The TARDIS lands in Equestria and The Doctor confuses Twilight to unfathomed proportions. Spacey Wacey things undoubtedly ensue.
Is this sort of like the Matt Smith entrance, except he's a pony? Because that is just awesome
I'd just like to point out one thing, though:
"The smell of smoke could be heard throughout the shop." How do you hear the smell of smoke?
In short: MOAR!
I HAVE NO CLUE.
Let me fix that.
Rarity mentioned that Fluttershy still knew some "people" from when she was a model. Is this a typo, or is Lyra going to have to investigate? I'm going to guess it's a typo. Also, referring to "I" in the first paragraph was a little odd, since your narrator isn't a character as far as I know. You should probably try to avoid that.
Anyway, great chapter aside from that. I do enjoy a good Doctor Whooves story. I'll be watching this.
Number of doctor plez.
And thus mayhem ensues.
Isn't it implied that he's a new regeneration, who happens to be a pony this time? So he wouldn't technically be any of the human-looking Doctors.
Now if you'll excuse me I have more timey-wimey stuff to write about. Hopefully it'll be up tonight. Take it as an early Christmas gift or something.
Because of the fact you said "Green light" that means it's Eleven's Screwdriver. So is this Eleven into Twelve? In other words this doctor is the Twelth. Small nitpick: He would probably hate custard as like with apples when Eleven, he hated something he used to like. Different tastebuds and all that.
I would say Twilight just going along with Doctor just doesn't make sense, but by Doctor Who standards it actually does. How everyone just kinda accepts what he is saying for the most part and follows him around.
Yeah he would be the twelfth doctor, different taste buds do make sense. However, the doctor used to like fish custard. Now he likes daisy custard. The "sadly he could not find any fish" was me breaking the 4th wall. I like doing that.
Thanks for the feedback,
Your timey wimey friend
Tracking. This looks like it's going in a good direction. Praise to the 12th Doctor, last survivor of Gallopfrey. Yes, I am a massive Whovian. Glad to see someone else into it as much as me.
Also, Xmas special tomorrow!
I liked the part about the totally non-canon fridge and kitchen.
You'd think Twilight would have been less surprised about the bigger on the inside part, since she'd already been told about the swimming pool in there and everything, but ah well, can't argue with tradition.
Exciting series, actually! Of course Twilight would get roped into this, Magic and Science whatnot. Strange how Twilight lets a Stallion into her home without question, hasn't she heard about rapists and thieves? She's only met the guy for crying out loud! Then again... The Doctor's other companions followed him without question...
Yup, all the companions are crazy!
Also Equestria is a peaceful land without much crime except for the occasional corrupt god.
To borrow a phrase: "Fantastic!"
Free internets if you can correctly guess who I'm quoting!
I'm sorry I can't. No free internets for me.
And the occasional mythological creature, rival tribe, collapsing buildings, death ramp, sonic rainbooms and Rainbow Dash.
Yup, pretty safe
>>9366293662 Meh, I'll tell you, then give you free internets anyway, because you wrote this.
It was the ninth doctor! (I also find it a shame that he's not as popular as the tenth and eleventh doctoroon...)
I only just started watching two weeks ago. I've been trying to catch up.
>>102637102637 ah, that's okay...
It was what rebooted the series originally for the 2000-2011 audience, but it was before Tenant became the doctor. I recommend that you watch the Christopher Eccleston ones, he really portrays the ninth doctor well!
Y U NO UPLOAD CHAPTER 3
Nein bad Doctor BAD Doctor , Lemme guess that was the clan of Skaro right ? He's F***ED >:D !
Hooboy, the high-velocity organic waste product appears to be nearing the open-grate air circulation and venting system...
Also, which episode is the "level three civilizatation" thing a reference to?
the plot thickens!
It's not a reference to any episode in particular. In doctor who they have planetary development levels. I figured that equestria would be a level 3.
>>108591108591 I think Equestria would be more of a level 2
Earth was level 5.
Y U NO UPDATE?! - Laura
Cuz lol. Hai Laura.
how did you manage to leave us with the same cliffhanger as last time? skills... just, skills.... haha keep it up!
Rage is my middle name. It's right there next to James
Useless daleks are useless
You know, I always thought Daleks were stronger than that Really, an entire high tech army with access to weapons lost miserably, but some ponies with cakes beat them without any deaths Awkward...
I found it a bit awkward too... and I wrote it. Then again chapter 4 is a prime example of why you do not install a self-destruct system in anything.
