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  • T Twilight Sparkle, Planeswalker

    A crossover involving Twilight Sparkle in the Magic the Gathering setting of Innistrad.
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  • T Troubled New Home: What's Old Is New Again

    A burned out Twilight Sparkle gets sent back to a different universe's Episode 1.
    28,571 words · 1,624 views  ·  95  ·  2
  • T Twilight Sparkle: HEROINE OF THE IMPERIUM

    Commissar Twilight Sparkle simply wanted a quiet, book filled posting. If she only knew...
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  • T By One's Own Merit

    There's a conspiracy surrounding Rainbow Dash, and she's sick of it. She wants it go away. But then, what we want is not always what we need. (Mature language)
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  • T This Strange Yet Wonderful World

    Imagine Equestria as it would have been if firmly rooted in the early 1800s. Where the protagonists live in an age of empire, of steam and gunpowder, of great explorers and undiscovered lands. That is the story I seek to tell.
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  • 19w, 2d
    I'm coming back (with some bad news too)

    The Good News

    To those of you who have followed me, and are reading this blog post, then I would like for you to know that I am still alive and I intend to start writing again. I have achieved several important life goals, including completing my bachelors degree.

    The Bad News

    For those of you who don't know, my writing originated from a site called Space Battles. At the moment it appears to be, for lack of a better word, dying, which means a lot of my old stuff is probably going to be wiped, including everything that is not already saved here.

    However, to a certain extent, I view this as a good thing as it will allow for me to make a decently fresh start, including with what has been learned working on non-pony fiction.

    Stay tuned for more details.

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  • 71w, 6d
    Those semi-steampunk space shoes

    For anyone who receives or read my blog...

    I am working on my new story. It is beginning to get to the point where I'm willing to post it up on FiMFic, but not quite. The long and short of it is that I'm writing the story out speculating what it would be like if MLP was firmly set in the 19th century. What I realize this means is that there are going to be some overlaps with steampunk, but I am not going out of my way to write it up as such. Steampunk is a romantic form of anachronistic fantasy, while what I am aiming to do is simply pin down the technologies available in the setting to help with constancy and reduce the likelihood of breaking the willing suspension of disbelief. (Though we are talking about technicolor ponies.)

    Here is the link to the Spacebattles thread. If you have any comments you'd like to share without being a part of that forum, please let me know.

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  • 80w, 2d
    Will be stepping back into these space shoes very soon

    Had some major delays, mostly related to life. I've determined that guitar is my instrument, so there goes fifteen to thirty minutes of my day right there. (As well as a good part of my money, as I have Guitar Acquisition Syndrome.)

    On the inclusion of humans: for my sci-fi setting, and it applies to these here as well, humans are notable for only two things. First is that they're the bureaucratic jobbers of the galaxy. One day a backwater planet with primate evolved sentients was discovered, and the next they're having to yell at this weird monkey thing for a refund with the monkey thing demanding that they fill out a Form 35.D to send the complaint to his manager. The second is that they have modernized stringed instruments, probably due to their higher than average dexterity and cultural affinity.

    Another note is that a human document is likely to be translated like this. The unicorn translation spell ends up translating to common, easily understood words, which gets really awkward for specialized terms that are not easily explained.

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  • 91w, 1d
    Stargazing (Pt. 1)

    So tonight I felt like stargazing. Astronomy had always been something of an interest of mine, but I've just begun to be mature enough for actual backyard astronomy instead of sitting in a chair, staring at a screen and oohing and awing at how beautiful the universe is with color enhanced images from Hubble.

    Orion was out. It's my favorite constellation. Using my current astronomy book, Night Watch by Trace Dickenson, specifically the chart on the winter sky, I began to use Orion as a point of reference. I was able to discover Canis Major, Taurus,Auriga, and maybe Canis Minor. Of course, I could have gotten confused and mistaken one of the feet of Gemini for Canis Minor, seeing how the Moon is in the middle of Gemini. (You know what they say: The Moon is always out when you want to look for something faint. Overwhelmingly so tonight, since it drowned out a constellation of the Zodiac/I could read my own handwriting by it. If the Princesses were real instead of cartoon characters, then Luna would be such a troll for those of us who bother to stay up. Or a narcissist. Considering the whole Nightmare Moon thing...)

