:

    >>1497328 Shit! And yes, I got a bad ass 360.....why? Buck this, I'm going to sleep....buck you all!!!!! WORSHIP DERPY HOOVES!!!!! WORSHIP HER!!!!!!!

    Sorry, sorry bros, I'm just tired as hell, but for real....love her.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #67 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497334 which one was it?

    MLP BRONY 27
    #68 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497338 you got a 360? you got LIVE?!?!?! if you do, add me, i am BdAnPwNeR27:pinkiehappy:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #69 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497338 Lol but of course. and idk if you read my review or not...but that rabbit dies...i hated it anyway. lol Also i love Derpy!! *rage face*

    >>1497339 Lost Soul of Equestria at first it will throw you off but it is meant to do that. you'll see when you read it.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #70 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497347 YAAAAAAY! i will go read it soon!:pinkiehappy::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #71 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497349 i think you'll like it. since you liked Gilda's Greatest Mistake" lol.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #72 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497352 you read that too huh?:ajsmug: truly a fantastic fanfiction wouldnt you agree my good sir?:moustache::moustache::moustache:

    Inferno demon Dash
    #73 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497339 Tomorrrow I will and only if you add Derpy Hooves (and don't kill her!) to your story...because everything with Derpy makes the story better, real talk.

    >>1497347 And I have, Angel is a bitch and one of the villians in that story anyway, for some reason the role seems to really fit him. And it's: Lost soul of Equestria, and I'm very glad you like it so far bro. Hoping you like my other one as well.....WHY THE BUCK AM I STILL UP?:raritydespair:

    MLP BRONY 27
    #74 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497360 i will add derpy, and do you have minecraft xbl edition, cod black ops, or left 4 dead 2?:trixieshiftright:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #75 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497359 Lol yes it was, though i dislike scootabuse, Rainbow beating the living hell out of Gilda was just brilliant.

    >>1497360 Lol good. and yeah i know. it does kinda fit him. yes very good story. and probably because i'm so awesome to talk to? lol j/k get to bed!

    MLP BRONY 27
    #76 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497368 LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL!

    what is your opinion on this image?

    Inferno demon Dash
    #77 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497362 YES!!!!!!!!:derpytongue2: And no, I do not....always wanted to play Left 4 dead though, but does it require Gold? I don't have Gold if it does.

    >>1497368 Damn....the three of us seem to follow eachother on every story :rainbowlaugh: Right and I'm very glad you really enjoyed it bro, let's see how you like Legacy of Death Belle. :rainbowlaugh: True, true.....and I can't because of you two whores and your bad ass comments, damn it!:fluttercry:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #78 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497375 Lol My thoughts when faced with a hater on youtube. Lol! XD or God of War, because you can do that!:pinkiehappy:

    Inferno demon Dash
    #79 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497362 >>1497368 Night BITCHES!!!!! :rainbowlaugh: JK!!!!

    MLP BRONY 27
    #80 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497380 well add me anyway, so we can play when you get gold, kay?:twilightsmile:

    MLP BRONY 27
    #81 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497383 i haven't laughed that hard since the end of chapter 3 or Article 2!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

    Inferno demon Dash
    #82 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497386 Will do and I agree with God of War on that pic, because Kratos is bad ass like that....or at the very least, Luna when you really want to piss her off:derpytongue2:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #83 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497380 LOL well that go's without saying XD Anyway ttyl bro!

    MLP BRONY 27
    #84 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497395>>1497393 ttyl mah niggas!:pinkiecrazy:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #85 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497391 Lol That picture just kills me when i see it.

    ReaperofSouls42
    #87 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497408 Lol :rainbowlaugh: Yes that one I'll find a way to use it properly on here one day. lol

    MLP BRONY 27
    #88 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497412 you will be able to use it later in my story, spike will pick up a pony and beat another with him, i am only putting that in so you could use that picture.:twilightsmile:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #89 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497415 :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: thats sounds terrible! lol I'm curious how you pull that off. Write faster slave!:flutterrage: Lol j/k faved picture for later.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #90 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497417 I WILL WRITE FASTER! CUT ME SOME SLACK!!!!:flutterrage:

    MLP BRONY 27
    #92 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497432 lol... STROBE LIGHT TIME!!!!!!!!

    MLP BRONY 27
    #94 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497470 IT IS QUANTITY SO I WIN!

    ReaperofSouls42
    #95 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497476 LOl i prefer quality over quantity.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #96 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497478 how did you get the fluttershy invert? i dont see it on here?

    ReaperofSouls42
    #97 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497486 you get it with the grease monkey App for firefox or chrome. If you have it its under Miscellaneous next to Mr. cake first row.

    MLP BRONY 27
    #98 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497489 FOUND IT! you win, congrats.:twilightsmile: but where did you get the aj and rd brohoof thing?:rainbowhuh:

    ReaperofSouls42
    #99 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497499 Right here it has a bunch of awesome emotes. you just right click go to image info then copy the highlighted link then past as an image on here.

    Inferno demon Dash
    #100 · 30w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>1497386 I added you and mine is Ni9htmare demon

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