Twilight decides to take a break from her intense studying and appreciate the beauty of the magical night. Much later, that night's inspiration sends Rainbow Dash to her dreams.
Ponies will go where their determination allows.
cute, nicely done
Ponies in space!
I'm looking forward to seeing how this comes off.
I'm glad you guys like it!
Argh. Now I want to know what was on that note. It's gonna bug me!
I'm just going to assume it's a note of romantic significance and appease my inner Twidash.
Cute story. One of the few in months that I'm not being asked to review, and reading it just to read it. Congrats on your acceptance, btw.
Danke, good sir.
What an adorable story! A quick little piece of writing that accomplishes what it needs to do.
Great story! I don't see how anyone could dislike this.
Congratulations on the feature mate!
Thanks a bunch!
Shucks, I'm glad you think so.
You and me both.
This was a very lovely peace of work indeed
Now to figure out what was on that note... It's not like I'm too tired to figure it out anyway
Awww, that was a really touching story. Your description of Twilight's star-gazing was just beautiful, and I was more than happy to see the hint towards Twidash shipping at the end there . Well done on a great story
awesome story but I really want to know what that note said.
I just might be inclined to make an epilogue... *wink wink*
>>13227721322772 do it!!
My god. This story will never receive the recognition it deserves. Your use of descriptive language and overall atmosphere of this story is stunning. You didn't let it get convoluted with any worthless garbage, and kept it true to a clear and beautiful goal the whole way through.
Well done. Someday I'd love to be half the writer you are.
Really, I'm sure you're fine in your own right.
Now excuse me while I curl up a little and mumble incoherently because you know how to make compliments.
Seriously though, it's hard to keep composure.
What a delightful story, I'm glad I saw this go by.
Looove it!! :
That avatar looks familiar...
>>13288841328884 It's a screen capture out of a filler episode from the anime One Piece, I've been using it as a profile pic on various websites for years. If you recognize it from somewhere it is probably me behind the account.
for some reason, the first couple of paragraphs were going in one ear and out the other(or however you would modify that saying for text) for me, but it's kinda late and I think that was more my fault than the story's.
A fun little story, and this from someone who normally isn't a fan of these shorter one shot affairs. I approve.
Awesomeness approved. Just one thing. WHAT THE HAY DID THAT NOTE SAY?!
Speaking of heart warming epilogues, aye
How it should end.
Rainbow Dash: "Can I join the Wonderbolts?!?"
Spitfire: "Um, no."
Raibow Dash: "What......"
Spitfire: "I mean, despite the fact that you helped save Equestria three times, saved the team from certain death, won the Best Young Fliers competition, can do a sonic rainboom on command, got to the moon AND got water up to clsdale with barely enough wingpower, we're still not letting you join.
Rainbow Dash: "Why not!"
Spitfire: "Because you aren't good enough."
Rainbow Dash: ""
Spitfire: "Bye bye now!"
And then Rainbow Factory.
At this point, she's got a higher rank than they do .
heart warming epilogues indeed
I've gotta say, at the beginning (of the epilogue), I thought it heading more towards a 'shipping' ending, but I really like the way it turned out. Good work!
My intent was to keep the ending open, and I'm not gonna say what actually happened. Glad that that way's preferred!
It was a nice story. However, due to the tone and plot of the narrative, maybe a little less Purple Prose would have helped. It works well as a cure story, but the dialogue feels a little too heavy handed. I guess you were going more for a poetic/introspective feel, but the effect might have been strong if those instances were restricted to certain points in the narrative.
Even if that irked me somewhat, the characterizations and the (friend)shipping were very well handled, so it was a good story.
Made my day to see this epilogue.
Heartwarming and amazing.
I always like to see stories like this, able to create heartwarming scenes between characters without shipping them.
That's what I went for!
Well, the epilogue makes this story. I would agree with a previous commenter that the prose is a bit purple to begin with, and something about how the characters just suddenly and without any awkwardness dive into the heartfelt declarations seems a bit inorganic. But the visuals are quite nice.
I definitely agree with what you've pointed out, looking back. I get the feeling that I probably could have started at the launch and it wouldn't have suffered too greatly. Either way, I appreciate the comment, cowpoke.
Sometimes I regret my oath to Never Unwrite, Never Delete, yknow?
Anyway, I liked the story, by the end of it. I can't give you a thumbs-up because for completely unknown reasons, FiMFiction isn't allowing me to upvote things. I do not know why this is.
That's strange. Also, that feeling when a reference gets in completely unnoticed.
Some evil, masochistic part of me wanted this story to be sad. Wanted there to be an accident.
"Ground control to Major Tom, your circuit's dead, there's something wrong!
Can you hear me, Major Tom?
Can you hear me, Major Tom?"
That sort of thing.
As it stands, I share Skywriter's sentiments. It's a tad "inorganic", but not a bad read.
I say that a big part of writing is learning, so it's definitely good to make some mistakes and then be able to avoid them later on.
"... heat from the rocket hadn’t yet been matched by the cool of the outside."
Space is not cold. The problem is that the atmosphere becomes so thin that there is no heat transfer whatsoever. Venting heat is a much more pressing issue, because even though the average temperature is near absolute zero, there isn't any atmosphere through which the heat can be transferred.
I'M SORRY I'M GETTING TWILIGHT SPARKLE ALL OVER YOUR AMAZING LOVELY STORY IT JUST BUGS ME
She's not quite in space yet at that point, just high in the air. Either way, don't worry about it. I decided to leave out the really physically accurate things since the story wasn't very technical in the first place, so it's my bad.
Even a year after first reading this, I still consider this to be one of the most inspirational and sweetest fics I've ever read, and it's one of the few that I've come back to re-read.
This is probably eleven months overdue, but I just had to draw you something for making such an amazing story that's been stuck in my mind for so long: http://fav.me/d6p6kso
Overdue my ass! (pardon that)
It doesn't matter when it happened, the fact of the matter is that it happened and that makes you awesome. If anything, I'm a bit overdue in that I got here nearly a week after the fact.
Still, thanks. This was a great pick-me-up after the past few days.
No problem, this story is truly awesome, and one of my top favorites.
I'm glad you like it
>>13587681358768 I think Spitfire is just worried that Dash will steal her thunder by being so awesome. Which she would.
I hardly remember this fiction.