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A noble gesture by a royal guard forces Luna to confront her loneliness and her ideals of love.

Special thanks to my hard-working editors: Not Worthy, DJ GarV the Expert, and NATO Strike.

Cover By ~Fluffywafflez

First Published
7th Sep 2012
Last Modified
15th Sep 2012
zel
#1 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

I Love You, DontWannaKnow.


Ok, now dafuq did I just read.

#2 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

This is going to be bloody horrid, isn't it?

reading

It wasn't bloody horrid; it was actual sadporn. Colour me shades of surprised; is this some sort of meta trolling, where you write something which seems like an effort so as to troll those who watch you for gluefic?

Or will it get to the front page and give you ample opportunity to write a necrophiliac follow-up?

Good faith must be assumed, however, and so I must say that the story is actually very good. In truth, it's actually somewhat heartwarming; the words aren't particularly wasted, and the clichés intrude only now and then. I can't exactly tell whether I'd favourite and like this if you didn't write it, but it doesn't particularly matter.

Have these things that cost nothing and derive from them what joy you wish.

#3 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

That was... Interesting :o Well written, I'd say. A little shallow on story, but it sounds that if you had the right inspiration, you could conjure up quite the tale!

#4 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

This was amazing! A little short and unexplained, but that wasn't the style of the story. Awesome stuff. :twilightsmile:

#5 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

DWK has posted something remotely serious? My faith in the gods has been shaken.

#6 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

Wait, so this wasn't the prologue to a gruesome zombie horror story? :pinkiecrazy:

#7 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

I liked it a lot.  It was no shorter than it needed to be. Well done.

#8 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

Beautiful! Wonderfully written!:twilightblush:

#9 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

Very nice. I don't see it so much as a story as I do a flash of emotion, but it does what it does very well.

#10 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

Pretty well-put-together little story, I liked it.

#11 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

Was okay. Have a thumb.

#12 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

Not bad... worth the read for sure. Seemed a little shallow in places, but still kept my interest through the entire fic.

Comment posted by heretick deleted at 11:27am on the 18th of November, 2013
#14 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

Well, that was amazing.

Have a fluttercry. :fluttercry:

Comment posted by zel deleted at 11:32am on the 18th of November, 2013
#16 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

I actually teared up a little on this one. Good show!

#17 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

I didn't think this was sad at all. I thought it was a wonderful tale of honor and loyalty and dulce et decorum est.

#18 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

D'aaaaww. That one's really good! :twilightsmile:

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#19 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

:heart::eeyup:

#20 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

Thanks for all your support guys!

#21 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

you know what I also liked about this story? The protagonist remained nameless. I love stories like this but usually the OC pony's name is something ridiculous and that just kills it for me. Smart move.

#22 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>1237213 Aegis Heartwarden Protectorscale Dragonwing?

#23 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

I loved it! Sad but in a good... No great way. I'm glad I read this.

#24 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

Your first actual serious story, and it's a sadfic. A guard that confesses his love for Luna. In thought.

Could you have done any better with this?

No. No you couldn't.

You really need to write more serious things like this. You're as natural with these as you are with your comedy/trollfic stories.

#25 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

Just out of curiosity...I see ten dislikes and yet no negative comments. To those who didn't like it, I'd appreciate your criticism if you have a minute.

#26 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>1237331 Wow thanks man, that means a lot. I must confess I love writing trollfics, but even guys like me get emotional now and then lol.

#27 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

This was excellent. Simply excellent. This better be featured or I will utter a prayer so hard....

Anyways, I had to read this seeing that my favorite princess and character was in it and you did not disappoint. You have my fav.

#28 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

Good.... God....

I'll try to go back to writing my own stuff, but I'll be thinking about this story

*leaves*

*comes back*

  I was right...

#29 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

Not bad, actually. I didn't tear up, but I certainly don't regret the time I spent reading this either. It was just long enough to not overstay its welcome.

Good on ye, DWK.

#30 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>1237536 thanks bro! Oh and look! Featured!

#31 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>1237545

Oh! That's awesome!

#32 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

I enjoyed this. Bravo, sir! :twilightsmile:

#33 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

Not exactly feels, but still very descriptive!

#34 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

pretty colorless don't ya think?

#35 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

This is an amzing fanfic. :pinkiehappy:

#36 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

nice thought... who was the villian? and personally i think it would have been better  if the mystery guard survived to confess his love and die 10 seconds later  from the wound:pinkiecrazy: then again... its just me the sick bastard 12 yr old who fully enjoyed cupcakes and the first part of cheerilee's garden (scarlet harvest was to  repitative)

#37 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

I think the people who disliked just did it because they saw your name on it. Great fic, though. It could use a bit more storyline. People take the trollfics too seriously.

#38 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>1237738 Yeah I almost thought of publishing this under a different alias because I know I have a large haterbase, but I thought screw it, I'ma be me.

#39 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

The feels! They are high!!!!!!!!!

Love this story. Princess Luna is my favorite and I always wanted to see the day she doesn't feel guilty anymore.

#40 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

Feels accuired, man. Spend them wisely.

#42 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

Read this right after reading the comments on "Scootaloo is Slightly Flame Retardant". This wouldn't have anything to do with Applejinx's advice to be less "casual", would it?

(I thumbs-downed SiSFR, but I don't have any strong feelings one way or the other about this, so yay improvement, I guess.)

#43 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

Here take a moustache you've earned it. Wear it with pride :moustache:

#45 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>1237897

Actually this had nothing to do with those comments, the idea just popped into my head and wouldn't go away. I stand by SiSFR, I thought it was a good sillyfic and so did a lot of people. This is a departure from my usual gorn and comedy, but not for any particular reason.

#46 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

TAKE THAT 100!!! TAKE IT NOWWWW!!!!!

(you deserve it :D) :rainbowwild::pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

#47 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

>>1237568

Personally, I found that added a bit to the charm of the story. The guard is dying and confessing his love for Luna simultaneously. Dying, I figure, is a pretty humbling experience, so I'd imagine he wouldn't be so flowery in his proclamation.

That said, this is a great story. Like I said, I think its concept keeps it from being too extravagant, but regardless, you pulled it off immensely!

#48 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

...wow, I actually felt the emotion in this story. Stupendous good sir.:rainbowkiss:

#49 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

:fluttercry:

Beautiful.....Like and fave for you!

And you deserve three moustaches! None of that "one-mustache" shit anymore!

:moustache::moustache::moustache:

#50 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·

:fluttershyouch::fluttershyouch::fluttershyouch:

Come on man.... damn it!  Men don't cry...:fluttercry:

:raritydespair::raritydespair:

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