Interesting so far. I didn't see any major mistakes. Keep it up, you're pretty good at writing.

Ooh, now this should be interesting...

Citrus wants to give it a thumbs down, but I ignored her. Nice work!

Gonna have to look into this RP, it sounds fun.  I really liked Tiercel, but the urchins were pretty cool too.  

This is going to be good...I can tell!

>>14124581412458

Thank you very much, I appreciate that.  Paranoia and years of practice come in handy!

>>14124631412463

Oh, you.

>>14124931412493

Glad to see you had the strength to ignore her madness.  And thanks!

>>14126641412664

It is beyond fun and we are making something truly amazing.  The more the merrier!

>>14126981412698

Thank 'e very much.  It's a lot of fun to do, since it's basically pure character building in story telling fashion.

Dustdigger: "Looks like the Hawk ruffled some feathers, eh? Eh?"

Lyra: "Please stop. You're not only embarrassing me, but yourself too."

Dustdigger: "Fine. Was still in a good story though. But not as good as Dar-"

Lyra: "It's not really the same type of story as Daring Do so it's unfair to compare then."

Dustdigger: "I'll just shut up before you go into another musical metaphor..."

Sync: Let me get this straight.  We walk ALL OVER this city and we seem to be the ONLY orphans, yes?

Thorn: I'm not exactly an orphan...

Sync: Oh no...OH NO THEY DIDN'T!  I bet these little urchins were following us the whole time and laughing at our failures--"Oh look at the pathetic little unicorns, see how even the rich orphans fall to the same hardships as us but we're tribalists so we don't like uncool types like them--"  I MEAN COME ON!

Thorn: Hey Sync, my parents will find me here, right?  Right?

Sync: This is bucking ridiculous!  DISLIKE!

Thorn: But I like the story!

Meanwhile Kartal, who was holding the mouse this whole time, slowly moves the cursor to the thumbs up and presses it, much to the displeasure of Sync

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Blaze: Oh señora, this "Hawk" is quite the hero, no?

Citrus: *Snort* Oh please, all he did was gallop around a bit and pretend to know what he was doing.

Blaze: Ahaha, do I detect the sound of jealousy?

Citrus: *DEATH GLARE*

Blaze: It seems, I do not.

Citrus: Quite. Come along, Blaze. I'm not wasting my entire evening on the internet with you.

Blaze: Ah, your cruel words! They wound me! Can you hold me to your plot? I wish to cry.

Citrus:

>>14127031412703

Should have joined in on the fun when I had the chance...I could have used Purple Dreams (if you still remember her...)

>>14133941413394

Of course I do!  And who says it's too late?  We're right in between major story Arcs, it's the perfect time to join!

Very nice Is this the one you said had a kind of  Dresden feel to it? Cuz I could tell

>>15161681516168

Hahha, well, I started this story in third person, before adapting the first.  So, the next one I do--which was started with the intent to begin with--will, with any luck, sound a lot more like it, heh.