Alright... here we go. Chapter 1

The writing went fairly smoothly. There was a couple of fairly major edits that had to be made in order to address consistency issues that those sections would have caused later in the story. I tried really really hard to keep everyone in character at this point and I think I did an alright job of it. And once again, constructive criticism I love it, I thrive on it... the sweet sweet criticism. Don't sugar coat anything, I MUST know if there are problems with the story. (Of course back patting and ego-stroking is good too!)

Anyhow, I hope everyone enjoys chapter 1 of Researcher Twilight, I enjoyed writing it.

Keep an eye out for Chapter 2: The Rise of a Shining Star  (I know, that was supposed to be this chapter, but it just didn't work out that way. ) I'm going to stop trying to name chapters before they're written.

p.s. Don't forget to rate, fave, watch and all that happy junk.... I mean... only if you want to, of course.

>>12420791242079

My credentials as a writer may be suspect, but the answer is yes: it is perfectly reasonable to have a certain amount of emotional investment in a character.   It's hard to write convincingly about somepony to whom you're utterly indifferent.

That said, if it's at all possible to overdo it, I've overdone it.

a brilliant chapter (nearly made me cry at some parts)

now i cant wait to see twilights slow decent into madness

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also wow you realy write alot in a small time huh?

Oh god. I can already feel the heart break coming for when she goes over the edge

>>12423321242332

Yeah... fast writing. I wouldn't expect as much in the future. I'm hoping for a chapter per week, but it will probably end up being at least two weeks between chapters. I do work for a living and have a couple of kids, so life happens quite often and may interfere with the expediency of chapter updates.

The calm before the storm.

Best. Party. EVER!!

man, now im hoping that something will actually go wrong with twi, and that she's not really a complete and utter psychopath...

great chapter, didn't think the story would have this kind of quality when i read the opener. i can't really think of anything wrong with the chapter in any way (that caught my attention at least), so im sorry; but i don't have any criticism for you.

>>12556761255676

If there's nothing to criticize, there's nothing to criticize. I'm just extremely surprised that my first attempt to delve into fiction writing is turning out so well. Glad I was able to catch you off guard with the quality!

We'll just have to wait and see what happens as far as Twilight's decent into madness. I've almost finished the plot outline, and it looks like we're going to be in for about 30-35 chapters of this roller coaster ride. So there's plenty of time.

And I noticed I didn't thank you for being gracious enough to click the star on this story. So... Thanks for the fave of my story!

>>12559101255910

heh, no problem

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Not sure if I want to read this. Tracking for now.

>>12649281264928

You know you want to. Come on, just give it a shot. I'll be the first to admit that the prologue is... jarring. But chapter one is the happy-go-lucky ponies we all know and love.

>>12700941270094

Thanks a ton, that is extremely helpful.

Edits concerning the things you suggested have been made.

thnx for the input on my story  good chapter

>>12703191270319 Its what I do.

epic best story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  

ever!!!!!!!!!

please excuse me while I throw a grammatical bitch fit.

you’ve been handlin’ the Winter Wrap-up for years now and ever since ya’ll started

Ok first you have "you've" that is a contraction of "you have" as I'm sure you're aware. But then you have "ya'll" (which, by the way, should be "y'all") which is a contraction of "you all". So, contrary to the apparently popular belief, you never, never use "y'all" to adress one person.

Anyways, sorry about that. That is the single most annoying grammatical mistake I have ever encountered. And so many people make it.

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Alright, you need some definite work on your word word choice, but I've done enough of that for awile so I'll leave it up to your editor (whenever you get one. If you plan on getting one.) The main problem I can see with this story is Twilight's goal. First, nobody in cannon has ever mentioned the position of "grand magus". And especially not Twilight. So claiming that as her ultimate dream is a bit far-fetched, since she's never even mentioned it. And as RD, Rarity, FS, and AJ have all shown us, if a person (putting anthropomorphism aside, naturally) truly loves something, they will mention it.

Other than that, I can't really find anything wrong with this story.

WW out

>>12791611279161

Hey thanks a bunch. All of your points have been taken under advisement.

Allow me to retort concerning a couple of points you made:

never use "y'all" to address one person.

