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  • E Dinky's First Kill

    Like every little filly, Dinky loves everypony and everything... except spiders.
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  • E Dance 'Til We're High

    Twilight looks for love at the Winter's Eve Ball. What she finds is like nothing she expected.
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  • E Whisk

    A colt and his fathers move to Ponyville to start a new life.
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  • T Epic Unicorn History: The Beards of Harmony

    Barely three years old, the fledgling nation of Equestria is threatened by chaos foretold in a dream. It's up to Star Swirl and five erstwhile, beardy stallions to brave the Forest Ever Free in search of their only salvation.
    30,755 words · 2,197 views  ·  228  ·  5
  • E A Lovely Apology

    Spitfire decides to make up for an embarrassing mistake by inviting Filthy Rich out for a night on the town.
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  • E The Sun Shines Brightest at Night

    Nightmare Moon's defeat meant more to Equestria than just the return of the sun and their Princess. Witness the conclusion of a story one thousand years in the making, through the eyes of a Hoofington nurse.
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  • T Laugh, Laugh

    Though she admired him, Pinkie Pie was never close to Ponyacci. She wasn't expecting him to call her to visit. She really wasn't expecting to find him like this...
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  • E Treehouse

    She stumbles into the Whitetail Woods one last time, to finish what she'd started so many years before...
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  • Friday
    And one more for good measure!

    Y'know, for someone who doesn't like Halloween much, I sure am having a good day. :D I knew about this one ahead of time, but that doesn't make it any less awesome!


    Scribbler actually asked me to record a little thing about why I wrote Faun, so there's that too!

    4 comments · 39 views
  • Friday
    State of the writer, October 2014

    First, cool stuff. Fall Down got a reading by Cherax!


    This is awesome for two reasons. First, because, hey, audiobook of my work, that is always cool! :D Second, because Cherax wrote Cerulean, which I did a reading of, and which was also a big influence on Fall Down. So it's like this awesome, incestuous circlejerk ouroboros of fic reading and writing and I love it.

    (Allow me a moment to be conceited: I think Fall Down is one of the best things I've ever written. Yeah, I've been hard on it in the past, and even listening to it now, I can see tons of places where I could have added more or used a different phrasing or something. But the fact is, it's really a case of succeeding at doing the wrong thing, and I think I succeeded quite a bit. I can definitely see where I was pushing myself as a writer, and I vow to continue to do that while writing serious stuff, at least.)

    So, what's new on the writing circuit? The Loneliest Laundromat was a decent hit, which pleases me. :) Some folks got the jokes without needing them to be explained, which also pleases me. And according to Csquared08, it was "actually not just a super dumb crackfic." I win!

    (Huh. Looking at the stories page, the one that you get for editing stuff, they've moved unsubmitted fics to their own spot at the top. I'm not liking this. :| Though I can see why it was done. It may be time to retire the Fic That Shall Not Be Named forever.)

    Other than the writeoff, which I can't even remember what my entry was, I haven't done a whole lot of writing this month. I've gone to two job fairs in as many weeks, I'm talking with employers for possible interviews (don't get exciting, I have it on good authority that this company is actually a pyramid scheme, just my luck), some music mag on Tumblr noticed my reviews and has been talking with me, and oh yeah, I'm going in for a medical procedure on the 17th, so life has been hectic. @_@ I usually go out food shopping with my parents on Fridays, but decided to stay home today so I could write, that's how bad things have been.

    And on that note...

    Funny story. I totally sat down Monday to finish off the draft of Epic Unicorn History 4, which I wanted to get done by the end of the month, when a fugue overtook me. I don't remember everything that happened, but it involved syrup and being upside-down and there were a lot of people laughing at me. Long story short, I wrote something else and you won't find out what until tomorrow. :B Maybe. Doubtless you will be disappointed in me, but that's okay, I'm doing it for the lulz. (That's a good thing, right?)

