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Old ass user, probably never finishing my stories cause they suck. If i like something of yours it's probably pretty damned good.

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Five years ago, something happened to Caramel that has been bothering him since. But he's felt pressured to keep it a secret. Now, he struggles to find ways to deal with his bottled up emotions. (Warning: coltcuddling ahead!)

A/N: This story was written as a sequel to a story I wrote called The State That I'm In. It's probably a good idea to read that first. This story is written in the same style, but from Caramel's perspective. Note that this features the Dark and Teen tags, so it's a little more serious, sort of.

For the sake of consistency and symmetry, here's the song that this half of the story was originally based on: Springfield

And lastly, as always, what you're about to read would look like a pile of manure if it weren't for the incredible WhatTheMoo, editor extraordinaire!

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 37 )

Did you delete the first chapter then re-upload it? Cause I swear there were some comments there last time I checked.

Or maybe I'm going crazy....

Really liking this so far. It's progressing nicely and the stakes are slowly getting higher and higher. I look forward to the rest of this.

I guess I'll go beg for mercy from a mod.

1248537 Well, knighty can't do anything about it. Apparently there are failsafes to recover deleted stories, but deleted chapters are deleted from the FiMfic servers completely. Ah well, the damage is done and I've learned an important lesson. Best to just move on! :twilightsmile:

Thanks for the Russians though. :pinkiesad2:

Geez, sorry to hear I was right. Well, hope things only look up from now on.

1250562 All I can say is... Eeeyup, I'm an idiot.

1250828

It could happen to anyone, don't beat yourself up over it.

So.... HOW has this not gotten any comments on it yet? This is amazing. :eeyup:
GJ, shall read next chapter when I get the chance.

1257522 Funny story about that... (check my blog). Anyways, new chapter this weekend, so you might have two to read!

I'm actually enjoying this, though my heart kind of hurts for Cloud Kicker. I've been the one fruitlessly pursuing, thinking there was something there.

1271732 Ha, that's so relevant... You'll see once Chapter 3 is live - she comes so close!

I see you've updated Fr: Canterlot W/ :heart:

If you'll excuse me, I'll be dropping everything now and reading that.

Amazing chapter, I can't wait for the next! :eeyup:

Shit hits the fan in the next chapter I'm guessing.

You just had to end on a cliffhanger though, didn't you? I really want to see the next chapter now.

Now I'm really excited to see where this goes... Although I cant wait for the look on her face when Caramel tells her about Mackintosh.
This can only end well. :facehoof:

hmmm interesting!

Man, great stories, hope you continue them, or bring em to a happy ending, that would be great.

1329580 Don't you fret, I'm a sucker for happy endings too.

Most of the time.

Is there a reason why I see what looks like Google Doc comments on the bottom? I assumed it was an Author's note, but seeing that you've actually talked about what happens in later chapters... ???

nice story, but you may want to make sure you don't lave your notes at the end =p

"Caramel outlined, for the first time to another pony, the" and that's where that sentence ends. I think you need to fix that, bro.

There were apparently two different 7 of hearts in the deck — no wonder Caramel lost! :raritywink:

But this is still an interesting start to the story, and TSTII was good enough to drive me toward the sequel. Enjoyable so far!

... Oh, damn. This chapter just pushed the story over the edge from like to fav. Nice job twisting the knife.

I look forward to seeing where it goes from here!

1452525 Do you know, I explicitly read over that scene to make sure it made sense card-wise. Words cannot explain how hard I'm facehoofing right now.

It's fixed now.

I'm loving this story. I hope you continue it. I see too many fics getting abandoned after a few chapters.

sooo this is it or is there more?

I want to know how it ends these Macintosh and caramel are my favorite characters.Don't leave me hanging its not natural for an earth pony! :eeyup:

the feels man......the end kinda hurt......

Come on, finish the Bucking story, you can't leave us hanging like that, espically when your story was getting realy good!!!

Hey there :pinkiehappy:
In all honesty, I only read this because of how awesome 'The State That I'm In' was and I was a little bit dubious of this chapter to begin with, but it actually came out to be a really cool introduction to what I'm sure is going to be an interesting read :twilightsmile:

I enjoyed this chapter a lot more than the first one :raritywink: I found it easier to engage with the characters this time around and the flow felt a lot more natural and easier to follow. Is it just my imagination or was this one shorter than chapter one?
I'm really loving the type of character your making Caramel out to be and I loved the interactions between him and Cloud Kicker, although I do feel like there could have been a bit more there for comedic effect - I couldn't help but picture a crazy montage of situations where Caramel desperately avoids Cloud, causing little mishaps here and there :pinkiehappy:

Anyways, once again, another awesome read - can't wait to read the next chapter :heart:

This was absolutely amazing - loved the end of this chapter :raritydespair:
Hope there's more to follow with these two from you :heart:

Well, this fanfic looks pretty dead :ajsleepy:
Too bad, it looks so promising! :fluttershysad:

The amount of times 'hands' were used in this chapter was painful.

This itself is an ending, I hate it, also, are you British?

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