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    150 Followers? That's weird

    Well it happened. I hit 150 followers. If I had more time I'd make a nice post, but for now I'll keep it all brief.

    Thanks everyone. It really means a lot.

    Some time ago I had mentioned doing an AMA once I hit 150, but for now I'll put that on hold. After I release another chapter of Stability, then I'll do the AMA.

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    Hey everyone. I just want to let you guys know that I'm still working on writing when I can. Lately I've been working sixteen hour shifts in addition to being sick, which has left me with little time. I'll get the next chapter of Stability out as soon as I can, but I can't make any promises as to when that may be.

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Note: This story is sorely outdated. It's in desperate need of a rewrite that I'm too lazy to provide. Read at your own risk.

What do you do when your world collapses? When a pony you thought you knew turns her back on you? How do you cope when the pieces don't fit and your friendship comes crashing down? A certain white unicorn is devastated when she finds her pegasus friend of many years to be a cold and broken shell of who she once was.

First Published
16th Sep 2012
Last Modified
7th Nov 2012
#1 · 109w, 3d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

Edit: This story is extremely outdated. It was but my first attempt, and I have improved exponentially since then. It is nothing to judge my writing by.

Deviant Art links

Chapter 1: http://fav.me/d5ewg17

Chapter 2: http://fav.me/d5ewmin

Chapter 3: http://fav.me/d5fndh2

Chapter 4: http://fav.me/d5gcjud

Chapter 5: http://fav.me/d5h231u

Chapter 6: http://fav.me/d5ihey0

Chapter 7: http://fav.me/d5jwm3u

Epilogue: http://fav.me/d5keiwu

#2 · 109w, 2d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

Hooray Vinyl! Also others.

#3 · 109w, 2d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

>>1284100

Oh yes, we will be getting plenty of Vinyl and her antics soon.

#4 · 109w, 2d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

this was the shipping story you were working on huh? sounds enthralling :3

#5 · 109w, 2d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

>>1285117

Yes, this is the result of all my work, or rather "work" over the past couple of weeks. Criticism is definitely welcome.

#6 · 109w, 2d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

welp I read the first chapter. I don't think I'll get to the second today though. it was pretty good.

(though I was expecting a lot more crying fluttershy)

anyway, one thing I noted was how the colt talks to rarity. I'm not exactly sure, but it seems like a blatant call for action. a plot device if you will and it makes the scene look more ridged in my eyes, especially considering how unrealistic it seems. some high class musician/writer telling a stranger he barely knows about how great she is. you just can't do that in real life.

other then that, it was pretty good and I enjoyed it. ^_^

#7 · 109w, 2d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

>>1285369

Mister Staccato there is a loose cannon, and as his interactions with Octavia and mannerisms show, he is anything but high class. Everyone will just have to wait and see where he winds up. :pinkiecrazy:

#8 · 109w, 2d ago · · · The Pain of the Unkown ·

You have my attention.

#9 · 109w, 2d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

better then what i right

"like"

#10 · 109w, 2d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

Flarity is best shipping! :raritywink:

#11 · 109w, 1d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

Can't wait for vinyl and her shenanigans!!:pinkiehappy:

#12 · 109w, 1d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

>>1292575

Shh, who told you? :pinkiegasp:

#13 · 109w, 22h ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

>>1293981 my pinkie sense is telling me that something's going to happen.

Pinkie, wha... How... Whe...

Oops, sorry gotta go byeee!

#14 · 109w, 22h ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

Octavia! I read it in her 'Dubstep Dishwasher' voice.

Very well written! I'm going to read chapter 2 this afternoon but impressed so far!

Please remove the hyphen line breaks, it doesn't look good on a mobile device.

:fluttershysad:

#15 · 109w, 18h ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

Hmmmm....Haven't quite decided if I love this one or not..:applejackunsure:  I like it for sure...just not sure if I love it.   There doesn't seem to be any major issues to complain about. I t is fun.......... at least I wish to continue to see how this plays out....at least with the new couple interacting with the musical couple.... it is.....compelling. :duck:

Not sure who deserves credit for this pic...found it on PB

#16 · 108w, 6d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

I found this to be wonderful, and I love the integration of Vinyl and Octavia (of the few shippings I do read, they're my favorite) but in all honesty, I think that Rarity may have overreacted to Fluttershy's ONE encounter of closing her out. If it happened maybe twice or more I could see why Rarity would have cause for alarm, but otherwise, I like this story.

#17 · 108w, 6d ago · 1 · · Those Blue Eyes ·

This sir, I am finding enjoyable. :twilightsmile: Please write further!

#18 · 108w, 3d ago · · · With Friends Like These ·

Chapter 3 is finally here! Thank you all!

The absolutely amazing song referenced in this story for those of you that haven't heard it yet: Luna- Eurobeat Brony

#19 · 108w, 3d ago · · · With Friends Like These ·

Truly amazing story, really well written. I'll be sure to share it around. Waiting for the next chapter :pinkiehappy:

#20 · 108w, 2d ago · · · The Pain of the Unkown ·

I see. Nice appearance by Octavia, and that colt (Mando comes to mind), whoever he is, is a nice character.