    (Actually I'm not even all that mad at myself, given that November will mark a year since the last installment of The Elements of Awesomery. :( )

    Oh, and Laugh, Laugh suddenly showed up in my top fics sidebar at #7. Surprise! (I miss having 10 stories there though. ;_;)

    What lies in store? Well, my goal is now to finish the draft of EUH4 next month. Hopefully next week. While my #NoContests promise hasn't really gotten me to write more (okay, it has some, there were some interesting contests over the last two months that I passed by) and I've kind of broken it this week, I had plans to continue it one more month in the name of getting shit done. And I can totally get this shit done, I swear. D: God, I can't wait to finish this story so I can never write anything ever again. By which I mean not publish until a story is at least fully drafted, which will likely mean really low outputs for the near future. :B And on that note, my newest "huge fic that I will never write" idea is a two-book shipping adventure that starts with DashBlaze and ends in the Dazzlings coming back to Equestria along with the humane five and Sunset Shimmer to try and break Star Swirl's enchantment. I'll never write it though. :V Probably.

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  • Thursday
    Fic recs, October 30th

    Hot dang, I love that there's a "new blog post" button in the drop-down now. Also, newer, easier-to-use story tagging system! :D

    Things will be slow for a bit as I’m currently a third of the way into an audiobook of The Celestia Code, which will be my next vs. post. Unless, y’know, I read something else first. (I have a couple shorter ones lined up.) The upside is, my dad’s finally recovered from his heart surgery and will be going back to work, which means mornings are mine again! That means more time to listen to stuff, is what I’m saying. :B Also, when I said I wasn't doing Halloween recs this year, I meant it. Hope no one's disappointed.

    H: 1 R: 2 C: 2 V: 0 N: 0

    The Life and Death of April Fool by Prak

    Genre: Surreal Comedy

    A little filly named April Fool comes out from under a rock in the Everfree Forest once a year to play with the foals in the nearby town. This is a magnificently charming comedy, moving from whimsical fairy tale to bizarre random fic at the drop of a hat and without ever feeling disjointed. That is the biggest “thing done right” in this piece. I’m kind of amazed at how much comedy is packed into this, given that the fairy tale and nursery rhyme motifs are front and center. The twist at the end is the kind you’ll never see coming, but which makes perfect sense in hindsight. Definitely give this a read if you’re looking for something upbeat and cheerful (yes, in spite of “death” in the title, there is no darkness here) with maybe a bit of whimsy and carnival in addition.

    Recommended

    Sacrifice by Mystic

    Genre: Low Fantasy

    Two pegasus knights climb a mountain, hoping to slay a dragon. This isn’t very pony, set as it is pre-Unification, and it’s rather telly, but man, it’s kinda cool. The dynamic between the two characters is compelling, and there’s a lot of little hints of world-building around the edges that really caught my attention. Plus, the fight against the dragon is a lot of fun. The ending is pretty well foreshadowed, so it likely won’t catch you by surprise, but if you ever wanted a tale of pony knights doing knightly things, check this out.

    Recommended If You Don’t Mind Telling

    Breaking the News by horizon

    Genre: Comedy

    Oh yeah, horizon’s got a writeoff compilation too, so expect lots of him in the future. :B This has a great premise: how do you manage a disaster when they're all planned? Given the ponies’ control over weather, this seems a natural thing to consider, and the journalistic style makes this a hilarious read. This is absolutely brilliant, and its shortness means it doesn’t stretch out its central joke more than necessary.

    Recommended

    Sugar, Cubed by BlazzingInferno

    Genre: Slice of Life

    This story is a giant middle finger to anyone who took “Don’t use your fancy mathematics to muddle the issue” to mean “Applejack is terrible at math”. Here, we see just what math means to her, both in the present and the past. Despite the Sad tag, the emotional overtones are subtle, and the result of the contest deftly avoids either of two poor outcomes. My only real complaint about this piece is the use of the title; it’s extremely cheesy, specifically as it appears in chapter 3. Still, the writing is good, and this is a very unique look at Applejack.

