Great job! I really like it so far.

>>12618901261890

Thanks. I'll be working on Chapter 2 soon.

Cover art ...

... That's Wooden Toaster.

So, remind me again Tehluna, why did you think this was fanfic worthy? Yeah, I get the fact that this is incomplete, but I think everyone here will know how this turns out. So tell me again, why did you think it was worthy? Especially when there are already more than a hundred of these types of fics alone?

>>12632241263224 Ouch

Sun-

Brain broke, gimme a sec. Is his special talent a plot twist?

>>12633381263338

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Well written. However, I don't think Twilight would just bring some unknown pony into her house and let his sleep in her room, she's nice but not that nice.

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No.

Interesting...I came here expecting a total train wreck, but this was actually pretty good. The formatting is easy on the eyes, and your OC isn't a total mary sue. One point of contention though: since when does twilight take random ass ponies into her home and let them sleep in her bed? She even said she had a guest bed, so why wouldn't she have Sun sleep there? As arandompenguin said, she's nice...but not that nice. Other than that this is a decent story imo, so I shall track it and see what happens.

Thanks for the feedback guys. I'll be sure to make some tweaks & revisions.

>>12631781263178 I didn't mean for it to appear like Glaze, and I know it does look like him. I'll be getting a new picture done soon by someone on deviantArt.

>>12632241263224

That's what plot twists are for.

>>12647141264714 This has about as much plot potential as a Pig has to get a GED and graduate from college.

>>12647311264731

I'll say it again... It's incomplete, and the plot isn't at all going where you think it is. Oops, spoiler alert.

>>12647071264707

oh, just wondering.

>>12647311264731

It's on par with the fics you write,  so I don't see why you're complaining.

>>12682771268277 Oh that's rich. Come back when you've written a really good sad story that makes people cry. THEN maybe you'll have some weight behind those words.