>>129495129495 Not even getting into Phineas and Ferb. Um, if you watch that f course
I don't watch that. Did I make a reference somewhere without meaning to?
yay this is not the same cliffhanger!! hahaha i wish to see their ridiculous time and space adventures soon. you better update like... in 4 minutes. lol
>>Semester Exams Tomorrow.
If by 4 minutes you mean 4 minutes and one week from now... sure.
...was sort of interesting at first. But the characters are just too agreeable. Wouldn't Twilight would be hounding The Doctor for all the information she can get out of him. (Stuck on him like glue, literally)
Most fics portray ponies as not being inherently violent, would they really cheer all the sudden when the doctor destroyed these unknown creatures? How does Big Mac know to run on sight from the Daleks? (He tends to be rather neighborly) If you were in a total panic, would the first thing that pops into your head be "grab a camera?"
I'd suggest getting to know your cast better.
Duly noted. I'm trying to finish this fic up in a timely manner (excuse the pun), as I have some other ideas I want to work on. However, being a busy high school student doesn't give me much time to write so i can only handle one fic at a time. To be honest im horrible at exposistion and im working on it. In future fan fiction I plan on excurciatingly painful amounts of exposistion and I will show the cast in a more realistic sense.
Please excuse any errors. Im typing this from my phone.
I am guessing that the Princesses (or at least Luna) already know the Doctor.
He may or may not have saved Equestria twenty three and a half times before the mane 6 did.
I'm loving this story, but it does feel a bit rushed...
Maybe you could draw out the scenes a bit more? I mean... If that was o-okay with you...
Maybe once exams are over.
I really should be studying...
Confound these ponies they damage my grades.
So is this gonna be a Whoovex x Twilight? I haven't seen a good one of those in a while. Not since my little pony generations stopped updating.
Not really planning on shipping...
So... they're going adventuring? YAY!
Filler chapter, but really good nonetheless. I hate that about time travel too, so confusing
I could see a spin-off story involving the elsewhen adventures of Celestia, Luna, and the Doctor.
i hate when people know me cuz i met them in the future, too. how do i know who i can trust? also, wouldnt the knowledge of your future meeting with them change what actually happened? maybe not lol.
No, in fact in the episode "Blink" it helped the doctor.
i really need to start watching dr who...
Wait you've never seen it? That makes you the perfect test subject.
How well do you understand the Doctor Who aspect of my story with the way I've presented it? Was there anything I could of presented better that you were unfamiliar with?
Lemme name the monsters i know
Vashta Nerada (second favorite)
Weeping Angels(My favorite)
Slavines(or is it Slamines)
Dream Lord (not really a monster)
Those Rhinoceros Things (forgot the name)
SATAN. (Yeah that's right. The doctor killed Satan)
Still trying to remember the rest. I have a type of memory where if I get reminded of something just a little bit, I remember it all. Anyways, just something for Supermunchor
Rhino Things: Judoon
>>159909159909 well i think youve done a pretty impressive job. although im probably getting some things confused with the other Dr Whooves story im reading, but there doesnt seem to be much im missing. teh doctor'z personality seems cohesive and natural for some sort of time travelling reincarnating alien guy, and the timeline problem with celestia is also sense-making. (course, im good at understanding time travel, so it might just be me, but i doubt it). it all seems pretty much great. so good job!
>>160261160261 i recently (like yesterday) heard what weeping angels and slavines (or whatever theyre called) are. creepy stuff. then one of my friends posted a fb status that said that the statue of liberty is a weeping angel, but someone's always looking at it. and thats even creepier.
Wait... The Doctor can recognise a Galifraean constellation... From Equestria?!
Aside from the fact that the stars would be completely different, this is still a good story.
Hnnng, can't wait for some excitement!
He's not in an alternate universe, he's on an alternate planet.
>>163410163410 yeah, never said anything about an alternate universe; even from a different planet, constellations will appear differently, because of your view-point and perspective in relation to the stars making those constellations.
AND KNOWING IS HALF THE BATTLE
However, what you don't know is that the Gallifreyan's view constellations differently than humans. They view them as a group of stars based on their temporal and physical locations, where as humans view them as pretty pictures.
Ah, should have considered that...
My opinion of you just went up by several notches after reading that justification, by the way.
I think I resolved it too quickly.
But what can I say? I didn't want to leave you waiting.
Maybe I'll do a rewrite at some point.
