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    primalcorn1's Stories (12)

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      As Steel grows older, he begins to question the circumstances of his adoption

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      Twilight does some thinking
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    A young colt with a dark green coat stepped inside a small home. As Jade set his saddle bags down he took a quick look around. Satisfied that he didn't see his father he walked into the kitchen to make himself some dinner. He hadn't gotten the chance to eat breakfast and had no money for lunch so a quick meal sounded incredibly appetizing. Celestia's sun had long since gone down. This told him his father was out drinking and it would be wise of Jade to be in bed before he got home. Despite this the need for something to eat overwhelmed his knowledge of the risk he was taking by not getting out of his father's way. After quickly putting together a relatively small salad (he wanted something hot but knew he wouldn't have time) he sat down to eat. As he began to eat his brother walked into the kitchen.

    "You know what he'll do if he catches you out of bed this late." His brother was concerned for him.

    "I don't really care right now. I haven't eaten all day and I'm not gonna wait to eat until tomorrow just because of our father."

    "If you're generous enough to call him a father."

    "Good point." Jade quickly turned back to his salad. Time was of the essence at the moment. His father could be home any minute and he needed to have finished his food before he got home. He'd clean the kitchen if it were possible. His father was something of a hoarder so the kitchen was littered with filth. As was the rest of the house for that matter. A small path had been made through the filth to the young colt's bedrooms. They were the only clean rooms in the house. Jade finished his food. As he was on his way to his room the door opened. Jade's father stepped in with a whiskey bottle dangling from his mouth.

    "What're ya doin' up?" Jade swallowed.

    "Eating. I haven't eaten all day. I was hungry."

    "Eatin' my food? I don't recall sayin' ya could." The drunk stallion made his way toward his son. Jade attempted to run but the house was too small. His father descended on him too quickly for him to react. Jade felt a hoof hit the side of his head. "I'm only gonna hit ya one more time. If I ever catch ya raidin' my fridge again Imma hit ya four times. Got it?" As the stallion raised his hoof Jade saw his brother tackle him.

    "Stay off him, he didn't do anything wrong!" The stallion threw his assailant into a pile of junk (mostly pizza boxes and whiskey bottles) and knocked him out cold with a hoof. Jade made an attempt to help his brother but was met with a hoof to the top of his head. Jade shakily got to his feet. He was still in a daze but he could see his father standing over him. His father swung the whiskey bottle he was holding at Jade. Jade dodged the attack and the bottle broke on the floor. His father swung again. The broken bottle cut a long gash in his cheek. Jade looked up in time to see his father's hoof descending toward his head.

    Jade woke from the nightmare in a cold sweat. He was shaking uncontrollably. He hated it whenever he dreamed about his foalhood. His father, his brother. He always woke in a cold sweat. Worse, he felt like he didn't have control. Nothing was worse to him than feeling helpless. He got up and headed downstairs. He needed a drink. Just a little something to calm his nerves. He never was much of a drinker, only when he needed to relax. He had never endured inebriation in his life. He knew that alcohol clouded his reasoning from his time with his father. Whenever his father got drunk he lost control of himself. If Jade couldn't control himself he knew there would be no way he could control the world around him. That would be unacceptable. He pulled the bottle from the cupboard he kept it in and thought about the events of the last week of his life. As he poured himself a small dose of the calming fluid he thought back to when he lost his wife. Why she took a hit for that freak pegasus he would never understand but there was nothing he could do. Well, he could always force her back. That is if her loyalties to her new friends and her daughter weren't too strong. As he downed his whiskey he figured it was worth a try. It wouldn't be hard to find her. All he needed to do was go to the Dash home when she was alone there. Convincing her to come back would be easy after that. The next order of business was Scootaloo's coltfriend. That had to change. He would stand up for Scootaloo and give her courage to stand up for herself. If Jade could sever that relationship it would make breaking his daughter that much easier. He headed back to bed. He had work to do the next morning.

    Scootaloo woke up crying. It was the same dream about Rainbow and Skyscraper. She quickly gathered her wits only to see that Aerial was standing over her.

    "Are you alright Scootaloo?"

    "Yeah. Just a nightmare. I've been having it since I got my first set of talons enchanted."

    "Talons?"

    "Yeah. So I can play guitar. The first set was Ma's when she was a filly. When Twilight enchanted them for my use she didn't remove the enchantment from Rainbow. Long story short I got stuck with a lot of her memories, and some of them I wish I didn't have."

    "Like?"

    "The one where I was raped as a filly." Rainbow stepped into the room. Noise traveled easily through cloud homes, so it didn't take much to wake the sleeping mare upstairs. "She got stuck with that memory. She dreams about it from time to time still. I feel terrible that I let her have that memory." Scootaloo frowned at Rainbow.

