Ooh... I'm really fascinated by this story. I think you can really get a lot of pathos out of it.

The only problem I see is, she doesn't seem to have a lot to do so far. Where is this plot going? Won't it get kind of boring to just watch the false Bon-bon walk around doing stuff?

Oh, and first.

Wow, this is fascinating. I must see more! Reminds me I need to continue my own bonbon fic XD

How is it possible for something to walk on their hind legs and not fall over?

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Interesting premise. The character building feels like you're making a lot of assumptions that we already know how Lyra and Bon Bon are designed, where in fact they often receive varying character designs due to not having canon personalities yet. Otherwise it's really interesting, although I must ask the same question as >>12180651218065

Calling Lyra having used a spell to try and make Bon Bon more chill, and it having gone wrong.

Interesting, tracking.

Wheels Of Confusion - Black Sabbath

>>12180651218065

What?  You don't think fake Bon Bon is going to have fun adventures?

I'm kidding, in the next chapter things, will be different for Bon Bon.  I swear

>>12181461218146

Wow, I feel like a moron.  I forgot all about Spike, I'll have to go in and fix that.  Thanks!

And I'm glad you brought that up, writing those two was a little more difficult than I had thought because as you said there is no canon personality for them.  So far I have been starting with the personalities that I've found interesting and furthering them as I go... hopefully that works.

cool story so far, tracking to see where this is going

This has serious potential.  I'll hang around to see where it ends up.

It's an interesting concept i can see how it could get dark but like some others have said, where is this going?

maor.

oh and

Lyra and the fake went into the market and instantly walked over to Carrot Top's booth.  It had become a ritual for the two of us to stop there first and buy something from her, even if we didn't wan to.

Little spelling error i picked up.

Curious where you go with this.

>>16096161609616

I have a plan.  I'm just slow getting to it haha.

Also thanks for pointing that out, I'll go fix that

Glad to see this updated!

Who has ejected her spirit and snatched her body away?

What would they gain?

I would like to see.

Awaiting further releases.