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Stunt Monkey
Stunt Monkey #1 · Sep 4th, 2012 · · ·
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A few errors, but overall, good story! Thumbs up! Hot hot hot.:moustache:

DeiStar
DeiStar #2 · Sep 4th, 2012 · · ·
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Well, for a second, thought the title read as A Hard Day's Night.

The Writer of Fate
The Writer of Fate #3 · Sep 4th, 2012 · · ·
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She gave him a sultry look before propping her front limbs on the desk, once more giving Caramel a view of dat flank.

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Theorangefox
Theorangefox #4 · Sep 4th, 2012 · · ·
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Clop scene had a pretty good structure, but you might wanna proof read it for those mistakes. They can really derail the moment. I felt AJ kinda went a little OOC with the dialogue near to the end, but overall still a good clopfic!

2coolcanadian
2coolcanadian #5 · Sep 4th, 2012 · · ·
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I laughed hard as hell when i seen this: "once more giving Caramel a view of dat flank.":rainbowlaugh:

2coolcanadian
2coolcanadian #6 · Sep 4th, 2012 · · ·
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i give you 5 out of 5 awesome dashie faces :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

Starr Struck
Starr Struck #7 · Sep 4th, 2012 · · ·
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Soldier: DAT FLAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAANK!!

Another great clopfic with the one and only AJ. You sir get the K-Mac Seal of Approval: :ajsmug:

Francois
Francois #8 · Oct 12th, 2012 · · ·
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Get a proofreader to give this a once over. This is a really nice fic, but a handful of errors in inopportune places distracts a little bit. Other than that, you get my thumb and fav.:twilightsmile:

fanon44
fanon44 #9 · Dec 28th, 2012 · · ·
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excellent work one of the best carameljck clopfics ever and i've have read one other

Bryce98
Bryce98 #10 · Jan 7th, 2013 · · ·
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1220292

Medic: Soldier! Vat did I tell you about zhese ponies? Zhey have an affect on you!

Shadowking58
Shadowking58 #11 · Sep 19th, 2014 · · ·
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I'm sorry but I can't read this when it's all clustered like that, but it was pretty good.

Alticron
Alticron #12 · Jan 24th, 2015 · · ·
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This a a pretty good fic, but there are some things you may want to edit.

“Come on Mel. Were burning daylight and I don’t want Carrot Top even angrier at me!”

That should be "We're".

He’d been around Wind Whistler why she was in heat.

That should be "when".

He finally trudged his way back to a small shed out behind the main homestead of Apple’s.

There should be a "the" between these two words.

He watched as she finished inspecting him and watched her lick her lips in hungry, lusty manner.

There should be an "a" between these two words.

“I’m getting close. I, I have helped you yet. So could you?”

That should be "haven't".

He then moved his muzzle away and licked his wet lips whipping off as much of the substance as he could.

First, there should be a comma after "lip", and the word after that should be "wiping".

He backed away and too in the sight of the panting out of breath mare still high off the orgasm he’d provided her.

That should be "took".

Flicker Flame
Flicker Flame #13 · Jul 9th, 2018 · · ·
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“Well get it fixed you danged oaf!” Triple shit!

Looks like somebody’s a fan of Dashie XP... :rainbowkiss:



God, I really hope somebody gets that reference... :fluttershysad:

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