Keeping an eye on this one for sure.

Bookmarked. I'll read this when I have the time. :)

There is an exceptional amount of exceptional world building in this story. Good job.

that was really quite depressing. i'm at least happy the end suggests they reunite all of their friends and are happy again. but the rest gave me such feels. very good story! upped, faved, banana stickered!

ohmmm I knew this picture would cause some good fic to appear, nicely done

Sad, but sweet fic!

Reading this, I couldn't help to get that old Scorpions song stuck in my head.

This part seemed fitting in real well

"Walking down the street"

"Distant memories"

"Are buried in the past forever"

Although in this case, Rainbow was flying...

Very well done I do hope you expand more into this world love the Twidash here so looking forward to moar or else

Looks interesting. Will read.

I would love to see an expansion onto this. It's constructed beautifully and it ends on such a hopeful note to leave it where it is will drive me crazy. Really beautifully done, definitely going into my favorites if for nothing else than just the sheer amount of feels induced.

Very good, we need more :D

Wow. That was glorious. I'd love to see this lengthened, to see who would stay friends and who would move on.

I can connect with this. My best bro and I were apart for seven years, but it was like we never separated at all when we finally got back together. This leaves me wondering who would be like that for Rainbow and Twilight.

Today I am going through the first chapters of every non-mature story on the front page and offering feedback on each one. Yours is the eighth.

Presentation

* When you only have one chapter in a complete story, it's good practice to call it something other than "Chapter 1."

* Hyphenation. When two words work together to describe a third, you need to put a hyphen (-) between them, unless the first ends in "ly" (i.e. it is an adverb).

smoke filled skies

*smoke-filled

* "it's" means "it is" or "it has" and should not be used for constructions like "its lustre," where you are indicating that something belongs to "it."

* If you're looking for the en dash character to use instead of those double-hyphens, here you go: – Create your own by holding down Alt, typing 0150 on the numpad, then releasing Alt.

* One regales ponies with tales; one does not regale tales to them.

* Use pony-specific terminology, because you're not writing about humans here. "showmanship" should be "showponyship"

Story

* The beginning strikes me as a little heavy-hoofed. You really lay the "smog is bad" thing on thick, and it gets a little annoying.

* It's clear that you've got a decent grip on mechanics and have put a lot of effort into this story, but something's missing. You spend a lot of the story telling us about how the characters are feeling instead of showing us how they act around each other and letting us infer their feelings from that, which greatly reduces this story's ability to engage and resonate with its readers. In other words, "show, don't tell." Have a look at these links.

Good day.

I knew it!

I seen that art picture before I just knew somebody in the comment section made a summary background about the picture. It was such a perfect way to start it but I wasn't sure if somebody would make one until YOU did now.

More please~

I'm going to agree with one of the above comments that the whole "Industry is teh BAD" thing is laid on pretty thick, and is really annoying.

And I'm also going to disagree with more than one of the above comments that says that this story needs a continuation: its more or less perfect as is.

To many good one-shots get ruined these days by continuing past their point. This story and what it sets out to do is more or less complete.

Overall, I liked it. It gave me a nice amount of feels. Good job.

very nice/ this was great!  I truly with this one would keep going with more chapters.

Honestly, this set up would have worked better in a total alternate-universe.  I have a very hard time believing the incredibly rapid pace of modernization presented here, especially given the low population density of Equestria and the fact that there is no pressing need for most of the technology.  The human Industrial Revolution took QUITE a long time to come about!  Decades alone to develop steam engines and industrialize existing cities.  

The entire replacement of Ponyville by such a modern city is very unlikely in the space of a mere 5 years.  That is a level of construction such that we haven't seen until the mid-20th century.  Even in the 1940's, it would take a city quite some time to develop to such a degree of industrialization.  The infrastructure alone required to support such a city would take nearly a decade to fully implement.

And then the sudden explosion of technology.  What was the driving force behind this modernization?  Ponies rarely travel much, why the sudden need for supersonic aircraft?  Given the low population and the use of magic for many needs, I can only fathom a huge surge in warfare as a stimulus strong enough to trigger such a rush to modernize.  But even then, how did they come upon all the scientific and technological discoveries needed in such a short time?  The mention of supersonic aircraft alone raises a huge number of technological difficulties.  Such craft took humans nearly 40 years to start building and perfecting after the first powered airplane flew at Kitty Hawk in 1903, and much of that development was due to WWII (the Germans developed the first practical jet plane)

Given that the primary purpose of this story is a relationship between Rainbow Dash and Twilight Sparkle, the industrialized setting is uneccesarily overcomplicated.  It seems wedged in for the sole purpose of narrating a personal dislike of industrialization rather than having an organic relationship to the central plot.  The story would have worked out quite well if the two had merely drifted apart after Dash joined the Wonderbolts.  Twilight could have become the head of the School for Gifted Unicorns or taken a head research position somewhere and allowed the entire story remain firmly within the canonical Equestria without the need for such drastic and inexplicable societal-industrial changes.  