    Highly Recommended

    Sonata Grabs Twilight’s Peaches by Admiral Biscuit

    Sequel to Twilight Eats Sonata’s Taco

    Genre: Crackfic

    Oh dear, we’ve crossed the memes. Never cross the memes! Anyway, all you have to know about the prequel to approach this story is that Twilight Sparkle ate a taco that was Sonata’s and it wasn’t sexual in the least. I find I like this story more, for a couple of reasons. First, while it’s mostly just an excuse to again have a silly sexual title, the characters feel a little more real and the situation is less far-fetched. The inherent ridiculousness is left to hang in the air while the characters move on with the story, rather than the setup. Second, it’s mostly just the Dazzlings arguing, and that’s always fun. Third, the touted locker room scene just barely passes muster by leaving all the true details to the imagination. And fourth, the ending has quite a twist to it. I hope we get more in this series.

    Recommended for Sonata Fans

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  • Sunday
    Fic recs, October 26th

    Man, do you realize Leap of Faith is a look at how scammers play on the fears of the elderly? Heavy.

    Griffin from City of Doors has started posting redirects to his blog on his Fimfic account, along with rewrites of old reviews! So if you didn’t have a way to follow his site, now you can be one click away by following him here!

    Have today’s Sonata dose.

    This is another monster review blog because I wanted to get one story out from each of the collections I’m now trying to get through. Expect lots of Cold in Gardez, Esle Ynopemos, Benman, Chris and Pascoite in the future!

    H: 0 R: 7 C: 10 V: 1 N: 0

    I’m Afraid of Changeling by Cold in Gardez

    Genre: Comedy

    We kick off the story collections with a short piece about a changeling going to a psychiatrist. What a comedy this is! The centerpiece is the psychiatrist, who remains unflappable and entirely professional while his client does very changeling-like things. There’s a lot of great wordplay in this, and the punchline is fantastic. For feeling shorter than it is, it manages to pack in a lot of laughs.

    Recommended

    A Night in the Barn by Esle Ynopemos

    Genre: Sad

    Granny Smith can’t sleep one night, which ends up being rather fateful. Honestly, I’d hate to think what would’ve happened if she hadn’t been up to see Applejack leave the house. This is a pretty solid little piece, giving us some nice background on Granny and approaching Applejack’s reaction to the loss of her parents in an original way. Definitely check this out if you’re into stories about that.

    Recommended

    One Giant Leap by Benman

    Sequel to One Small Step

    Genre: Politics

    Princess Luna seeks to reclaim her role as Princess of Equestria starting with a few titles, including... Captain of the Wonderbolts? I was kind of hesitant to get into Ben’s collection, because so many of the stories are abandoned, but despite being marked so, and being a sequel to a story of his I haven’t read yet, this stands on its own remarkably well. It comes in two parts, first Celestia and Luna playing Go and discussing Luna’s plans, then Luna and Spitfire racing for control of the Wonderbolts. It’s obvious that there’s room for continuation, but I was satisfied by the ending, not to mention it’s pretty funny. As for connections to One Small Step, all I saw was a mention of Luna’s assistant Lodestar, who I’ve seen in other stories of Ben’s, so I wasn't bothered by it and now you know enough to deal with her yourself. This is a good followup to Luna Eclipsed, and it’s well-written to boot.

    Recommended

    Doppelganger by obabscribbler

    Genre: Comedy

    Rarity takes over for Vinyl Scratch. The whole situation is as well-explained as it is far-fetched. My only complaint is that this is all setup with no denouement; I wanna know how the show goes! Still, if you ever wanted to see two characters interacting who normally never would, this is your chance.

    Recommended as Light Reading

    Dream Pony by Dimondium

    Genre: Shipping

    Pinkie recounts her relationship with Twilight. This is pretty average as shipping goes: Pinkie likes Twilight, finally works up the courage to tell her, and finds out Twilight secretly liked her back. The draw is the follow-through and the voicing. I started off feeling like this was too serious to be Pinkie, but in short order the narrative really takes a turn for her style, and the serious bits are understandably mixed into that. As for the follow-through, we don’t see much of the courtship, but this goes into the wedding, and them dealing with other life issues: losing friends, relationship troubles. That said, it is all told, so YMMV.