    "It's not your fault ma. Don't take the blame on yourself."

    "It is my fault that I never mentioned to Twilight the enchantment had never been removed from me when I had her enchant those talons to you."

    "If you had told her I wouldn't be the guitarist I am right now."

    "Yes you would, it just would've taken longer for you to get there."

    "Ma, stop feeling bad. Now." Rainbow cocked an eyebrow at Scootaloo.

    "You telling me what to do Scoot?"

    "Yes I am ma." Aerial watched the exchange. She found it strangely heartwarming.

    "You three certainly know how to make a lot of racket." Spitfire yawned as she stepped in the room. She wrapped a hoof around Rainbow's neck. "Come on, it's cold up there without your body heat."

    "You know, we're both awake. Wanna-" Rainbow was cut off with a hoof to her cheek.

    "No. Too late. As much fun as you can be I need my sleep. And so do you." Rainbow let out a small sigh.

    "Yeah, I guess I am kinda tired. Well goodnight everypony!"

    "Night Ma. Night mom." Scootaloo said as her parents went back to bed. Aerial chuckled as the two mares left.

    "They remind me of Jade and I when we were younger." She sighed. "I miss those days." Scootaloo didn't know what to say. It was easy for her to hate Jade, she had never known that he had a good side. For her mother leaving had to be difficult despite what he had done to her. Not finding the words, she decided to settle on a simple goodnight. The two hugged and Aerial went back to bed.

    Lightning woke up and hit his alarm clock. He had a peculiar love/hate relationship with the inanimate object beside his bed. He loved that it got him where he needed to be when he needed to be there, but he sure didn't like waking up in the morning. He rolled out of bed and walked to the shower. He took a quick shower and shook when he got out. The air would dry him well enough on his flight to the Dash home before school. He ate a quick breakfast and got his saddle bags ready to go. He said goodbye to his parents and stepped outside. As he was about to dive off the porch a voice stopped him. A voice that he recognized. He turned to see none other than Jade Crestfall waiting to talk to him.

    "Hello young colt. I hope you don't mind if I take a minute of your time today before you go and see my daughter."

    Comments ( 44 )

    Ice
    #1 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    GOD DAM IT I HATE CLIFFHANGERS

    #2 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Buck you jade, buck you...:ajbemused:

    #3 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    :rainbowderp:

    #4 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96742

    You know you love them.

    Ice
    #5 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96749 nope punched my laptop because of it.

    #6 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96752

    you know you love punching your laptop as well

    Ice
    #7 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96754 no I love punching walls

    #8 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Ice
    #9 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96759 the fuck?

    #10 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96759>>96761

    You two are silly fillies

    Ice
    #11 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96764 I'm a guy who's gonna blow up Japan if you ever say that again.

    #12 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96765

    I think the Tsunami's did a good enough job at that

    #13 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    If Jade hurts Lightning Bolt, Celestia better send him to the moon!

    I can't take these cliffhangers, gaddangit!!!

    Ice
    #14 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96770 yheah but they didn't finish the job btw don't try the guilt thing it dosen't work

    #15 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96773

    What guilt thing? I was just making light of the natural disaster in Japan

    I think that makes me a dick...

    Ice
    #16 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96775 really I was thinking more along the lines of captian obvious.No but seriously I'm just joking your alright

    #17 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    dammit, why do you have to make Jade such a prick, the fact that he's not a total drunk and still acts like this makes him seem just that much worse, I mean with his memories of being treated like that as a colt you'd think he'd be compelled to be  kind not a total dick

    #18 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96781

    Because I need the bad guy to play the part

    #19 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96765

    you are such a silly filly, silly filly, silly filly, silly filly, silly filly, silly filly,silly filly

    :trollestia::trollestia: u mad bro?

    #20 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I want to know more about rainbows rape and what goes on in the bedroom between Dash and Spitfire im not creepy just curious. :pinkiehappy: :rainbowkiss:

    #21 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96789

    curiosity killed the cat or in this case the brony

    #22 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    gah, more cliffhangers! Can't wait to see how this plays out :rainbowlaugh:

    #23 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>96789

    I'm not going to go into detail on those. If you read Family Mares you already know enough about Rainbow's rape because I went through that dream

    And as far as Rainbow and Spitfire's bedroom activities go, I'm trying to avoid a mature rating. I'm only even mentioning sex between them for comic value

    #24 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    DUN DUN DUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUN

    WHAT COULD HAPPEN NEXT?

    STAY TUNED

    #25 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Jade knows nothing about Lightning, and next to nothing about scoots, how can he do anything?

