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    My Little Dashie 2: Equestria

    By: bucknorris

    Edited By: TheWattsMan

    Chapter One: The Portal

    Authors Note: I am not a very good writer but I hope you enjoy what this story is meant to tell.

    It had been two years since Rainbow Dash had returned to Equestria. I thought of her every day, wishing I could see her again, but knew there was no way for that to happen.


    I had just finished getting dressed for work when I heard a loud crash of thunder outside. Odd,’ I thought,the weather report said it was going to be a clear and sunny day. I looked outside into the front yard and there was no rain, nor any clouds. I then checked the back garden and saw a large congregation of clouds swirling around, with small but noticeable electrical sparks showing up every now and then. There was another loud thunder blast, and a bolt of lightning hit the ground. Curiosity got the better of me, and I went outside to investigate.

    Once I stood on the grass, what seemed like a small earthquake caused the ground where the lightning struck to part, revealing a stairway down. Since curiosity was beating the living hell out of me, I decided to go down the staircase. After about a minute of walking, I ended up in a chamber of some sort with an arch doorway in the middle. I was about 2 to 3 metres away when the doorway started getting these little electrical sparks like the ones in the clouds. A sudden flash of light nearly blinded me, it calmed down revealing in the arch what appeared to be a portal. I went closer to investigate, when the doorway started to pull me in. A moment of darkness was instantly replaced by a piercing bright light, then back to darkness.


    I awoke groggy with my vision blurred, and heard voices around me.

            “What do you think it is?”

            

            “I don’t know, but... Hey, it’s waking up!”

            

            I tried to speak as best as I could, “Uhh, what? Where am I?”

            

            A familiar voice replied, “Easy there sugar cube, you’ve been out cold for a couple of days. Me an’ my family have been taking care of you the best we could, but-”

            

             I interrupted, “What happened, and where am I?”

            

            “Well, you’re in Sweet Apple Acres: it’s the apple orchard for Ponyville.”

            

            “P.. Ponyville? I can’t be, this place was…”

            The voice interrupted, “Are y’all sayin’ you’ve been here before?"

            

            I replied, “No, but someone I know lives here.”

            

            “Who?” The voice replied.

            

            ‘This might be my chance to see her again,’ I thought.

            

            “Who?” The voice said again.

            

            “Dashie...”

            

            The voice was startled, “It’s you? But, that can’t be possible-- I gotta get Twilight…”

            “Wait, if we’re in Sweet Apples Acres, then…”

            

            “That’s right,” the voice said, “Its me, Applejack. Now wait here while I go get Twi.”

            

    End Of Chapter One

    Comments ( 2 )

    #1 · 72w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I see no quotation marks when speaking, there are awkward sentences that feel incomplete like There's some I know here...

    Which should probably be "There's somepony/someone I know here..."

    Nice attempt, but I'm sorry, this had many issues that if I weren't posting on my phone, I would point them out to you.

    #2 · 45w, 3d ago · · ·
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    YAY MLD 2!!! I will read now...

    Edit: Short but cool, but short.

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