You apparently have not spent much time in Alabama or Arkansas. While not grammatically correct, in colloquial speech, "y'all" is most certainly used as a singular pronoun. Quite often, actually. You would probably have an aneurism if you had to talk to people down there.

nobody in cannon has ever mentioned the position of "grand magus".

This is far from the canon universe (hence the alternate universe tag). This will become much clearer in the next chapter.

Anyhow, thanks again for looking it over. I really do appreciate it.

>>12792101279210 heh, no problem. And I think I'll be avoiding both of those places if I can help it .

My bad for not noticing the AU tag. As that's the case, carry on =3

You.....

Actually what TWE to read your story......

well then let's gets started.....

Review after the break:

Chapter 1:

Im not going to sugar coat it this fic. Is.... Good, like really good.

Iv been drawn In to a land of crazy ponies, fluttershy feels a bit off but I can forgive that.

So far you story is good in my books.

>>12948401294840

I'm glad you like it! Having a solid base to start with, then having another 6 pairs of eyes on it for editing and revisions pays off, i guess.

There we go. Twilight made it to Canterlot, her new instructor doesn't really want anything to do with her and her newest friend is emotionally unstable. Fun.

I was really worried about using OCs, as it seems like they usually turn into empty pony-shells that pretty much suck in every way. I took a lot of time to work out the OC's characters, and I really hope I did okay with them.

Anyhow, as always, I like comments. Good or bad.

Not to worry.  These OCs have both their places and their positions carefully limned out.   (And Fireshade's remark "I got my cutie mark for killing"  speaks volumes about her that would otherwise take entirely too much exposition.)

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>implying this means something good and how awesome this story is

Wonder what's with the sudden onslaught of tumblr-based fics?

Just recently I posted a question on the blog asking to make Trixie her assistant.

I would appreciate it if you made that canon, because he probably won't.

Dick.

Damn Twi. Why you gotta be so mean to FireShade?

I like the OCs. They have so much personality. Well done!

Secret schools for magically unstable ponies coupled with a secret lab. Wonder if these two combined when Twilight be visiting will be the first step to crack her psyche open a bit.

>>13200511320051

Twilight made it to Canterlot, her new instructor doesn't really want anything to do with her and her newest friend has a severe emotional instability

i just wanna point out; when twilight first arrived to ponyville she didn't really want anything to do with the little town, i know it's not the same thing, but i thought i was valuable to point out. and as for her newest friend with severe emotional instability, two words; pinkie pie.

"Training" next chapter, oh I can't wait for the blood to spill

Wow, Arcana is an asshole. I hope Twilight can put him in his place.

>>12772451277245

Damn you Seductive Lyra avatar! If that is Lyra. It is, isn't it ?

It begins.

So, you may have noticed that I removed the prologue. And you may be wondering, "What the hell did he do that for?"

Allow me to explain: The prologue was originally written as a sort of 'one-shot' simply to gauge reader interest in the story. There was interest, so the story continued from the beginning. The prologue has served its purpose, and I don't think it really fit as a prologue in the first place, because it was never really meant to be that. So, after discussing it with my new proofreader/editor, Azu, the decision was made to cut it in its entirity.

I think the story is better off after the amputation. That particular piece was really jarring with the way it jolted back and forth in the timeline and then dumped the reader in a point of the story (chapter 1) that is WAY before it in the timeline.

For those of you that are just joining us and didn't get to read the prologue, don't worry, the scenes it depicted will crop up later in the story.

The generator stuff brought with it some serious Half Life 1 vibes. I like it.

I would be interested if you did a short FireShade x Spike story. Other than that, I'm really interested.

Wow it's great to see this update and poor twilight she was like a dear frozen in front of headlights, and wish you luck in your EQD submission hope that they accept it.

Very nice, now I'm wondering two things: how long until Twilight learns the identity of her purple voice, and is Section Five a nod to Eureka?

Eight years later and RD isn't in the Wonderbolts yet?

>>13918501391850

yet

>>13918121391812

is Section Five a nod to Eureka?

Hadn't even thought of that... but yeah, why not.

