Edit: This story is extremely outdated. It was but my first attempt, and I have improved exponentially since then. It is nothing to judge my writing by.

Deviant Art links

Chapter 1: http://fav.me/d5ewg17

Chapter 2: http://fav.me/d5ewmin

Chapter 3: http://fav.me/d5fndh2

Chapter 4: http://fav.me/d5gcjud

Chapter 5: http://fav.me/d5h231u

Chapter 6: http://fav.me/d5ihey0

Chapter 7: http://fav.me/d5jwm3u

Epilogue: http://fav.me/d5keiwu

Hooray Vinyl! Also others.

>>12841001284100

Oh yes, we will be getting plenty of Vinyl and her antics soon.

this was the shipping story you were working on huh? sounds enthralling :3

>>12851171285117

Yes, this is the result of all my work, or rather "work" over the past couple of weeks. Criticism is definitely welcome.

welp I read the first chapter. I don't think I'll get to the second today though. it was pretty good.

(though I was expecting a lot more crying fluttershy)

anyway, one thing I noted was how the colt talks to rarity. I'm not exactly sure, but it seems like a blatant call for action. a plot device if you will and it makes the scene look more ridged in my eyes, especially considering how unrealistic it seems. some high class musician/writer telling a stranger he barely knows about how great she is. you just can't do that in real life.

other then that, it was pretty good and I enjoyed it. ^_^

>>12853691285369

Mister Staccato there is a loose cannon, and as his interactions with Octavia and mannerisms show, he is anything but high class. Everyone will just have to wait and see where he winds up.

You have my attention.

better then what i right

"like"

Flarity is best shipping!

Can't wait for vinyl and her shenanigans!!

>>12925751292575

Shh, who told you?

>>12939811293981 my pinkie sense is telling me that something's going to happen.

Pinkie, wha... How... Whe...

Oops, sorry gotta go byeee!

Octavia! I read it in her 'Dubstep Dishwasher' voice.

Very well written! I'm going to read chapter 2 this afternoon but impressed so far!

Please remove the hyphen line breaks, it doesn't look good on a mobile device.

Hmmmm....Haven't quite decided if I love this one or not..  I like it for sure...just not sure if I love it.   There doesn't seem to be any major issues to complain about. I t is fun.......... at least I wish to continue to see how this plays out....at least with the new couple interacting with the musical couple.... it is.....compelling.

Image: http://i730.photobucket.com/albums/ww301/xBNDx/MLP-FiM%20Megathread/Normal%20Pics/22049-artistvalcronfluttershyrarishyrarity.png

Not sure who deserves credit for this pic...found it on PB

I found this to be wonderful, and I love the integration of Vinyl and Octavia (of the few shippings I do read, they're my favorite) but in all honesty, I think that Rarity may have overreacted to Fluttershy's ONE encounter of closing her out. If it happened maybe twice or more I could see why Rarity would have cause for alarm, but otherwise, I like this story.

This sir, I am finding enjoyable. Please write further!

Chapter 3 is finally here! Thank you all!

The absolutely amazing song referenced in this story for those of you that haven't heard it yet: Luna- Eurobeat Brony

Truly amazing story, really well written. I'll be sure to share it around. Waiting for the next chapter

I see. Nice appearance by Octavia, and that colt (Mando comes to mind), whoever he is, is a nice character.

Good job on this chapter! Sad to see Fluttershy have to be a mixture of and . But I could easily see why she was like that.(I have that ability now appearantly :p)

"The couple stepped out of their carriage and into the chaos, organized chaos, but chaos nonetheless." That should be, "The couple stepped out of their carriage and into the chaos... organized chaos, but chaos nonetheless." or just put a period there.

Now that I've done that, there is one thing on my mind... what happened to that speechlessness when rarity found out about Octavia? Other than that, YAY Vinyl!

>>13220401322040

Can you specify? What speechlessness are you referring to?

Its a great story you got here! I usually stay within my "Master Ships" (Rainbow Fire, Appledash, Pinkieshy, and Vinyl 'tavi), but whenever I leave those I find a very cute or very engaging story.

I award you with moustaches

>>13221861322186 When Rarity was first informed of Octavia being a lesbian. I remember her being unsure of how to react to that information. Then she gets back, sees the letters, goes to Fluttershy's, hears the song... and thinks nothing of it. I at least expected some form of "She's... she's into mares?" thought or openly questioning Fluttershy. It took me a moment to realize that, though.

>>13223021322302

Basically the way I intended to be seen was Rarity is more tripped up by the fact that she was wrong in her assumption of Octavia's preferences than the preferences themselves, which she obviously has no problem with.

