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The story read is written as if were for kindergartners, the content is not.
"So my little ponies, gather around and one of you may sit on my lap as I tell you the tale of the first black and red alicorn."
(Not to be taken seriously)
Pinkie Pie, did you like the fic too?
I SURE DID!
Reminds me of "The Ugly Duckling." Since the title is "The Ugly Alicorn it must be related in some way. "You whore!" Was the part where the father cussed at the mother duck (Maybe)
Anyway's good story! But I hated the part where he grew up all sad like Fluttershy 
But patrick is a pretty good narrator too!
Don't you agree?
in my books Morgan Freeman is the 2nd best narrator behind Brian Blessed speaking of which you can have a Brian Blessed!
"But where do black and red alicorns come from?!"
Image: http://i281.photobucket.com/albums/kk237/CoolYoyoddd/Reaction%20Shots/FryandHermesSalmon1.png"Nobody knows!"
Image: http://i281.photobucket.com/albums/kk237/CoolYoyoddd/Reaction%20Shots/FryandHermesSalmon2.png"I just told you!"
*BANG*
(But seriously, though. Great story.)
To be honest, I don't have grudges against any alicorn. Including Red and Black ones. Heck, even I used to have a Red and Black Alicorn OC too! Till I got some sense knocked into my head. It was a phase. Don't judge me.
Anyways, great story! I love-love-love it!
"OO! OOH! MEMEMEME! I HAVE ONE!" A vibrant pink filly jumped from the sitting crowd as she galloped to the front with the future Elements of Harmony. "If you're a human, how are you in Equestria, Mr. Freeman?""Hahahaha, that's a good one, little pink filly," he heartedly laughed, pulling the young filly to the side as he whispered. "If you never ask that question again, I shall grant you the powers to break the fourth wall."
"Huh?" Pinkie Pie tilted her head in confusion.
"Granted!" He exclaimed, with an electric slide and jazz hands, secretly giving Pinkie the powers to deny Physics. "Well, ta-ta, my little ponies, I must be off now!" The african american man said, waving a hand goodbye to the young foals. "And don't you ever forget little colts and fillies...
Well played my good sir, well played.
"There are only supposed to be three alicorns!" I think Princess Skyla would like to have a word with you:
I looked up the Elfen Lied English dub to hear the narrator's voice.
Pic very much related:
a black magic called STD...
LOL! Exactly, I was just glad I found a gif. of it.
One I have wished to find but haven't yet is one of magic man from adventure time when he does his little "magic" trick for jake and fin, JUST THINK OF THE POSTING POSSIBILITIES!
I did find a youtube but its just not the same as viewers would have to hit play
I mean heck, it could even fit perfectly into this story!
After five hours of gruesome labor, continuous screaming and agonizing pain later -POOF- appeared the one colt. Just like that.Magic.
EDIT: lol, there are even ponies in the realated
any more prouderYou're only supposed to use "more ____" when "____er" isn't a word, which "prouder" is (a word, not not-a-word)
After five hours of gruesome labor, continuous screaming and agonizing pain laterHaving both "after" and "later" in there is redundant; you should remove one
The father repeatedHe didn't repeat anything, he just spoke again. And the t shouldn't be capitalized
left clueless as to wonder whyWhile this may technically be grammatically correct (though I don't think it is), it doesn't flow well. I suggest either "cluelessly wondering why" or "clueless as to why" and removing the "left" entirely
As Celestia was my witness through each and everydayThis is a confusingly common misconception; the phrase is actually "With God [or in this case, Celestia] as my witness." And while "everyday" is a word, in this case it should be two Too many errors! Get a proofreader so I can enjoy this properly!
>>1253268 But Gordon doesn't talk... 
>>1254088 Ahem* Yeah, I do admit to some of those mistakes even though I did see them, it was just my fault that some were a bit repetitive for example the "any more prouder" stuff as well as the after and later, sorta thing, truly it was my bad, I shall fix it.
Knew somethings were a bit off, even when I repeated it in my mind.
Actually, those were all in the first few paragraphs! Now realized that, and my bad, it takes a while for me to you know, get into it.
I have no idea what happened, but good job explaining where all those down red and black mutations came from.
>>1254231 Oh i JOINED recently, just to post stories. Though i followed it for a long time long enough to know yours was probably at least one of the most weirdest yet funniest ones here, beside unobvious trollfics which I love to stumble upon. Good job my friend you deserve the feature
This story was fucking gold. Have a fuck.
You know what? One fuck is not enough. Have another.
It... it all makes sense, now. So, so much sense. Mom always said my father was a strange dark-skinned creature with a majestic voice who disappeared out of nowhere. And he... he...
DEAR. GOD. 
(But in all seriousness, this was great. Bless you, sir.)
Titty sprinkles.
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