As I said, these rapid changes are not impossible, but given how drastic they are, some explanation MUST be included or it opens too many questions and pollutes the remainder of the story, especially given the fact that so much attention is given at the beginning to the industrialization and yet it bears little relevance to the central focus of the relationship between the two ponies.  Either a war/invasion drove prgress forward at a frantic pace, or re-set this story in an alternate Equestria where rapid population booms had been driving science and technology for several decades, culminating in a full-blown industrial revolution.

I always pay a great deal of attention to the logical composition and progression of a story's world building.  

>>13090321309032

You forgot to take into to account the slight, stupidity of ponies when  compared to humans. But still good argument.

A truly magnificent piece that I enjoyed reading. I'm surprised stories like "Fluttershy and the Wild Stallion" make features, but carefully constructed works of art like this don't. Honestly sir, you are saluted.

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edit: And then you get featured.... Nice...

Will read, but can't right now. BUT  I WILL DO IT!

>>13083291308329 what he said

Wow nice cover art

Looking forward to more

Dang man... you got a real good piece of world building here!

I heavily enjoyed it. TwiDash is one of my favorite pairings and the emotion of the final scene got me right in the 'awww'.

I for one would love to see more of this world!

This is complete? Noooo! MEWANTS MOAR!

>>13082381308238 Thanks Jyki. You've always been a great source of inspiration.

>>13083291308329>>13083591308359>>13084571308457>>13093321309332 Thank you all for your kind comments of support. I never expected this. Have a heart!

>>13085931308593>>13088071308807>>13088711308871>>13089561308956>>13112521311252>>13113241311324 So I wasn't sure if there would be interest in this world, but since all of you have expressed so much enthusiasm to it I'll start exploring a few of the ideas I have for the expansion of this world. Here's hoping for the best!

>>13088931308893 Thank you very much for your comments. I'm making a lot of effort to improve my writing style, I think the best way is for me to just write more. I'll keep working hard!

>>13090321309032 You've put a lot of thought into this, thanks so much. It's a lot of food for thought. I had considered some of these points but not all of them. It's definitely something I'll be toying around with in my head. Yay.

>>13084571308457>>13089041308904>>13111411311141 The awesome coverart was made by SpyroConspirator. I haven't stopped thanking him for letting me use his art. The coverart is sourced appropriately so check him out!

If I forgot to respond to your comment please accept my deepest apologies! It's a lot of comments and I appreciate every single one of them.

ANOTHER ROMANCE.... CELESTIA DAMNIT! I was hoping to read... I bet it's good.

>>13114991311499

Of course i would be interested in that idea of an alternate Equestria like that. Big fan of steampunk and age of industry, I think it could be as big Fallout Equestria or close to it, especially if you flesh it out like you did in your story.  I look forward to seeing what you bring.

I knew it. It's always the one's I notice on the front page... Good job

Wow after I read ut... I was moved. I felt the pain and lose so closely...

You must give us more of this!

faved, thumbs upped, and watched. this was amazing. my favorite 5,000 ish short story by far. please i would love to hear more. not to demand it, just it would be totally awesome if there was more.

On my player durring the darker emotive parts twards the end;

Haven't read yet, but this sounds way too much like Fable 3 to be a coincidence. Am i wrong? The cover art and the description seem so clear, but i just have to be sure.

There should be more.  This is too good to leave like this, because it feels totally unfinished.

An excellent story. I for one was very pleased to read this story... it was interesting to see how the world changed with the rise of technology. On a side note, I'm not so sure the Wonderbolts would fade away simply because I feel like while we can always watch machines race it's far more interesting, at least I think so, to watch people race and compete. Of course I can see Dash losing her love of the racing because of the machines that clog her air.

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It isn't really a romance. More like two very close friends finally seeing each other in a very long time.

I don't even know why the romance tag is there. The parts that explain the past, hardly even suggest anything was going on. unless I'm missing something

But none the less. The story is really well written, so don't let a possibly misplaced tag scare you off.