Good job on this chapter! Sad to see Fluttershy have to be a mixture of :flutterrage: and :fluttercry:. But I could easily see why she was like that.(I have that ability now appearantly :p)

#21 · 108w, 2d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

"The couple stepped out of their carriage and into the chaos, organized chaos, but chaos nonetheless." That should be, "The couple stepped out of their carriage and into the chaos... organized chaos, but chaos nonetheless." or just put a period there.

Now that I've done that, there is one thing on my mind... what happened to that speechlessness when rarity found out about Octavia?:rainbowhuh: Other than that, YAY Vinyl!

#22 · 108w, 2d ago · · · Those Blue Eyes ·

>>1322040

Can you specify? What speechlessness are you referring to?

#23 · 108w, 2d ago · · · With Friends Like These ·

Its a great story you got here:pinkiehappy:! I usually stay within my "Master Ships" (Rainbow Fire, Appledash, Pinkieshy, and Vinyl 'tavi), but whenever I leave those I find a very cute or very engaging story.

I award you with moustaches :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#24 · 108w, 2d ago · · · With Friends Like These ·

>>1322186 When Rarity was first informed of Octavia being a lesbian. I remember her being unsure of how to react to that information. Then she gets back, sees the letters, goes to Fluttershy's, hears the song... and thinks nothing of it. I at least expected some form of "She's... she's into mares?" thought or openly questioning Fluttershy. It took me a moment to realize that, though.

#25 · 108w, 2d ago · · · With Friends Like These ·

>>1322302

Basically the way I intended to be seen was Rarity is more tripped up by the fact that she was wrong in her assumption of Octavia's preferences than the preferences themselves, which she obviously has no problem with.

#26 · 108w, 2d ago · · · With Friends Like These ·

>>1322334 Ah, I see. It just seemed like a rushed reaction... almost like I missed a whole section. Thanks for clearing that up:pinkiesmile:

#27 · 108w, 2d ago · · · With Friends Like These ·

I'm so like vinyl in resturants, not giving a crap, eating bread over bread, talking with my mouth full.

#31 · 108w, 1d ago · · · With Friends Like These ·

I like the way you portrayed Vinyl and Octavia.

I pictured Sergio's singing with the voice of Frank Sinatra

Can't wait for the next chapter

Well this chapter was quite the annoyance for me to write. The pace will pick up a bit next chapter, I (somewhat) promise.

Stories are good!:derpytongue2: This did tend to drag but I can let one chapter slip. May :raritywink:X:yay: continue to be plausible to me.

Goddamn.... To... Much.... Cuteness... Can... Keep... Up... With... It... D'awww so cute!!!

>>1359613

Yes, I hate this chapter, I can assure you that the next one will be interesting. If not feel free to storm a castle and kidnap a princess of sorts

>>1359625

Glad you liked it! I disagree, of course, but your opinion is definitely reassuring.:pinkiehappy:

I'll just put this here if the story didn't quite fill you with enough cuteness.

Keep up the good work.

>>1362110

I hope you sleep happy knowing you almost killed a man with that GIF.

Thanks though!

So... Rainbow is upset at the lack of Flutterdash (I assume Flutterdash because Raridash doesn't show up much), and had already confessed her feelings to Twilight. Twilight is unsure how to take it; she's unhappy for Rainbow, but happy for Rarity and Fluttershy.

>>1363332

Have you been looking through my MS Word documents or something?

#42 · 107w, 1d ago · · 1 · The Pain of the Unkown ·

Sorry, I can't read this...

The way Aloe acts is not only out of character for her, but it's also professional suicide which just breaks me out of the story entirely. :fluttershysad:

>>1367476

Completely understandable, I hate that part as well to the point where the first chapter could get a massive rewrite. And thank you for actually telling me what you didn't like, one of my biggest pet peeves is when people don't let me know my mistakes. Keep being awesome!

Good chapter, a little slow compared to the others but enjoyable nonetheless. It was disappointing seeing Rarity lie, it's almost as if she knew Fluttershy wouldn't have the confidence to call her out.

Poor Rainbow Dash.

You may want to fix a spelling error "Flutteshy".

#45 · 106w, 3d ago · · · Redemption ·

Second to last chapter everybody! It's definitely been a wild ride for me. New awesome cover art by http://insanebowdash.deviantart.com/

T4
#46 · 106w, 3d ago · · · Redemption ·

Oooh that ending. Not sure how to feel about that...is rarity happy or sad?

#47 · 106w, 3d ago · · · Redemption ·

>>1395508

I still can't get over your amazing name.

She's happy because :yay: :raritywink:

#48 · 106w, 1d ago · · · Redemption ·

Can't wait.... Going to read chapter 5 on the train.

#49 · 106w, 1d ago · · · Redemption ·

Awww, ending so quickly :applecry:

#50 · 106w, 1d ago · · · Redemption ·

>>1404244

(possibly only) One more chapter to go! However, just because it will be the end of this story doesn't mean it will be the end of this pairing (hint, hint).

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