    I also saw the Pleiades through my pair of astronomy binoculars. They may be little specks of light, but they're beautiful jewels hanging on velvet. My regret is that my hand is not steady enough to fully appreciate their beauty. I may get a telescope at some point, but not right now. I have neither the budget for something of better quality than the "Christmas trash" scopes you see in department stores, nor the skills to use it effectively. I would like to get an Orion made Newtonian telescope on a Dobsonian mount, but the 4.5" Dob starts at $250. *sigh* I guess I'll shop around some more. I may just use an achromatic refractor for the observing I'll be doing, since for right now I do not have the skills for deep sky, which would lower my costs by half but limit me to the Moon, planets, double stars, etc.. (Not that those objects are not worthwhile, mind you.)

    Did get to spend some time with my brother. Maybe we'll have something to talk about other than video games now? I doubt it, but still there's hope. I also renewed my membership with the Astronomical League. Maybe I'll complete some of their observation programs this year and earn some pins? I hope so, at least knock down some of the ones without major equipment requirements like the Lunar I, Constellation, etc.

    You know, this might be a reason why I lean towards Twilight Sparkle as favorite pony.

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  • 91w, 2d
    Status Report

    Here's how I'm seeing my current stories, for those that are interested:

    Troubled New Home/Trouble with Time Travel: I plan to work on this soon. Problem is that this story was a product of me on SB, and I'm not keen on going back now that I've spent time away from it, got some perspective and realized that I was spending too much time on something I wasn't finding fun anymore. I might go back, update the thread, etc., just for the sake of getting feedback and such, but I'm burned out on that site.

    Twilight Sparkle, Planeswalker: I need to draft things out so that it's not just a rewrite, so that I have a consistent plot that I see all the way through.

    Twilight Sparkle: HEROINE OF THE IMPERIUM: Far back burner. I used to love Warhammer when I was 18-21. Now I'm 23, and wanting something with hope shining through.

    By One's Own Merit: I've got two chapters in the hopper right now, so that'll be another two to four weeks by my current estimates.

    Other possible stories:

    Untitled Iron Kingdoms Crossover: Elements of that are already at work in Troubled New Home, but it might be a lot of fun. Especially with Cryx being the Nightmare Empire, generically Scottish/Native American Trollkin riding around of buffalo, etc.

    Untitled MLP:FiM/LotR Crossover: Would be a ton of fun, but after I get done reading The Hobbit, The Lord of the Rings and The Simarillion, plus whatever other letters and works count as part of the cannon for Middle Earth.

    Untitled MLP:FiM/EVE Online Crossover: A man can dream, can't he?

    Untitled MLP:FiM/Fallout Crossover: I'd have to do more research for the whole 'Pony in the Wasteland' thing, but seeing as Twilight Sparkle is a favorite of mine it can be doable. Real trick would be deciding between the Capitol Wastelands, the Mohave Wastes and my own version of the mythical Texas Wasteland that I started with another story that I did not finish on SB.com.

    Untitled MLP:FiM/Pathfinder Crossover: Not sure how I would do that, since I would make the ponies humans for this one like last time.

    Possible Non-Pony Stories:

    Fallout: Texas: Apparently my first go at it was deserving of a mod. Plot things out, elaborate on setting, so on and so forth. 3 vaults, a secret vault, four nations, radioactive tornado and zombies riding undead horses and giant Mexican freetail bats.

    Original Fantasy Fiction Setting: I'd like to live the dream, but living the dream means no more fan fiction. At least here I'm writing every day, and since I'm writing every day, I'm getting better every day.