As much world building as you put in this, there's no way you can leave it a one-shot! I simply won't let you!

Winds of Change? Hehe. Sounds like something that would come out of my arsehole.

Good story. I really got nothing else.

Steampunk.

Twidash.

Fairly well-written.

More from this universe please?

Well I feel a little like I've just been stabbed in the gut. That was lovely, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

I liked this a lot. I would like to see more to this story as other people have said. However I do think Nyronus has a point, so don't stretch it further than it should. But I do think this could go a few more chapters without disgracing itself! Perhaps just see from the others' point of view how everything has changed.

Ah now this is a good read so far its got got a good feel to it and has nice connection with the characters seems a bit early to give it a ponyfic critic rating but it has to be done

Rating: Its the Perfect Fic

Im the ponyfic critic, and i read it so you dont have to

I was intrigued by the way you conveyed the changing world and how the ponies reacted to it. I'm surprised how many people seem to dislike the acrid atmosphere you have developed especially considering that the industrial era was really just a bad time period. All thoughts of hygiene and general cleanliness went up in smoke with all the smog of the new industry making the air difficult to breath. At least that's how I've always learned it in my history classes. Taking characters who had grown up in a world that was colorful and vibrant and throwing them into a world that is as bleak and dull as the industrial era, it's a fascinating combination and leaves a lot of room for emotional turmoil and interesting character development.

The only reason I suggested an expansion is because I read your blog where you said if there was interest you would want to, so I wanted to show that I would support if you wanted to expand, don't want to feel like I'm forcing you into writing more than you feel like.

Also I feel I should point out the mere fact you are actually going through and answering every single comment is a feat in itself that is worthy of all my respect. You're pretty awesome man.

Looking forward to whatever you write.

Can I stab that secretary?

>>13090321309032  Pegasi can control clouds and earth ponies can grow rocks, you'd think they could do something about the smog.

>>13090321309032

I think the point was to empathize the changes twilight was willing to endure and by extension, the changes friendships could endure.  He needed to almost alienate twilight from the town as she watched it fade into steel and ash.  I also believe that it was simply 5 years since she left and that they had gone on for a while together and developed a little closer relationship (light twidash shipping was hinted at pretty strongly) as the seeds of change were being sown.  

I definitely agree that the speed at which technological advancements progressed was unprecedented even under the most ideal of occasions, the demand for materials of higher grade must have skyrocketed and been consumed faster than older methods could produce.  Perhaps instead of war, an event that would radically increase the population tenfold forcing travel to less populated areas, increased demand for food, shelter, jobs, and luxuries, and sudden political fluctuations as radical groups gain enough members to gain more power.  An explanation is that these technologies may have been readily available but expensive and not worth the effort it would take to replace traditional methods.  When that technology was finally needed enough to make it worthwhile, it was quickly adopted and mass produced to keep up with the strained supply and demand.  With the country scrambling to maintain stability, morals are thrown aside in favor of better dividends and survivability.  frivolities and celebrations are faded out and functional, calculated plans for survival and maximizing profits replace them.  A nation gives up it's culture so that it's descendants might have a spitball's chance in hell at having a decent life in a working country instead of a burnt out shell with to few resources to sustain itself.

>>13129271312927

Shame on you!

Love and tolerance brony!  Love and tolerance!

>>13127201312720

+1

Wow. Just... Wow.

You've done a brilliant transformation of Ponyville from a small town to an industrial wasteland. I am envious.

That being said, do you mind if I use elements of this story in a future story I may write?

>>13122611312261

Your right!Fable 3 is very steampunkish!But the ending of the storyline is still sadder than anything!!!

A great one-shot, good job!

Very cool!

Epic story...but when ever I read a story I always imagine it this being no exception and usually I get and I idea off the title page and the picture for this story (not sure if deliberate or not) looks steam punk so it was all thought out in steampunk but the part about the airship I always think of some really fast airship and the bit about supersonic was... well well weird I mean a supersonic airship BTW +=

A Sequel for this is a must...

>>13131531313153  But you're still talking about 5 years, maybe 10 if you allow some time after the canon show for Dash to join the Wonderbolts (The story's timeline needs to establish this clearly, without having the reader make assumptions to have it work).  Unless they began mass-cloning of ponies (though that would explain all the Colgate copies in crowds!  Gasp!) there's no way to create that many new ponies so quickly, if population growth is used as the explanation.  A 10-fold growth in population, assuming a 4-1 ratio stallions to mares, in that time period would require each mare living to be of breeding age AND have 12.5 offspring between the time of the show's canon and Dash joining the Wonderbolts, leaving society in an impossibly mad rush to keep pace with a population boom akin to what I would only expect from rodents!  It's completely impossible.

