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Questionable relationship with alcohol [X]

One out of three ain't bad.

>>13666451366645

the last one is the only one that really counts, because everyone knows that alcohol gives writers mysterious powers to write good stories.

An interesting idea, you've earned my attention sir

Will track and see where it goes

What's better than ponies?

Drunk ponies!

Bollocks.

*screws up plans to write barkeep-centred anthology and throws them in the bin*

That'll teach me to procrastinate so much.

So AJ is jelly of Rainbow and Big Mac and Rainbow doesn't swing towards mares... what could possibly go wrong?

I like the bartender, hopefully Aj comes back with her bits later

Ha! I don't think AJ should have her heart to heart with RD while she's drunk.......

This looks good so far (funny) and I'll be sure to check back later to read the next chapter.

Fun story. Can't wait to see what else you have in store (e.g I can't wait to see what your interpretation of shitfaced Rarity is).

Beauty, beauty. Fuckin loved this shit. More, I say. MOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR.

Moar.

That will be all. Thank you, gents.

Last few lines were the best

Poor AppleJack

Rainbow, you better love her you

Wow, I didn't actually expect you to make a fic from that pic, but either way nicely done

Dude really nice. Hope to see more like this soon.

noice!

will stick around to see what happens!

Bar ponies are best ponies. Thumbed up and tracked!

that drunk pony

As a male lesbian myself, I could relate.

That line alone wins you points.

Sir, this was excellent. Very well-characterized, well-written, and from an interesting, unique viewpoint atop it all. I have entered your name into the ballot for the Inky Award of Excellence.

Keep writing, brah.

>>13681381368138 I'm up for an Inky? Nice.

>>13679771367977 Yeah, then I thought out the premise and just went with it. I suppose I do owe the inspiration to you!

>>13676361367636 Write it anyway!

those last few lines.... ROFL. Good story, interesting concept. I can only imagine how rainbow's visit is gonna be. Consider yourself tracked.

Wow... This is a very interesting concept. Dialogue's pretty good and characterization. Could use more descriptive language when it comes to setting. Will watch and like good man.

AJ leaving without paying?! I betcha she'll be back to pay that bartender in the next chapter!

Really good and an interesting concept :) keep it goin!

As a general rule, shipping the elements grates on me, it just writes "FAN SERVICE" in big fucking letters over the fic it's in, I mean some of them so blatant it's almost laughable. I took a dive today and I'm glad I did :p as long as the story is inventive and not another sick twist of fat guys writing smut while giggling like a freak then it's fine with me

Is it safe to assume that 'a pony he would have never thought he'd have the honor of getting drunk', is either Big Macintosh or one of the princesses?

That was hilarious.  Screw you AJ, Rainbow has her eye on a better prize.

Also, I think we all know what Rainbow is going to be talking about.

I'm guessing this idea might have been inspired by Breaking Barriers.

Anyway, decent story and funny ending

It shall be added to my watch list where I shall...watch it...

Let's see. AJ drinks herself senseless and manages to invent a storry about being rutted senseless by to get free drinks. Now that's what i call a silver thongue

I can't wait to see the rest of the mane 6 trying to do the same

Just kidding. RD let AJ down and we know it. I think we also know what RD wil be talking about. The only question is how detailed it is going to be.

Next time... Pinkie Pie confesses her mishaps with Mr B. Turnips!

I can get why Twilight would drink, and Pinkie loves a good party, but FLUTTERSHY?

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Rainbow, you fool! How could you do that to AJ! :(

I definitely hope there's a good appledash resolution coming up!

Definitely, definitely hope. Or I shall have to send my ninjas. Out. And one of them isn't nice!

>>13689231368923 but the others are nice, right?

Their all drunk and since they are drunk, any references to a gay ship are lies.