    Recommended for Shippers Only

    One Day in the Crystal Library by FanOfMostEverything

    Genre: World-Building

    The last three collections are (mostly) writeoff-based, and rather than read and review the literal dozens of entries for my writeoff edition, Imma just do ‘em with these guys. This one deals with Sombra and Cadence before all that “taking over the Crystal Empire” business. The ending scene feels rushed, but otherwise this posits a scenario that is both believable and interesting. I do wish a little more had been done with it.

    Recommended If You Like World-Building Vignettes

    Of Course, You Realize… by Chris

    Genre: Comedy

    Rarity and Rainbow Dash play War; it doesn’t end well. This is maybe the definition of “just enough” as stories go: at not even 300 words, it's sufficient to get the scene established and lay out the punchline. I will make some bones about Rarity’s behavior, but it’s kind of worth it given that it's Rainbow Dash falling for it. Reading this won’t put a dent in your day, anyway.

    Recommended as Light Reading

    Sweet Temptation by Pascoite

    Genre: Comedy

    Dinky Doo is taunted by a muffin. This is mostly light comedy for the sake of cuteness, but it takes a bit of a turn when Derpy Ditzy shows up. Also, there’s something truly amazing about Dinky saying “By Celestia, I’ll unmake you!” There’s a good balance of adorable and super-serious meant for comedic effect, but I can see a few places where word choices could have been improved. Granted, that’s comparing something two years old to the author’s current works; had anyone else written this, I might not have even noticed. Definitely worth it if you’re into cute stuff, especially as it doesn’t go overboard.

    Recommended

    From a Filly on a Hill by littlerobotbird

    Genre: Slice of Life

    This is written very strangely, making it hard to suss out what’s going on. What I think it is is Dinky recounting a time she lay out on a hill after either a fight with her mother over having gotten into a fight at school (likely started by Dinky trying to protect her), or that fight itself. There are concrete things I can point to, like the tense shifts and certain spots where repetition doesn’t work, that are definite errors. And then the perspective starts getting all wonky toward the end, and the overall effect is simply confusing. I’m not sure what the purpose was of writing the story this way. (Up until the very end, I thought the narrator might be the spirit of Dinky’s departed father, watching over her.) I’m just baffled by it.

    Vaguely Recommended

    Trixie’s Favourite Pony by Blueshift

    Reading by Sleipniiir that I am not linking to because the cover image is kinda NSFW

    Genre: Crackfic

    Trixie finally works up the courage to tell her favorite pony she loves her. This is an extraordinarily silly (and old) piece, written by the master of silliness himself. The central joke is amusing, things ramp up nicely, and it’s no longer than it needs to be. If you want Trixie silliness, look no further.

    Recommended If You Like Silly Things

    Scent by DegeTheMighty

    Reading by Scribbler, et. al.

    Genre: Horror

    After Ponyville’s first Nightmare Night celebration featuring Princess Luna, Big Macintosh goes in search of his missing little sister, all the while aware of an unfamiliar scent in the air. This does at least one thing majorly right, which is using an unusual sense to instill foreboding over the narrative. And “foreboding” is the right word, for that’s what I was filled with by the end. I was waiting for the proverbial skeleton to jump out, but this story doesn’t bother with trying to explain itself. I however was intrigued and wanted to know what the heck was going on. The answer is in the comments, but I’ll say this much: the one thing missing is an indication that the scent is a signifier in the first place. Once you know that, it’s just a matter of piecing together the fridge horror yourself, spoiler comments or no. Going through the story myself, I wasn’t quite looking at it from the right angle to get the full effect, and that’s fine, because I did at least get something out of this. If you’re looking for a spooky scare this Halloween, check this one out! (And if it spoops you too much, check out the parody in the comments.)