No matter how you look at it, the growth occurs too quickly, and there's still the fact that in the story there is no explanation.  It should not be up to the reader to make up reasons for settings in the story.  Also, it is very important to note that settings should be written as to need no explanation.  For this story, which is so short and with the primary focus is Twi-Dash, there's neither time in the narrative nor purpose in creating such a drastically different setting than we are familiar with in Equestria.

FOR THE LOVE OF GOD, DON'T SHIP THEM!

This is beautiful, I sense a drunk Pinkie Pie scene in the near future.  

I like it. Shows just how much progression can change things, but at the same time it shows how things can stay the same, standing against the test of time.

DAMNIT I CRIED AND IT'S ONLY THE FIRST CHAPTER! I don't think I'ma make it guys

Oh my gosh, this is an incredible number of comments. I will try to respond to you all. Please forgive me if I miss some, know that I appreciate all these comments. They're truly inspiring. Also, I would like to note that I have started considering how I want to continue this. There is a lot of back-story which needs to be explained.

>>13116111311611 I hope it's good, I've put a lot of thought into this one. I look forward to seeing your comments if you have any!

>>13116131311613>>13120521312052>>13121031312103>>13122641312264>>13124791312479>>13127271312727>>13134041313404 I mentioned above, but I'd like to respond to all of you directly since your comments are a directly contributor to my inspiration to continue. I had a lot of ideas when I first started writing this but I didn't really explore them. I am definitely exploring them now!

>>13116701311670>>13138571313857 I'm incredibly honored I was able to get such a strong emotional response. While that was not my direct intention, I always try to put my best effort into anything I write so the readers can feel what I am feeling. Thank you!

>>13122611312261>>13133661313366 To be honest I actually have not played through the Fable series though I've heard it's excellent. With that in consideration, it's quite a compliment coming from you guys. Thanks so much!

>>13128811312881 Wow, you are too kind. While I don't think I can ever be perfectly happy with everything I do, your compliment means a lot to me.

>>13083321308332>>13086111308611>>13100911310091 Thanks for adding me to your read lists! I look forward to any comments you may have.

>>13136321313632 Ponies have such crazy hijinks when they get a little strong cider in them. As far as Twilight and Rainbow, I find them adorable together. I'm a romance author at heart...

>>13133811313381 Thank you kindly, the picture really was one my great sources of inspiration. SpyroConspirator made a great piece of art before this story was even conceived.

>>13133801313380>>13133671313367>>13126421312642 Thank you kindly! As much as I write for myself, I can't help feeling a great deal of appreciation for everyone else who can enjoy what I write.

>>13132341313234 I'm honored you would consider adding more to this world of your own volition. I'd love to read it when you get around to doing it.

>>13129271312927 I don't intend to have any harm befall her, however, she is a quite mean. She sort of encompasses a lot of the anger and malice which could reside after years of not so great circumstances.

>>13125671312567 Not my intention exactly, but it's an funny thought for sure.

>>13114911311491>>13128741312874 I am definitely considering more at this point since everyone seems very keen on seeing more. After all, I have a lot of back-story to work through. I especially care about the remaining characters who are separated.

>>13138261313826 This theme was definitely something I was striving for. After all, in this world the bonds of love and friendship should be the strongest!

>>13134361313436 I've been following your comment thread and I am thoroughly humbled by how much thought you've put into this world. I have a few ideas to address some of the logical elements regarding growth in this story, but nothing concrete yet that could really contribute suitably to your thoughts.

>>13131471313147 Have a heart! I hope you feel better. And thank you.

>>13128991312899 Wow, a directly compliment to me personally. Thank you so much. It really means a lot to me. And yes, if I can continue this without detracting from the story then I will add more to it. There's a lot of relationship building and friendship building. I hope my future works will be pleasing as well! I intend to do my very best!

>>13127201312720>>13088661308866 I'm definitely thinking about it! Twilight and Rainbow have a long way to go...

>>13123471312347 The romantic elements of this story are definitely lighter than my other works. I do want to develop it into something a little more though. Love stories just warm my heart so much, I hope you don't mind!

