I am proud to say , this is my first story in hopefully a series that might pick off ,

Sadly i lack proof readers in the slightest so any mistakes don't be afraid to post and tell. The more that are found the better i can improve the stories architecture

In short have fun reading this and hopefully we can keep this trainwreck moving

EDIT: proof reader hired finally

Looks interesting. Added to my read later list.

Also, is the name a play off of the game Sins of a Solar Empire?

This is one of the best fanfic I've ever read, though it's not even complete in 1/4(just my opinion on how much you can extend this awesome story!). And it would be awesome to see, if Twi somehow started to feel something to Lighting You know, awesome adventure story with growing love in the backgroud ;) And it's not like I'm trying to change the story. No. Just wondering :) Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter!

P.S.

Sorry for terrible english :/

>>12189491218949 Lighting is younger then twilight , i can if you want extend it to a brother sister thing but other then that romance is off the table.

I dont think i have the best story , there are others out there i read that blew my mind literally

"For want of a dawn" and "Inner Demons" are brilliant

Lighting may return im not say how or when but he will

>>12196981219698 Ehh...The way you replied was the last thing I wanted to cause by my comment :/ The last thing I want is to interfere(idk if it's the right word for what i mean, google translator sucks) in your story.

And while we are talking about the age of them...I don't think that age of each other would cause any problems in pony world untill one of them is extremely young or old. I mean in pony world age is not causing any problems as well as sex when it comes to that thing called love. ANYWAY, I think the reason for why I mentioned it, is too many love stories I've read on this site and I'm sorry for interrupting your concept of this fanfic.

And about the fics you have mentioned. I've read them both and though they are great, for me, something is still missing in them. And I'm still looking for that something in every story I'm reading and I hope I'll find it in yours :p

P.S.

I have no idea, if you understand even a half of what I just wrote. If you don't - nevermind(or you can ask me to shorten it :D). If you do - I hope you would understand it as i would like you to.

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Thats cool man , dont worry i have a plan to work all this out with the characters , i just need to work it all in together , chapter 3 for me is gonna be hard to do since it will set in motion literally the entire premise of the story.

PS: google translate works fine i can understand you fully

Honestly. I was expecting everything, but not this(in positive meaning of course).

Well, now we know what was the first word of the title on this teleportation scroll.

1.Strange thing is that Twilight did not ask how she died. I would ask that, if I was in the future. EVERYONE would ask. Oh well, I guess you skipped that on purpose.

2.It was also strange that Steel accepted she really is Twilight Sparkle so fast.

3.LOL I REALLY NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENED TO LIGHTING!!!!<joking>

And question: How many chapters will come out?

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all will be answered, don't worry about that

honestly steel still does not know her name is Twilight , just he goes on jokingly about it.

the journey to canterlot will be kinda shown, but wreath and coronet will be shown more and will share a chapter next with lavaliere

with chapters, i do not know as many are needed , i do plan sequels to this story, crazy ideas run through my head

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Next two chapters are gonna be background heavy, i promise you that

The story and the plot is pretty awesome, but you desperately need an editor or a proofreader, seriously!!

>>15544061554406 I know also the need to get these out fast usually within 10-14 days per chapter

I will go back and fix early chapters, me reading them myself now is slight cringing

EDIT: I have contacted some proof readers on the group section hopefully they answer the call