Rarity has decided to finally tackle her problems with obsessive compulsiveness, and at the same time is working on a project to expand her boutique.
Why is there a dark tag?
>>12582371258237 Well that's a shame. Murder for the sake of murder isn't really my thing. Here I was hoping for something cute, silly, and a tad sol perhaps.
I just realized, after having read this before it was put in this site that spike could've saved himself easy with his letter sending fire. Still a good story though.
Yes, this was brought up several times, and the counterargument is that the fire spell arguably doesn't work on notebooks. Plus there's the internal dialogue of a Spike who's not thinking quite rationally that even if he did send a message Celestia could not save him in time.
Fire only working on specific paper is a nice idea
>>12584521258452 Me to oh well maybe the next one.
Good to see this on here
Hmm.......... I will pass negative judgment first. I didn't like this story, I didn't hate it though. I just wasn't enthused by the story it self.
Now the good stuff. I think this was a well thought in using OCD as a catalyst for Ms. Rarity to snap and Sweetie Bell's antics to send her over the edge.
All in all it was a good story (even though it didn't tickle me personally) with only a few spelling errors. I look forward to checking out more of your work
Keep at it!
Not what I expected from Rarity! lol
Very good so far.
WOW! Some excellent writting in Chapter two!
First off, not only have you made the story quite gripping and suspensful, but also quite realistic. You seem to have a strong understanding of both logical thinking and investigative technique. Kudos to you on this!
Second, I feel you have Twilight nailed down perfectly. To me, it feels just like her.
I do have to add that the psychosis which you have inflicted upon Rarity is also done very well. I am thoroughly impressed with how well you have done in just two chapters.
YOU KILLED TWILIGHT!!!
On to the last chapter!
All in all, I found this one to be an outstanding story. In my opinion, you have captured the characters perfectly, and I was on the edge of my seat the whole time. If this is typical of your writing, then I know that I will thoroughly enjoy the other stories that you have given to us.
Thank you for this excellent story.
x10 out of