    #26 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Lightning is too smart to listen to Jade

    #27 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    ROUND-HOUSE BUCK TO THE FACE NOW!!!:flutterrage::twilightangry2:

    #28 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    RUN LIGHTNING RUN

    #29 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    ""They remind me of Jade and I when we were younger." She sighed. "I miss those days." Scootaloo didn't know what to say. It was easy for her to hate Jade, she had never known that he had a good side." Exactly. That is a little hard to picture. . . :ajsleepy: Well, I can try to respect Jade (love and tolerance and all that good stuff) but I doubt I ever will. :applejack unsure:

    Huuuuuuuuuh. Jade, Jade, Jade. What ARE we going to do with you :rainbowhuh:? You're targeting you daughter's coltfriend now? Really? That's just sad and under-hoofed, which is what you were going for, but really man, have some class. :facehoof:

    >>96983 I wouldn't count on it. This is exactly the kind of thing that Lightning was worried about, why he didn't want to start his relationship with Scootaloo. Now that this thing has come he'll do one of two things. 1. Man up and stand up for his marefriend --or-- 2. Cave in to his earlier fears and cause a rift between himself and Scootaloo, and possibly get hurt physically and/or mentally by Jade.

    Ahahahahaha! The comment section is hilarious! This looks just like 90% of the internet now, people arguing about who is incorrect with offensive and mostly pointless responses :pinkiehappy:. (That's a joke, I still love all you guys :twilight smile:)

    Shit got very real again. I'm sensing a climax that tests Lightnings loyalty to Scootaloo in the near future, and hopefully Jade getting his shit handed to him. I leave the story in your very capable hands, Corny! Now go do something awesome! :pinkiehappy:

    #30 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>97176 sorry to disagree with you, Dash, but Lightning isn't worried about these confrontations with OTHER ponies. He's worried that his relationship with Scoots will weaken if he gets involved with her. :ajsmug:

    #31 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    fantastic

    #32 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Jade is such a dick.  He treats his daughter the same way his dad treated him, and he sees nothing wrong with it even though he hates the way his father was.  At least his father had the excuse of alcoholism(which is still a bad excuse), Jade has no excuse.  I do find this incredibly realistic though, as people are likely to treat their kids the same way they were treated, even if they didn't like it. :facehoof:

    Can't wait to see what happens between Jade and Lightning.  Either he'll defend himself for Scootaloo an probably get attacked by Jade, or back down from Jade and probably get hit anyways.  Either option will allow for lots of drama. :twilightsmile:

    #33 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Guys remember: 'love and tolerate' :P

    #34 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I hope Jade dies. But then I don't because he has a bad past and reasons why his is screw up. But he's a titbag. But he's misunderstood. But he's a bloody creep.

    GAH JUST GET HIM OUT OF HERE.

    #35 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Off with his head! :flutterrage:

    #36 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Trying to find enough love and tolerance for Jade is like trying to put out a forest fire by spitting on it. It just ain't happening.

    #37 · 76w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I have decided that Jade is a quote on quote " M******** F******* T******* H****** sucking *******************************" that should just about describe him!:rainbowkiss:

    #38 · 76w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I swear if Jade even lays a hoof on Lightning I will kick his sorry ass to the SUN!

    #39 · 76w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>97567 Its just as the internet meme says   "I'm gonna tolerate and love the SHIT outta you."

    #40 · 76w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I like what you did with Jade's Foalhood. Makes him seem like Someone with Feelings. A Result of Abuse and Tradgedy, rather than just being a dick.

    And to all the peopl Bitching about Jade's Actions not being realistic due to him getting abused as a kid, that is, sadly, how it works. The More abusive a parent and the bigger the asshole they are, the more likely their children will follow in their footsteps. Its very much a psychological thing. Due to being Bullied all the time, they have very low self esteem. Due to that, they're going to do whatever the can to regain their self esteem. One of the easiest ways to do that is To Bully someone weaker than you. If the Abuse is bad enough it can stick you with a permaent Self Esteem thing that sticks with you 'till adulthood. Ditto the bullying in an attempt to convince yourself you have some self worth by proving you're better than someone else.(Thats not to say All Abusive People are suffering from a bad childhood or that All people with a bad Childhood are going to grow up to be abusive Dickbags. It takes a different kind of mind to break out of the Circle, but its possible)

    #41 · 76w, 3d ago · · ·
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    When does Luna and Celestia get the chance to kill him/ send him to the moooooooon!

    #42 · 75w, 4d ago · · ·
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    thats it! KAIJIN BUSTER TO THE FACE!

    #43 · 73w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Aw. Shit. :pinkiegasp:

    #44 · 73w, 3d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiegasp:

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