While this one is a little short, I actually liked it. It had it's point across and this honestly did remind me of what happened around the timeline of "My Little Dashie" I'd see that happening in that story and I think you did it pretty well. Kudos for you.

>>12774201277420 Never in all my time writing have I ever tried writing a cute fic before, so I decided to give it a shot. Filly Rainbow Dash seemed like the perfect target.

Like you said, a little short, but I like how it turned out.

I give my own story an 8/10.

Hey it worked so I give you props for it.

You sir, wrote an excellent piece of work.

Have a mustache

Add two words to this. You must, you must! YOU MUST!

Wow. Short and sweet. Can't believe I actually liked it.

I d'aawd

This is so cute. I love it.

that is so cute i loved it

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I don't usually read fics with humans in them but this on was nicely done!

It'd be great if there was a sequel of some sort!

Pls make more of these cute stories, they are awesome!

This is a great piece of work.

Have another mustache.

Offically Carnage Approved!

Excellent story, nice one!

-Mr. Carnage

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To be honest, I didn't care for this story. I thought that the "cuteness" felt forced to me. But, I guess you can keep writing like this, because it seems like a lot of people like it.

>>12792081279208 Thanks, I DO like mustaches :D

>>12792251279225 I must, I must, I MUST!.....Must what? Write a sequel?

>>12792401279240 Hey, I'm not complaining that you liked it!

>>12792491279249 Be careful, man! Too much D'aaaawing could make your heart explode!

>>12792511279251 Love to hear it.

>>12792521279252 Not sure what I'd do with a sequel, but I'll toss some ideas around. Thank you for the comment though!

>>12792581279258 I'd hate to burn through them so quickly, but I'll make a few more eventually.

>>12792891279289 Woooooo! More mustaches!

>>12793921279392 Thank you! And awesome icons!

>>12793961279396 Thank you for taking the time to leave feedback, it really helps me as an author. I'll keep that in mind for the next one.

this'll be in the feature box in... a few moments.

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eheh. it's already in the Popular Stories bar. :)

>>12795181279518

No, adding the two words was more than enough.

wow this was great, a breath of fresh air in short one shots.

I read the comments first, but that just built up my expectations a tad. Still very cute and good, because who wouldn't want a filly Rainbow Dash to hug at night?

Although, I may have preferred it in first person rather than second, for in second I feel less attached than in the other persons, if that makes any sense...

Anyway, yes... Well done!

(Also, I am pleased by the word count.)

>>12793921279392 Mr. Carnage? The one who solved the case of the serial killer in equestria!?

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>>12798621279862

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>>12798651279865

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Aww, that was adorable. Have a star.

SOOOO CUTE!!!!

*Squee*

Well, this is something I've never seen before. Though short, it looks daftly cute

+1

>>12798771279877 Really? I dont see your name on the favourites list so u might want to check that my friend.

>>12795271279527 Oh, I don't know if this'll make the features box, but if it does I'll be SO happy. :D

>>12795761279576 I appreciate the positive feedback. Have a Twilight.

>>12797941279794 I'm actually shocked (and overjoyed) at the positive comments. And thank you for being one of them.

Stupid wish fuflment story not cute, not sad, not anything good about this, oh and if anyone thinks this is trolling this is something called criticism. Ever heard of it?

Buddy, I am very proud of you for being featured.

Do you have a Doctorite in making cute stories? Because you might need to be a Doctorite at being a ductor if you want to save the incoming swarm of diabeties you have given the world.

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Is too cute.

>>12799051279905 Oh... That may be why I have not noticed any new chapter's... HERP DERP!

Oh my Luna, The D'awwww Levels are of the charts.

SO CUTE

OMFG!!! You made be die of D'AWWWWWW

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You forgot the OC tag.

>>12800281280028 There is no OC....the person is YOU.

Cute: Definetly

Short: Unfortunetly

Referance to My Little Dashy: Expanentially so

A decent read, i enjoyed it.

