Excellent. Little to no grammar errors, Deep and engaging plot. Simple, Excellent.

Well that escalated quickly.

Favoriting, but only because I wanna see where this goes. Still not sure how I feel about it just yet...

well written, engaging, and overall enjoyable.

Ooooo I can't wait to see what happens next!! Will she be like batman and realize killing wont help?

You clawed me into this story like a cat playing with its ball.  I'm favouriting this

>>12232901223290

It's one of those stories that starts at the end, and then tells what leads up to that moment.

Sorry if that wasn't clear.

>>12264741226474

No, I got that much. Just... Again, not sure how I feel about this just yet.

I'll let you know by the next chapter or... Four.

>>12264861226486

Oh. Okay then. Hope you like it.

Two mistakes, for atleast what I found.

1. Also, funny enough, that was the street where I stood. I stood there in my best suit, waiting for someone. And that someone was late. Just due to the fact that you said somepony before this, it would make sence to continue it through the story. Keep it thorough, ya' know?

2. A Thompson submachine gun, and a beautiful one at that. I think the correct way would be to remove the extra "and" in there.

Other then that, I really liked it. I've always thought Octavia was the best pony. Nonetheless, cant wait to see how it got to this point

-Thatonerandompony

>>12855421285542

Thanks. I'll fix those.

On hiatus? Noooooooo

>>16757571675757

Sorry. I did a blog post about this. You might wanna check that out for the reasoning.