    Recommended for Horror Fans

    Rainbooms and Marshmallows by electreXcessive

    Reading by Doctor Cobra

    Mature: Sex

    Genre: Clopfic

    Rainbow Dash visits Rarity, her self-esteem crushed after her encounter with Prince Blueblood, and cheers her up with sex. I’ll hand it to the author, the intro to this is pretty well-crafted, though it also contains my major issue with the piece. Rarity is clearly shown to be in the throes of self-doubt, her self-worth entirely nil. So is it okay that she has sex with the first pony to compliment her, genuine compliments or not? Beyond that, this has some weird issues with POV and cheesy dialogue. Face it, if you’re coming at this story for anything but the clop watch out for the fisting, you’re doing it wrong.

    Recommended for Cloppers Only

    The Words Won’t Come by True Blue Spark

    Reading by Hero541

    Genre: Shipping

    Fluttershy tries to work up the courage to tell Applejack how she feels about her. At its core, this is pretty much every shipfic with Fluttershy on the attack. In true anime style, she “accidentally” cooks too much food, invites AJ out for a picnic, and then tries her damnedest to say the words she wants to. In true February fic form (I think; it’s been a while since I used that term), she starts out already liking AJ, and they end up practically married by day’s end. Non-shippers will definitely want to skip this, but if you like shipping — and this is one of my favorite pairings, I should add — this is fluffy and cute and features a great cameo by Apple Bloom.

    Recommended for Shippers Only

    Maud’s River by ArtichokeLust

    Reading by Akash the Reader

    Genre: Character Study

    Maud’s reaction to Pinkie’s first party. As character pieces go, this is quite good. Maud’s voice subsumes the narrative, and it makes a good case for her having some kind of mental issue. (Not autism, though, she’s too good with metaphors. If anything, her inability to understand the actions and emotions of others sounds more like sociopathy, at least in this story.) It’s also a very admirable and believable effort to reconcile season four canon with season one. (Remember that period of time between Pinkie Pride and Maud Pie where the question on everyone’s mind was “Who is the third sister?”) Though I will say that adding in Maud finding Boulder was a bit of an overreach, but probably the only issue I have with this. I’m just glad someone not only tried to do this, but got it right.

    Recommended

    The Brief Reign of Princess Twily by Forthwith

    Reading by Dr. Wolf

    Genre: Comedy

    Wanting to give Celestia a day off, Twilight Sparkle finds a loophole in Equestrian law that will allow her to do just that. Hopefully. This story has a “Lesson Zero but not terrible” vibe to it. (The scene when Twilight is contemplating ways to cause a national crisis got me worried, but the execution pays off.) It’s a really fun piece, even if it drags just a bit in the middle. We get to see both Twilight and Shining Armor as kids in the palace, and Celestia having a little fun at Twilight’s expense. Plus, filly Twilight as a cranky tyrant is just lots of fun. Also, there’s plenty of Cakelestia. If you missed this back when it was in the featured box, now’s the time to check it out!

    Recommended

    PETAshy by Chelis

    Genre: Crackfic

    Fluttershy ends up as part of an animal liberation raid on a facility, coordinated by the Eco Kids from school. What strikes me about this is how she gets involved in this: she’s got a crush on the kid with the green dreadlocks, if you remember him, and what she thinks is going to be a midnight tryst ends up being, well, this. That’s hilarious. That said, the ending is played rather straight, so this isn’t quite as funny as it could be. This is in major need of proofreading, with colon misuse and “they” instead of “the” all over the place, but if you’re here for lols, you’re probably not going to care much.

    Recommended If You Like Silly EQG Stuff

    Bad Sonata! by Syeekoh

    Genre: Crackfic

    The Dazzlings accidentally meet up with Twilight and Sunset at Donut Joe’s after their defeat, where a horrible truth comes to light. This story is kind of amazing for a number of reasons. First, it shows the Dazzlings post-defeat as actually caring about one another, Adagio for Sonata in particular. That’s definitely not how the trope has been going lately. Second, Sonata has a “stupid attack”. Third, it balls up a bunch of EQG-related fanon into a single explanation that manages to be the most Cards Against Humanity-style hilarious thing ever. And then we learn about the power of forgiveness. This is pretty good, but be warned, it does take a turn.