So far so good, though perhaps the Canterlot ponies would address Twilight as Lady Sparkle. Remember that at the end of season 2 all of the Elements of Harmony were knighted by Celestia.

oooh brain damage

this is a meathod of making twilight crazy that ive never seen before

I LIKE IT!

>>13921451392145

this is a meathod of making twilight crazy that ive never seen before

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Well color me interested. You have any sort of update schedule set up yet? Waiting is my least favorite thing.

>>13925161392516

So far it has been about every two weeks... but who knows for sure, life happens to me quite often.

I always have a "progress meter" of sorts for the upcoming chapter on my user page, too.

Yay it's up!

>>13925161392516

>>13925221392522

Don't worry, he also has me kicking his flank across the room each day to hurry up as well.

As always, >>13925221392522 you show how well of a writer you are. Good job man.

>>13930531393053

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May Derpy watch over you Azu, you goddamn saint!

Dark Twilight? and no gore?

yay

man, that Magical Generator Explosion was like Waltzing into one of the Engine Test Cells at Chrysler's Technical Center in Auburn Hills, MI during a Full Power Run, and the Engine in the Test Cell you are in Fails Spectacularly, embedding a piece of Connecting Rod in your Skull! (I watch the Tumblr, Stumbled on this Story while Browsing EQD, and you just earned yourself a Watch!)

This is good. I can't wait to see what hapens next.

“I mean, all my friends are here...Everything that I’ve known for the past eight years is in this place.”

Once again, Spike is forgotten. At least with this fic it's only in the nooks and crannies. Props to you for actually treating him like a main character! At the last minute there it looked like none of the ponies were going to miss him, just Twilight.

I like it and will continue reading but I must recommend using a different font color for the "voice" its really difficult to notice as it's so close to black(when viewed on the white background) that it took me a few seconds to even notice the color change.

>>14279861427986

Hey, thanks for the suggestion! I switched to a color hex code (C030FF) for the voice, instead of the standard 'purple' code. It really stands out a lot better now.

> Why, you’ve been handlin’ the Winter Wrap-up for years now, and ever since y’all started, Ponyville has been on time every year.”

Erm, doesn't "y'all" generally expand to "you all"?  If so, that's an incorrect usage of the term, since what Applejack is saying is that ever since Twilight (singular) started, Ponyville has been on time.

> Twilight opened her mouth to argue her point further, but couldn’t find the words to dispute Rainbow’s rebutal.

The word you're looking for is "rebuttal".

>>14281451428145

You're obviously not from the south. This was actually brought up once by my fellow TWE compatriot, Werewolf. Here's a copy/paste of my response to him:

You apparently have not spent much time in Alabama or Arkansas. While not grammatically correct, in colloquial speech, "y'all" is most certainly used as a singular pronoun. Quite often, actually. You would probably have an aneurism if you had to talk to people down there.

So, there ya go.

And thanks for the spell-check!

> I didn’t even know there was a school that specialized in pryomancy alone, it’s such a rare talent,”

Whoops!  "pryomancy" should be "pyromancy".

> “I trust the Princesses judgement with my life, and I understand that you are her personal student and extremely talented.”

Two things: one, depending on whether you're using American English or British English, 'judgement' might need to be spelled 'judgment', as noted here (in American English, 'judgment' is the only correct spelling).  Two, you need an apostrophe somewhere in "Princesses" to indicate a possessive -- either "Princess's" if you're referring to just Celestia, or "Princesses'" if you're referring to both Princesses.  The exact rules are located here.

>>14282941428294

Thanks again! It's amazing, all the little bits that get missed. Revisions have been addressed.

Judgment looks so awkward in my opinion, but correct spelling is correct.

> “That thing looks like it could handle months of constant canon-fire.”

Unless you're talking about accepted verified-true facts from the actual cartoon, the word you're looking for is "cannon", as outlined here.

>>14285581428558

Would you be interested in being a second proofreader/editor for upcoming chapters?

>>14285791428579

Would you be interested in being a second proofreader/editor for upcoming chapters?

I do enjoy proofing, and this seems to be decently engaging.  Feel free to message me through the site if you want to pursue this.

> On the front, a window similar to the portal on a ship offered a view of a faint blue glow.

Heh. Cherenkov radiation, perhaps?

