Fascinating, I will have to keep an eye on this.

Looks promising. The premise sure is eye-catching, though the grammar could use some work, and the story itself has a lot of potential... it remains to be see how you handle all the standard cliches and pitfalls of an HiE. I'd recommend finding a decent pre-reader and/or editor to help you out. If you do, you should be golden.

Oh, one more thing: the word "forest" only has one "r" in it.

Will you release one chapter every day ? Or more ? Or less ?

>>12239591223959

I'll try and update as often as I can, but right now i'd say once or twice a week

>>12239071223907

Thanks for your input! Do you by any chance know of someone or where I could find someone to review/edit my story? I'm kind of new to the whole thing

>>12242271224227

No problem at all. There are actually various groups on this site dedicated to helping you find a very special some-pre-reader. Here's a few you should look at joining:

Proofreaders and People willing to proof-read

Looking for Editors

author help (a group made to help new and old authors with fic's)

Author Support

i like where this is going

A... twin? Of Chaos? Hmmmm...

Wow can't wait for the next chapter

>>12242271224227 If you have any trouble finding an editor, I'm willing to have a crack at it, I dabble in editing here and there, but nothing major; plus I seem to have quite a lot of spare time at the moment, so if you're interested, just message me with any details and whatnot and I'll help how I can.

MMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAR!!!!!!

MOAR

Bravo!

ooooh this fic just got interesting

i cant wait to see what happens next

this is too short for once a week i need MOAR

How is Rainbow going to pick up the diamond?

Guess we'll find out!

What's this...

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I love it!

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Quite nice!

Now I need to know MOAR!

MOAR

I... need.... MORE!!

Eldritch creature seance powers GO!

Moar

Very good!

MOAR!

I DEMAND MMMOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAR!!!!!

MOAR!!!!

Nice story

Did... you just make a Sonic crossover?

>>14009731400973 Sort of... it's more the concept of the Chaos Emeralds than the actual thing, so there will probably be some differences

>>14012211401221

Is there Seven of them?

>>14013431401343 ... maybe...

>>14013861401386 Well, if the Chaos Emerald is /that/ big, it's more of a Master Emerald. Don't you agree?

As you can't just rip pure Chaos off of it's shell. :3

>>14016541401654 if that was the master emerald, then how did a human get trapped in it? i bet somehow chris thornedyke or w/e his name was got in there after sonic x ended

>>14034011403401 Exactly.

I like this story, its a nice story. I WANT MOAR

I demand moar

>>14034011403401 Well, it's not really a crossover. There are some similarities but no Sonic characters

LESS !

...see what I did there ?

ouch

That's gotta hurt

Sounds like a reverse My Little Dashie... Interresting.

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My thoughts exactly.  Ouch @_@

HA... i can't wait to see where this goes!

Intriguing... despite the ominous descriptions of what's to come, I am eager to see how this little relationship plays out.

Uh oh... last time we saw Dashie bite something in the show was... well:

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Hope she's just giving him a warning nip, or he can probably say goodbye to his whole arm.

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Now would those be the Jaws of Life or Death?

Great chapter, but I wish it was longer.

GOD DARN IT DASHIE!!! THOSE ARE NOT GUMMIE WORMS!!!

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It was originally going to be much longer, but I ended up rewriting it like three times

I hope she realizes that fingers are, by no means, edible to a pony.

I feel his pain, I too have been bit by a pony

Nom.

Owwwwgood story

Grrrr why do all the really great fics get to the really good parts, then taunt me with the whole not having another chapter thing?

delicous fingers

Maybe Dashie thought he was salad fingers

i know you typed in that he's NOT stupid, but i get the feeling that he IS stupid, or at least hard-headed

Dude your human is getting beat to hell.

And isnt sharp cracking noises coming from your bones generally a sign you broke something?

Great chapter!! I wish they were longer though...

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Is it just a coincidence that I have a story very similar to the title for this?

>>14765841476584 Yup or dislocated, in this case

>>14766531476653 Awesomeness i demand moar of this!

very rarely do you see this combination of factors in an HiE.

my only complaint would be the short chapters and slow update pace coupled with the generally slow pacing of the story makes me impatient. You should be proud, you actually have me randomly checking my favs for updates to this story.

A good story... the kid's a bit hard headed buuuut... it IS a rainbow colored pegasus so I'm willing to say "Yyeeaah I can see a kid doing that!"

And ooooh when he wrapped his arm in the rope I suddenly felt very very very bad for his arm... as someone who's grown up around horses... I know that's a big no no... cause... well lets just say you're going for a ride... by your arm. Hey at least it'll save him from the wolves right!?!

...sad to see it be so short though. Ah well... can't have everything. Thanks for the update.

. . .  Chaos. . . CONTROL!

Shockingly well done, good sir. The human is EXTREMELY human instead of the usual "OMG It's a PONY SQUEE" we see around these parts. First instinct is to take it home and make it "mine"? Wow. There's little that is MORE human than that possessive urge to claim.

Nice nice. I like the feel of this story so far.

Human comes to Equestria unconscious. Dash is nearby. Hilarity ensues and Dash gets injured. Human makes splint and ties her to a tree. She wakes up. More hilarity, and then wolves.

On another note, his arm isn't going to look so good after this is it?

And on a more serious note, he's going to be a bit devastated when he realizes how far away from home he is, huh?

Kudos on making a language barrier as well, those always add more fun to the situation.

~With regards, the Current Student of the Second True Magic.

I'm really loving this story at the minute, and I can't wait to see where this goes. My only complaint is that I wish that the chapters for a story as good as this could be a bit longer, but apart from that, you've really caught my attention with this one. Excellent work!

>>14773921477392 is there a language barrier though? I can't remember either of them speaking out loud while the other was conscious.

Anyway, liking how this is shaping up. Keep up the great work

>>14885481488548 Except for the whole first meeting, I think. Where she mistook him for growling angrily at her.

Risk having your arm ripped off to get a rainbow horse?

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Let me guess: They can't communicate.

Isn't the noose still around Dashie's neck? If she bolted away at that speed with a human hanging on the end of the rope she'd break her own neck.

>>15358021535802 There's a good dose of cartoon logic in my "version" of Equestria. Doesn't make characters invincible, just a lot tougher.

wow amazingly good. Didnt expect it to be this great of a read keep up the good work

Seems pretty good. Can't wait to see more.