>>13223341322334 Ah, I see. It just seemed like a rushed reaction... almost like I missed a whole section. Thanks for clearing that up

I'm so like vinyl in resturants, not giving a crap, eating bread over bread, talking with my mouth full.

Wurd!

=

Image: http://i352.photobucket.com/albums/r324/knowwii-chan/rarity_ogglyboogly.gif

>>13287261328726

'Dat comment.

>>13287981328798  

I like the way you portrayed Vinyl and Octavia.

I pictured Sergio's singing with the voice of Frank Sinatra

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png

Can't wait for the next chapter

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_rainbowkiss_flip.png

Well this chapter was quite the annoyance for me to write. The pace will pick up a bit next chapter, I (somewhat) promise.

Stories are good! This did tend to drag but I can let one chapter slip. May X continue to be plausible to me.

Goddamn.... To... Much.... Cuteness... Can... Keep... Up... With... It... D'awww so cute!!!

>>13596131359613

Yes, I hate this chapter, I can assure you that the next one will be interesting. If not feel free to storm a castle and kidnap a princess of sorts

>>13596251359625

Glad you liked it! I disagree, of course, but your opinion is definitely reassuring.

I'll just put this here if the story didn't quite fill you with enough cuteness.

Image: http://iambrony.steeph.tp-radio.de/mlp/gif/157289%2B-%2Banimated%2Bcursor%2Bderpy_hooves.gif?1333659283

Keep up the good work.

>>13621101362110

I hope you sleep happy knowing you almost killed a man with that GIF.

Thanks though!

>>13621481362148

Then my work for the night is done

Image: http://cdn.broni.es/images/emotes/mlp-desalute.png

Wurd.....

Image: http://e621.net/data/preview/04/56/0456e34a76f47593b80dce685581e2fe.jpg

So... Rainbow is upset at the lack of Flutterdash (I assume Flutterdash because Raridash doesn't show up much), and had already confessed her feelings to Twilight. Twilight is unsure how to take it; she's unhappy for Rainbow, but happy for Rarity and Fluttershy.

>>13633321363332

Have you been looking through my MS Word documents or something?

Sorry, I can't read this...

The way Aloe acts is not only out of character for her, but it's also professional suicide which just breaks me out of the story entirely.

>>13674761367476

Completely understandable, I hate that part as well to the point where the first chapter could get a massive rewrite. And thank you for actually telling me what you didn't like, one of my biggest pet peeves is when people don't let me know my mistakes. Keep being awesome!

Good chapter, a little slow compared to the others but enjoyable nonetheless. It was disappointing seeing Rarity lie, it's almost as if she knew Fluttershy wouldn't have the confidence to call her out.

Poor Rainbow Dash.

You may want to fix a spelling error "Flutteshy".

Second to last chapter everybody! It's definitely been a wild ride for me. New awesome cover art by http://insanebowdash.deviantart.com/

Oooh that ending. Not sure how to feel about that...is rarity happy or sad?

>>13955081395508

I still can't get over your amazing name.

She's happy because

Can't wait.... Going to read chapter 5 on the train.

Awww, ending so quickly

>>14042441404244

(possibly only) One more chapter to go! However, just because it will be the end of this story doesn't mean it will be the end of this pairing (hint, hint).

Love the story.

Thanks again for using my cover edit for the picture.

Makes me feel like I actually contribute.

This chapter is finally done! I do apologize for the week delay, but apparently I have my own obligations outside of pony or something silly like that. Chances are is that after this there will be one new chapter and a possible epilogue. Thanks for reading!

>>14741641474164

I KNOW! The nerve of real life, getting int the way of the Magic of Friendship.

This story realy deserves more views.

I hate when good stories don't get enough recognition. :(

>>14801691480169

>>15243641524364

Why thank you, both of you. This is the ongoing cliche, but it really is the readers that make the story. Each and every one of you are the reason that this story has lasted as long as it has and are the reason that I continue to write words, no matter how bad I believe them to be. As far as recognition goes, I am thoroughly shocked and surprised at how well it has done, especially being my first story; I never thought it would evolve into such a labor, yet a labor that is completely worth it. I personally believe I have received many, many more views than my story has deserved (not that I'm complaining, of course ) and am extremely surprised anyone read past the first two chapters. I have to extend all of my gratitude to all of you beautiful readers. That being said, it is not me that gives the story the views you believe it deserves, so if you believe that, I encourage you, please, spread it around. Tell your friends, your parents, your dog, your congressmen, anybody that you see fit. It truly is my pleasure to serve you guys, and expect much more from me in the future. All though this story will be experiencing it's final chapter (hopefully) this weekend, that does not mean my writings of this pairing are over. They are too adorable to put down

>>15244901524490 I totally agree with you, rarishy's too cute to put down. Also, octascratch is unputdownable as rainbow dash would say. I hope I could tell more people about this story, but no one in my life is a brony :(

told you i would read it and its perfect

Well, the time has come. The final real chapter for Catching Butterflies. Please take note, this is NOT the last part of the story, there will be an epilogue in the coming days. Just a short little conclusion, that's why this one was seemingly empty.