>>13689301368930

Well. NicER, certainly. But that's relative~

(in all seriousness. I can't wait for the rest of the cast... but especially Rainbow. For obvious reasons )

Well, this is definitely one of the more unique(?) takes on ponies getting drunk and getting into lord knows what, at least of ones I've read on this site/overall. Though hopefully, rest aren't as sad as this kinda was (which'd probably require Sad tag, even though it is probably more Slice of Life right now with AJ finding out sometimes don't always get what/who we want, and dunno what others'll be like, just saying and kinda rambling, so feel free to ignore this part). Definitely funny (whether or not it's related to Rainbow/Big Mac storyverse of yours), how AJ stumbled upon them! I'm curious as to if when Rainbow comes into the story, what she'll have to say, if Applejack has come clean by then. And having the bartender relate as a gay like AJ is, was definitely something for extra points, I think, even if a minor point or will be only brought up with Applejack (at least, at the moment). Definitely tracking to see what the other Elements of Harmony have to say when they get drunk, as well as the special pony he never expected to get drunk!

>>13689231368923 >>13689301368930

I'm just happy to see a shipping situation where Rainbow isn't a lesbian. That's almost blasphemy in this fandom.

>>13689721368972

Not for long, if AJ has anything to say about it!

>>13689981368998 Yes, AJ will demand carpet munching of the highest order. Pony sex ahoy! /sarcasm

>>13690071369007

Perfect!

>_>

<_<

Well, not directly carpet munching. But I hope Dash is a receptive to what AJ has to say :D regardless! Tracking this :)

I've never laughed so hard because of a single word!

That's a thumb well earned!

I was sold early, but that ending sealed it. Faving to watch.

>>13690071369007

Damn right, /sarcasm! You were the one who made me a believer in Mac/Dash, to the point I made it a plot point in my story!. You better not turn your back on it!

Well, I do like MacDash and this was hilarious, so thumbs up and I can't wait for more.

male lesbian? scared to say "GAY" ?

Wow. This is going to be really fun by the end.

I hope and assume Rainbow comes in next. And for that other thing, maybe Celestia?

I demand moar as quickly as possible

>>13689161368916

true dat. That ought to be a good chapter

>>13676001367600

Hmm, I'll try that when I turn 21.

Red Solo Cup...

>>13691831369183 No, as in a male who can relate to lesbians because he too is into mares.

>>13689231368923

My thoughts, too. Here, have ALL my ninjas.

>>13691831369183 ...

Why do I have a feeling that Fluttershy is going to be like a yellow Pinkie Pie when she gets drunk? Maybe go around sticking her tongue in random patrons mouths and not realize what she's doing. Either way, many laughs are going to be had methinks

>>13690071369007>>13690271369027

Oh dear, judging from your comments, I think it's safe to assume that no AppleDash will happen

Lol if this keeps happening, Frosty Mug is going to be one fucking poor bartender!

>>13690071369007

/sarcasm

Aww... there goes my dreams of drunken Twilight Sparkle selfcest.

>>13694101369410 That's rather un-related to AJ/Dash/Mac 'love' triangle. It could still happen (implied and off 'screen').

finally something that isnt appledash get over it AJ shes with big mac now.  sorry i really hate appledash with a fiery passion i ship AJ with everyone but and twillight is going to be an angry drunk.

>>13694101369410

Best Pony / Best Pony is unsinkable ship?

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I like it! Bring me another!

>>13694101369410>>13694411369441 Why can't Rainbow have both apples?

>>13689721368972 tis refreshing to get a straight Dash, as far as shipping goes I'm up for anything that isn't mane six with other of mane six seriously go to the shipping group those are like the most filled folders.

>>13666451366645

Zero of three for me.

There's nothing questionable about how much I love the stuff.

>>13695501369550 Because that would be selfish and I doubt that the Apple siblings would agree to it.

>>13695691369569

i think fanfics with Applejack pining over Dash is getting old sheesh get over it AJ go find somepony else to whine your stupid pitiful life over. is the best

>>13695691369569

but in all seriousness the fact that they're siblings would make it weird

Ooh, this is getting good.  Hopefully you won't go with what everyone else is doing and make Drunk!Fluttershy a very angry drunk or a very horny drunk.  It's funny...but it's also cliched.

