Bluebirdd065
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HAHAHAH, yes! Best pony going nuts over her shades, gotta love it. Favorited!
Only critique though, you could really add more detail to her searching of the house. Since her searching for her glasses is the main focal point of the story, there's a lot more depth to be had. Adverbs and adjectives are your friends, and since this story is a comedy, exaggeration is your BEST friend!
Other than that, though, great story! Like I said, Favorited. :)
Looks interesting. Added to read later. Have a thumb for one of my favorite bg ponies
Octavia's face at the end:
The thing with Vinyl reminds me of Homestar Runner with the "Presents" cartoon, here I'll even parody it for you.
Viynl Scratch: Oh horseapples I set the alarm for 6:00 PM instead of AM again!
There is nothing Holy, or sweet about Celestia. Nice story though
Vinyl for best pony!![]()







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