    Recommended for Terrible People

    Hooves of Clay by iisaw

    Genre: Political

    Twilight attacks Lyra in broad daylight, revealing her as a changeling, then vows to do something about them. It doesn't turn out well. I have my misgivings about this story, and though it tackles most of them during its course, the primary one remains: I can’t imagine Twilight getting that angry. I mean, we’ve seen her that angry, two seasons after this story was written, but problems of using later show canon for critique aside, it took a clear and present threat to all five of her friends, the princesses, and Discord before she acted on her emotions. Still, this ends up being more about Luna, and Twilight bonding with Luna, and the state of modern American politics than anything. Yeah, that last one’s totally in there. This gets maybe a little tangled up in the allegory, focusing on it more than is necessary, but I nevertheless appreciated it, and that it ends on a positive note. Given how things stand at the start of the second chapter — from where most of my misgivings stemmed — I was expecting another The Hanging of Twilight Sparkle. It’s just a matter of getting everyone to calm down so they can talk things out like rational ponies, after which they don’t seem to be so out of character. And Twilight learns a letter about politics. Definitely a worth read, as it left me with a lot to chew on.

    Recommended

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  • 6d, 15h
    If you liked Awful Rumors...

    And you're also into creepypastas or just the SCP Foundation in general, check out my newest skip, SCP-2080, which is based on a similar idea. That's kind of not a coincidence. (Also neither it nor its companion tale explain what's happening in Awful Rumors. Just to be clear.)

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A mysterious machine appears in Ponyville. At first, it's a curiosity. After its purpose is discovered, however, it quickly becomes a menace and Twilight must figure out a way to destroy it before peaceful Ponyville is torn apart at the seams.

A crossover with Machine of Death intended for readers unfamiliar with the novel.

Published on EQD September 15, 2012. Cover art rendered by Alexstrazsa.

First Published
10th Sep 2012
Last Modified
10th Sep 2012
#1 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

*providesblood sample*

death by SnuSnu.


huh? wait.. what does that mean.. ohmygodno aaaahhhh!!!!!

#2 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

Hmm... Well it tells them how they die, it doesn't cause premature death, right? So maybe not so bad. OK, I'll read it.

#3 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

I assume Twilight's and Celestia's strips read "Act of Will" just based on the story title, but I was wondering what others' take on their fates was. Or is it clearer if you read the original story?

#4 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

interesting...

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#5 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1254548

You're correct about the first part, not sure what you mean about the second. Takes on their fates?

#6 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1254790

As in what they thought the strips said. Figured I might have missed something by not reading the original story

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#7 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1254829

Well, the 'original story' is actually a collection of short stories.

And the reactions are varied. I go into some of them in the text. That's kind of the whole point, actually.

#8 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

Good stuff. Written in a Mary Shelly/Bram Stoker style fitting of the subject matter.

#9 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

“ACT OF WILL"?

Do you actually have an explanation in your own mind as to what this means, or is it supposed to be vague but without true meaning?

Either way, this was great! It's time for me to look up the original stories, because this is such a great concept. Awesome job here! :twilightsmile:

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#10 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1255296

There's a meaning behind it. Just think about what it pertains to. :)

#11 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1255654

Okay, I do understand what you're getting at, I think...

...But I prefer to think of it as, say, Twilight willfully acts to save a town of ponies in a dragon attack or something. :scootangel:

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#12 · 111w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

>>1255714

Machine predictions are finicky things. That's not what I intended, but I like the interpretation. :)

#13 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1255746

Your interpretation does sound like a very Celestia-ish thing to do, if you imagined a future where ponies are extinct and Celestia (and Luna, maybe) are the only ones left. But the way I personally interpret Twilight's personality...I just can't see it happening. So instead I'm going to say that they both got the same slip of paper, but they refer to very different deaths.

By the way, just bought the anthology for my Kindle. Thanks for introducing me to it!

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#14 · 111w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1255791

A benefit to writing crossovers. :)

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#15 · 111w, 2d ago · · ·

Dat cover image.