I want to give a massive thank you to everyone who read along and has supported me through out this fun little endeavor of mine! Thanks guys, you bronies are awesome!

I'm blown away right now. It made the featured list. This is amazing; I am struck speechless.

Congratulations, with your fic you have got me introduce to the many wonders of OctaScratch and RariShy

no regrets Even though the fic is small it made up for it with it's storyline.

Very nice job

I'm glad I thought to give this story a read through all that time ago.  It sure has been a lovely trip, from start to finish!

SlightlySerious, that chapter (7) was amazing! Every moment I could visualise. I really enjoyed this whole fic.

Many Thanks!

Tom.

>>15537881553788

>>15537961553796

>>15574171557417

>>15631141563114

Alright, time for a collective response of gratitude to all of you great people who have helped me through this endeavor of words, letters, paragraphs, and run-on sentences.

I want to start by reiterating how overjoyed I am at the response my writing has received, both on this website and on Deviant Art, which can be found here. Believe it or not, it is your words that have created mine. Without all these encouraging comments I had been recieving, I never would have made it past chapter three, let alone to seven loaded chapters full of shippy goodness. I'm proud to have written for so many great people.

Alright, now that that sappy stuff is out ' the way, on to cool things.

First of all, I'm writing an epilogue to provide some much needed closure that I was far too tired to put into the final chapter. Yay

Next, I currently am basically storyboarding for some short one shots involving R and Flyshy (Nicknames, but you already knew that) that will be mostly comedic. Yay for comedy.

And a final note here: I have many stories in the works right now, and at least four times as many ideas, so on my profile I will be placing a little module that will help me and everyone else keep track of those writings and their progress. More shipping, some sad, some dealing with insanity , all that good stuff. That being said, I strongly encourage that you add me to your watch lists to keep up with all that, that is, if you believe that I am a writer worthy of something such as a watch.

That about covers it.

I choose the best places to write long messages; like five people are going to read this.

Man, I'm gonna miss this so much, I'm excited/sad about the epilogue.

It has most definitely been a wild ride with this story, but as with all roller coasters it has a part where people hop off and either say "that was fun" or "that was disappointing".  No matter what way you look upon it, all good things must come to an end (and some bad things too), so it is with this, final page of words that I close out this story. It's been good fun, fun that I wish to repeat with future endeavors. I want to thank everybody for their support, and I want to give a big thank you to ArikarinRD for helping me through this from beginning to end. All of you people are amazing, each and every one of you.

Stay tuned for a chapter one rewrite!

speachless. its been a great ride and cant wait for more stories also first.

Awww!  That was very cute.  And congrats on getting this far man, I know it couldn't have been easy with all you've been busy with lately, but congrats still.

This story is similar to my darling sugarcube, it's about one of it favorite pairs, it's short, but well written, and very cute.

>>15806771580677

>>15813741581374

>>15989431598943

Drat, I was hoping it was an intense psychological thriller.

>>15993621599362 Why this whole story is nothing but a emotional rollercoaster that really drags the feeling into someone even my cat is happy enough to start licking me when I open this story (that or I still taste like Bar B Q from last nights screw up.

I quite liked the poem did you make it up for this or is it an adaptation to fit the theme?

I can only surmise Aloe's disregard for one of the small list of regular clients is that she is atleast slightly aware of the situation of why Fluttershy is upset tot he point she would actually go through with denying her business over the problem.

I was slightly perterbd at Octavia's annoyance of rarity assuming she had a colt-fiend, but considering her given high class tendencies i assume it was her thinking Rarity would judge her. If that was the intent then your writing has background influences of dialogue people may not neccesarily notice.

But i digress, looking forward to how this plays out.

>>16364971636497

The poem was something I wrote in a fit of boredom when I was in a room with a guitar for a couple hours.

Basically the first two chapters are rather empty and detached from logic, but I like to tell myself that my writing skills improved as the story went on.

Ok, the point of view seems off to me, you gave some rather in-depth thoughts about Fluttershy's internal thoughts and worries that would have been very meaningful had they been presented as something she was worrying about rather than placed out there as fact.

It seems like you have a very clear picture of what is going on in both Fluttershy's and Rarity's mind but without that context placed in somewhere in the story we readers cant enjoy the full work of what you are doing. Had this been an alternating 2cd person POV chapter i should think it would have been quite beautiful, with this 3rd person view however we readers lose out on both the context and the emotional build-up and progression that seems clearly evident in this chapter.