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[Cancelled and rebooted] It has been thirty years since Twilight Sparkle gathered the Elements of Harmony and went on her first adventure. Now a certain "John" appears in her library, deciding that she needs a break and sending her back to a "simpler time". Once again, she must stop Nightmare Moon. Only this time... things are different. Details are out of place, added or removed completely. She may not be in the past she remembers at all.

First Published
22nd Dec 2011
Last Modified
31st Aug 2012

:pinkiehappy: you should have used doctor whooves for this! =D anyways good read :derpytongue2:

#2 · 148w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

first i was like :derpyderp1:

then i was like :derpyderp2:

no i want :derpytongue2:

This caught my attention. I'll continue reading to see what the hay happens!

#4 · 148w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

Well that was fun. Now that I think about it your story is the first peggy sue I have read of mlp:fim and is also quite interesting.

This Twilight Sparkle appears to have quite a story of heroism and magical expertise (perhaps to be slowly unveiled to the readers as the fic advances) and also seems to be used (more like resignated) to the attentions of the night-omnipotent being Q who has chosen our heroine for a part in a play for his son birthday, the world created (or transfered to?) for this purpose seems to have some interesting changes (wonder how celestia is) though we have yet to see the rest of the mane 6 (:rainbowderp::yay::raritywink:).

There are however a few spelling problems so you may wish to check that though I am no expert.

Overall this fic has a good start and I expect to see more

Good Luck

Luis fading out

#5 · 148w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

At first in chaptet 1, I was::eeyup:

Then, I was::pinkiegasp:

later at chapter 2 , I was::pinkiehappy:

an then I was::derpyderp1:

and finally I was::pinkiecrazy:

IT NEED MORE CHAPTERS!

#6 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

Well, that was.... um, I'm not sure how to describe it. I was left thinking 'wtf'? But I liked it. A lot. You sir have earned yourself 5 stars and a track.

#7 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

that was fun :D 5/5 tracking :D keep it up!:duck:

This definitely caught my attention, and I have a couple notes for you before I forget them:

Slow down a bit.

I'm a little... befuddled as to this John person and how Twilight got into this position. That's a writing element, so it's fine. But, the narrative seems to be passing this off as though traveling through time is an everyday occurrence for Twilight Sparkle, which, unless Doctor Whooves is involved, it is not.

Unless you're doing it intentionally, be clearer.

Your writing skills themselves are right on par, but watch your speed.Slow down a little. A good way to do this would be to describe the surroundings. Even if we don't know them, it makes it a shit-ton easier to know what's going on, as the brain has time to process it. :pinkiecrazy: You kind of have to pretend your audience is four years old. (Disregarding vocabulary, of course.) This is a trick actors use, but it works in writing as well. Be. as. clear. as. possible. When people are reading, (This applies to everyone, I don't care who you are.) people don't want to have to constantly make connections with what's going on and what happened earlier and such. I should be able to scan my eyes along the sentence and the page and understand what's going on, a movie playing out in my head.

TL;DR: Slow down a bit, pretend your audience is four years old, disregarding vocabulary.

That aside, your basic concept interests me greatly and I'm going to move on to the next chapter. Your writing itself is very good. :twistnerd:

ONWARD!

#9 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

I'm still a bit more confused than I'd like to be. Now, I will admit I didn't exactly sit down to study this.:applejackunsure:

But, I did understand it better than I did the last chapter. Keep in mind what I said last chapter, and you could have yourself a great story here. :raritywink:

Understanding that the John is basically Q choosing the name of one of his favorite mortals to identify himself explains a lot.  Also recognizing that this Twilight really has "Been there, done that" so much that she's ascended to the level of an Arthur Dent helps too.  Any minute now she'll be wandering around going "All this end of the world business is so dreary, you know what I need?  A good strong cup of tea."

I don't think it's too fast at all, though RadaVonVon's points are good.  Being a dork who gets all the references makes it surprisingly easy to slip into this story.

#11 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

How bizarre.  :moustache:

#12 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

Dam it Q, fix it, don't make me put you in the box again.

TIME TRAVEL IS A BAD IDEA.:apple cry:

inbox me for full details

#14 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

You spelled Twilight wrong in the description.