Nicely improved from when I checked it out on /fic/. Very cool stuff, PP -- I'll admit to liking this story more than one or two of the ones in the original collection.

I'm a Dinosaur Comics reader and unsuccessfully tried to write something for the second volume when submissions were open last year, so props for succeeding at writing another take on the concept. MLP certainly gives it an interesting flavour.

#16 · 111w, 2d ago · · ·

I haven't even started yet, but seriously, thank the lords of Kobol that someone gets that indents and paragraph spaces do not mix...

Back later!

*reads*

Right!

PP, that, was legendary. Sure, I get that the style may have been taken from other similar stories using the premise, but it's rare that I find short stories on here that actually achieve so much with so little. If I were to hold up an example of how to do a short story, this would be it as of today.

It's positively dripping with emotion, it's concise, it conjures vivid imagery. It gives the reader a sense of knowing what's going on (a much needed sense of attachment all too often missing from MLP fics), without them actually knowing anything truly relevant. It adds mystery, without the reader feeling cheated when it isn't resolved. It carries tension sublimely while never explaining a damn thing. And, of course, it carries an underlying observation on a very real issue of perceiving the value of life and death.

If I knew the alt-code for those little starts, I'd give you six on the spot.

Also, I hate you for knowing someone who does pony art. C'est la vie.

-Scott

P.S. You're getting a blog-post for this one PP!

#17 · 111w, 2d ago · · ·

Very well done and effective. I think that "ACT OF WILL" is one of the few things that I'd accept for a cause of Celestia's death, and it creates a lot of dramatic tension by foreshadowing an ominous  future. That it matches Twilight's own is even more tantalizing.

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#18 · 111w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1263434

This comment means a lot. I figure most people are not going to know about MoD in the first place. And yes, not all the actual stories are created equal. (In truth, I have not even gotten halfway through the first book. I wonder if I ever shall...)

>>1263454

Alex is awesome. :D He whipped this up for me in like an hour and a half, based off the actual cover art for MoD. (To wit, the only parts of the original left are the floor/skyline/sky, the X and the manhole.)

Most people tend to give out moustaches here, I've noticed. :B :moustache:

Wait, blog? :O Wut? Link me. If you've got a blog, I should know!

And thank you! :D

>>1264190

You've got the (intended) meaning down! :)

#19 · 111w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1266379 If there is one thing I definitely can't be accused of, it's being anything like 'most people'.  And no, just a regular blog post on here, i'm afraid. I don't think I'd have enough to say to run a real blog! Well, not enough that anyone would want to listen to anyway...

Maybe when i actually finish my story one day and actually start writing something else, it might become more worthwhile.

#20 · 111w, 4h ago · · ·

A wonderfully depressing story! Thank you for bringing Machine of Death to my attention: it seems very interesting!

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#21 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1276754

You're quite welcome!

#22 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

Zero feels, zero creepy feelings. Letters... why?

Bleh.

Loved the concept, but the execution did pretty much nothing for me. Sorry, Pres.

#23 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1280102

If you're interested in other stories with the same concept except told with humans: Link to Machine of Death pdf ebook

It's an actual book, it's free, and it is fantastic.

#24 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1254425 You shall be snu-snued by the most beautiful women. Then the large women. Then the petite women. Then the large women again.

#25 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1255654 They were killed by some guy named William?

#26 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

Now I want to read the book...

#27 · 110w, 6d ago · · ·

I got MoD on my kindle when it first came out, but I burnt myself out trying to read all those stories at once. This makes me want to go back to the book and read the rest. Or maybe even try my hand at a MoD story (though that's honestly unlikely).

I very much enjoyed the story and thought it was well executed.

As for Celestia and Twilight, my thought would be that they actually both have the same kind of death, and the machine isn't using it's... unique charm in this instance. It makes sense that imortal Celestia wouldn't die so much as she would simply choose to not live anymore (though the distinction is probably lost on the MoD, it is just a machine after all). As for our purple friend, Twilight-as-Celestia's-successor is a common enough trope that I'm guessing the same can be said of her.

