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Lightning always enjoyed the brisk autumn air against his coat when he flew. Few things ever felt better in his opinion. It was a bonus when he was flying away from the jewellery store in the stuffy, high class city of Canterlot. He couldn't count the ponies that were lining up to get his signature. Again, he cursed his distinct coat and mane colors. Even his tail gave it away. Most racers could mask their identities rather easily by covering their faces and cutie marks, but Lightning was a little more popular than that. It made him happy to live in the small town of Ponyville. He chuckled when he thought about how much his life had changed as a result of moving there. His parents had wanted to get away from the attention one received being a famous racer brought a pony in Cloudsdale. Lightning had no objections when they moved. He was glad he didn't. He had met his first true friend the day they arrived. That friend turned out to be the love of his life. He and Scootaloo had been together for the last seven years. Given their respective careers maintaining a relationship was difficult, but they had made sure it wasn't impossible. Lightning checked his saddlebag to make sure the small, felt covered box was still there. He gave a satisfied smile when he saw that it was. When he told his parents about what he had planned for the night, they embraced him and began showering him with congratulations. When he asked Scootaloo's parents if it was alright, they facehoofed and made him aware that it was "about bucking time." He had expected nothing different from the Dash family, but he still felt the need to ask. He WAS asking their daughter to marry him that night. It was only courteous. Ever since the now infamous "day of the dildo" the relationship between him and his marefriend's parents had changed. Spitfire had completely stopped trying to scare him, Rainbow had begun to police her to ensure she wouldn't go too far again, and Lightning felt as comfortable around them as he had before he started dating Scootaloo. Before he knew it he had landed on the porch of his marefriend's cloud home.
I gotta stop getting lost in thought he thought to himself before knocking on the door. Scootaloo quickly answered and greeted him with a gentle kiss.
"Hey Scoot!"
"Hey Lightning! Come on, get inside! Dinner's almost ready!" There was another reason for Lightning to marry Scootaloo. She had quite completely inherited her mother's ability to cook. Lightning's stomach gave a low rumble. Scootaloo laughed. "I guess you got here just in time. Come on, I've got everything set up." Lightning felt a little odd proposing on a date his marefriend did all the work for, but he knew it didn't matter. She wasn't one to care how things happened with them as long as they happened. He did feel it would be appropriate to wait until after dinner. Ever since he smelled Scootaloo's cooking he had difficulty thinking straight.
After dinner the two ponies sat in Scootaloo's living room. They didn't speak, they just cuddled with each other. Lightning decided if he was ever going to do what he came here to do, it was best to speak up now.
"Scootaloo, can we talk for a second?" Scootaloo's ears perked up. It had been a VERY long time since he had used her full first name.
"What about?" She was getting suspicious. Lightning smiled.
"Scootaloo, ever since I met you my life has been the weirdest, yet most awesome rollercoaster ride ever conceived. I've loved every minute I've ever had with you." Lightning stepped off the couch. "I've loved the ups, I've loved the downs, and all because I got to share those moments with you."
"Lightning, what's going on?" Scootaloo knew he was up to something. She hoped he was planning on proposing. Lightning reached into his saddlebags and removed a small felt box. He opened it, displaying the most beautiful engagement necklace she had ever set eyes on.
"I'm saying I want to have a lot more moments with you. Scootaloo Dash, will you marry me?" Scootaloo couldn't speak. So instead, she let out an overjoyed squeak and nodded furiously. Lightning carefully lifted the necklace out of the box and placed it over Scootaloo's head. He leaned in and gently kissed her. From that night forward, their lives were going to change completely. Both of the ponies were ready to embrace that change with every fiber of their being.
Author's Note
I can't thank you all enough for reading this story and my previous work. Knowing that you guys appreciate my writing is the only thing that keeps me writing. I love you all so much, and I ask that you stay tuned for the conclusion of the Scootaloo Dash story in the final chapter, "If You Hear Me, Let Me Know." I'd like to give a special thanks to my friends Cloudhammer and Dash Is Best Pony for their awesome job proofreading for me (The Lord knows I needed it) and to my friend Taliesin for creating the most beautiful cover art I've ever seen.
Again, I can't stress enough how much I love you guys. I pray that I'll continue to receive your support and critique as I finish off this story.
With showers of Love and Tolerance,
Dylan Kern
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. His parents had wanted to get away from the attention one received being a famous racer brought a pony in Cloudsdale.
^Err. I think you forgot to delete some words here, or change something.