Ah the generator exploding... Reminds me of my younger days of playing Half-Life

I had very mixed feelings going in to this. I guess I'm kind of a huge fan of ask-Researcher-Twilight. But good work so far. I do have a question as to whether you are going to use the train station a lot in this story. There was a lot of description of the train station, then Twilight kind of left immediately after you had made the setting. I like good descriptive language fine, but it can get boring if it doesn't serve a purpose. Fun to see this and I hope that the characters and plot turn out cool like the tumblr. It's a great universe and awesome to see some detail about it.

Soooo, is this story more about how Twilight ends up where she is in the blog? I thought it was going to be more how she goes crazy, but that seems to be done. The accident was a cool idea, but then she just got a split personality from it, instead of developing her craziness from say an obsession with defeating her brain damage, or stress from her job. What is the rest of the story going to even be about? You could really just segwey into the ask blog from here without missing much.

I just read your first on the story. this is just your take on things in the universe, not like consistent with the tumblr...things make more sense to me now. Definitely will read on

Cold reading:

Chapter 1:  "Grand magus" I really like your mane title. "You'll always be my friend, Twilight. No matter what." Bad news. Very very bad news. <the two scenes at the library> I know foreshadowing when I see it. Nothing this happy will result in less than soul-chilling grimdark. Quillfeather, I hope you survive this. Summary: if I didn't already have some idea where this story was going, I would entertain the possibility that it's going to be a social comedy about a simple country girl being swept up in the hurly-burly of political maneuvering in the court of Canterlot. The sadness expressed would help frame an initial "oh hey the big city's not so bad" and the subsequent "but I hate some of the ponies here..." as well as the climactic "I never should have left." I'm predicting it's going to be used to frame a longing for happier times before the end.

Chapter 2: The viewer's "eye" in the train station is well-directed. Ah, tenement living in the Equestrian industrial revolution (most likely the very beginning of it, if the marble walls and spires of the castle are still white). Tension-relieving comment on Twilight's personal life, followed by "the two laughed" = foreshadowing in my mind. <Throne room> The head mage will be gruff, but eventually take a liking. The young mage will make fast friends, but daggers can hide behind smiles. Plus, "Fireshade" in a world of meaningful names? Yeah, really trustworthy. <hallway> I CHANGE MY MIND. Fireshade is either a talented actor and high-functioning sociopath, or a genuine woobie. I have little doubt that Arcana will turn out to have been on the side of "good not evil not entirely evil" but that doesn't mean he won't in the interim be on the side of "jackass."

Chapter 3: “Pfft, Arcana may be a jerk, but I doubt he’s a murderer.” Do... do I even need to say it? Also, Spike is continuing to take Twilight's constant abuse very easily. He's one to watch. <lab> -That- is his cutie mark? Probably going to be a Gendo. Also, good work on Celestia's part in providing a method of discreetly monitoring her faithful grand magus with that journal. <lab accident> If Arcana did that, I rescind all possible positive comments. That would be incredibly unprofessional, especially in such a setting.

tl;dr: I like.

Well, time to read the tumblr, I guess...

*first few pages of tumblr*

...I believe I may have grossly underestimated the level of grimdark to which this will go.

...Fluttershy...

*more fluttershy*

...Twilight you beautiful monster...

>>14321691432169

I really enjoyed reading through your comment. Lot's of good stuff.

I may have grossly underestimated the level of grimdark

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>>14320371432037

this is just your take on things in the universe, not like consistent with the tumblr.

And the more I think about the story and tweak the plot outline, the more and more it diverges from the Tumblr. At this point with what I have in mind, people familiar with the blog will be able to easily see the pull-through scenes and plot devices that were used from the blog, but the story is going to be something... different altogether.

>>12420791242079 Of all of the stories that I have read, this one has got to have the best first chapter. the writing was as fluent and graceful as a ballroom dance, the characters were in no way out of character and I was hooked from start to finish.

Couple of things though:

1-The scene where Quill meets Spike. It was the only thing that felt like an off note in a classic orchestral piece

Quill held out her hoof for Spike to shake. “Hello Spike, my name is Quillfeather. It’s a pleasure to meet you.”