>>174586174586 eh.. i didn't care great job by the way
a little rushed but nice job none the less
Hell, there wasn't even any running! You can't have a proper Doctor Who story without running!
if u want to unrush it, id suggest taking a lot of the descriptive paragraphs at the end and basically converting them to dialogue. and maybe put in a section with dashie finding the doowhacks. that should fix it pretty decently.
I love how you used doowhacks instead of Coryzatiles.
Anyway, I think I'll edit it before I write and upload chapter 8.
>>177341177341 didnt feel like spelling incorrectly or rereading hahaha
Yeah, too quick...
It's pretty good, but seemed a little rushed. Oh well, still pretty good.
>>174586174586 Rushed but good
i like the story so far but this last chapter felt a little off the main issue that i saw was with these three sentences,
With six new companions aboard his stolen Time-Space Vessel he set off for the most logical destination for their first trip; Equestria, approximately 1200 years ago, when it was first founded on Hearth’s Warming Day.
“I was originally planning to take you to a planet called Earth, but I received a distress signal from this point in time and space. I can see why they would be in distress. This is a nasty blizzard.”
So Equestrians have encountered them before? I fear we may be at a temporal turning point in Equestria’s history. Quick, Twilight, you’re the most Equestrian history savvy, what point in time could we be at?”
the first sentence gives us the destination and implies that the doctor knew where he was going and that he had planned on going there from the start.
now this isn't bad he did get a crash course on equestria's history from luna in the last chapter so he could know about the founding and what not, but the other two sentences that i listed contradict this, now if you ask me the best way to fix this would be to have the doctor start the trip to earth, then receive the distress signal and go check it out and then when they arrive have the doctor check the scanner to find out where they are giving them the information that its equestria 1200 years in the past. and the only other thing i had a minor issue with was that you didn't make it clear as to weather or not the doctor made sure he was intervening at the right time i mean just to be clear this is the event that lead to the founding of equestria if the wendigos leave too soon it could have serious repercussions. i'll leave it at that since i have no way of know if that was your intent or not.
Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it.
It kind of was my intent though. I want to make it seem like The Doctor has been helping Equestria along for a long, long time. You'll see what I mean next chapter.
your welcome and i look forward to reading your next chapter when it's posted
I do see the contradiction however, and I've been planning to rewrite ch7 so ill probably edit it.
that's good as i said before i look forward to your next chapter and now i am also looking forward to seeing your rewrite of ch7
I'm still working on the rewrite for Ch. 7. I now realize rewrites are much, much harder than updating.
The phrase "BAD WOLF" is active? Uh oh.
Looking forward to seeing what's causing the phrase to appear.
"Rarity had to drag Twilight passed the massive London Library."
"Passed" should be "past".
“If it’s supposed to be scarred of pots banging around, what’s it doing in the big city? Shouldn’t it be scarred of all the noise?” Rainbow Dash asked.
"Scared", not "scarred".
hmm.. seems interesting.
Thanks. I always seem to maae tha passed mistake. However the scarred thing probably has to do with the adventure map I played that day. The word scared kept getting misspelled as scarred so it probably stuck in my mind. I'll fix those when im back at a computer.
twilight sure is good at thinking. keep up being awesome and whatnot!
I'm not sure if I can! Stop pressuring me!
Kidding. I'll do what I can.
Bad Wolf ain't something as simple as a Timber Wolf. This means something bad is about to happen after about 30-40 life-threatning travels
I know what BAD WOLF is. BAD WOLF is the entity that Rose Tyler transformed into when she absorbed the time vortex. Every BAD WOLF warning throughout time and space was left for The Doctor by the BAD WOLF entity, which having absorbed the time vortex, had or still has control of time and space. Either bringing his attention to something which he will unravel and reveal or giving him that last little mind spark that he needs to cook up a plan to save the universe once again.
So maybe the BAD WOLF entity left this message for The Doctor so that it would bring his attention to the Timber Wolves and get him thinking.
If tl;dr - It's a plot device, deal with it.
that's a nice picture, made by a very awesome deviant I follow. Makes me jealous. I want a cool picture from an awesome deviant too...
Wizard of Oz reference in the title. Not the most original of ideas.
I'm pretty sure you could've done this better, it's kinda sloppy.
BAD WOLF/color]? Is Rose Coming back? Why did I captitalize the c? All those questions, excep the last one, will be answered in the next chapter of... It's Bigger on the Inside!
BAD WOLF?! Crap crap crap crap crap! This isn't gonna end well