#28 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1283560

That's kind of what I'd assumed as well. That 'ACT OF WILL' means it was either a form of suicide, or murder from a Higher Cause (IE, the Fausticorn/Scriptwriters).

Either that, or the minotaurs are a bigger menace than first thought.

#29 · 110w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Act of will...Action taken on purpose...Twilight and Celestia's death cards..

....Suicide? :rainbowhuh:

#30 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

I really wish I had heard of MoD before this, seems interesting.

Anyway, finally, a fic that's just the kind of fic I like! Short, concise, suspenseful, focusing on the emotions and reactions of characters in stressful and terrible situations, while giving just enough of a resolution so one doesn't feel cheated, while not so much that nothing at all is left to think about. Good job!

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#31 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1284487

Wow, thank you! This is precisely the sort of reaction I'd hoped for! :D

#32 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

*tests machine, gets slip of paper*  404...

:trollestia:

#33 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

I pretty much screamed in delight when I realized that this was about the Machine of Death. And I must say-- had this been one of those included in the anthology, it would have been one of the better ones. Very well done.

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#34 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1284982

Man, I'm so glad this is pulling folks out of the woodwork who actually know about MoD. :D

#35 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

I've actually started reading MoD because of this. It does not disappoint.

#36 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

Honestly, it rustled my jimmies. :fluttershyouch: It was so... freaky.

Very emotional and tense. I'm not necessarily the open ended type of guy, but this one got me thinking... real disturbing things. Definitely. :pinkiecrazy:

I love it. You did a good job.

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#37 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1285636

Thank you. These are all good feelings to have. :3 At least, from where I'm standing.

#38 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

Looks at linked PDF...

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[HIV INFECTION FROM MACHINE OF DEATH NEEDLE]

"Well," I thought, "that sucks"

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^ BEST STORY EVER!!! :rainbowlaugh::facehoof::trollestia:

You did a good job writing this. My jimmies... Dear Luna, they have been rustled!

#39 · 110w, 5d ago · 2 · 1 ·

I think we are all missing the point.  Twilight's card obviously means that she will be killed by Iron Will when he returns for revenge

#40 · 110w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Does Ryan North know about this?

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#41 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1287846

Do any crossover media or other IP creators ever know about fanfiction?

#42 · 110w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

>>1287893

Whups, I meant that like 'You should tell him about this, he seems like a cool guy who'd get a kick out of it', instead of 'I must inform him that someone has been STEALING HIS IDEAS'.

#43 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

You've got me downloading the original and ordering the book online. Congratultions.

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#44 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1287935

Well if anything, he can be happy with how many people have gotten interested in the book since I

>>1288167

THERE'S ANOTHER ONE :D

#45 · 110w, 5d ago · · ·

very thrilling. i found out about machine of death through this. I've been listening to the audiobook/podcast, and reading the .PDF form their website. needless to say, i'm hooked. i'm a junkie of psychological thrillers and this pushes all my buttons in just the right way. i'm probably going to buy the book as soon as i get some money. please, make more of these. or, if at all possible, maybe hold a pony MoD spin-off competition? i'd love to participate in something like that. if you do plan something like that, please let me know, you'll be making a stupid fat kid really happy.

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#46 · 110w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1289695

I've really got no desire to make more, expand this, or write sequels. I wanted an MLP/MoD crossover, so I made it, end of story.

#47 · 110w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1290712

i see. it's a shame, this is a really good story, and i'd love to see more from it. maybe i'll make my own crossover someday, and be called a an un-creative ripoff artist. lol :P

#48 · 110w, 3d ago · · ·

Oh, curse you and your ambiguity. I couldn't figure out what Twilight's slip said until I realized it (probably) is the title, and I went and looked up "act of will" to find out what it meant and it turns out to be the most vague idiom I could imagine.

The first thing it brought to mind though was suicide, since I think I'd heard the idiom used in that context, and if an act of will is an intentional action, then it would mean death would have to be intentional.

In any case, overanalysis aside, I loved this. Maybe I'll go and get Machine of Death now.

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#50 · 110w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1298996

:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

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