Overall, great story. I'm looking forward to the next one. It was a good solid read and was extremely enjoyable.
but enough of that!! i loved both of the fics you have written and cant wait to see more from you! :scootasalute:
Your so tricky, Corny! I love that about you! I go to bed at 3am after editing 'Resolution' and when I get up you have the epilogue up!!! 
I'm feeling all the good feelings I felt when 'Family Mares' came to it's end yet again. And now we've wrapped up the second installment of the Scootaloo Dash series. It leaves such a satisfying ending. Honestly, your the only fanfic writer I know who's really done a "series", with multiple fics for the same story. It's wonderful. It's like a season on TV ending, we love and hate that it's ended and we can't wait for more! 
Congratulations on finishing part 2!!!! I can't wait to see more!!!! I look forward to seeing you continue writing 
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OK, now something that really expresses my joy, for this I must use the Royal Canterlot Voice:
INSTALLMENT TWO HAS BEEN COMPLETED!!!! 
A BIG SHOUT OUT TO EVERYONE WHO HAS READ THIS FIC AND STUCK AROUND SUPPORTING CORNY UNTIL THE END!!!! I DON'T ACTUALLY KNOW, BUT I'M GOING TO SAY I KNOW THAT OUR ENCOURAGEMENT AND ENJOYMENT IS WHAT MAKES HIM LOVE WRITING THESE!!!! PLEASE KEEP UP YOUR SUPPORT!!!!
CELEBRATION IS IN ORDER!!!! YEAAAAAAH!!!! HAVE AN IMAGE:
Image: http://chzbromania.files.wordpress.com/2011/07/guidos-bros-douchebags-fratboys-party-on-bronies.gifKEEP UP THE AMAZING WORK, CORNY!!!!
You... You... I... You....
You are the most evil person I know. I finally find a story I love, coupled with an author who's great, and you done go and end it. You........
*sigh* You done good. You ended it at a good point, without letting it drag on. You gave more personality to those characters than I ever thought someone could... But why must everything I love end when I find it? 
You had better keep writing fantastic stories.... because if you don't... I'll.... do... things....
That as an amazing ending, primal! You're really great at what you do, and I know the sequel will be fantastic too. But, you know what's gonna happen when that ones over right? 
Truthfully, though, this is one of the few stories that I'll drop everything to read if I see it has updated. Your writing technique is amazing, and you always leave us wanting more and more. Congrats on the finish to The Fears Of Yesterday, and I know whatever the sequel deals with will be amazing too. Thanks, Primal, for bringing us these great stories. 
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Read the whole story ! including the first one. I just finished reading the last chapter and I don't have words to explain how awesome this story has been ! (been reading all night , slept for 4 hours, got up and continued reading for 4-5 more hours)
I hope the last chapter is more detailed ! Can't wait !
2 things that bothered me though (Story is still epic!)
-The grammar mistakes in the first chapters and in the previous story. Get them fixed and you'll will easily get to EQD with this. (if you haven't already)
-Second thing is more of a personal choice so ignore it, but I would like a response to it 
Scoot has known Lightning for 4 years before they got together as a couple. In the last chapter they were together for another 7 years before asking her to marry him. My question to you is, why such the long wait ? Why wait 4 years to realize you really need to be with someone ? Why wait 7 more years to realize you want to spend the rest of your life with that someone ? At first I though, by seeing how Scoot's natural mother's funeral went, that you are a conservative and a very religious guy in real life. But then I remembered Dash and Spitfire screwing at least 10 times in every chapter so that must not be it. Of course they loved Scoot as their own foal and thus the need to keep her... innocence for as long as possible but still, statements like "not until your wedding" were quite out of the Dash couple's character, especially since they've known Lightning for so long. I do hope Scoot and Lightning didn't actually had to wait 11 years for their first time, that seems to bug me a lot for some reason.
Also I still didn't understand how old Scoot actually was when she met Lightning and the time references are a bit confusing (She knew him for 4 years and then dated him for 7 more, like he said in the last chapter ?).
Still, great fic, deffo on my top 5. (and I read a lot :D) !
Can't wait for next chapter
I am very faithful and spiritual, but I'm not conservative. And I'm not religious (There is a difference)
The reason I have Spitfire and Rainbow so sexually active is because sex in the marriage bed is a beautiful thing. That, and who doesn't laugh at sexual humor?
The reason I had to have the wait be another seven years for Lightning to propose is because I was an idiot and decided in the first story to put a 15 year time span for the three stories. Given that I intend to end with the epilogue of the first story, I had to make that work.
So...there's my excuse 
I'm glad you enjoyed my stories though, and I greatly appreciate your feedback
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