#15 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

It's an interesting premise, but the Faust references feel very crow-barred in.

#16 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

Well. This chapter annoyed me, until I reread it with Applejack having a very loud southern accent. Then the rest of the references made sense. 5/5.

#17 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

I don't know what in the flying fuck I just read, but Faust damnit, it was good.

#18 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

While the first chapter and a good deal of the second were great(I myself getting the references to Star Trek), I too think some of the elements of the alternate universe after the swap are a bit forced.  I assume you of course have an understandable explanation for the slight change in, well, everything, though I also second the feeling of the random cheap token religion outta nowhere. What point is there to it other than being an annoying meta gag that adds nothing to the story? Remember, Meta gags tend to detract from the story.

hmm getting good

#20 · 148w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

wow weird stuff:pinkiesad2:

#21 · 148w, 23h ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

Please write more, I'm interested.

#22 · 148w, 10h ago · · · Chapter 2: Apple Pie ·

Whiskey Tango Foxtrot is coming from all angles of this story.:twilightblush:

You have my attention, proceed with the story please kind sir/mam:moustache:

Well Written My good sir, Well written:moustache:.

Oh yeah, its a nice Alternative Reality you got there. I can almost see Twilight screaming "Chill out" at Nightmare Moon.

I can't wait to see where this goes.

This is awesome. You're awesome. The world is awesome. :twilightsmile:

I'm still wondering about the references to 'Miss Belle'. Is it Sweetie this time around somehow, or just the 'Her full name is Rarity Belle' fanon? Guess I'll just have to wait and see.

Sorry, Chapter 3 isn't making much sense to me. I know its in an alternate universe/timeline but even then I'm not picturing it very well.

Great story!

"Hey Princess Luna!"    

*Twilight Sparkle grabs Applejack and Rainbow Dash and starts alternately making out with them while they're dumbfounded with shock*  :rainbowderp::applejackconfused:

"You want to join my harem?  The benefits package is really nice... if you konw what I mean."  :twilightsmile:

*Luna's head explodes*  

"Excellent work, my most faithful student!"   :trollestia:

"Ah, Celestia, you should join us!"  

*Celestia's head explodes.  Twice.*

John? As in... Jean-Luc Picard?! Oh, Discord/Q, you whimsical thing.

“For behold, Night Mare Moon, Goddess of Love and Fertility, shall be unbound in the thousandth year of Her punishment!”

Dude, there is some serious shit going on her. Q at it's finest.:rainbowlaugh:

NHO

So, masterplan is to make all the ponies to look so crazy, Nightmare Moon will be too afraid to try to rule them?

Next stage of Twilight's plan involves a mini skirt and a very tight shirt!

so she though nightmare was a sex goddess....sign me up

“Take me, my Nightmare Queen! I've been a wicked mare!” oh Twilight you silly silly pony awesome update.

Troll on you crazy Sparkle.

gonna catch the next chapter Saturday, can't wait.

Cleverly done, Twilight.

The honey badgers were a nice touch.

ga damn. now Lyra is militia.

twilight can mindfuck on whim.

Octavia is spec ops....

(said this before)

Whiskey Tango Foxtrot is coming from all angles of this story.:twilightsheepish:

You can tell this story is the product of a Spacebattler by the ack-ack. It's subtle, but you can certainly catch it if you know where to look.

Excellent work, sir. I've been passing this over for the last few days on the forum, and I'm sorry I did. This is one of the most enjoyable and outlandish stories I've read in a while.

This made me laugh sooooo much. :)

I am utterly confused as to the state of things.  All that makes sense to me is alternate timeline.  And what is up with Tuesdays?

Is Fluttershy Ranger Gord now? That is not a crossover I was expecting to see.

Yep, this is definitely the kind of thing Q would do. Keep it up, author. Looking forward to seeing how this all works out.

Great....what's next? Ditzy telling us "Keep your muffin on the ice"?

I... felt rather sorry for Fluttershy, there, at the end.

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