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English is not my native language, but i hope it's readable and you guys will enjoy it if not i'm sorry about that. i'll appriciate any comment.
Dash meets a new arrival to the town who have some unusual wings and she will get to know the story behind it.
Not the best title and description. :/
Hey, if you want any help with all of the phrasing or stuff, you could always get somebody to edit your work after you write it.
Just join a "New Writer" or "In need of Editor" group... you could also just shoot someone a private message and ask them to proofread. These look like really interesting stories, and it sounds like you have great ideas 
but are not able to portray them how you want to in english.
I really like the ideas, and hope you can succeed! 
Two stories? By the same author? IN A ROW?
1) You have a lot of the same formatting issues in this one as you did in the last (or next? I guess the other was published second). "Quote marks" are for spoken words, italics are for thoughts. That's the typical formatting for English fiction.
2) Dash's instant attraction to Sky is a bit obnoxious. Real relationships take time to build.
3) Pacing. Slow down and build the world and its characters.
Hope this helps!
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