Rainbow Dash is now best pony

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I wub this so much. So berry much.

>>12799331279933

What the hell do you think is 'cute' then?

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>>12801511280151 Furry kittens and cats

I expected this to be one of those cheap 'cute just for the sake of being cute' fics. And it was, but in this case it was well written enough that I didn't mind at all.

Loved the MLD reference.

Loved it absolutely!

This earns the Changeling seal of approval

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Fave , like,and watch for you

Yes! Finally, some innocence and cuteness that doesn't involve sex! Some real, pure cuteness with no lust involved! Thumbs up and more, I give you all my respect and praise for this fine piece of work

Rainbow's face when she told him about the "dream"

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Oh my god so many feels ;_;

Aye, this story makes even the most manly man feel warm and fuzzy inside.

The Great and Powerful Madara Approves of such CUTENESS!!!  

Have an

OFFICIAL SEAL OF APPROVAL

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Words can't help me express my feelings about this, but memes can!

Aww. I thought you meant her future self and her past self.

Would've been adorable.

c- rate? Sure!

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>>12774601277460 You just did something that is bad luck: You rated your own story. Anyway, this story had some elements that needed some work. Like more fill and so on. I will give you 7/10 in the rating totally.

6/10 in originally

5/10 in fill

8/10 in total enjoyment

9/10 in grammar

That's all.

Pretty good. I've read cuter, but this is nice. Have a mustache:

Me mother fucking gusta mother fuckerz

Your wordcount has amused me.

Huehuehuehue.

Those feels you get when it hits you that you'll never get to cuddle with a filly rainbow.

This story was sooooo adorable!  You are a great writer, and Rainbow Dash is best pony and I think cuddling ponies is  awesome so... I loved it!

Keep up the amazing work!

good sir you just earned your self a fav and a watch also i give it a 8 out of ten

There simply aren't enough stories like this. I love this one. LOVE IT! Thanks for a great read.

When do I expect the foal? And who is gonna be the fAther?

My heart exploded.

I give you X infinity

Aww... Cute!

...

And a little pointless, but who cares?

Aw that was to cute it has entered my favorites

Cant believe this is in the feature bar...... *sigh*

Guh....so....sweet....need my insulin....

*rams syringe into shoulder*

Phew, better, this story hit me worse than one of Pinkie's cakes, and that's saying something. My heart literally melted while reading this. have five mustaches for your work, and while I'm at it, two yays.

If I hadn't read My Little Dashie it may have not been as adorable as it was although I almost cried reading it

A cute little idea :3 Was wondering when I'd see that picture turn into a fanfiction. Pretty decent.

/)^3^(\

Ohmaigosh!

>>12799331279933 >>12807071280707 while I don't like what you're saying, I'll defend to the death your right to say it. If you don't like it, that's fine. NO one story can be right for everyone, even if I wish it was.

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWW! MY HEART! (drops dead)

5/5! Excellent, cute read! I loved it, but now I want a little Dashie to snuggle. :(

>>12807071280707

Wow. I love how you criticize him, but then go on and further express distaste in the fact that it was featured. Do you personally have anything against the author? If not, then please, do not be rude with zero justification.

>>12807511280751 Yes its called a opinion and im glad your smart enough to realise this.

This cute goes up to eleven

There has got to be some kind of times 5 like button on here, because that is just cute.

I think I got type 9,000 diabetes while reading this. Have 10 moustaches, and internet, a fuck, and some stock film of woman applauding as a gift for making me D'AAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWW that much.

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Daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaasaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwww

I usually don't like stories, or even read them, when the reader is suppose to be in the story, but this was very cute....I like this story.

From a critical point of view, it could have had more cute in it....so I'd rate it 9 out of 10....though I'm being bias as I think Rainbow is best pony.....and Filly Rainbow is better than best pony.....so cute...

Anyway, good work, Thumbs upped and Favorited.

