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    terrycloth's Stories (5)

    • Spirit Tethers
      Princess Twilight Sparkle will never truly die, and never know what happens to those she loves once they pass beyond the veil. But then, one day, she comes up with an idea of how she might find out what lies beyond death.

      3,815 words · 661 views · 74 likes · 7 dislikes
    • No Need for Rainbows
      Rainbow Dash never did her sonic rainboom, and now Nightmare Moon has returned. Who will stop her?
      16,058 words · 1,973 views · 33 likes · 3 dislikes
    • Space Captain Pinkie Pie
      Rainbow Dash reveals the little-known fact that pegasi can survive in outer space.
      93,921 words · 740 views · 48 likes · 8 dislikes
    • Earth to Twilight
      Twilight tries to deal with being turned into an earth pony, despite help from all her friends.
      51,271 words · 757 views · 42 likes · 9 dislikes
    • Monster Housing
      5,460 words · 190 views · 3 likes · 4 dislikes
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    Nightmare Moon looked a little smaller in the sunlight, not that it was able to touch her directly. Her star-studded mist of a mane and tail glowed within the pool of shadow surrounding her crumpled form, as she lay at the base of the crater, not moving except to breathe.

    The others – aside from Big Mac, who’d headed off to reassure Applebloom, and check up on Granny Smith – whispered to each other from the crater’s edge. Before long, though, the conversation died down, and they ran off to frolic in the sunlight. For a second it looked like Rainbow Dash was going to invite Nightmare Moon to come along, but Fluttershy said something to her and they both flew off without a word. Still, it was enough to make the nightmare smile.

    She closed her eyes for a while, opening them only when the sun’s warmth washed across her wings, to see Celestia standing next to her. “I take it I’m forgiven,” the radiant alicorn said.

    “For what?” Nightmare Moon asked. “You were right all along.”

    “Your friends said that it was the little yellow pegasus who talked you down,” Celestia said.

    “Fluttershy? Yes, she was the spark.” Nightmare Moon admitted.

    Celestia frowned. “Then the elements were involved?”

    “Metaphorically, but that is always how they’ve been at their most powerful.” The black alicorn sighed, and folded her wings in against her body. “When I declared myself ruler of Equestria, the ponies here treated me with more kindness and generosity than I realized, or deserved. I was confused by their offerings, and infuriated that petitioners brought nothing but the same request – that the sun be raised – over and over and over. I thought they were defying me, when in reality it was simply the only request important enough for them to risk offending me.

    “And then, when I fled to the Everfree Forest, thinking to be alone, some ponies – these six – were not content to let me be. They laughed in the face of my threats, and told me the truth even though it was not what I wanted to hear. They pushed themselves to the brink of exhaustion and despair in my service – in the service of my dream.

    “And I misinterpreted it all as treason. I was about to destroy them, when Fluttershy’s stare forced me to realize the truth – that they’d been loyal all along. That they were only trying to be my friends.”

    “A valuable lesson,” Princess Celestia said.

    “It had better be,” Nightmare Moon replied. “Equestria suffered enough for it.”

    “Friendship is sometimes hard, Luna, but always worth the price,” Celestia said gently.

    Nightmare Moon squeezed her eyes shut at the mention of that name. “Don’t call me that. I don’t deserve it.”

    Celestia was taken aback. “You really want everypony to keep calling you ‘Nightmare Moon’?”

    The nightmare nodded. “It will serve as a reminder, perhaps as a form of penance. And besides,” she added, with a smile, “for some reason it makes everypony bring me candy.”

    Comments ( 9 )

    #1 · 74w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I like this story.  It has a lot of witty and funny moments, but in some ways it's more compelling than the original version.  I like the idea of conquering Nightmare Moon with actual friendship, instead of some sort of friendship-powered magical super-weapon.

    #2 · 74w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Very interesting, complete story. What the hell, couple of awesome original stories just popped up. WOW

    #3 · 74w, 2d ago · · ·
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    <3 the moral at closing. I agree, having Nightmare Moon conquered by actual friendship is pretty awesome.  Very much in the spirit of the show -- even Rainbow Dash's "friendly prank" has a certain appropriateness. :)

    #4 · 74w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Heh heh. Well, I'm glad people liked it. I know the premise isn't exactly original, but I wanted a version where Nightmare Moon was both really Luna and really dangerous. And that wasn't grimdark.

    I also like beating up on Rainbow Dash I guess, because she's kind of a jerk. She's still best pony though.

    And yeah, Rowyn, there were a couple flashbacks I was thinking of having that I didn't have a good place to put in. One of them was Rainbow Dash convincing Nightmare Moon to let her join. The only line I had was one about her rainbow mane striking terror into the hearts of their enemies, because really, what could possibly be more terrifying than a rainbow? Those things are weapons of mass destruction!

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    #5 · 74w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Best ending line ever

    #6 · 70w, 4d ago · · ·
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    little hard to follow but still very well writen:rainbowkiss:

    #7 · 65w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Now, this... this is great. There are a few pacing issues to address, and not as much detail as there could be at times, but I'm one to talk. :raritywink:

    I admit, I don't know if I like Applejack in this universe, but still curious about where it all goes from here, if you're going to expand. Maybe she'll grow on me, like she did in the series proper.

    #8 · 65w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>255334

    Sometimes I think detail is my bane. :derpytongue2: I can see everything clearly in my head but I forget to actually describe it and end up with pages of dialog instead.

    #9 · 65w, 19h ago · · ·
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    >>255391

    It is awfully nice dialog, make no mistake. :pinkiehappy:

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