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TechnoPony 1112273

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    Meet Safeguard and Advocate, a pair of siblings that have the best job in the world, according to them. They take care of the Canterlot Gardens, the central part of Canterlot in many cases.

    Together they have taken care of the gardens for years, but with another expansion they have been spread thin. In response to this Celestia went to find a new helper for the gardens.

    The only problem with this is that Safeguard doesn't like newcomers, so advocate takes things into her own hooves and helps the newcomer learnt he ropes.

    Meanwhile, an ancient evil, sealed away within the "Statue Gardens" by Safeguard and Advocate (With the help of Celestia) millennia ago, is amassing power to break free from its prison.

    The first creature sealed away in stone is trying to break out. Can our heroes, with the help of some friends, save the day and destroy this evil once and for all? Read to find out!

    ~

    A/N: For the new guy/gal, I picked four random ponies that might work in a garden-type place and then I eenie-minee-mo'ed them to come out with the final character. It turned out to be Roseluck. So yeah.

    Advocate/Phloe

    Roseluck

    Featuring:

    The Slender Family

    Eris the Draconequus

    and

    Prison the Ancient Evil

    First Published
    21st Sep 2012
    Last Modified
    23rd Sep 2012

    Comments ( 20 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Well, this chapter will most likely be a bit boring, but it explains a bit of recent (And not so recent) history in Equestria and the Gardens.

    It's pretty much just hastily thrown together, but I wanted to get this idea published, so here it is.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago · · ·
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    TBH I didn't want to read a 1700-word "boring backstory" until it had more story to go with it, but I hate people who downvote without bothering to leave a comment so here's an upvote.  At least, I hope that's what happened and you didn't delete the comment in a fit of rage :pinkiegasp:

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Mmmm... I'll be watchin'.

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago · · ·
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    A story about gardening? Interesting, don't see that a lot here...

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1313362

    /Deletes Comment/

    PFFTLOL. °˖✧◝( ◠‿◠ )◜✧˖°

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Last but not least... Some action-y story-y stuff to come in about a week!

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1314440

    Woah there, gardening is dangerous bznz.

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Subbed!

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Enjoyed Imensly. Bravo, good sir. Have my favorite and like.:moustache:

    P.S. Nice artwork. You make that yourself?

    #10 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>1315925

    Uh, no. Look at 1) the source and 2) the bolded centered italicized underlined part at the beginning of the chapter.

    But thanks a bunch. :pinkiehappy:

    #11 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Have an upvote.  It's a well written narrative, but I have to say for the beginning of a story, it doesn't have a hook.  You need to somehow put action into it, or show through action.  (Explanation is good for covering ground, but use it for the beginning of a story and it gets boring).  Maybe you can have Eris wreck some havoc and have Celestia threaten to imprison her in stone and within the gardens and THEN use that even to have Celestia explain how the gardens work through that scene.  We don't need a history.   I mean it's nice, I do it too, but not at the beginning and not in 3rd person narration at such an extent.  Still, i'm keeping an eye on this fic.  Good luck!

    #12 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1315372 It is? I would've never guessed.

    #13 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>1317547

    Yeah, I may change it (Most likely) but once the first REAL chapter is up  it won't matter much. But that's just all I'm going to do for that now. I have to put something together first.

    #14 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Ooooohhh.... I seem to have made a mistake.

    I forgot to write a first chapter before I submitted it. It was late and I forgot all about it.

    So, really, that's the explanation for that Prologue. It isn't such a good stand-alone chapter, not really, I was supposed to post the first chapter along with the history and it would've been better.

    As it is NOW, I'm going to be working overtime on the first chapter so this story won't just stand as a (very boring) history...

    So expect it within a couple days because, :yay: weekend.

    #15 · Chapter 1 · 38w, 4d ago · · ·
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    FIRST CHAPTER TO BE UP IN... AN HOUR OR SO!

    #16 · Chapter 2 · 38w, 3d ago · · ·
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    First chapter is out!

    I did a lot better here, you guys, at least in my opinion!

    I really hope you like it. Towards the end it got a little iffy, but I tried.

    Anyways, next up...

    I will be shortening (And changing) the Prologue A LOT so it isn't as shady and weird  and more story like instead of; this is how this happened and boring.

    Second chapter should be up in a few weeks if not less.

    #17 · Chapter 2 · 38w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Sounds like this will be an interesting piece

    Please continue

    #18 · Chapter 2 · 38w, 2h ago · · ·
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    sounds like a good one cant wait for the next chapter

    #19 · Chapter 2 · 37w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Ditto

    #20 · Chapter 2 · 28w, 3d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiesad2:

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