Short. Sweet. Straight to the point. And above all else ADORABLE!!

>>12807591280759 I did not once insault the author i said i cant believe this is in the feature bar get the facts straight. Also i can display distaste for it its called rights dont get buthurt.

So you want me to crate this?

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Here you go.

>>12799331279933

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>>12799331279933   What's wrong with writing a story about fulfilling a wish, and then sharing it with everyone else who have the same wish? If you didn't like it, why did you keep reading it, and leave a comment. I think you just wanted to get a reaction out writer, and the readers. Looking for attention good sir, or jealousy?

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>>12808321280832 critics gonna criticise

>>12807911280791 Allow me to rephrase what I had stated before, as you didn't seem to get the point.

Wow. I love how you criticize him, but then go on and further express distaste in the fact that it was featured. Do you personally have anything against the author? If not, then please, do not be rude with zero justification.

You were being rude with zero justification. I never said you had insulted the author, but was it worth mentioning that you:

Cant believe this is in the feature bar...... *sigh*

Really? Really? I am not butthurt*, I am merely pointing out that your behavior in this comment section has been less than professional, and has been extremely rude. Also, while I defend the right to Freedom of Speech, I do not defend the right to Mindless and Rude Commenting. You could have left your comment of how you didn't enjoy the story, then that would be off the to-do list, but you went out of your way to state that it didn't deserve the reception it got.

>>12808461280846

True my sir. It is a foreign idea to have a person writing so simply. I like it as a fealty to the show rather than the story, it's way too short for my attention span, as I scroll right through it speed reading.

>>12808481280848 Please, no fighting on my story. Just take solace in the fact that he's missing out :D

>>12808391280839  

Looking for attention good sir, or jealousy?

You were being rude with zero justification.

but you went out of your way to state that it didn't deserve the reception it got.

>>12808751280875 I suppose so

*First thought*

This would be a great deleted-scene-like part of the My Little Dashie story.

I just want to hug a real Rainbow Dash SOOOO BAAAAD!

Until I'M 20% COOLER!

Great story, great grammar, great overall.

9/10

My little Dashie reference. Awesome! 1/1

So overall. 10/10 :) good job.

>>12809011280901

Well I can see where you're coming from and I certainly understand your distaste for such one shot stories to get so much praise. Hell I'm somewhat bitter about it myself.

Perhaps we should all agree to disagree, yes?

While I myself may like this, I do kinda feel that maybe it's a stretch for it to be featured and I most certainly can appreciate your ability to be outright blunt about the subject.

Either way sir. stand by your ability to show distaste in this story as well as I defend this story's existence.

Some things deserve praise where some don't. That's my opinion on the subject.  

A nice little, well-written one-shot. I applaud you, author.

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>>12809791280979 And thank you for realiseing its my opinion Just that and not saying im "insaulting" the author or go as far to say im "Jelous"....... What they dont understand is that i was asking how THIS story can get feature. Plus it was more a question i was asking myself not to be answered And thank you for being smart on the internet.

Hell yeah to this story.... IT'S WHAT I'VE ALWAYS WANTED!

Wait a second! Your not fluttershy!!!!

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Well, this was a cute, adorable filly RD story.  Snuggling is good, and it's short and sweet.

I have really only one criticism:  this isn't Rainbow Dash.  She doesn't act like this.  She's brash, rude, and insensitive.  To quote RD herself:  "Cutesy?  Wutesy?  Have you even met me?"

Now, Fluttershy, on the other hand...

Cute.  Have a pinky.

I never thought that it was possible to get diabetus from a story......

>>12811351281135 that's why I alluded the growing up part. She hasn't experienced the things that make her her yet.

Although I admit it IS a little too cutesy for RD...but what the hay!

I think this is pretty well written for a simplistic one shot. Very very cute, and as others stated, cant help but be reminded of My Little Dashie on this one.

Double staches.