The time skips are also a little confusing at times, Rarity having woke up and received the letter to visit Fluttershy i would assume this means it is morning or early afternoon, however after walking to Fluttershy's and going through that interaction they fall asleep cause it is night, i assume this meant they had laid together for hours already, but that is an assumption had it been a statement it would have been both clear and a meaningful gesture to the romance.

I am also off put by the "S" playing in this, i assume S is Sergio, If so how could he possibly know about Fluttershy's condition or even have the idea that he could/should intervene for Rarity whom he just met, i have no context to understand someone other than a well known friend of rarity being involved in this, perhaps it will be explained later on.

Like i said it seems You (The Writer) know what is going on but i cant keep up all the implications without some context, but i can clearly see that this story has a well defined progress that i am missing out on. Makes me a sad panda to see the form of a beautiful story without being able to fully indulge in it's interplay and context.

(I can see that you have skill with this story but i don't have the enough pieces of the story you see, to enjoy it on the level you alone can see.)

PS- (sorry if i am not clear trying to be, i can clarify if you need and i absolutely do not intend to be rude with these statements.)

The Vinyl and Octavia interplay was adorable.

This chapter fits quite well. Bravo

Still getting hints of missing information and emotional tensions, perhaps i am to tired to notice the points?

Unfortunatly it is late and i will have to return tomorrow to continue the story, and believe me i will.

Nice chapter, now to see what RD is upset about. Onward.

It was a well worked chapter but the escalations starting point namely this worry of Rarity having loved someone before felt colorless. It needed to be made something for a reader to consider before the escalation into a very well done spiral of romantic chaos. I think i can see some of this story as you imagined it, but the story itself does not contain these critical pieces of information. I did like that the later chpter went into first person for Fluttershy and it made it alot more effective at getting points across and eliciting emotion, i think the story would have been fantastic had it been done in first person mostly with a bit more deliberation on what each of the main subject feels and fears.

It's like a picture was taken of a beautiful landscape but the lens was fogged over and all i can see is the colors of the sunset.

There are a few grammatical errors but other than that it was a lovely chapter, and i rather liked the implied background story for Vinyl and Octavia, and i adored Vinyl's act of messing with Fluttershy that was a hilarious turn.

Ok, a nice finish. I take it this means the implication of Rainbow being involved was something you decided to drop.

It is a good story but it could have easily been great, thanks for an interesting read!

>>16386061638606

And I must thank you for the lovely critique. A lot of the time there is a lingering problem where people will read a story, dislike some aspects and say absolutely nothing about it, so it fills me with great joy that you did the opposite and let me know what the problems with it are.

This story itself was a learning experience, and being the nature of learning experiences, there is bound to be a tip-hooved waltz of wonky perspective, as seen in this story. 'Twas a fun write, but I can only expect that my next stories (the many, many that I have planned) will be exponentially better as I take the lessons I have learned from this slightly overly ambitious endeavor.

The little bit with Rainbow turning into a sad pony is something that is basically a supplement to another story that I have in the works, being one that is standalone but refers back to this one just because I can.

Still though, this little fic will always be a first attempt, and if there is anything that I have learned about writing, it's that I can only get better at it as time goes on. I look forward to those days when I can write something that I will consider worth reading; this is quite an exiting time.

Thank you again for reading and more so critiquing my story! It does me good to know that people care enough to want others to improve.

>>16386691638669

Not a problem, it is fun to read these stories and i try to help when i can.

Thanks for letting me know the Rainbow thing was an allusion to another story.

I can only hope you future stories will be to their full effect, and from what i read behind the lines in this it should be something worth being quite proud of.

Thanks for taking the criticism as friendly cause that is what i meant it to be, and i am always cautious about this because so much of the context is lost in text and i make sure it is clear as to not offend or upset someone.

>>16387701638770

Constructive criticism should in no way be offensive to me or anybody. What's offensive is when people give the story a dislike and don't bother to tell what was wrong with it.

Got to thinking i should make sure i had the correct POV in mind with my earlier statement after a bit of research seems i was mistaken with my description, for that chapter i meant 2cd person alternating POV not first, your skill seemed to be in 2cd peron for that, Felt i had to clarify so that my suggestion was not tainted.

I broke my mouse, but I could only like this once! ERGH! Anyway, great story! Favorite chapter so far. (I'm a bit behind)

>>17087221708722

Fix that mouse! You can't scroll without it.

>>17087391708739 I kid.

I think that I found one word to sumerise this story: D'aww

Cute fic

>>21938702193870

I disagree.