This scene seems fine and good and normal and stuff until you get to here:

Over the past eight years Spike had grown to stand two hands taller than Twilight and had lost most of the pudgy awkwardness that had been present when he was a baby.

Either a lot of the stigma around Non-ponies has gone bye byes in the last few years or that is one composed pegasus! she greeted a dragon two heads taller than her like it was nothing! But then again, in the show, the only time xenophobia was evident (regardless of personality or precedents; Race or species alone) was when it was actually the subject of the episode! This could just be me making a tumor out of a mosquito bite.

2- Not sure if this is a good thing or a bad thing, but remove the last three sentences and you've got a oneshot.

>>14327341432734

Are we going to get the trademark glowy eyes? I am terrified by like the glowy eyes in the tumblr.

>>14332071433207

When you started following me I thought, "Well, this guy must just be one of those creepy stalker types."

You've proven me wrong. Now you're a creepy stalker type with decent feedback. Well played, sir.

I like. Also awesome Warehouse 13 reference.

Well... this chapter ended up being quite a bit shorter than I had expected, but what can you do? It covered everything I wanted to cover, progressed the story to where I wanted it set up for the next chapter. Can't just add padding to get a higher word count; it would bog the story, and we don't want that.

So there you go. Chapter 4... Please do comment and discuss. Spoilers are encouraged, I love to see people speculate on what's going to happen next and I also like to hear about what can possibly be improved. Besides, if someone reads the comments before reading the story, that's their own fault.

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That chapter seemed to end abruptly, but my interest is piqued.

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Alright! Chapter 4 is up!

Poor twilight needs a little psychotherapy.

Although, if Lesson Zero is any indicator of her mental health, her need for treatment might not be restricted to the universe your fic has established. :p

I think I'll read "Ask Researcher Twilight" Before I read this story.

Edit

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If Twilight keep acting little to no subtle, then every arrow will point at her when strange things start to happen around the lab. But then again, Twilight isnt very good at been subtle, or handling preassure, or curiosity...

this is a train wreck of catastrophic proportions waiting to happen, isnt it?

>>14421721442172

I think I'll read "Ask Researcher Twilight" Before I read this story.

Now what would you go and do that for?

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>>14421891442189

Possibly. That is only one of the many very likely scenarios.

>>14418991441899

Congratulations on comment #100, here's your prize:

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Twilight is still best pony.

>>14422391442239 You said it inspired your story so I thought it would be a good idea. Once I started reading it it was just to horribly compelling to stop...

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>>14423091442309

well he did try to warn you.

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>>14422391442239

Oh and I didn't even realize I was 100th, yay!

I'm trying to read the first chapter but my brain is so full of F#$% right now.

>>14425801442580

Just put the ask blog out of your mind. This story is very very different from it. It won't hurt you, Pinkie promise. There's no gore, but it will be very dark later on, though. I'll hold your hand if it will make you feel better.

Seriously though, give it a try. You'll like it.

>>14426201442620 I'm sure I will have no issue with your story. I just keep getting distracted as my mind wanders to the ask blog. I have read some rather dark stories it's just the actual pictures depicting it got stuck in my head. Doesn't help I'm watching NCIS as I'm doing it and there are a lot of dead people being cut up in that.

The books.[color]

Little bit of malformed code there.

Also, the little hints of things to come are piquant as all hell. The destination of the books, the nature of the antipsychotic, Twilight's use of "we," the coming shitstorm with Twilight's little outburst to Arcana...

“Effects of High-Level Magical Energy Exposure on Earth Pony Reproduction,”

Wat.

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Wow, this story is really getting good. The ask blog can update in it's own time. I hope to see more of this. I also have no idea where this is going, so keep doing that. The intrigue really tickles my fancy

The 'Ancient Equin' is actually Hindi, Google translate spits this out.

Chontinuad Shudis Own Mgical Kpbilitias

Eggs were Ofr Limittions Royal Pony Sisters:

Volume 105 612 718 Ofr Study

My Closest guess to what it actually is:

Continued Studies of Magical Capabilities

[Something] Off limitations Royal Pony Sisters

Volume 105 612 718 Of study

Babylon gives this partial translation

चोन्तिनुएद स्तुदिएस मगिचाल् projects

were ओफ़् jesuit लिमिततिओन्स कपबिलितिएस् eligibility पोन्य सिस्तेर्स:

105 ओफ़् वोलुमे स्तुद्य ६१२७१८

Nothing new really other than the word eligitibility, but that is probably just a synonym of "off limits"

>>14432081443208

Thanks a bunch for the catch on the coding!