>>13122831312283 I imagine the WonderBolts are still out there, though slightly diminished in form considering the skies are no longer their's alone to rule. I definitely have a few ideas regarding their status and how they may impact the world in the future. Rainbow is probably hit the hardest because she always wants to be very best.

>>13121421312142 I'll just consider that lucky on my part to have a soundtrack to add to the mood.

>>13116601311660 Thank you. I know I've been saying thanks a lot, but it's completely sincere.

>>13089431308943 I'm glad you enjoyed this. As far as a continuation. I tried to leave it off at a good point where there is hope in the future. The reader can take it from there, or as many people have expressed, they would like to see my own thoughts on it. If I do produce something I'll do my best to avoid detracting from this piece - after all, everyone has expressed so much positive feedback for it.

>>13141501314150

So very true!

I read around 10 stories in this week, and yours is the best so far. This lil story is surprisingly good. Making this longer with visiting the other girls would be a really nice sequel, because the story, and setting is good.

If you need a pre reader, than add me on skype: Kristof070

-Dark

Not bad, not bad at all.

Buck you man Hit me right in the feels just by reading the damn description. This is...WOW. Someone call up Webster 'cuz theres no words for this

please write more, such a beauty does not deserve to end like such...

Brb, gotta empty out the old tear ducts.

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Excellent, just excellent. Bravo, good sir. Bravo.

I can easily see this continuing. Too bad it's a one- shot... It's one of the best One- Shots I've read in a while, nonetheless.

Also, 69th comment. Hehe. Yes, I'm so immature.

>>13133661313366 i know what you mean, awful...

>>13141501314150

Me? Minding? Hah, that's laughable. As long as a story is well written, I can read damn near anything. Though, I thing there were a few well written stories that were a grind to get through.

>>13146941314694Again with the image failures..... If anypony needs help with images, feel free to ask. Sample:

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i'll read later it seems really good

Awsome story is awsome doesnt seem complete though needs a couple more chapters. Also mustache

Good story is good.

>>13128991312899

The Industrial Revolution was one of the greatest time periods in human history, rivaled only by the Information Revolution and the Dawn of Agriculture. The advent on industrialization lifted countless people out of crippling poverty and subsistence living. It wasn't all roses, but if you could ask any factory worker of the time what they thought they would tell you it sure beats struggling to grow enough crops to survive winter.

Magnificent piece of work

I don't usually read AUs, but with yours and The Fluttershy Effect, I might just become a convert. I do hope you'll continue this; the ending's left quite open to interpretation, and I don't like loose ends.

>>13155471315547 See cause when I think of one of the greatest times of human history I think of maybe the Renaissance where art thrived and new ways of thinking were being developed, or perhaps the Period of Enlightenment where logic and knowledge were being spread further than rhetoric from religion. I don't exactly reach first for an age where child labor became a thing that caused many to never even make it out of their childhood and living conditions were so bad that 35 was the average age for all workers.

I have a hard time believing any worker would talk about having to grow crops to survive the winter being an issue compared to the absolute garbage working conditions of factories back during the start of the Industrial Age. True for those running the factories this was an age of revelry and good tidings but for the common man wage was low, housing was cramped, the air was thick with smog infecting their lungs and making breathing difficult, and the safety conditions of the factories were nonexistent making every single work day a possibly fatal errand.

Things slightly improved near the end when people realized that all they had been dealing with over the last 50 some years was literally killing them but even the conditions after that were not so amazingly great. Perhaps the Industrial Revolution was a great time period because of the advancement that it gave to humanity, but at the same time it showed one of the darkest sides humanity has to offer. Factory owners were overwhelmed with greed and as a result people died and their children forced to work. The air became poisonous as a result of that greed as well, almost as if to symbolize the dreary fate of all those who were to work that day. People might believe the ends justify the means.....but these means are just too much for me to justify. Again perhaps that's just me though.

>>13141501314150  I always put a huge amount of thought into everything I write or write about.  I may not have all the literary terminology to adequately explain what I'm noticing, but I can muddle through well enough to get the point across.  

My exceedingly logical world building and outline planning is the primary reason I've only posted one tiny snippet of a story.  It takes me MONTHS to plan a large story.  I've only ever written one long story in my entire life, it was the first and only time I sat down and forced myself to push through all the obsessive attention to details.  It ended up being about 93 pages, a decent novella-size.   And that was 11 years ago now!

I have about a dozen short pony story ideas, and 8 long ones.

I expect maybe one of each will eventually get done.  