I'm not a big fan of Appledash however.  Maybe Rarity will come in on the rebound?  (Yes, I am a big fan of Rarijack)

>>13695921369592 That is kind of why I said; "The Apple siblings wouldn't agree to it".

>>13695821369582 Why are you replying to my comment?

>>13676001367600

Alcohol!

Because no good story ever started with someone eating a salad.

>>13696021369602

I love rarijack too welcome to the club man i noticed Applejack fanfics involve her angsting ALOT i was part of the anime fandom i seen character like her because fans favorite angst trope.

>>13696121369612

i liked what you said. nothing personal.

There's no way this will get any better, because it's already awesome.

>>13696271369627 I... See? Thanks?

Though it may be wise to note that you are speaking to someone who strongly believes that AJ may happen to be best mane 6 pony.

Poor AJ, but the ending was very lolable. I wonder what the rest of the mane 6 will be like.

>>13696581369658

oh dont get me wrong i like Applejack she's my favorite character. i just read to many fanfics where she's going through some emotional stuff for once i like to see her happy.

Hey! Come back and pay your bill!

>>13696781369678 Okay, okay. It's just that that whole "stupid pitiful life" part of the comment you made makes that somewhat less than apparent.

Reading this, while drinking a glass of Stewart's... Priceless!

Cheers my good sir. Cheers

>>13696231369623

exactly

>>13676001367600 OMG. That is so true! I can't write for shit if I haven't had at least a glass of wine or two. Glad it's not just me tho

Also, cool story bro, faved and liked, keep up the good work!

Man that was good and I know Applejack would come back the next and pay him, she just forgot at the time.   Very well written lokking forward to your future works.

>>13677331367733

drunk rarity?

true, but I'm looking forward to drunk PINKIE!

or drunk Twilight!

Fluttershy?

You know what, any of em could be hilarious.

.....

DISCORD

Ah, a new Bronius Maximus story! Excellent.

Drunk ponies? By a critically acclaimed author?

Dis gon b gud

...when I have the time after my exams that is XD

>>13689161368916 She'd probably drink one shot and end up on her plot.

Hmm, so for now, just the Mane 6? I can live with this.

It was only then I realized that she drank almost 125 bits worth of liquor and left without paying.

Shit.

love that ending!

This is good and it can only get better  

That ending   I can only home it becomes a recurring thing.

At the end Frosty Mug and a guard come up to the main 6 and demand payment for 4 digit amount of bits they owe.

>>13696231369623 This guy gets it.

>>13698811369881 I read this in Mr. Burns' voice for some reason.

The ending made me giggle. The rest of the story was also quite nice.

Hmm, an interesting premise.

You now hold the attention of all FiM Fiction within your hands. (Dear god)

Only one logical question remains...

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(No pressure! )

This automaticly gets a 10/10 on the awesome meter keep on going!

Well, Applejack is the element of Honesty so I'm sure she'll pay.

Assuming she remembers going off and getting drunk.

I wonder if this means Rainbow will be the next one...

I like this direction. Might have to borrow this OC for future head canonicity, if you don't mind.

The ending was hilarious!

I am loving this!!! next chapter please!!!   

>>13704971370497 feel free.

Love it so far.

Yeah.. so..

Love&Tol out!

Great story btw. The song has has nothing to do with the story besides AJ sitting at a bar. lol

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>>13696231369623  Twilight Sparkle Gets A Free Salad would like to disagree with you.

That was great! The introduction made me kind of skeptical, because it seemed like the narrative would end up trying too hard (You know you've read stories like that) but this story didn't have that problem. As soon as the the action got going, the narration smoothed out a ton and came much more naturally. I also really like Frosty's analysis of Applejack and cross-referencing with past experience and all that as he communed, and Applejack herself seemed way in character the whole time.

I'm not gonna lie, you've got me on edge! I can't wait for more installments!

No. 9... sounds like the name of a pale ale. IPA, maybe?

I'm partial to wheat beers myself.

>>13692871369287 *tilts head* so he's straight...? why does the world not make sense... >>13693271369327

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>>13711211371121 No worries, eh? Have one on me!

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