>>14442311444231

You're pretty close, but there's a reason google's translation to Hindi is even more sketchy than it's usual shit-job of translating. I'll give you a hint: It's not quite Hindi, but it is a closely related language.  

>>14426201442620

Possible spoilers -

Do you mean there might not be, like, the Apple Mafia or Lobotomized Spike? is the previous introduction (the passage with jailed Fluttershy and Insane Twilight in the secret lab) still part of this fic's storyline?

>>14443001444300

Possible spoilers - (question concerning the original prologue)

yes

As for the other stuff, at this point, I cannot confirm nor deny their involvement in the story. One or both may or may not play a part in this story.

Well hot damn. Wonderfully well written, with a foreboding atmosphere so strong that it makes you wonder if you really want to unravel its secrets.

You just went and earned yourself a like and a track, good sir.

>>14442811444281 >>14442311444231

Well it's obviously still written in a relative to devanagari. Probably sanskrit. I can't read sanskrit, but the internet can!

for the second line अण्ड लिमिततिओन्स ओफ़् थे रोयल पोन्य सिस्तेर्स:

I'm getting egg/ball/scrotum for the first word. Otherwise it's the same.

So... the princesses were studying alicorn reproduction? Or maybe they lay eggs.

>>14423091442309I felt the same way. I had to keep going, until I had seen EVERY post at 4 something in the morning. Sleep deprivation IS Nature's eye-shadow after all.

>>14469031446903

Like I said... EVERYWHERE.

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>>14471031447103 Like you said what everywhere?  Not to read it? I did so of my free will.

>>14474191447419

Sorry, I was referring to a comment of yours I replied to on CookieMonstar's blogpost earlier.

Guess I should specify. oops

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I have one small concern reading this after perusing the current entirety of 'Ask Researcher Twilight' blog.

Twilight did seem to have one or more voices in her head, but the overlying theme was that Twilight went corrupt at her core. She had seen things she never could have believed, and her faith in ponykind was destroyed. Twilight Sparkle, in her own rationality, accepted the things she was doing.

Having a voice in her head is a good way to drive the story and account for some of the changes that Twilight will go through, but I really don't want to see the voice play a very big role. The voice can help start her down certain paths and perhaps provide different views, but don't let it trick her and lead her into depravity. Twilight was fully aware of the consequences she would face, and she willingly threw her conscience away.

Everything that Twilight did, she did to herself. Everything that Twilight became, she chose to become. Don't let some alter-ego cheapen that.

Well... I can't open the next chapter without Skype calling it. Dafuq is this?

>>14477081447708Oh, ok. That clarifies a lot. Funny thing is, I do more lurking than commenting, which says a lot,  if I am indeed 'everywhere'.

>>14479681447968 He has said on several occasions that story was inspired by and is based off of that tumblr, but that there would be quite a few differences. Personally, that's one of the reasons I prefer the tumblr to the story. This seems to be suggesting that 'Researcher' Twilight is a split personality created in the accident, or that she might not have done what she did if it hadn't been for the voice. Don't forget that Twi drinks that green gunk, that "Eliminates the hallucinations associated with sleep deprivation...at least I think it elminates them". In the tumblr, she realized if things could go back exactly as before, she'd do it all again. To paraphrase:

I'd do it all again...My god I would do it all again...

And NATOstrike, don't let this make you think I don't like your story. I quite love it. I would feel like if the story would be cheapened if it were a mere writing of the tumblr(or something like that).

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I completely agree with you. It was just a little hard to put my point into words.

As an analogy, Rainbow Dash abandoned her friends when she had been discorded, but she wasn't really to blame due to outside influences. What I mean to say is that I don't want this mysterious voice to be used as a scapegoat for Twilight's actions. I want all blame to fall on Twilight because it was her own true nature that made her do it, just like you explained.