>>13114991311499 dear god, thats my friends but, im becoming something thats not good and my friends are drifting further and further apart except one.

>>13140761314076 you are very welcome... if you could elaborate on each of the other M6's stories I want each of there stories... and possible where and what the CMC are up to now...... I leave you with this.... CHARIOTS!!!!

>>13160351316035

Income for societies poorest was ten times what it was before industrialization. Median income literally increased tenfold. Imagine the living conditions of the time period and make them 90% poorer. Conditions really were that terrible beforehand. I will freely admit conditions are even better today, but that was a direct result of the industrial revolution and the increase of applied technology, without it we would almost certainly not have the luxury to communicate with each other from across the world on a website dedicated to fanfiction about a television show. Without the expansion of production, we wouldnt be able to afford computers or televison, they would be luxuries only for the very wealthiest if they existed at all.

Manly tears were shed that day...

AAAAAWWWWW YEEEAAHHH!    Good stuff!   Bro-hoof!  Hi-Wing!   I really liked this story...one of my faves.

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>>13155471315547

You are daft..... these were some of the worst periods mankind has ever douched out upon the earth.   The only great things about these periods was all the technological developments that lead to the creation of ponies......the rest is just the beginning of the inevitable implosion of all societies!......

Look up  Fredreich Neitzche..... then imagine a world where his philosophy reigned supreme  (disregard the retarded and skewed views of Fascism)

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MLP needs more Steampunk.

even though i'm not really a fan of Romance, i'm gonna have to make an exception for this.

>>13165151316515 I do not wish to continue this discussion over the comments of a story as it is rather rude for our discussion to be taking up all the space that CalmNQuiet can be receiving praise from. If you want to discuss this further still just shoot me a PM or something and we can go from there.

Sorry Calm, this got kind of out of hand. Entirely my fault and I apologize for not taking it elsewhere sooner.

Despite it's length, good job on fleshing out the background. I see a goldmine of ideas that you could wring from this, a sequel, or probably even a prequel!

the song your betrayal is a good song   for this story

it fits  this was great anyways with that said MOARRRRRRRR!

Damn good writing!

Keep at it!

>>13188031318803>>13172131317213>>13159171315917>>13154611315461>>13143451314345 Thank you all for the kind comments. It brings me a lot of joy to weave a good story to share.

>>13186981318698 The song is a little heavier than I anticipated for the world - however I can see it working considering all the heavy machinery.

>>13185491318549>>13152951315295>>13146911314691 At this point I am fairly certain I would like to expand upon this world SpyroConspirator has inspired me to write. However, until I come up with an actual full draft for my editor I'll keep quiet. I don't like making promises I can't keep.

>>13177791317779 It's all right. Discussion can be helpful in creating story ideas. I'm just staying neutral so I can listen to both sides.

>>13175281317528 You're too kind. I know romance isn't for everyone so I've really focused on crafting the world. How a romance may develop in this world is a side story all together.

>>13170541317054>>13146941314694>>13146711314671 I'm touched that my story was able to instil such deep emotions in you guys.

>>13141951314195 Thank you for your kind offer. I'll keep it in mind should my current editor wish for a break.

>>13159771315977 The loose ends in this story could technically be left up to your interpretation, but, since everyone seems keen on seeing how I would like to continue the world I am currently trying to put together a synopsis for a draft of a continuation.

Once again, in case I forgot your comment or missed it (there are so many of them now) I apologize! I thank everyone for taking the time to express their thoughts on this story. This really helps me grow as a writer and it also gives me warm and fuzzy feelings.

Really great story!  Can't wait to see where this story goes.

THIS STORY NEEDS TO CONTINE.

>>13201261320126 WHAT HE SAID!

Wow... This one actually made me a bit sad. The sense of the mane six becoming... obsolete... is just heartbreaking. Having lost a friendship because they "left for better things" i can tell you, twilight's reaction is completely genuine. I will watch this story closely. I must know what happens... (Convenient that most of the friends went off in pairs. Rarity and Pinkie in Las Pegasus, and Fluttershy and AJ in Appleloosa.)

I loved this story. Almost everything about this story is amazing. Except that it went a bit too fast, like Alondro said.

BUT THE COVER ART! HOLY CRAP! Never has a simple internet image actually made me think so much (And then mix it with you story, it's like, a mass thinking... Thing...)

Haunting and beautiful.  I love it!

Touching and nearly heart wrenching.  very good

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That is EXACTLY what I thought when I saw this in the featured box.